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Arre aap likho baaki agar ye cnp ka kuch pata chale to aap batana hume....hum dekhte hai aapki mehnat ko kaun chhap raha hai....
waiting sir
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waiting sir
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Aap Runa bhabhi ke creator ho.....
aur wo love hai hamari....
Tab to shayad aapko thodi nirasha hogi. Abhi jis pe kaam chal raha hai usme Runa bhabhi nahi hai.
Can anyone suggest me good cheating wife stories like "the unwanted houseguest" by indiansubmale. I like the aspect of cheating behind the back and not cuckoldry.
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Likhne mein bahut dimag lagta hai
Rules likhne mein to puccho hi mat 
Phir rules follow karwane mein
ispe kya hi bole ab.....Jinta dimag aapko aaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhh...........ahhhhhhhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh type karne mein lag raha hai.....usse kam rules padhne mein lag jaayenge....
Agar ye likhne ke baad thoda bahut dimag bach jaata ho....to rules padh lijiyega taaki hum aapko aage pareshan naa kar sake...
Dhanyawad.....
Frieren
𝙏𝙝𝙚 𝙨𝙡𝙖𝙮𝙚𝙧!
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Queen by Damha
Plot- I think it was mixture of various horror movies like 1920, raaz and even little bit some stories here and there. However it was good! I really liked it.
Storyline- lot of loopholes are there, which remain unanswered. Like how sushant survive for so long without getting caught. When did he change maya coffin?? I thought the horror going to be wild at the climax but at the end it was little disappointing.
Starting- the base of story was build solidly at the starting, giving you a lot of advantage to use past and present events to make it more terrifying.
Middle- lgnoring the end! It was really nice, I can feel the horror and also imagine the environment you create it. But as soon as we connect the dots of ending it doesn't even make sense at all. Why actually we follow the mc storyline for so long, when he was actually sushaant!? I mean why he feels fear? It doesn't make sense at all.
Ending- don't know, but you unintentionally create lot of doubts and loophole at the ending.
Conclusion- it was good horror story overall, but the part which I love the most is, how you represent romance and love in the few paragraph at the ending. It was on whole different league. I wish if only you explore more that love between them. Still awesome, after a long while I read a story and your story was so much worth it. Thanks.
Plot- I think it was mixture of various horror movies like 1920, raaz and even little bit some stories here and there. However it was good! I really liked it.
Storyline- lot of loopholes are there, which remain unanswered. Like how sushant survive for so long without getting caught. When did he change maya coffin?? I thought the horror going to be wild at the climax but at the end it was little disappointing.
Starting- the base of story was build solidly at the starting, giving you a lot of advantage to use past and present events to make it more terrifying.
Middle- lgnoring the end! It was really nice, I can feel the horror and also imagine the environment you create it. But as soon as we connect the dots of ending it doesn't even make sense at all. Why actually we follow the mc storyline for so long, when he was actually sushaant!? I mean why he feels fear? It doesn't make sense at all.
Ending- don't know, but you unintentionally create lot of doubts and loophole at the ending.
Conclusion- it was good horror story overall, but the part which I love the most is, how you represent romance and love in the few paragraph at the ending. It was on whole different league. I wish if only you explore more that love between them. Still awesome, after a long while I read a story and your story was so much worth it. Thanks.
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fun fact! I've never actually watched those Raaz movies, I've heard about them, but I've never sat down and watched them for real.
The only horror movies I've seen are the Kanchana ones from South India and then that recent one called Shetaan.
I wanted to explain it a bit more, but the USC had Words Limit! I still probably could have fit it in if I didn't have to take a break for a month
The story was already 7K words long! And I wrote the last part in just 4-5 hours
Sushant was still a normal person, not some ghost or immortal being! He wasn't afraid of ghosts, but he still had to be careful, He wasn't invincible.
Sushant also had to do a bit of acting to make it look natural, so he could slowly kill everyone in the mehal
Yup, I left some questions unanswered at the end on purpose! My story wasn't about giving a moral lesson or anything like that.
I ended it at a point where the reader could keep imagining what might happen next.
I had planned to write a full scene for Sushant and Zara! but the story was already 7k words long and I was short on time because of Ramzan.
so I just wrote it as well as I could in the limited words and time I had.
Thanks for reading my story and taking the time to write a review! I hope I can write a story you like even more next time
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Abhi bhi sabhi ke dimaag me purani story ka keeda ghoom raha hai .......
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