Fantasy The War Of Magical World

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Sare swal to aapne Pahle hi kar diye superb update bhai sandar jabarjast to adarsh ne acche se sabak sikhaya pr ranjeet ek kutte ki dum hai vo sant nhi baithega jarur kuchh na kuchh krega maza aa gya padh kr bhai adarsh part time job bhi karta hai jo 2 se 6 hai thaka hara asram aakr so gya or khane ke time baba ne aake jgaya or sath me bate karte huye khana khaya vhi ek ladki jo abhi bathroom se nikli hai uska phone lgatar baj rha hai Vo use utha kar baat karti hai Lagta hai vo ladka uska chhota bhai hai Jise vah jaan bolkr sambodhit kr rhi hai... Superb update bhai sandar jabarjast dekhte hai ab yah ladki kyA karti hai gusse me to bahut lag rhi hai or Usne kisi ko marne vale ladke ki info niklne ka kahti hai...

Ha apne sahi bola Ranjeet kute ki dum hai wo kuchh to karega lekin adarsh bhi kam nahi hai use it ka jabab pathar se dene aata hai aur us ladki ki bat to wo ladka us ladki ka bhai ha ya kuchh aur ye aage hi pata chalega by the way thanks for comment

 

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har baar, har koi julm seh le, ye thodi na hota hai...
Aaj in logo ko pata chal gaya hoga ki bina jaane samjhe kisi par hamla nahi karna chahiye, chhot khud ko hi lagti hai... dusman ke taakat ko Kam aank ne ki koshish ki, natiza saamne hai..
Khair dilchasp update tha sath action se bharpur...
gaur talab baat ye hai ki weh seniors aage chalke kya karne wale hai...
Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills

Sher jab sant rahta hai to beriye use kutta samajh lete hai lekin unhe kya pata sher tabtak sant hai jabtak use koi chhede nahi ab yelog ko kya pata tha ki jise wo awara kutta samajh rahe hai wo babar sher hai Adarsh ke sath bhi aisa hi tha jabtak koi use chhede nahi wo sant rahta hai aur chedne ke bad babar sher.
waise apka comment bahut achha hota hai thanks for comment aise hi sath bane rahe

 

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Haa shi kha
Pr agar aage jakr waisa hi hona hai jaise story k suru me jungle ka scene dikhaya tha to ab ise itna lmba khinchne ki kya jrurt hai . Short me khtm krdena chaiye . Aage jungle me Adarsh k mrne k baad agar wo magical world me jayega to wha tak ka scene thoda short me btana chaiye jisse main story suru ho skke .

Apka bolna bhi sahi hai lekin agar mai kahani ko short me nikal kar magical world me le hai to sare readers sawal karenge ki Supriya akhir thi kon wo kyu adarsh par war kari aur ye sab batane ke liye kahani ko thoda sa khichna hi padega waise 2 update me earth ka story samapt ho jayega
Thanks apke comment ke liye aise hi sath bane rahe aur apna review dete rahe

 

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Shayad writer ne kuch aur socha ho.. maybe flashback mein hi kayi raaz ki baatein chupi ho..
Haan ye bhi sach hai present mein Adarsh ki jindagi mein ek nayi suruwat hogi... lekin kabhi kabhi details flashback bhi chahiye taaki present mein ho rahe ghatanayo ko achhe se samajh sake readers..
gaur talab baat ye bhi hai ki... Adarsh beete jindagi ke baare mein jitna jaanenge readers, utna hi kahani ke Nayak ko aur bhi karib se feelings ke sath pehchan aur jaan payenge..

Ha Naina jee apki bat bilkul sahi sahi adarsh ke jindagi ke flashback me kuchh aisa razz hai jo use magical world me bahut kam aayenge isiliye mai flashback ko thoda lamba khicha hu

 

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Haa ho skta hai writer ne kuch or socha ho
Pr Abhi Adarsh jis duniya me hai wo bilkul normal hai . Story k name se pta chalta hai ki Magical World bhi hai isme . Or jise adarsh. BABA bolta hai wo bhot baar isse magic ki baate krta hai kyoki wo magical world se hai or usi ki kisi chiz se Adarsh magical world me jaega . Pocket Fm pr Magic School naam se story hai. Use sunke dekho same aisi hi hai . Bs isme writer ne thoda change krdia hai.

Bhai maine apko pahle hi bola tha ki ye story magic of school se thoda alag hoga

 

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Bhai ho skke to flashback ko thoda short me khtm krdo kyoki magical world me jane k baad is world k characters ka to importance hoga nhi or time bhi bchega

Apne sahi bola bhai lekin is world ke ek character aisa bhi hai jiska magical world me aham bhumika hogi.
Lekin agar aap sab yahi chahte hai ho mai is story ko short kar dunga

 

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Good update bhai

Thanks for comment johnsamuri jee

 

[Vickey1211]

Apne sahi bola bhai lekin is world ke ek character aisa bhi hai jiska magical world me aham bhumika hogi.
Lekin agar aap sab yahi chahte hai ho mai is story ko short kar dunga

Bhai story ko nhi bas flash back ko short kar dena ho sake to

 

[Devil hunter123]

Nice update

 

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Update 4

WO ladki phone pe bat karne ke bad jaldi jaldi se kapde pahni aur apne room se nikal gayi fir usne apne garage se apna gadi nikali aur nikal gayi fir thodi der bad uski gadi ek hospital ke samne ja kar ruka aur wo gadi se nikal kar jaldi se hospital me chali gayi fir wo recipienists ke pass ja kar ek room ke bare me puchati hai aur wo se sidha us room ke taraf chali jati hai waha jakar dekhti hai waha par char panch ladke bed par behos pade huye hai aur unke pass ek ladki baithi huyi thi fir jaise hi us ladki ka dhayan is ladki par gaya to wo turant hi uth gayi aur boli.

Ladki- Are Supriya tum aa gayi aao yaha baitho. (Ye ladki aur koi nahi balki Supriya hai)

Supriya- Ye sab chhodo pahle ye batao Kaise huya ye sab aur kisne kiya tum pata lagayi.

Ladki- Ha maine pata lagaya wo ladka usi collage me naya naya addmission liya hai jaha par ranjeet padhta hai aur usi ne inlogo ka aisa halat kiya hai isse jayada uske bare me mujhe nahi pata chala.

Supriya- Us ladke ne mere pyar meri jan ranjeet par war kiya mai use jinda nahi chhodunga use hi kya mai uske khandan me kisi ko bhi jinda nahi chhodungi mujhe subah tak uski sari janamkundali chahiye tum chahe kuchh bhi karo mujhe nahi pata mujhe subah ka subah uske bare me sari jankari chahiye samajh gayi.

Ladki- thik hai mai subah tak uske bare sab pata laga lungi.

(Ab mai thoda Supriya aur ranjeet ke bare me bata du ye log bachpan se hi ek dusre se pyar karte hai yaha is sahar me inke aur koi nahi hai ye log apne maa bap ko markar ghar se bhag kar yaha aa gaye hai ye log apne maa bap ko is liye mara ki inke parents inke sadi ke khilaaf the ye log yaha aakar alag alag collage me addmission karwa liya aur us collage me drags ke dhandha karne lage ye log yaha dhire dhire apna shika jama liya aur ye mafiya bhi join kar liya hai lekin inke bare me itne detail se koi nahi janta hai)

Idhar mai khana khane ke bad sone chala gaya fir subah uth kar fresh huya aur apna martial arts ki traning karne laga 2 ghante traning karne ke bad waha se sidha apne room me gaya aur collage jane ke liye taiyar hone laga fir thodi der me taiyar ho kar khana khaya aur collage nikal gaya.

Idhar wo ladki bhi Adarsh ke bare me sari jankari nikal li aur sidha Supriya ke pass ja pahuchi.

Supriya- Uske bare me kuchh pata chala

Ladki- Ha mai uski sari janamkundali nikal li hai.

Supriya- To tum meri muh kya dekh rahi ho jaldi batao kon hai wo aur kaha rahta hai.

Ladki- Thik hai batata hu us ladke ka name Adarsh hai aur wo ek anath hai wo xxx anath asram me rahta hai aur ye lo uski photo bhi layi hu.

Supriya- Adarsh ek anath hai sale ki na maa ka pata na bap ka ek gandi nali ke kora hai wo aur usne.. huh bahut badi galati ki launde jo tune meri jan ko mara mai tumhe itni dardnak maut dungi ki upar wale bhi kap jayenge.

Fir usne apna mobile nikali aur ek no. Par coll ki aur boli

Supriya- Shera mai ek photo bhej rahi hu dhyan se dekh lena mujhe aaj kisi bhi kimat par is photo wale ki lash chahiye

Shera- Thik hai madam apka kam ho jayega

Idhat maine apne anath ashram se nikal kar sidha collage chala gaya jab mai waha gaya to sare student mujhe hi ghur rahe the jaise mai koi ajooba hu mai unlogo ko ignore karte huye sidha class me chala gaya fir hamari class start huyi thodi der bad ek peon mere class me aaya aur usne mujhse bola ki principal bula rahe hai mai waha se naikal kar sidha principal office pahucha to principal ne mujhse kal ke bare me puchha to maine use sab sach sach bata diya to usne mujhe last warning dekar chhod diya fir mai waha se nikal kar sidha canteen me gaya waha jakar thoda time pass kiya aur fir apne job par chala gaya waha par 6 pm tak rukne ke bad mai apne anath ashram ke liye nikal gaya abhi mai thoda hi dur gaya tha ki tabhi mujhe ek awaj sunayi diya mai piche mud kar dekha to waha uncle jon khade the mai yaha uncle jon ko dekh kar surprise ho gaya aur unse puchha.

Mai- Are uncle jon aap.. Aap yaha kya kar rahe hai

Jon- Mai yaha kisi kam se aaya tha aur jab mai wapas jane laga to tumhe dekha to sochha ki tumhare sath chala jata hu hamari raste bhi kat jayenge aur ham muchhe bate bhi kar lenge.

Mai- Apne thik kiya uncle mai bhi akele hi jaa raha tha ab ek se bhale do hahhhh

Jon- Waise kal kyu nahi aaye tum

Mai- wo kya hai na uncle jon ki kal mai kuchh jyada hi thak gaya tha isliye ashram jate hi so gaya tha.

Hamlog isi tarah bat karte huye ja rahe the ki tabhi ek gadi aakar hamare samne ruki aur usme se 10 gunde nikale aur hame charo taraf se gher liye aur hamare taraf badhne lage.

Mai- wo bhai log aapne hamara rasta kyu roka hai hato hamare raste se.

Un gundo me se ek gunda jo dekhne me in logo ka boss lag raha tha wo samne aaya aur bola.

G boss - Hamlog yaha tumhara raste roke isliye nahi khade hai hai ham yaha se hat jaye.

Mai- To tumlog yaha aise G**d marane ke liye khade ho hato yaha se.

g boss- Ham yaha tumhari G***d marne ke liye ( Apna jibh dat tar dabate huye) Auchh mai yaha tumhe parlok bhejne ke liye khade hai.

Mai- ham to sayad tumse kabhi mile bhi nahi hai aur mujhe aisa lagta hai tum pahle mujhse mile nahi ho to fir the m hame kyu marna chahte ho.

G boss- Tumne sahi kaha ham kabhi nahi mile hai agar mile hote to tum abtak jinda nahi hote waise mai ek bat bata du mujhe tumhe marne ke liye supari mili hai.

Mai- Kya... Mujhe marne ke liye supari lekin mujhe jaha tak yad hai mujhe kisi se koi dusmani bhi nahi hai to mujhe koi kyu marna chahega.

G boss- Mai ye nahi bata sakta ki tumhe kon marna chahta hai lekin mai tumhe ek bat bata deta hu tum aaj jarur maroge ( apne ek gunde se) Jao re mar dalo aur ha aram se marna jyada dard na ho wo kya hai na ki mujhe kisi ko dard me dekhna achha nahi lagta hahhhh

Mai- Are ruko bhai ek minat ruko mujhe apne uncle se bat karne hai Ha to uncle aap sath aa rahe hai ya aap side me ho kar tamasa dekhiyega.

jon- nahi mai nahi aaunga mai to waha par baith kar tamasa dekhunga aur mujhe aaj ye bhi dekhna hai ki tum mujhse kya kya sikhe ho aur uska use kaise karte ho.

mai- Thik hai uncle aap side ho jaiye ( un gundo se ) ha to ab tum waha khade khade kya kar rahe ho aao aur maro mujhe

mera bat sun kar wo gunda bhagte huye mere pass aaya aur uske hath me ek hocky stick thi usne jaise hi mujhe apne hocky stick se marna chaha waise hi maine ek kick uske pet me de mara wo wahi gir kar behos ho gaya.

Mai- are are are ye kya ho gaya kahi jyada kas ke to nahi lag gaya sorry bhai wo kya hai na ki mai marte huye dhyan hi nahi de pata ki jor se lagi ya dhire ha sorry bhai so sorry hahhahh

Idhar g boss ne jab dekha ki uska ek banda ek hi kick se behos ho gaya to usne do gunde ko aur mere pass bheja maine un dono ka bheja bhi tod diya isi tarah mai abhi tak 8 gundo ko nipta diya tha aur 9ve se bhida huya tha mai abhi use mar ke behos kiya hi tha ki ek goli chalne ki awaj aayi aur sath me ek chikh ki bhi maine palat kar dekha to mera hoss hi ud gaya aur gusse se mera chehra lal ho gaya kyuki goli g boss ne chalayi thi aur wo goli uncle jon ke shine me lagi thi to huya ye ki mai use 9ve gunde ko mar mar kar behos kar raha tha tabhi g boss ne mere upar goli fire kar diya jise uncle jon ne dekh liya aur wo mujhe bachane ke liye mere samne aa gaye mai jab unhe khoon se lathpath dekha to mere aankho se aansu girne lage aur mera chehra guse se lal ho gaya maine waha aas pass dekha to mujhe ek gunde ki talwar dikhi mai jaldi se us talwar ko uthaya aur us g boss ke taraf phek diya jo sidhe jakar uske shine ke aar par ho gaya fir mai bhagkar uncle jon ke pass gaya aur unhe pakad kar rone laga.


--- To kya jon uncle mar jayenge kya jon uncle ka adarsh ke jiwan me itna hi bhumika tha aur in gundo ko kisne bheja tha kya ye Supriya ke gunde the ya koi aur
Ye sab janne ke liye padhte rahiye THE WAR OF MAGICAL WORLD