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Agreebadiya ek shandaar story! bahut achi writings. Please go slow seductively and let not the son expose his loving mom so openly.
Will write more details and deep conversation but that's take little more time and I'm working woman so quite difficult but I will try to post Moro and more updates.... kartik is like maza bhi aayega aur bura bhi lagega...but at the end lust will win over guilty...lust ko control nahi kar paygaa...and aahe jaake kab wo iska aur addiction me chala jayega pata bhi nahi chalega....nice update bro but mujhe lagta hai kahani thodi fast ja rahi hai.....
Story line bohot achchi hai lekin thodi fast lagi..... thoda slow aur seductive way mein banao. agar possible ho to.. thoda aur structure do scenes ko...... bcos scene abruptly end ho jata lagta hai kahi kahi.....
Jese Parvez ne double meaning baat boli lekin Apeksha ne koi reaction nahi diya... aur ye bhi nahi samjh mein ke usne ye baat dheeme se boli thi ya zor se..... khair
Ye mera opinion hai... baaki jo aap ko sahi lagey after all ye aap ki mehnat aapki creation hai....
Parvez tharki ne Apeksha ke saath masti ke liye ghar mein to entry le li dekhte hai kya karta hai aagey......
Likhte raho...
Yes...it's all about kartik lust and guilt..let's see who will control kartik emotion...lust or guiltGood writing. It seems that the son is more aggressive to guide his mom to fall into the evil trap of parvez. The son should be defensive.
Han ji I understand... Kaam se thoda time nikal kar likhna aur padhna.. khud ka entertainment aur dusro ka entertainment karne ka arrange krna bohot task hai..Will write more details and deep conversation but that's take little more time and I'm working woman so quite difficult but I will try to post Moro and more updates.... kartik is like maza bhi aayega aur bura bhi lagega...but at the end lust will win over guilty...lust ko control nahi kar paygaa...and aahe jaake kab wo iska aur addiction me chala jayega pata bhi nahi chalega....