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Wish you a great weekend casi bro.
will eagerly wait for Monday and the following updates
will eagerly wait for Monday and the following updates
Incest Vihaan Aur Ashita - Bhai Behen ki kahani - Exclusively written for XFORUM(COMPLETED)
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king cobra
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dhaannsssssuuu update he bidu
hamesha ki tarah baht acha likha hai tumne
Ashita se ishk ho gya mere ku bidu
kia mast ladki hai, mere ku bhi esa hich behna mangta ab
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maan gaye bidu
tum sach mein alag hi type ka writer ho
itna mast likhna asaan kaam nahin aap bht hi talented writer ho
aap k muqable sab phuss hai idhar ais apun ko lagta
kia likha hai bidu
kiss mod se kahan le aaye kahani ko kia kia ata hai tumhare dimaagh me bhai buss
hamare dimagh ko to sunn kar dete ho ap[ne writing se bidu
ashita k iss kahani ne diwana bana rakha hai mere ku ab
addicted to ashita thread
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Weekend off rahta hai Bhai ka only Mon-Fri Update Aata hai
Komal singh
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Kal vale donon updates super fantastic hai Casi ji.
Behad passand aya mujhe.
Ashita ab apne aap se sab sambhalne lagi hai. Akeli police station gayi aur cops ko dant kar apne matlab ka kaam karvaya.
Ghar mein khud ko aine me dekh kar mobile mein pics yaad ayi tab gayi mobile ki talash karne.
2nd update bahut bada update hai jo mujhko jiada passand aya.
Ashita bhut mehnati ladki hai. Bhut mehnat se doc se mili. Magae doc ab usska faeda uthana chahta hai.
Ashita lagta hai wahan fanss gayi hai.
Ab keise niklegi ye dekhna hai Monday ko.
Aap bhut hi best likh rahe aur lajawab aur shaandaar update diya hai.
Keep it up. Hats off and thanks very much.
Wish you are having a great weekend witn your family.
See you on Monday.
Behad passand aya mujhe.
Ashita ab apne aap se sab sambhalne lagi hai. Akeli police station gayi aur cops ko dant kar apne matlab ka kaam karvaya.
Ghar mein khud ko aine me dekh kar mobile mein pics yaad ayi tab gayi mobile ki talash karne.
2nd update bahut bada update hai jo mujhko jiada passand aya.
Ashita bhut mehnati ladki hai. Bhut mehnat se doc se mili. Magae doc ab usska faeda uthana chahta hai.
Ashita lagta hai wahan fanss gayi hai.
Ab keise niklegi ye dekhna hai Monday ko.
Aap bhut hi best likh rahe aur lajawab aur shaandaar update diya hai.
Keep it up. Hats off and thanks very much.
Wish you are having a great weekend witn your family.
See you on Monday.
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First of all, I congratulate you for completing 100 pages. I like the way you write your story and I loved your story.
Ashita has a lot of trouble in finding her brother's mobile phone and the mobile was with that bastard doctor and the doctor has seen all the pictures of the mobile, now he will blackmail Ashita.
Doctor looks at Ashita's body with dirty eyes and touches her body. Only her brother has authority over Ashita's body and I don't like that the doctor is doing all this with Ashita. I think the doctor is doing wrong and he will be punished for their mistake. Hope Ashita gets out of this problem soon.
Nothing has been known about Vihaan, but reports have come, maybe in the next update you will tell how Vihaan condition is
As usual the update was very good, you are writing very well, now let's see what happens next in the story, waiting for the next part of the story. Thank You.....
Ashita has a lot of trouble in finding her brother's mobile phone and the mobile was with that bastard doctor and the doctor has seen all the pictures of the mobile, now he will blackmail Ashita.
Doctor looks at Ashita's body with dirty eyes and touches her body. Only her brother has authority over Ashita's body and I don't like that the doctor is doing all this with Ashita. I think the doctor is doing wrong and he will be punished for their mistake. Hope Ashita gets out of this problem soon.
Nothing has been known about Vihaan, but reports have come, maybe in the next update you will tell how Vihaan condition is
As usual the update was very good, you are writing very well, now let's see what happens next in the story, waiting for the next part of the story. Thank You.....
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Amity
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First of all congrats for the 100 page score Casinar ji. And do enjoy your weekend with zeal.
Now let me talk about update 1 among the last 2. That is update 19.
The first one starts with Ashita learning from her dad that the dictor proposed her indirectly through her parents. And she no doubt got angry but the dad consolled her saying she only has to reject it.
And this is where Ashita goes in front of the mirror to look at herself sensuously.
Wow Casi how you created this scene by making the father tell her and she wonders what the doc found in her to ask her in marriage and that brings her in front of the mirror so that you create that sensuous scene. Great Casinar ji hats off to you. What an amazing writer you are that you reserved this to be told to her inside the house only then she could hv gone to the mirror and only then that scene could hv been created. If the proposal would hv been made to her at the hospital this scene would hv then been impossible. How intelligent you are to think about all this beforehand Casinar ji?
I am trying to look into your mind my dear.
If I was writing this story I would not hv thought at all that she would look into the mirror to admire herself AND YOU MADE THIS SCENE SO THAT SHE THINKS OF HER PICS TAKEN BY VIHAAN WHICH IN TURN MAKES HER REMEMBER OF THE MOBILE . Oh my God ..... how did you think of all this Casinar ji..... means you killed two birds with one stone.
This was wonderfully thought by you Casinar ji and I can't stop admiring you for such a talent you do possess. Just amazing. You are an amazing writer indeed. Beautiful update with the sensual action done by Ashita touching her own body to get herself wet down there.
Will write review of the next update in another post or else this one gonna be too long.
Now let me talk about update 1 among the last 2. That is update 19.
The first one starts with Ashita learning from her dad that the dictor proposed her indirectly through her parents. And she no doubt got angry but the dad consolled her saying she only has to reject it.
And this is where Ashita goes in front of the mirror to look at herself sensuously.
Wow Casi how you created this scene by making the father tell her and she wonders what the doc found in her to ask her in marriage and that brings her in front of the mirror so that you create that sensuous scene. Great Casinar ji hats off to you. What an amazing writer you are that you reserved this to be told to her inside the house only then she could hv gone to the mirror and only then that scene could hv been created. If the proposal would hv been made to her at the hospital this scene would hv then been impossible. How intelligent you are to think about all this beforehand Casinar ji?
I am trying to look into your mind my dear.
If I was writing this story I would not hv thought at all that she would look into the mirror to admire herself AND YOU MADE THIS SCENE SO THAT SHE THINKS OF HER PICS TAKEN BY VIHAAN WHICH IN TURN MAKES HER REMEMBER OF THE MOBILE . Oh my God ..... how did you think of all this Casinar ji..... means you killed two birds with one stone.
This was wonderfully thought by you Casinar ji and I can't stop admiring you for such a talent you do possess. Just amazing. You are an amazing writer indeed. Beautiful update with the sensual action done by Ashita touching her own body to get herself wet down there.
Will write review of the next update in another post or else this one gonna be too long.
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Amity
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Now regarding update 20.
Superbly written casinar ji. Awesome update which ends in lust and thrill.
Started by Ashita looking for the mobile at the police station where she scolds the cops. Then moves to the hospital.
You have given great scope to Ashita in both updates. She is the heroine and good to see a girl dominating both updates. Not only here but since Vihaan is admitted its all turning around Ashita only and it very nice to see her strong and bold also independently dealing with issues.
She's grown up and capable of handling difficult issues all by herself.
May be the past days that she held herself from Vihaan by curbing her own desires and holding herself from going to her brother, dominating her own self by preventing herself to be close to Vihaan all that made her strong. She loves him dearly but was holding herself by giving pain to her beloved brother. She needer an extra force to control herself by not going close to him. All that stregthened her morally and physically may be. That is why she was able to deal with all strongly.
All that she went through before meeting the doctor needed much patience are boldness which she did have.
Coming to the last scene inside the doctor's office, here she seemed capitulated. She once again became the Ashita who was at home in company of Vihaan during their erotic days. She was unable to deal with the doc as she was shocked by learning that he had seen her pics where she was half naked may be or kissing Vihaan or some of her private parts could be visible in them... you did not mention the kind of pics were in the mobile but in previous updates we read Vihaan took her pics secretly which she was aware of but did not prevent her brother to take those kund of pics.
The doc is like blackmailing her emotionally. He has not really blackmailed her to the true term but he can do that. This could be why Ashita looks weak at the last moment.
Fantastic update Casinar ji, very much appreciated to read such a script in an incest story.
All looked true and natural and I felt like I was going through all that.
Hats off Casi, hope on Monday I will read that Ashita successfully got out of the grip of the pervert doctor.
Superbly written casinar ji. Awesome update which ends in lust and thrill.
Started by Ashita looking for the mobile at the police station where she scolds the cops. Then moves to the hospital.
You have given great scope to Ashita in both updates. She is the heroine and good to see a girl dominating both updates. Not only here but since Vihaan is admitted its all turning around Ashita only and it very nice to see her strong and bold also independently dealing with issues.
She's grown up and capable of handling difficult issues all by herself.
May be the past days that she held herself from Vihaan by curbing her own desires and holding herself from going to her brother, dominating her own self by preventing herself to be close to Vihaan all that made her strong. She loves him dearly but was holding herself by giving pain to her beloved brother. She needer an extra force to control herself by not going close to him. All that stregthened her morally and physically may be. That is why she was able to deal with all strongly.
All that she went through before meeting the doctor needed much patience are boldness which she did have.
Coming to the last scene inside the doctor's office, here she seemed capitulated. She once again became the Ashita who was at home in company of Vihaan during their erotic days. She was unable to deal with the doc as she was shocked by learning that he had seen her pics where she was half naked may be or kissing Vihaan or some of her private parts could be visible in them... you did not mention the kind of pics were in the mobile but in previous updates we read Vihaan took her pics secretly which she was aware of but did not prevent her brother to take those kund of pics.
The doc is like blackmailing her emotionally. He has not really blackmailed her to the true term but he can do that. This could be why Ashita looks weak at the last moment.
Fantastic update Casinar ji, very much appreciated to read such a script in an incest story.
All looked true and natural and I felt like I was going through all that.
Hats off Casi, hope on Monday I will read that Ashita successfully got out of the grip of the pervert doctor.
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Amity
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And yes I forgot to mention, you have a flair for comedy as well i see.... in update 19 where Ashita's father was discussing with her wife and she was mad at him, he mummured while the wife turned back to ask either he said something,
The dad said no he was just humming a ghazal...... that made me laugh loudly that was really funny my dear
The dad said no he was just humming a ghazal...... that made me laugh loudly that was really funny my dear