Fantasy The Ring of Light

[Ristrcted]

Hakimo pedon- jhadion se takrate huye tezi se bhag raha tha. Tez barish aur kadakti bijli ke beech uske hamfne ki awaj alag hi gunj rahi thi. Wo thak chuka tha . aur bhagna uske liye Sambhaw nahi tha. Lekin sawal zindagi aur maut ka tha. Koi aur chara bhi toh nahi tha. Usne peeche mud kar dekha toh Nazim badi tezi se uski taraf badh rahe the. Kale ghode par sawar 7’5” ka daityakar aadmi. Kale kapde aur lambe baal. Uski hawa mein lehrati Talwar mein use maut saaf nazar a rahi thi. Uske paas ladne ko kuchh thaa bhi nahi. Usne apni kamar mein tange chhote se khajar ko dekha. “yeh kafi nahi hoga.” Uske man se awaj ayi aur sath hi himmat bhi tut si gayi. Tangon ne bhi sath chhod diya... Hakimo pathar se takrate huye munh ke bal kichad mein gir pada.



“Ahhhhhhhhhhh” ander se takat jutate huye usne uthane ki kosish ki.



“Hakimo... tum aur nahi bhaag paoge...” Nazim ne talwar ko uski peeth par rakhte huye halke se daba diya.



“ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh" ek tez cheekh jungle ki gehrayion mein kho si gayi.



“Hakimo... Ring mujhe dedo.” Nazim ne bhari awaj mein kaha.



“Ring mere paas nahi hai.” Hakimo ne kisi tarah apni saanson ko thamte huye kaha.



“Nahi hai… Toh fir kahan hai.” Nazim Gusse se chilaya



“yahan use hona chahiye…. The chosen one ke paas.” Hakimo ne garv ke sath kaha.



Nazim ki ankhon mein gussa aur aakrosh saaf nazar a raha tha usne neeche jhuk kar Hakimo ke gale ko pakada aur kisi khilone ki tarah use hawa mein uchhal diya. Wo udte huye seedha ek ped se takraya aur wahin dher ho gaya.



“Hakimo bas karo… tumhari ladayi ab khatam ho chuki hai…” Nazim ne talwar dikhate huye kaha. Hakimo ne dard se karahate huye Nazim ki taraf dekha aur halke sa muskura diya.



“Sahi kaha Nazim… meri ladayi ab khatam ho chuki hai…” Itna bolkar Hakimo ne wo khanjar apni kamar se keecha… Isse pehle wo dono kuchh samajh pate wo khanjar Hakimo ke pet mein utar Chuka tha. “On the name of ETHAN" Hakimo ke munh se akhri shabad yahi the. Tabhi tez Roshni ke sath ek bada dhamaka huya aur wo Nazim hawa mein udate huye dur jakar gira.



“Hakimoooo" Nazim jor se chilaya. Wo uth kar us jagah gaya yahan Hakimo gira huya tha. Par wahan na toh Hakimo tha aur nahi kuchh aur. Bas jameen par ek ajeeb sa chin tha.



“The order of ETHAN” Nazim ne us Sign ko dekhte huye gusse se kaha aur apni talwar us sign ke beecho beech gada di.



“Awwwwwwwwwwww" Nazim uper ki taraf dekhte jor se chilaya aur uski awaj pure jungle mein dur dur tak gunj uthi.

(I hope you guys liked it. Vaise yeh just ek sneak peek tha main pehla update jaldi hi post karta hun.)

start sahi hai.....aisa lagta hai jaise dono ek hi sath kaam kiya karte the....wahi Nazim ko pata chala hoga wo anguthi usko nahi milne wali....aur issi wajah se wo iska dusman ban baitha....
kuch aisa hi laga.....
accha tha....sunna isme incest nahi hoga yahi to chahiye tha....
for update

 

[Mr. Marvel]

start sahi hai.....aisa lagta hai jaise dono ek hi sath kaam kiya karte the....wahi Nazim ko pata chala hoga wo anguthi usko nahi milne wali....aur issi wajah se wo iska dusman ban baitha....
kuch aisa hi laga.....
accha tha....sunna isme incest nahi hoga yahi to chahiye tha....
for update

Thanks bhai. And apne sahi suna hai. Achhi fantasy story likhne ki try ki hai. Baaki ap sath bane rahiye aur apne sujhav dete rahiye. 1st update jaldi hi ayega.

 

[Naina]

For new story

 

[Naina]

Hakimo pedon- jhadion se takrate huye tezi se bhag raha tha. Tez barish aur kadakti bijli ke beech uske hamfne ki awaj alag hi gunj rahi thi. Wo thak chuka tha . aur bhagna uske liye Sambhaw nahi tha. Lekin sawal zindagi aur maut ka tha. Koi aur chara bhi toh nahi tha. Usne peeche mud kar dekha toh Nazim badi tezi se uski taraf badh rahe the. Kale ghode par sawar 7’5” ka daityakar aadmi. Kale kapde aur lambe baal. Uski hawa mein lehrati Talwar mein use maut saaf nazar a rahi thi. Uske paas ladne ko kuchh thaa bhi nahi. Usne apni kamar mein tange chhote se khajar ko dekha. “yeh kafi nahi hoga.” Uske man se awaj ayi aur sath hi himmat bhi tut si gayi. Tangon ne bhi sath chhod diya... Hakimo pathar se takrate huye munh ke bal kichad mein gir pada.



“Ahhhhhhhhhhh” ander se takat jutate huye usne uthane ki kosish ki.



“Hakimo... tum aur nahi bhaag paoge...” Nazim ne talwar ko uski peeth par rakhte huye halke se daba diya.



“ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh" ek tez cheekh jungle ki gehrayion mein kho si gayi.



“Hakimo... Ring mujhe dedo.” Nazim ne bhari awaj mein kaha.



“Ring mere paas nahi hai.” Hakimo ne kisi tarah apni saanson ko thamte huye kaha.



“Nahi hai… Toh fir kahan hai.” Nazim Gusse se chilaya



“yahan use hona chahiye…. The chosen one ke paas.” Hakimo ne garv ke sath kaha.



Nazim ki ankhon mein gussa aur aakrosh saaf nazar a raha tha usne neeche jhuk kar Hakimo ke gale ko pakada aur kisi khilone ki tarah use hawa mein uchhal diya. Wo udte huye seedha ek ped se takraya aur wahin dher ho gaya.



“Hakimo bas karo… tumhari ladayi ab khatam ho chuki hai…” Nazim ne talwar dikhate huye kaha. Hakimo ne dard se karahate huye Nazim ki taraf dekha aur halke sa muskura diya.



“Sahi kaha Nazim… meri ladayi ab khatam ho chuki hai…” Itna bolkar Hakimo ne wo khanjar apni kamar se keecha… Isse pehle wo dono kuchh samajh pate wo khanjar Hakimo ke pet mein utar Chuka tha. “On the name of ETHAN" Hakimo ke munh se akhri shabad yahi the. Tabhi tez Roshni ke sath ek bada dhamaka huya aur wo Nazim hawa mein udate huye dur jakar gira.



“Hakimoooo" Nazim jor se chilaya. Wo uth kar us jagah gaya yahan Hakimo gira huya tha. Par wahan na toh Hakimo tha aur nahi kuchh aur. Bas jameen par ek ajeeb sa chin tha.



“The order of ETHAN” Nazim ne us Sign ko dekhte huye gusse se kaha aur apni talwar us sign ke beecho beech gada di.



“Awwwwwwwwwwww" Nazim uper ki taraf dekhte jor se chilaya aur uski awaj pure jungle mein dur dur tak gunj uthi.

(I hope you guys liked it. Vaise yeh just ek sneak peek tha main pehla update jaldi hi post karta hun.)

Maybe wo ring kaafi powerful hai aur kisi choosen one ki hai...isliye nazim us hakimo ke piche hath dho ke para tha.. isse pehle ring chin le nazim usse pehle hi shayad koi tarkib lagake hakimo ne wo ring choosen one ke paas pahuncha diya... ab jab farz nibha liya usne to khud ki jaan de di .. maybe wo nahi chahta tha ki nazim ushe bandi bana le...

Khair kahani ki suruwat kaafi dilchasp hai... waise achha hai kirdaar marte rehna chahiye har ek update ke sath
chaahe positive characters ho ya negative characters.... inki maut hi kahani ko aur zyada interesting aur entertaining banayegi
khaufnaak aur dardnaak murder mystery + thrill + suspense ho to story line waise bhi superhit ho jani hai....
Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills writer sahab

 

[Jaguaar]

Hakimo pedon- jhadion se takrate huye tezi se bhag raha tha. Tez barish aur kadakti bijli ke beech uske hamfne ki awaj alag hi gunj rahi thi. Wo thak chuka tha . aur bhagna uske liye Sambhaw nahi tha. Lekin sawal zindagi aur maut ka tha. Koi aur chara bhi toh nahi tha. Usne peeche mud kar dekha toh Nazim badi tezi se uski taraf badh rahe the. Kale ghode par sawar 7’5” ka daityakar aadmi. Kale kapde aur lambe baal. Uski hawa mein lehrati Talwar mein use maut saaf nazar a rahi thi. Uske paas ladne ko kuchh thaa bhi nahi. Usne apni kamar mein tange chhote se khajar ko dekha. “yeh kafi nahi hoga.” Uske man se awaj ayi aur sath hi himmat bhi tut si gayi. Tangon ne bhi sath chhod diya... Hakimo pathar se takrate huye munh ke bal kichad mein gir pada.



“Ahhhhhhhhhhh” ander se takat jutate huye usne uthane ki kosish ki.



“Hakimo... tum aur nahi bhaag paoge...” Nazim ne talwar ko uski peeth par rakhte huye halke se daba diya.



“ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh" ek tez cheekh jungle ki gehrayion mein kho si gayi.



“Hakimo... Ring mujhe dedo.” Nazim ne bhari awaj mein kaha.



“Ring mere paas nahi hai.” Hakimo ne kisi tarah apni saanson ko thamte huye kaha.



“Nahi hai… Toh fir kahan hai.” Nazim Gusse se chilaya



“yahan use hona chahiye…. The chosen one ke paas.” Hakimo ne garv ke sath kaha.



Nazim ki ankhon mein gussa aur aakrosh saaf nazar a raha tha usne neeche jhuk kar Hakimo ke gale ko pakada aur kisi khilone ki tarah use hawa mein uchhal diya. Wo udte huye seedha ek ped se takraya aur wahin dher ho gaya.



“Hakimo bas karo… tumhari ladayi ab khatam ho chuki hai…” Nazim ne talwar dikhate huye kaha. Hakimo ne dard se karahate huye Nazim ki taraf dekha aur halke sa muskura diya.



“Sahi kaha Nazim… meri ladayi ab khatam ho chuki hai…” Itna bolkar Hakimo ne wo khanjar apni kamar se keecha… Isse pehle wo dono kuchh samajh pate wo khanjar Hakimo ke pet mein utar Chuka tha. “On the name of ETHAN" Hakimo ke munh se akhri shabad yahi the. Tabhi tez Roshni ke sath ek bada dhamaka huya aur wo Nazim hawa mein udate huye dur jakar gira.



“Hakimoooo" Nazim jor se chilaya. Wo uth kar us jagah gaya yahan Hakimo gira huya tha. Par wahan na toh Hakimo tha aur nahi kuchh aur. Bas jameen par ek ajeeb sa chin tha.



“The order of ETHAN” Nazim ne us Sign ko dekhte huye gusse se kaha aur apni talwar us sign ke beecho beech gada di.



“Awwwwwwwwwwww" Nazim uper ki taraf dekhte jor se chilaya aur uski awaj pure jungle mein dur dur tak gunj uthi.

(I hope you guys liked it. Vaise yeh just ek sneak peek tha main pehla update jaldi hi post karta hun.)

Update mast haiiii.

Woh Ring jarur bahot shaktishaali hai. Tabhi Nazim uske piche padha aur uss ring ke liye hi Hakimo ne apni jaan di.

Bahot khubbb

 

[SameerK]

Prologue hi itna saandaar he matlab story bhi Mazedar hi hoga

 

[ashish_1982_in]

Hi guys. This is my second Story on the forum. Actually main yeh wali shuru se hi likhna chahta tha but views ke chakkar mein kuchh aur hi likhne laga. I am working on this story from a year now. Hopefully It will turn out to be a good adventure. Umeed hai ki ap sab ise pasand karoge. Maine iske kuchh chapter plan kar rakhe hain. But main one by one hi Likhne wala hun. Agar pehla aap sab ko pasand aya toh age bhi likhunga.

About Story.

Guys its a Magical Fantasy Story. Story ke bare mein jyada toh nahi bata sakta. Apko padhke khud hi pata chal jayega. Baki its an out and out Fantasy baaki thoda masala add karne ke liye modification kar sakta hun. First part maine already likh rakha hai toh jyada changes possible nahi hain but next parts ke liye ap apne suggestions de sakte hain. Hopefully you guys will enjoy it. I will start posting it today.

Thank you Guys.

congrats for new story

 

[Mr. Marvel]

Maybe wo ring kaafi powerful hai aur kisi choosen one ki hai...isliye nazim us hakimo ke piche hath dho ke para tha.. isse pehle ring chin le nazim usse pehle hi shayad koi tarkib lagake hakimo ne wo ring choosen one ke paas pahuncha diya... ab jab farz nibha liya usne to khud ki jaan de di .. maybe wo nahi chahta tha ki nazim ushe bandi bana le...

Khair kahani ki suruwat kaafi dilchasp hai... waise achha hai kirdaar marte rehna chahiye har ek update ke sath
chaahe positive characters ho ya negative characters.... inki maut hi kahani ko aur zyada interesting aur entertaining banayegi
khaufnaak aur dardnaak murder mystery + thrill + suspense ho to story line waise bhi superhit ho jani hai....
Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills writer sahab

First of all thanks for calling me Writer with an extra sahab.

Thanks for reading the story. Apne review diya achha laga. Baki marna maarna toh jeewan ka niyan hai Sab uper wale ke hath mein hai.

Thodi der baad first update post karunga. Ap padhkar review jarur dijiyega.

 

[Mr. Marvel]

Update mast haiiii.

Woh Ring jarur bahot shaktishaali hai. Tabhi Nazim uske piche padha aur uss ring ke liye hi Hakimo ne apni jaan di.

Bahot khubbb

Thanks bhai.

Ap sath bane rahiye Ring ka rahasya khul hi jayega.

 

[Mr. Marvel]

Prologue hi itna saandaar he matlab story bhi Mazedar hi hoga

Jarur bhai. Mazedar hi hogi aur nahi huyi toh apke suggestions se bana lenge.