Jaisa tum chaho, but part 1 ki ending proper honi chahiye.
Jisase ye part complete lage.
Fantasy VIKRANT.....The Vampire Killer (Mystery, Magic, Horror, Erotic, Suspense)
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Jisase ye part complete lage.
Tahirtahir111
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The BadJoker
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Bohat hi accha idea hai.....
1st part- The beginning....
2nd - The conclusion.....
Ya phir koi 3rd part aapne jaisa socha ho....
Joh bhi ho.... Story continued.... Rakhna...
Par Bhai suspense... Bhi kholteh rehna....
DEVILWANTED
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Bro..
Ise part 1 kar ke khtm karna good think...
But proper ise khtm karna kyuki agar ise complete nhi kiya to 2 part me maza nahi aayega...
I think....
1 part beggning thi ab 2 part full to action... and 3 part conclusion hona chahiye.....
1 part me abhi 30 updates hai, unhe total 40-50 pages par puri suspences ke sath khtm kijiye.......
2 part me bhi lagbhag 60-70 updates hone chahiye.....
And 3 part jo ki conclusion h usme lagbhag 80-90 updates hone chahiye.....
Tab aapki story bahut awesome complete story hogi......
Only i suggest....
Keep update...
FRIDAY
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Bhai aapne sirf 30 updates hi post ki hai aur 2 ya 3 update ke bad ye story close kore doge to acha nahi lage he.
Aab koi new reader 30 updates porega uske bad ek sawal utega wo hai part 1 ki maksad kia tha?
Ye adult website hai ye story achi bhi hai.Magar hero ki koi saathi nahi hai.
Aur is story ke nam ki bracket Mystery, magic, horror, eroctic ,suspense. Eroctic kaha hai?
Ese mai story ke part 1 khatam ho jaye ga aur erotic ke bina to ye readers ko dhokka dena jaise hota.Aur reader bhi upset ho jaye ga part 2 porne ki interest kho degi.
Bhai aap ek entertainer ho is website pe bhul mat jaye ki ye koi child site nahi aap ki story child ki liye hai .You have to add sex in this story romentically. Because Vickrant need someone who will give him courage for future fights. So we need romance and sex in this story for the sake of this story.
Filhal ye apka story hai hum to sirf reader hai part korne aapki hi marzi.
Part kore ya na kore hum aapke saath hai.
Wating for next update.....
I hope u reply
Aab koi new reader 30 updates porega uske bad ek sawal utega wo hai part 1 ki maksad kia tha?
Ye adult website hai ye story achi bhi hai.Magar hero ki koi saathi nahi hai.
Aur is story ke nam ki bracket Mystery, magic, horror, eroctic ,suspense. Eroctic kaha hai?
Ese mai story ke part 1 khatam ho jaye ga aur erotic ke bina to ye readers ko dhokka dena jaise hota.Aur reader bhi upset ho jaye ga part 2 porne ki interest kho degi.
Bhai aap ek entertainer ho is website pe bhul mat jaye ki ye koi child site nahi aap ki story child ki liye hai .You have to add sex in this story romentically. Because Vickrant need someone who will give him courage for future fights. So we need romance and sex in this story for the sake of this story.
Filhal ye apka story hai hum to sirf reader hai part korne aapki hi marzi.
Part kore ya na kore hum aapke saath hai.
Wating for next update.....
I hope u reply
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Catch Me
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Good idea....
Part 1 and continuation in Part 2.... good...so, with more, magic and action...
Keep it up !!!!
Just give proper.. end to part 1, so. Continuation of part 2 will be interesting.....
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Idea behtareen hai....
Waise bhi Aab ek power ful Vikrant ladega...
Aab zabardast team lag rahi hai....
Jisme Grimm , soham aur jwalaah bhi Jud Gaye hai...
Toh Aab villan bhi, Warlock, is kahani ka main villan hai...
Warlock se ladne ke liye.... Alag part 2 mazaa aayega.... Is action ka....
Waise yeh Mera review hai.... Baaki jaise aapki marzi... Hum aapke saath hai... Bus Bhai kahani ko.... Apne hisab se likhna usme kisi ke kehne se.... Changes karne par.... Mazaa na hi aayega...
Waiting for next update....
Waise bhi Aab ek power ful Vikrant ladega...
Aab zabardast team lag rahi hai....
Jisme Grimm , soham aur jwalaah bhi Jud Gaye hai...
Toh Aab villan bhi, Warlock, is kahani ka main villan hai...
Warlock se ladne ke liye.... Alag part 2 mazaa aayega.... Is action ka....
Waise yeh Mera review hai.... Baaki jaise aapki marzi... Hum aapke saath hai... Bus Bhai kahani ko.... Apne hisab se likhna usme kisi ke kehne se.... Changes karne par.... Mazaa na hi aayega...
Waiting for next update....