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Fantasy The War Of Magical World

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Pure collage me charo taraf hangama macha huya tha ki kisi ne collage ke sabse bigde group ke ladke ko mara hai koi kah raha tha ki wo pagal hi hoga jo us group ke ladke ko mara hai wo ani jindagi se ub gaya hoga jo khud hi apne maut ko dawat de di to koi kah raha tha ki are jo us bigdail group se panga liya wo kitna khatarnak hoga koi to aisa aaya jo us group se panga lene ki kosish ki bas aise hi bate collage ke charo taraf fail gayi thi.

Ladka2- Bhai us ladke ko mai chhodunga nahi sale ne puri collage me meri beijati kar di.

Boss- Usne sirf tumhe hi beijati nahi kiya hai balki usne mera Ranjeet Yadav ki bhi beijati ki hai mai sare collage wale ko muh dikhane ke layak nahi raha is collage me mera dabdaba chalta tha lekin us ladke ne mere admi ko markar kar meri beijati ki hai log kya kahenge ki ek site gaire ladke ne ranjeet Yadav ki ladke ko mara hai mera to koi ijat hi nahi karega mujhe apna dabdaba kayam rakhne ke liye us ladke ko achh sabak sikhana hoga.

Ladka3- Ha bhai apne sahi kaha agar ham us ladke ko kuchh bhi nahi kiye to sab hame kamjor samajhne lagenge ab uske kiye ki saja use dena hi hoga.

Ladka1- Bhai ladka3 sahi bol raha hai hame use aaj hi dikhana hoga ki ranjeet ke adami se panga lene ka natija kya hota hai.

Boss- Ladka2 tum jakar dekho wo kaha par hai aur mujhe jaldi batao aaj sare collage walo ko pata chalega ki ranjeet se takrane ka matlab hai maut.

Ladka2- Thik hai bhai mai abhi dekhta hu wo kaha par hai

Fir thodi der bad aakar wo ladka 2 batata hai ki wo use canteen ki or jate huye dekha hai ye sunne ke bad wo sab canteen ki or nikal gaye.

Idhar mai class khatam hone ke bad canteen me chala gaya kyuki mai subah bina kuchh khaye aise hi collage chala aaya tha isliye mujhe bahut joro ki bhukh lagi thi canteen me jane ke bad maine khane ke liye kuchh order kiya aur ek teble ke pass ja kar baith gaya fir todi der bad mera ordar mere pass aa gaya aur mai khana khane me byast ho gaya.
Idhar us group ke ladke bhi cateen me aa gaye the tabhi us ladke2 ki najar mujhpar padi to wo bola.

Ladka2- Bhai udhar dekho wo raha wo ladka

Boss- Chalo sab Aaj use achhe se maja chakhate hai

Itna bolkar wo log mere taraf aane lage Aur mai ye sab se bekhabar apna khana khane me byast tha abhi mai kuchh hi niwala apne muh me dala tha ki tabhi wolog mere samne aakar khade ho gaye aur unka boss ranjeet mujhse bola.

Ranjeet- Chal sorry bol.

Jab usne ye bola to ek pal ke liye to mujhe kuchh samajh me hi nahi aaya fir mera dhyan ladka2 par gaya tabhi mujhe subah jo mere sath huya wo yad aaya

Mai- (anpne man me) o to ye log subah jo huya tha uske liye badla lene aaye chalo achha hi huya mera bhi man nahi laga raha tha ab thoda manoranjan ho jayega.

Mujhe kuchh na bolta dekha kar ladka1 bola.

Ladka1- Tumhe sunayi nahi deta hai kya chalo chupchap sorry bolo.

Mai- kya aap log mujhe jante hai ya mai aaplogo ko janta hu.

Ladka3- Nahi ham the tumhe nahi jante hai.

Mai- To fir aaplog mujhe sorry bolne ke liye kyu bol rahe hai

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Ranjeet- Dekh hamse jyada hosiyari karne ki kosish mat karo nahi to tumhe bahut mahnga padega chupchap hamse mafi mang lo mai tumhe chhod dunga.

Mai- Jab mai aaplogo ko janta hi nahi hu to mafi kyu mangu aur tumlog mujhe samjhte kya ho jo bar bar mujhe dhamki de rahe ho.

Ranjeet- Lagta hai tumhe kuchh jayad hi charbi chadh gaya sale do kaudi ke insan madharchod mujhse juban ladata..

Wo ab isse aage kuchh bhi bolta usse pahle hi uska pura jabda hila gaya kyuki uske aage bolne se pahle hi maine ek punch uske muh par mar diya aur bola.

Mai- Sabkuchh bolna lekin garib aur maa ko gali kabhi nahi dena.

Itna bolne ke bad fir se ek panch mara abki bar wo thoda piche jakar gira uske muh se khun nikalne laga jab uske dosto ne dekha maine uske boss ko mara hai to wo log paglo ki tarah mujhpe tut pade lekin todi der bad sab karahte huye jamin par gir gaya huya aisa ki jab maine ranjeet ko pahle punchh mara to uske sath uska sare chamcha log bhi sadme me chale gaye ki abhi abhi unke sath kaya huya lekin jaise hi mera dusra punch ranjeet ko pada to uske dard huya aur wo dard me aah karke chilaya jisse uske chamcho ko hos aaya aur wo log mujhe marne ke liye mere taraf bhagkar aaye sabse ladka3 tha usne mere upar apne punch se hamla kiya to maine uske punch ko hawa me hi rok liya aur uske piche aa rahe ladke1 ko apne pair se ek kick mara aur wo udte huye ladka 2 ke upar jaa gira fir maine ladka3 ko ek punch mara to wo wahi dher ho gaya udhar ranjeet ne dekha ki mai uske bando ko kute ki tarah dho raha hu to usne ek chair utha kar mere upar pheka jo aakar mere pith par laga to mai to thoda unbalance ho gaya aur niche gir gaya isi mauka ka fayada utha kar ranjeet ne mere pass aa gaya aur mere face par ek punch mara jisse mere muh se thoda blood aa gaya maine jab apna blood dekha to mai guse me pagal ho gaya aur wo logo ko kute ki tarah marne laga mai unsab ko tabtak mara jabtak wolog behos na ho gaye jab maine dekha ki wo log behos ho gaye hai to mai waha se nikal gaya.
Idhar jab hamlogo ka ladai start huya to use dekhne ke liye canteen me bahut bhid jama ho gaya fir kisi ne principal ko bata diya ki kuchh students canteen me ladayi kar rahe hai to principal turant hi canteen me aa gaya lekin usko aane se pahle hi main waha se nikal gaya tha principal jab waha aaya to usne dekha ki ladayi samapt ho gaya hai aur kuchh log waha behos pade hai to usne ambulance ko call kar ke bulaya aur un logo ko hospital bhej diya.
Idhar mai collage se nikal kar apne job par chala gaya mai ek coffee shop me part time job karta hu jisse mujhe 5k salary mil jati hai jisse mai apna kharcha maintain karta hu mera yaha job time 2 pm to 6 pm hai mai 6 baje tak job kiya aur for waha se nikal kar sidha ashram aa gya mai aaj bahut thak gaya tha isliye apne room me jate hi apna dress change kiya aur apne bed par so gaya karib 10 baje tak kisi ko jagane ke bad mera nind khula to maine dekha ki ye jagane wale aur koi nahi balki baba the wo mujhe khane ke liye jagane aaye the waise to aplogo ko maine pahle hi bata diya tha ki ye mujhe bahut mante hai isliye hamdono sath me khana khate hai jab aaj mai khane ke time par ashram ke dining area me nahi gaya to baba mujhe lene ke liya khud mere room me aagye fir mai unke sath dining area me gaya aur ek table par dono baith gaye aur khana khane lage khana khate huye baba ne mujhse puchhe

Baba- Aur Adarsh aaj collage ke pahla din kaisa gaya.

Mai- Achha gaya baba bas aaj ka din kuchh jyada hi thaka diya.

Baba- Isiliye mai tumhe hamesa se bolte aaya hu ki ye job tum chhod do mai tumhe apna beta mana hai to mere pass jo hai wo sab tumhara hi to hai lekin tum sunte hi kaha ho.

Mai- Baba mai pahle hi apko bola hu ki mai apne dam par kuchh karna chahta hu aur mujhe ye job karke ke khusi milti hai.

Baba- Thik hai Thik hai ab fir se wahi sab bhasan mat karne lagana tumhe jo man aaye wo karo tum kaha pahle mera sune ho ki ab sunoge.

Idhar ek room me ek mobile ki ring lagatar baje hi jaa raha tha tabhi us room ke bathroom ke darwaja khula aur ek ladki usme bahar nikali jo apne badan par sirf ek tawal lapete huyi thi sayad wo abhi naha kar nikali thi wo bala ki khubsurat aur sexy lag rahi thi wo dhire dhire apne bed ke pass gayi aur apne mobile ko utha kar call ko pickup ki.

Ladki- Ha bola kya hai kab phone kiye ja rahe ho kya bat hai.

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Ladki- Kya kab huya ye sab aur kisne kiya abhi tumlog kaha ho.

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Ladki- kiski itni himmat ki mere jan ke upar hath uthaye jaldi se pata kar ke batao use mai jinda nahi chhodunga.

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Ladki- Thik hai mai waha thodi der me pahuchti hu lekin mujhe us ladke ki puri janam kundali chahiye jisne mere jan ko hospital pahuchaya hai ab mai use is duniya se hi upar pahucha dungi.

-- Aaj adarsh ne un ladko ko mar kar hospital pahucha diya to kya wo ladke ab chup rahenge ya adarsh ke sath dobara bhidenge idhar collage me principal ko bhi ladayi ke bare me pata chal gaya to ab wo kya karega aur ye ladki aur uske jan kon hai kon mara hai us ladki ke jan ko aur ab wo ladki apne jan ko marne wale ke sath kya karta hai.
Ye janne ke liye padhte rahiye THE WAR OF MAGICAL WORLD
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Xabhi

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Pure collage me charo taraf hangama macha huya tha ki kisi ne collage ke sabse bigde group ke ladke ko mara hai koi kah raha tha ki wo pagal hi hoga jo us group ke ladke ko mara hai wo ani jindagi se ub gaya hoga jo khud hi apne maut ko dawat de di to koi kah raha tha ki are jo us bigdail group se panga liya wo kitna khatarnak hoga koi to aisa aaya jo us group se panga lene ki kosish ki bas aise hi bate collage ke charo taraf fail gayi thi.

Ladka2- Bhai us ladke ko mai chhodunga nahi sale ne puri collage me meri beijati kar di.

Boss- Usne sirf tumhe hi beijati nahi kiya hai balki usne mera Ranjeet Yadav ki bhi beijati ki hai mai sare collage wale ko muh dikhane ke layak nahi raha is collage me mera dabdaba chalta tha lekin us ladke ne mere admi ko markar kar meri beijati ki hai log kya kahenge ki ek site gaire ladke ne ranjeet Yadav ki ladke ko mara hai mera to koi ijat hi nahi karega mujhe apna dabdaba kayam rakhne ke liye us ladke ko achh sabak sikhana hoga.

Ladka3- Ha bhai apne sahi kaha agar ham us ladke ko kuchh bhi nahi kiye to sab hame kamjor samajhne lagenge ab uske kiye ki saja use dena hi hoga.

Ladka1- Bhai ladka3 sahi bol raha hai hame use aaj hi dikhana hoga ki ranjeet ke adami se panga lene ka natija kya hota hai.

Boss- Ladka2 tum jakar dekho wo kaha par hai aur mujhe jaldi batao aaj sare collage walo ko pata chalega ki ranjeet se takrane ka matlab hai maut.

Ladka2- Thik hai bhai mai abhi dekhta hu wo kaha par hai

Fir thodi der bad aakar wo ladka 2 batata hai ki wo use canteen ki or jate huye dekha hai ye sunne ke bad wo sab canteen ki or nikal gaye.

Idhar mai class khatam hone ke bad canteen me chala gaya kyuki mai subah bina kuchh khaye aise hi collage chala aaya tha isliye mujhe bahut joro ki bhukh lagi thi canteen me jane ke bad maine khane ke liye kuchh order kiya aur ek teble ke pass ja kar baith gaya fir todi der bad mera ordar mere pass aa gaya aur mai khana khane me byast ho gaya.
Idhar us group ke ladke bhi cateen me aa gaye the tabhi us ladke2 ki najar mujhpar padi to wo bola.

Ladka2- Bhai udhar dekho wo raha wo ladka

Boss- Chalo sab Aaj use achhe se maja chakhate hai

Itna bolkar wo log mere taraf aane lage Aur mai ye sab se bekhabar apna khana khane me byast tha abhi mai kuchh hi niwala apne muh me dala tha ki tabhi wolog mere samne aakar khade ho gaye aur unka boss ranjeet mujhse bola.

Ranjeet- Chal sorry bol.

Jab usne ye bola to ek pal ke liye to mujhe kuchh samajh me hi nahi aaya fir mera dhyan ladka2 par gaya tabhi mujhe subah jo mere sath huya wo yad aaya

Mai- (anpne man me) o to ye log subah jo huya tha uske liye badla lene aaye chalo achha hi huya mera bhi man nahi laga raha tha ab thoda manoranjan ho jayega.

Mujhe kuchh na bolta dekha kar ladka1 bola.

Ladka1- Tumhe sunayi nahi deta hai kya chalo chupchap sorry bolo.

Mai- kya aap log mujhe jante hai ya mai aaplogo ko janta hu.

Ladka3- Nahi ham the tumhe nahi jante hai.

Mai- To fir aaplog mujhe sorry bolne ke liye kyu bol rahe hai

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Ranjeet- Dekh hamse jyada hosiyari karne ki kosish mat karo nahi to tumhe bahut mahnga padega chupchap hamse mafi mang lo mai tumhe chhod dunga.

Mai- Jab mai aaplogo ko janta hi nahi hu to mafi kyu mangu aur tumlog mujhe samjhte kya ho jo bar bar mujhe dhamki de rahe ho.

Ranjeet- Lagta hai tumhe kuchh jayad hi charbi chadh gaya sale do kaudi ke insan madharchod mujhse juban ladata..

Wo ab isse aage kuchh bhi bolta usse pahle hi uska pura jabda hila gaya kyuki uske aage bolne se pahle hi maine ek punch uske muh par mar diya aur bola.

Mai- Sabkuchh bolna lekin garib aur maa ko gali kabhi nahi dena.

Itna bolne ke bad fir se ek panch mara abki bar wo thoda piche jakar gira uske muh se khun nikalne laga jab uske dosto ne dekha maine uske boss ko mara hai to wo log paglo ki tarah mujhpe tut pade lekin todi der bad sab karahte huye jamin par gir gaya huya aisa ki jab maine ranjeet ko pahle punchh mara to uske sath uska sare chamcha log bhi sadme me chale gaye ki abhi abhi unke sath kaya huya lekin jaise hi mera dusra punch ranjeet ko pada to uske dard huya aur wo dard me aah karke chilaya jisse uske chamcho ko hos aaya aur wo log mujhe marne ke liye mere taraf bhagkar aaye sabse ladka3 tha usne mere upar apne punch se hamla kiya to maine uske punch ko hawa me hi rok liya aur uske piche aa rahe ladke1 ko apne pair se ek kick mara aur wo udte huye ladka 2 ke upar jaa gira fir maine ladka3 ko ek punch mara to wo wahi dher ho gaya udhar ranjeet ne dekha ki mai uske bando ko kute ki tarah dho raha hu to usne ek chair utha kar mere upar pheka jo aakar mere pith par laga to mai to thoda unbalance ho gaya aur niche gir gaya isi mauka ka fayada utha kar ranjeet ne mere pass aa gaya aur mere face par ek punch mara jisse mere muh se thoda blood aa gaya maine jab apna blood dekha to mai guse me pagal ho gaya aur wo logo ko kute ki tarah marne laga mai unsab ko tabtak mara jabtak wolog behos na ho gaye jab maine dekha ki wo log behos ho gaye hai to mai waha se nikal gaya.
Idhar jab hamlogo ka ladai start huya to use dekhne ke liye canteen me bahut bhid jama ho gaya fir kisi ne principal ko bata diya ki kuchh students canteen me ladayi kar rahe hai to principal turant hi canteen me aa gaya lekin usko aane se pahle hi main waha se nikal gaya tha principal jab waha aaya to usne dekha ki ladayi samapt ho gaya hai aur kuchh log waha behos pade hai to usne ambulance ko call kar ke bulaya aur un logo ko hospital bhej diya.
Idhar mai collage se nikal kar apne job par chala gaya mai ek coffee shop me part time job karta hu jisse mujhe 5k salary mil jati hai jisse mai apna kharcha maintain karta hu mera yaha job time 2 pm to 6 pm hai mai 6 baje tak job kiya aur for waha se nikal kar sidha ashram aa gya mai aaj bahut thak gaya tha isliye apne room me jate hi apna dress change kiya aur apne bed par so gaya karib 10 baje tak kisi ko jagane ke bad mera nind khula to maine dekha ki ye jagane wale aur koi nahi balki baba the wo mujhe khane ke liye jagane aaye the waise to aplogo ko maine pahle hi bata diya tha ki ye mujhe bahut mante hai isliye hamdono sath me khana khate hai jab aaj mai khane ke time par ashram ke dining area me nahi gaya to baba mujhe lene ke liya khud mere room me aagye fir mai unke sath dining area me gaya aur ek table par dono baith gaye aur khana khane lage khana khate huye baba ne mujhse puchhe

Baba- Aur Adarsh aaj collage ke pahla din kaisa gaya.

Mai- Achha gaya baba bas aaj ka din kuchh jyada hi thaka diya.

Baba- Isiliye mai tumhe hamesa se bolte aaya hu ki ye job tum chhod do mai tumhe apna beta mana hai to mere pass jo hai wo sab tumhara hi to hai lekin tum sunte hi kaha ho.

Mai- Baba mai pahle hi apko bola hu ki mai apne dam par kuchh karna chahta hu aur mujhe ye job karke ke khusi milti hai.

Baba- Thik hai Thik hai ab fir se wahi sab bhasan mat karne lagana tumhe jo man aaye wo karo tum kaha pahle mera sune ho ki ab sunoge.

Idhar ek room me ek mobile ki ring lagatar baje hi jaa raha tha tabhi us room ke bathroom ke darwaja khula aur ek ladki usme bahar nikali jo apne badan par sirf ek tawal lapete huyi thi sayad wo abhi naha kar nikali thi wo bala ki khubsurat aur sexy lag rahi thi wo dhire dhire apne bed ke pass gayi aur apne mobile ko utha kar call ko pickup ki.

Ladki- Ha bola kya hai kab phone kiye ja rahe ho kya bat hai.

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Ladki- Kya kab huya ye sab aur kisne kiya abhi tumlog kaha ho.

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Ladki- kiski itni himmat ki mere jan ke upar hath uthaye jaldi se pata kar ke batao use mai jinda nahi chhodunga.

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Ladki- Thik hai mai waha thodi der me pahuchti hu lekin mujhe us ladke ki puri janam kundali chahiye jisne mere jan ko hospital pahuchaya hai ab mai use is duniya se hi upar pahucha dungi.

-- Aaj adarsh ne un ladko ko mar kar hospital pahucha diya to kya wo ladke ab chup rahenge ya adarsh ke sath dobara bhidenge idhar collage me principal ko bhi ladayi ke bare me pata chal gaya to ab wo kya karega aur ye ladki aur uske jan kon hai kon mara hai us ladki ke jan ko aur ab wo ladki apne jan ko marne wale ke sath kya karta hai.
Ye janne ke liye padhte rahiye THE WAR OF MAGICAL WORLD
Sare swal to aapne Pahle hi kar diye superb update bhai sandar jabarjast to adarsh ne acche se sabak sikhaya pr ranjeet ek kutte ki dum hai vo sant nhi baithega jarur kuchh na kuchh krega maza aa gya padh kr bhai adarsh part time job bhi karta hai jo 2 se 6 hai thaka hara asram aakr so gya or khane ke time baba ne aake jgaya or sath me bate karte huye khana khaya vhi ek ladki jo abhi bathroom se nikli hai uska phone lgatar baj rha hai Vo use utha kar baat karti hai Lagta hai vo ladka uska chhota bhai hai Jise vah jaan bolkr sambodhit kr rhi hai... Superb update bhai sandar jabarjast dekhte hai ab yah ladki kyA karti hai gusse me to bahut lag rhi hai or Usne kisi ko marne vale ladke ki info niklne ka kahti hai...
 

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har baar, har koi julm seh le, ye thodi na hota hai...
Aaj in logo ko pata chal gaya hoga ki bina jaane samjhe kisi par hamla nahi karna chahiye, chhot khud ko hi lagti hai... dusman ke taakat ko Kam aank ne ki koshish ki, natiza saamne hai..
Khair dilchasp update tha sath action se bharpur...
gaur talab baat ye hai ki weh seniors aage chalke kya karne wale hai...
Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills :yourock: :yourock:
 
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har baar, har koi julm seh le, ye thodi na hota hai...
Aaj in logo ko pata chal gaya hoga ki bina jaane samjhe kisi par hamla nahi karna chahiye, chhot khud ko hi lagti hai... dusman ke taakat ko Kam aank ne ki koshish ki, natiza saamne hai..
Khair dilchasp update tha sath action se bharpur...
gaur talab baat ye hai ki weh seniors aage chalke kya karne wale hai...
Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills :yourock: :yourock:
Haa shi kha
Pr agar aage jakr waisa hi hona hai jaise story k suru me jungle ka scene dikhaya tha to ab ise itna lmba khinchne ki kya jrurt hai . Short me khtm krdena chaiye . Aage jungle me Adarsh k mrne k baad agar wo magical world me jayega to wha tak ka scene thoda short me btana chaiye jisse main story suru ho skke .
 
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Haa shi kha
Pr agar aage jakr waisa hi hona hai jaise story k suru me jungle ka scene dikhaya tha to ab ise itna lmba khinchne ki kya jrurt hai . Short me khtm krdena chaiye . Aage jungle me Adarsh k mrne k baad agar wo magical world me jayega to wha tak ka scene thoda short me btana chaiye jisse main story suru ho skke .
Shayad writer ne kuch aur socha ho.. maybe flashback mein hi kayi raaz ki baatein chupi ho..
Haan ye bhi sach hai present mein Adarsh ki jindagi mein ek nayi suruwat hogi... lekin kabhi kabhi details flashback bhi chahiye taaki present mein ho rahe ghatanayo ko achhe se samajh sake readers..
gaur talab baat ye bhi hai ki... Adarsh beete jindagi ke baare mein jitna jaanenge readers, utna hi kahani ke Nayak ko aur bhi karib se feelings ke sath pehchan aur jaan payenge..
 
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Shayad writer ne kuch aur socha ho.. maybe flashback mein hi kayi raaz ki baatein chupi ho..
Haan ye bhi sach hai present mein Adarsh ki jindagi mein ek nayi suruwat hogi... lekin kabhi kabhi details flashback bhi chahiye taaki present mein ho rahe ghatanayo ko achhe se samajh sake readers..
gaur talab baat ye bhi hai ki... Adarsh beete jindagi ke baare mein jitna jaanenge readers, utna hi kahani ke Nayak ko aur bhi karib se feelings ke sath pehchan aur jaan payenge..
Haa ho skta hai writer ne kuch or socha ho
Pr Abhi Adarsh jis duniya me hai wo bilkul normal hai . Story k name se pta chalta hai ki Magical World bhi hai isme . Or jise adarsh. BABA bolta hai wo bhot baar isse magic ki baate krta hai kyoki wo magical world se hai or usi ki kisi chiz se Adarsh magical world me jaega . Pocket Fm pr Magic School naam se story hai. Use sunke dekho same aisi hi hai . Bs isme writer ne thoda change krdia hai.
 

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Haa ho skta hai writer ne kuch or socha ho
Pr Abhi Adarsh jis duniya me hai wo bilkul normal hai . Story k name se pta chalta hai ki Magical World bhi hai isme . Or jise adarsh. BABA bolta hai wo bhot baar isse magic ki baate krta hai kyoki wo magical world se hai or usi ki kisi chiz se Adarsh magical world me jaega . Pocket Fm pr Magic School naam se story hai. Use sunke dekho same aisi hi hai . Bs isme writer ne thoda change krdia hai.
Ab ye to writer sahab hi bata sakte hai.. lekin Weh to bas thanks kehke hi nikal lete hai :D
 
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Update 1

Ek ladka ek jangal me bhage ja raha tha jo dikhne me karib 5 feet 11 inch ka hoga uske gale me ek locket (pendant) latak raha tha aur uske sath me ek ladki bhi thi wo ladka us ladki ke hath pakade huye bhag raha tha un dono ke pichhe bahut se gunde type ladke pade huye the jo unke pichhe kuchh hi duri par unka pichha kar rhe the wo dono bhag hi rahe the ki tabhi piche se ek mota lakdi aakar un dono ke pair par laga aur wo dono wahi gir gaye fir kisi tarah wo dono uth kar bhagne hi wale the ki tabhi ek awaj sunayi di.

-Are ab bas bhi karo Adarsh kitna bhagoge aaj tum dono ko bhagwan bhi nahi bacha sakta fir kyu faltu me mera samay barbad kar rahe ho
(Wo ladka jo bhag raha tha wo hai hamare story ka hero Adarsh)

Wo gunde Adarsh ko charo taraf se gher liye to Adarsh ne jab dekha ki ab aur bhagna byarth hai to wo chupchap khada ho gya aur apne muh se khoon thukte huye bola.

Adarsh- Tumne sahi bola Ranjeet ab bhagne se koi fayda nahi hai ab ya to aar ya par aa jao sab aaj dekhte hai kon bachta hai aur kon marta hai (Fir Adarsh ne us ladki ko dekhte huye bola) Supriya tum ek taraf ho jao aaj ya to mai nahi rahunga ya fir ye log.
Supriya- Nahi Adarsh tum ye log se mat lado chalo ye log bahut sare hai chalo yaha se bhag jate hai.
Adarsh- Nhi ab aur nahi bhag sakte bahut bhag liye aur ye log ka atyachar bhi bahut sah liya ab aur nahi sahenge Aa jao ranjeet khud aaoge ya fir apne chamcho ko bhejoge aaj yaha se koi bhi bach kar nahu jayega.

Itna bol kar adarsh ranjeet ke taraf isara kar ke apne taraf bulane laga ranjeet to pahle se hi guse me tha ab wo adarsh ka ishara dekh kar aur aag babula ho gaya aur guse se apne sathiyo ko bola.

Ranjeet- Jao re aaj isko maja chakha do jo usko pahle marega usko 1 lakh rupya dunga.

Ranjeet ke bat sun kar uska sare chamche khus ho gaye aur Adarsh ko marne ke liye apne hatho me hathiyar leke uske taraf bhagne lage sabse aage jo gunda tha uske hath me ek hammer wo apne hammer wale hath ko lahrate huye Adarsh par ek war kiya jisse adarsh ne niche jukte huye bach gaya aur apne hath ko muka banate huye uske jabde me ek gusa mara jisse wo wahi ke wahi dher ho gaya fir adarsh ne us gunde ke hath se hammer ko apne hath me leta hai aur sare gundo ke taraf bhagne lagta hai aur fir hota hai ek ghamasan ladayi jisme adarsh ne sare gundo ko mar mar kar bharta bana diya itne sare gundo se nipatane ke bad adarsh bhi thoda thak sa gaya tha lekin fir bhi apne sanso ko durust karte huye wo ranjeet ke taraf badha ranjeet ko to pahle hi halat khara ho gaya tha jab usne dekha ki uske sare gunde jamin par dher ho gaye hai aur jab usne dekha ki ab Adarsh uske taraf badh raha hai to uska halat aur kharab ho gaya lekin kute ka dum kabhi sidha nahi hota aisa hi iske sath bhi tha itna sab kuchh hone ke bad bhi wo apne hath me ek chaku lekar adarsh ke badhne laga Adarsh ne jab dekha ki ranjeet bhi chaku lekar uske taraf hi aa raha hai to Adarsh ne apne hath me pakde huye hammer ko aur tightly pakad liya aur uske taraf bad gaya abhi wo ranjeet ke kareeb pauchne hi wala tha ki tabhi kisi ne pichhe se uske pith me chaku mar diya jisse Adarsh dard me chilate huye jamin par gir gaya aur apne sar ko pichhe kar ke jab usne dekha ki use piche se kisne mara hai to uska hos ud gaya aur uske aankho se aansu girne laga kyuki chaku marne wala nahi wali thi aur wo aur koi nahi balki Supriya thi jo piche khadi hokar muskura rahi thi fir wo muskurate huye aage jakar ranjeet ke gale lag gayi aur uske hoth par kiss karne lagi.

Adarsh- (dard me kaharte huye) Kyu akhir tumne aisa kyu kiya mai to yaha tumhe bachane aaya tha lekin tumne mere sath aisa kyu kiya.
Supriya- Hahahahhh tumhe kya laga mai tumhe phone kar ke yaha mujhe bachane k liye bulayi thi chu... Chu...chu..chu.. tu kitna na samajh hai re mai tumhe yaha mujhe bachane ke liye nahi balki tumhe marne ke liye bulayi thi

Jab Adarsh ne ye suna to uska sar guse se phatane laga aur wo kisi tarah bal lagakar apne pair par khada huya aur apne hath me pakde huye hammer ko Supriya ke sar par de mara jisse uske sar ka kachumar nikal gaya aur wo wahi dher ho gayi jab ranjeet ne ye dekha to wo guse me paglo ki tarah chilane laga.

Ranjeet- Supriya nahi ye kya ho gaya nhi ye tumne thik nahi kiya adarsh ab tumhe iska phal bhogna hoga tume meri Supriya ko mar dala mai tumhe jinda nahi chhodunga.

Itne bolne ke bad ranjeet Adarsh ke taraf paglo ki tarah bhagte huye gaya aur adarsh ke pet me apna chaku mar diya lekin is bar dard me chilane ki awaj ek nahi do aayi thi ek to Adarsh ki thi aur dusri ranjeet ki kyoki ranjeet ke chhati me jis side me dil rahta hai waha ek chaku gusa huya tha lekin ye kab huya to aaiye jante hai jab ranjeet paglo ke tarah apne hath me chaku liye Adarsh ki taraf bhagte huye jaa raha tha tabhi adarsh ne jo chaku Supriya ne use mari thi wo nikal liya tha aur jaise hi ranjeet ne apne chaku adarsh ke pet me gusaya waise hi adarsh ne bhi apna chaku ranjeet ke dil me utar diya jisse ranjeet wahi gir kar apna dam tod diya fir adarsh bhi gir gaya aur upar asman ke taraf dekhte huye bola.

Adarsh- Kyu bhagwan akhir kyu apne mere sath aisa kyu kiya apne na mujhe maa bap ka pyar diya mujhe bachpan se anath banaya aur na hi kabhi koi sacha dost diya akhir meri galti kya thi mai to is ladki ko apna sacha dost mana tha aur yaha ise bachane aaya tha lekin kya huya isne hi mujhe chaku mar kar meri jan lene ki kosish ki akhir kyu mere hi sath aisa kyu hota hai.

itna bol kar adarsh Rone lagata hai aur apne jiwan me bite abhi tak ke samay ko yad karne lagta hai....

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Bhai ho skke to flashback ko thoda short me khtm krdo kyoki magical world me jane k baad is world k characters ka to importance hoga nhi or time bhi bchega
 
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