fantasy zone me jadatar powers ka hi use hota hai waise toh
concept agar aacha laga toh story bhi aachi lagegi aapko aasha hai aur kisi bhi writer ka man waise hota nhi aadhura chhodana ka aur nahi mera haiकॉन्सेप्ट सही है, लेकिन इस फोरम पर तो हमेशा ही अधूरा रह जाता है।
उम्मीद है आप इसे पूरा करेंगे
मिला दूंगा ऐसे बहुत से राइटर से जो जान बूझ कर अधूरी कहानी छोड़ते हैं।
अच्छा है आप जानबूझ कर अधूरा नहीं छोड़ेंगे, मजबूरी अलग बात है।ant me aapke sujhaav ke liye Dhanyawaad
Bahut hi badhiya update diya hai Dev the lover bhai....UPDATE 1
Ek bara drawing room. Rishtedaar, cousins, aur family ke saare members ek jagah baithe hain. Dev ko sabke beech mein khada kar diya gaya hai, jaise uska court-martial chal raha ho. Uska sir sharam aur bezar se jhuka hua hai, aur har taraf se awaazein uske dil ko chhalkane wali hain.
Badi Behen (tez awaaz mein): "Main toh sochti hoon isko ghar se nikaal do. Har koi apne bache pe fakr karta hai, lekin ispe? Mujhe toh log seedha muh bhi nahi lagate. Pata hai, kal Mrs. Sharma kya bol rahi thi? 'Tumhare bhai ke kaam-dhanday ka kya haal hai?' Kya bolti main? Yeh toh apne ghar ka naam mitti mein mila chuka hai!"
Chhota Cousin Bhai (hassi udate hue): "Didi, iska kya haal hoga? Yeh toh wahi banda hai jo chair ka screw bhi tight nahi kar sakta. Last time yaad hai, jab table theek karne bola tha? Table aur tod di isne!"
Sab log hassne lagte hain, aur Dev ka sir aur jhuk jata hai.
Chacha (taana marte hue): "Mujhe toh sharm aati hai yeh soch ke ki hamare khandan mein aisa koi hai. Har khandan mein ek ladka hota hai jo apne ghar ka sahara banta hai. Aur yeh? Yeh toh poora ghar khali karwa dega."
Cousin Sister (ghinn se): "Isse toh koi shaadi bhi nahi karega. Kis ladki ke ma-baap apni beti ko ek nakara aadmi ke saath shaadi karayenge? Shaadi toh door, isko toh koi apne ghar ka naukar bhi nahi rakhega."
Dev ki maa, jo ek kone mein bethi hain, chup reh nahi pati. "Yeh toh meri zindagi ka sabse bada pachtawa hai. Pata nahi kyu isko janam diya. Arre, koi apne maa-baap ke liye izzat ka karan banta hai, aur yeh? Yeh toh sirf hamare liye sharam ka karan ban gaya hai."
Dev ke papa apne kursi se uthte hain aur thandi si awaaz mein bolte hain, "Tu kisi kaam ka nahi hai, Dev. Main toh yeh sochta hoon ki agar tu ghar chhod de, toh shayad sabke dukh kam ho jayenge."
Dev kuch bolne ki koshish karta hai, lekin uski awaaz dab jaati hai. Uski chhoti behen bolti hai, "Bhai, tumne ek baar bhi kuch prove karne ki koshish kyun nahi ki? Hum sab tumhare liye pareshaan hote hain, lekin tum... tumhare chehre pe bas ek hi cheez dikhai deti hai—haar."
Cousin Brother (aur ek taana maarte hue): "Bhai, ek suggestion doon? Kisi circus mein kaam dhoondh le. Wahan toh tere jaise useless log bhi fit ho jate hain. Kam se kam wahan toh log tere upar hansenge aur tu apni useless life ka kuch kaam kar lega."**
Room ek baar phir se thaakon se gunj uthta hai. Dev ke dil ke tukde ho rahe hain, lekin wo chup-chaap khada hai. Uske aankhon se aansoo girne lagte hain, lekin wo unhe pochne ki bhi himmat nahi kar pata. Wo dheere-dheere andar ki taraf hi ghoom jata hai, jaise uska dard kisi ko samajh nahi aayega.
Dev ke papa ka gussa aur unki beizzati ka silsila ruka nahi tha. "Tu mar kyun nahi jaata? Tere marne se kam se kam humein toh sukoon milega. Ek bekaar insaan ka bojh uthana humare bas ki baat nahi hai," unhone thandi aur tez awaaz mein kaha.
Badi behen: "Pata hai, Papa? Yeh zinda hai toh hamare liye sharam ka karan hai. Ek din koi is ghar ke darwaze pe humein taane dene aa jayega, aur hum sir jhuka ke sun lenge. Isse accha yeh mar hi जाए!"
Chhoti behen, jo ab tak chup thi, apni jagah se khadi ho gayi. "Aap logon ko sharam aani chahiye! Bhai aapka beta hai, aapka khoon hai. Aap sab ne kabhi usse pyar kiya? Kabhi usse kuch sikhaya? Har waqt bas taane marte ho. Aap sab usse maar daloge ek din," uski awaaz gusse aur aansuon se bhar chuki thi.
Papa ne ghusse mein kaha, "Humare ghar ka naam mitti mein mila diya isne. Tu chup reh, uski tarafdari mat kar. Yeh kabhi sudhar nahi sakta."
Cousin ne mazaak udaate hue bola, "Arey, chhoti behen ko toh apne useless bhai pe bada pyar aa raha hai. Kyun? Yeh toh khud bhi apne marne ke laayak hai. Iska kuch nahi ho sakta!"
Dev ne pehli baar apni behen ki taraf dekha, uski aankhon mein aansoon aur sharm ka samundar tha. "Chhoti, bas kar... mujhe kisi ki zarurat nahi hai. Shayad sab log theek hi bolte hain. Main kuch nahi hoon, kisi kaam ka nahi hoon," uski awaaz dard se bhari thi.
Uske papa ne usse dekh kar kaha, "Agar tere mein thodi bhi sharam bachi hai, toh yeh ghar chhod de. Teri wajah se yeh ghar dooba ja raha hai. Ab aur mat rah yahan."
Dev dheere-dheere wahaan se chal diya, bina kuch bole. Chhoti behen uske peeche jaane lagi, lekin badi behen ne use rok diya. "Chhod, uski tarafdari karna bandh kar. Aise log ke liye rona bhi paap hai," usne gusse mein kaha.
Dev ne darwaza band kar liya, aur kamre ke kone mein baith gaya. Uski aankhon se aansoon ruk nahi rahe the. Usne socha, "Shayad yeh log sahi keh rahe hain. Shayad meri zindagi ka kuch matlab nahi hai."
Lekin chhoti behen darwaza khol kar uske paas aayi. "Bhai, kuch mat socho. Main tumhare saath hoon. Tumhe sab prove karne ka mauka milega," usne kaha, lekin Dev kuch nahi bola.
Baaki log aakar uski chhoti behen ko khich kar lekar chale gaye dheere dheere time gya aur samay hua raat kaa.
Raat ka samay. Ghar mein sab so rahe hain, lekin Dev ke kamre ke bahar kuch saazish chal rahi hai. Uske papa, badi behen, chacha, aur cousin ne milkar ek plan banaya hai.
Papa (dheere awaaz mein): "Aaj raat is chapter ko yahin khatam karte hain. Is ghar ka bojh khatam hona chahiye."
Chacha (raazdaar tone mein): "Usse yahaan nahi maar sakte. Ghar ke peeche ka jungle sahi jagah hai. Subah tak koi uska pata nahi laga payega."
Sab log apne haath mein rassi, danda, aur chhura lekar Dev ke kamre ki taraf badhte hain. Dev neend mein hai, apne sapnon mein khoya hua. Uske sapne bhi dukh bhare hain—aise sapne, jo sirf ek toota hua insaan dekh sakta hai.
Darwaza dheere se khulta hai, aur wo log uske kareeb aate hain. Ek hi jhatke mein Dev ke munh par rassi baandh di jati hai aur uska haath-pair pakad liya jata hai. Dev aankhein kholta hai, lekin kuch samajhne se pehle uske papa uske sir par danda maarte hain.
Badi Behen (gusse se): "Zyada shor mat karna! Jaldi se isse gadi mein daalo."
Dev adhoori hosh mein hai, lekin kuch kar nahi paa raha. Usse ghaseet kar ek gaadi ke andar daal diya jata hai. Gaadi andheri raat mein ek sunsaan jungle ki taraf chal padti hai.
Jungle ke beech ek jagah gaadi rukti hai.
Cousin (hassi udate hue): "Yeh jagah perfect hai. Koi idhar nahi aata."
Dev ko gaadi se neeche ghaseet kar nikala jata hai. Uska sharir abhi bhi half-conscious hai. Chacha ek chhura nikal kar uske papa ki taraf deta hai.
Chacha: "Aap hi khatam kijiye. Aakhir iska bojh sabse zyada aapne uthaya hai."
Papa bina ek shabd bole chhura uthate hain aur Dev ki taraf dekhte hain. "Tune humein sirf dukh aur sharm di hai. Aaj teri kahani khatam hoti hai."
Badi behen aur cousin Dev ko pakad kar rakhte hain. Papa chhura uske peeth mein ghusa dete hain. Dev ki aankhon ke samne andhera chha jata hai, lekin wo poora behosh nahi hota. Uska sharir lagbhag motionless hai, aur wo log samajhte hain ki Dev ab mar chuka hai.
Badi Behen: "Kaam khatam. Chalo yahan se niklo. Koi iski laash tak nahi dhundhega."
Wo log Dev ke sharir ko jungle ke andar ek gehera gaddha dekh kar wahan phenk dete hain aur upar se patthar aur mitti daal kar dhak dete hain. Sab log wapas gaadi mein baith kar ghar laut jate hain, jaise kuch hua hi na ho.
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