Fantasy Whispers of Revenge

[achinsaha]

Intro​

Mumbai

Raat ke karib 1 baje, Black Scorpio ke engine ki awaz dharavi ki sankri galiyon mein gunj rahi thi. Tim-timate street light ki mand chamak basti ke gharo ki divaron par lambi-lambi chhayaen bikhere huvi thi. Basti ka sannata dur ki awazo se badhit hota tha. Kabhi kabhi basti me ghum rahe awara kutto ke bhokne ki awaze aa rahi thi. Inhi tang galiyon me se hoti huvi Scorpio ek jagah aake ruki.

Jaise hi Scorpio ruki, usake tayaron ne jamin par jami dhool ko hila diya, jisase ek chota dhul ka baadal bana aur hava mein bikhar pada. Scorpio ke andar kul milakar 5 log the. 4 hatte katte aadmi, jo sakal se kisi gang ke gunde dikha rahe the, aur ek 27-28 saal ke aaspas ka ladka. Jo khun se lath path pada huva tha. Dekh kar aesa lag ratha tha, jese ki wo apne pure hos me nahi hai.

Ek admi bahar aata hai aur aas-pass dekhta hai. Aur ek bar nischit hone ke bad ki koy unhe nahi dekh raha hai. Wo andar ki aur ishara karta hai. Jisse piche ki seat me betha ek aadmi bahar aata hai. Ladke ko bahar ghasitta hai, aur vahi pass me pade kachare ke dher par fek deta hai. Ladka dard se dhimi awaz nikalta huva vahi pada rehta hai.

Ladke ki muh se bass ek naam ki halki awaz aati hai: I love Ishita

Nice intro

 

[mrDevi]

Aapne to story ka tana-bana khol ke rakh diya.

ओबिवियस है।

Riky007 bhai ne bahut hi story read kri hai to pehle hi pata chal jata hai ke story kese hogi

 

[mrDevi]

Ladke ki muh se bass ek naam ki halki awaz aati hai: I love Ishita

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Ek Saal bad

Saindhav Rane, prabhavashali vals 55 saal ka majaboot vyakti. Karine se kati gayi saphed munche se saji usnki shaktishali kaaya se adhikaar jhalakata hai. Aksar safed kurta aur dhotee pahane, jo sadagi aur prabhav donon ko dikha raha hai. Saindhav Rane, kaaphi dhanavan vyakti hain, ek MLA ka pratishthit pad rakhate hain, jo unake vyaktitv mein raajanetik vajan jodata hai, sath hi import/export ka bhi business sambhale huve hai.

Sumitra Rane, Saidhav Rane ki wife, 50 saal ki aurat. Sumitra apna jyadatar kam ghar ki dekhbhal karna, nokar chakar ke kamo ko dekhna, aur jab bhi time mile bhagwan ni pooja karna. Sumitra ka jyadatar time Ghar ki char diwaro ke bich hi guzarta.

Shaindhav aur Sumitra ke 2 bete hai. Bada beta Surya Rane and Chota Aditya Rane.

Ishita Rane, Suyra Rane ki patni. Marriage ke 6 month ke bad hi Suyra ko kisi ne mar mar ke maut ke ghat utar diya tha, aur dharavi ki tang galiyon me fek diya tha. Tab se Ishita Suyra ki vidhava banke Rane family ke sath hi rehti thi. Shaindhav aur Sumitra Rane Ishita ko apni beti ki tarah manke ji rahe the.

Aditya Rane, 28 saal ka naujawan ladaka, awargi aur lafade bazi me hi uska jyadatar time gujazarta. Nashe ki aesi koy aadat nahi jise usne hath na lagaya ho. Aditya apne pita ke power ka bharpur fayada uthata, aur apne dosto me apna dabdabba kayam rakhta.

Durga Rane, umar 45 saal, Shaindhav Rane ka chota bhai. Durga Sara business sambhalta aur Shaindhav Rajnaitik kamo me rehta. Dono bhai aapas me mil kar rehte. Durga apne bade bhai ka pita saman adar krta, aur uski kahi har bat ko pathhar ki lakir man kar pura karta.

Kavita Rane, Durga Rane ki patni, Umar 38 saal. Wo bhi sumitra ki tarah ghar me rehti, aur kabhi kabhar apne pati ke sath office pe bhi jati. Kavita aur Durga ki koy santan nahi thi, Doctor ka kehna tha Kavita ke gharbh dharan karne ki khsamta me kami ke karan unki kabhi santan nahi ho sakti. Dono ne kafi bar try kiya par kabhi huva hi nahi, aur gharbh rehta to 3 mahine ke bad hi gharpat ho jata. To thak har kar dono ne umid hi chor di, aur Shaindhav aur Sumitra ke beto ko hi apni santan man kar ji rahe the.

Ye pura Rane pariwar Juhu beach ke pass bane asli saan banglow me rehte the, Banglow kehna to chota rahega, aesa kaho ki badi haweli thi. Aeiso aram ki life chal rahi thi. Pura banglow vilayati furniture se saja huva tha. Ghar ka aesa kona nahi tha jo mehngi chizo se saja huva na ho.

Isi banglow ke bane ek kamre mai betha Shaindhav kuch soch raha tha, aur khidki se lagatar bahar ki aur dekh raha tha. Samne samundar ki aati lehro ko dekhe ja raha tha. Tabhi ek mithi si awaz ne uski soch ko badhit kiya.

Papa ji, kaha khoye huve ho!!

Shaindhav apni soch se bahar aate huve piche ki aur dekhta hai, uske samne Ishita khadi thi. Safed dress mai, bade hi sagdi ke sath. Lambe khule baal jo uski kamar se niche tak aate, apne sar ko odhni se dhake huve.

Shaindhav: Ha!!! Kya kaha?

Ishita: Maine pucha, kaha khoye huve ho?

Shaindhav: Kuch nahi beta, bs kuch kam ke soch me duba huva tha, tumko kuch kam tha?

Ishita: Nahi, bass aapka ashirwad lene aayi thi, aaj se college suru ho raha hai na, to aapka ashirwad lene aayi thi.

Shaindhav: Mera ashirwad to hamesa aapke sath he beti.

Ye kehte hi Shaindhav apna ek hath Ishita ke mathe par rakh deta hai, aur muskura ke kehta hai.

Shaindhav: Bhagwan aapko khub gyan de, aur aap hamre business ko asman ki uchaio tak pahuchane me hmari madad kre.

Ishita, Rane ke pair chuti hai, aur bahar ki aur chali jati hai. Main hall main aake Ishita Sumitra aur Kavita se bhi ashirwad leti hai
aur callage ki aur chal deti hai.

 

[mrDevi]

Nayi Kahani ke liye mubarak baad

Congratulations ..Story k liye good luck

I'm sure this one is going to be awesome too.

नई कहानी के लिए बधाई हो भाई।कहानी का ताना बाना एक लव स्टोरी पर बना हुआ लगता है, जिसमे या तो अमीर गरीब या ऐसा ही कोई कारण है जिसके चलते अपने हीरो को उन गुंडों ने मार मार कर अधमरा कर दिया, और गुंडे हीरोइन के घर वालों के ही आदमी होंगे।देखते हैं आगे आप क्या क्या फैंटेसी जोड़ते हैं इसमें।

Nice introduction. Bohat khoob aapke sath hai hum

New story leke aa gaye bhai bahot jabardast starting tha. Bahot romaanchak aur majedaar story hoga lagta hain bhai pehle wale story se bhi jada. Next update ka intajaar rahegaa bhai

Intro chota tha, pr achi starting lagti hai. Best of luck for story

Congratulation For New Story

Update 2

for new story

Good start

Nice intro

Thank you dosto, new update post kar diya gya hai. To bharpur like and comment kijiye

 

[big king]

Ladke ki muh se bass ek naam ki halki awaz aati hai: I love Ishita

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Ek Saal bad

Saindhav Rane, prabhavashali vals 55 saal ka majaboot vyakti. Karine se kati gayi saphed munche se saji usnki shaktishali kaaya se adhikaar jhalakata hai. Aksar safed kurta aur dhotee pahane, jo sadagi aur prabhav donon ko dikha raha hai. Saindhav Rane, kaaphi dhanavan vyakti hain, ek MLA ka pratishthit pad rakhate hain, jo unake vyaktitv mein raajanetik vajan jodata hai, sath hi import/export ka bhi business sambhale huve hai.

Sumitra Rane, Saidhav Rane ki wife, 50 saal ki aurat. Sumitra apna jyadatar kam ghar ki dekhbhal karna, nokar chakar ke kamo ko dekhna, aur jab bhi time mile bhagwan ni pooja karna. Sumitra ka jyadatar time Ghar ki char diwaro ke bich hi guzarta.

Shaindhav aur Sumitra ke 2 bete hai. Bada beta Surya Rane and Chota Aditya Rane.

Ishita Rane, Suyra Rane ki patni. Marriage ke 6 month ke bad hi Suyra ko kisi ne mar mar ke maut ke ghat utar diya tha, aur dharavi ki tang galiyon me fek diya tha. Tab se Ishita Suyra ki vidhava banke Rane family ke sath hi rehti thi. Shaindhav aur Sumitra Rane Ishita ko apni beti ki tarah manke ji rahe the.

Aditya Rane, 28 saal ka naujawan ladaka, awargi aur lafade bazi me hi uska jyadatar time gujazarta. Nashe ki aesi koy aadat nahi jise usne hath na lagaya ho. Aditya apne pita ke power ka bharpur fayada uthata, aur apne dosto me apna dabdabba kayam rakhta.

Durga Rane, umar 45 saal, Shaindhav Rane ka chota bhai. Durga Sara business sambhalta aur Shaindhav Rajnaitik kamo me rehta. Dono bhai aapas me mil kar rehte. Durga apne bade bhai ka pita saman adar krta, aur uski kahi har bat ko pathhar ki lakir man kar pura karta.

Kavita Rane, Durga Rane ki patni, Umar 38 saal. Wo bhi sumitra ki tarah ghar me rehti, aur kabhi kabhar apne pati ke sath office pe bhi jati. Kavita aur Durga ki koy santan nahi thi, Doctor ka kehna tha Kavita ke gharbh dharan karne ki khsamta me kami ke karan unki kabhi santan nahi ho sakti. Dono ne kafi bar try kiya par kabhi huva hi nahi, aur gharbh rehta to 3 mahine ke bad hi gharpat ho jata. To thak har kar dono ne umid hi chor di, aur Shaindhav aur Sumitra ke beto ko hi apni santan man kar ji rahe the.

Ye pura Rane pariwar Juhu beach ke pass bane asli saan banglow me rehte the, Banglow kehna to chota rahega, aesa kaho ki badi haweli thi. Aeiso aram ki life chal rahi thi. Pura banglow vilayati furniture se saja huva tha. Ghar ka aesa kona nahi tha jo mehngi chizo se saja huva na ho.

Isi banglow ke bane ek kamre mai betha Shaindhav kuch soch raha tha, aur khidki se lagatar bahar ki aur dekh raha tha. Samne samundar ki aati lehro ko dekhe ja raha tha. Tabhi ek mithi si awaz ne uski soch ko badhit kiya.

Papa ji, kaha khoye huve ho!!

Shaindhav apni soch se bahar aate huve piche ki aur dekhta hai, uske samne Ishita khadi thi. Safed dress mai, bade hi sagdi ke sath. Lambe khule baal jo uski kamar se niche tak aate, apne sar ko odhni se dhake huve.

Shaindhav: Ha!!! Kya kaha?

Ishita: Maine pucha, kaha khoye huve ho?

Shaindhav: Kuch nahi beta, bs kuch kam ke soch me duba huva tha, tumko kuch kam tha?

Ishita: Nahi, bass aapka ashirwad lene aayi thi, aaj se college suru ho raha hai na, to aapka ashirwad lene aayi thi.

Shaindhav: Mera ashirwad to hamesa aapke sath he beti.

Ye kehte hi Shaindhav apna ek hath Ishita ke mathe par rakh deta hai, aur muskura ke kehta hai.

Shaindhav: Bhagwan aapko khub gyan de, aur aap hamre business ko asman ki uchaio tak pahuchane me hmari madad kre.

Ishita, Rane ke pair chuti hai, aur bahar ki aur chali jati hai. Main hall main aake Ishita Sumitra aur Kavita se bhi ashirwad leti hai
aur callage ki aur chal deti hai.

Bahot mast update tha bhai ekdamm lallantop

 

[achinsaha]

Ladke ki muh se bass ek naam ki halki awaz aati hai: I love Ishita

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Ek Saal bad

Saindhav Rane, prabhavashali vals 55 saal ka majaboot vyakti. Karine se kati gayi saphed munche se saji usnki shaktishali kaaya se adhikaar jhalakata hai. Aksar safed kurta aur dhotee pahane, jo sadagi aur prabhav donon ko dikha raha hai. Saindhav Rane, kaaphi dhanavan vyakti hain, ek MLA ka pratishthit pad rakhate hain, jo unake vyaktitv mein raajanetik vajan jodata hai, sath hi import/export ka bhi business sambhale huve hai.

Sumitra Rane, Saidhav Rane ki wife, 50 saal ki aurat. Sumitra apna jyadatar kam ghar ki dekhbhal karna, nokar chakar ke kamo ko dekhna, aur jab bhi time mile bhagwan ni pooja karna. Sumitra ka jyadatar time Ghar ki char diwaro ke bich hi guzarta.

Shaindhav aur Sumitra ke 2 bete hai. Bada beta Surya Rane and Chota Aditya Rane.

Ishita Rane, Suyra Rane ki patni. Marriage ke 6 month ke bad hi Suyra ko kisi ne mar mar ke maut ke ghat utar diya tha, aur dharavi ki tang galiyon me fek diya tha. Tab se Ishita Suyra ki vidhava banke Rane family ke sath hi rehti thi. Shaindhav aur Sumitra Rane Ishita ko apni beti ki tarah manke ji rahe the.

Aditya Rane, 28 saal ka naujawan ladaka, awargi aur lafade bazi me hi uska jyadatar time gujazarta. Nashe ki aesi koy aadat nahi jise usne hath na lagaya ho. Aditya apne pita ke power ka bharpur fayada uthata, aur apne dosto me apna dabdabba kayam rakhta.

Durga Rane, umar 45 saal, Shaindhav Rane ka chota bhai. Durga Sara business sambhalta aur Shaindhav Rajnaitik kamo me rehta. Dono bhai aapas me mil kar rehte. Durga apne bade bhai ka pita saman adar krta, aur uski kahi har bat ko pathhar ki lakir man kar pura karta.

Kavita Rane, Durga Rane ki patni, Umar 38 saal. Wo bhi sumitra ki tarah ghar me rehti, aur kabhi kabhar apne pati ke sath office pe bhi jati. Kavita aur Durga ki koy santan nahi thi, Doctor ka kehna tha Kavita ke gharbh dharan karne ki khsamta me kami ke karan unki kabhi santan nahi ho sakti. Dono ne kafi bar try kiya par kabhi huva hi nahi, aur gharbh rehta to 3 mahine ke bad hi gharpat ho jata. To thak har kar dono ne umid hi chor di, aur Shaindhav aur Sumitra ke beto ko hi apni santan man kar ji rahe the.

Ye pura Rane pariwar Juhu beach ke pass bane asli saan banglow me rehte the, Banglow kehna to chota rahega, aesa kaho ki badi haweli thi. Aeiso aram ki life chal rahi thi. Pura banglow vilayati furniture se saja huva tha. Ghar ka aesa kona nahi tha jo mehngi chizo se saja huva na ho.

Isi banglow ke bane ek kamre mai betha Shaindhav kuch soch raha tha, aur khidki se lagatar bahar ki aur dekh raha tha. Samne samundar ki aati lehro ko dekhe ja raha tha. Tabhi ek mithi si awaz ne uski soch ko badhit kiya.

Papa ji, kaha khoye huve ho!!

Shaindhav apni soch se bahar aate huve piche ki aur dekhta hai, uske samne Ishita khadi thi. Safed dress mai, bade hi sagdi ke sath. Lambe khule baal jo uski kamar se niche tak aate, apne sar ko odhni se dhake huve.

Shaindhav: Ha!!! Kya kaha?

Ishita: Maine pucha, kaha khoye huve ho?

Shaindhav: Kuch nahi beta, bs kuch kam ke soch me duba huva tha, tumko kuch kam tha?

Ishita: Nahi, bass aapka ashirwad lene aayi thi, aaj se college suru ho raha hai na, to aapka ashirwad lene aayi thi.

Shaindhav: Mera ashirwad to hamesa aapke sath he beti.

Ye kehte hi Shaindhav apna ek hath Ishita ke mathe par rakh deta hai, aur muskura ke kehta hai.

Shaindhav: Bhagwan aapko khub gyan de, aur aap hamre business ko asman ki uchaio tak pahuchane me hmari madad kre.

Ishita, Rane ke pair chuti hai, aur bahar ki aur chali jati hai. Main hall main aake Ishita Sumitra aur Kavita se bhi ashirwad leti hai
aur callage ki aur chal deti hai.

Nice update

 

[tpk]

Ladke ki muh se bass ek naam ki halki awaz aati hai: I love Ishita

------------------------------------------------------

Ek Saal bad

Saindhav Rane, prabhavashali vals 55 saal ka majaboot vyakti. Karine se kati gayi saphed munche se saji usnki shaktishali kaaya se adhikaar jhalakata hai. Aksar safed kurta aur dhotee pahane, jo sadagi aur prabhav donon ko dikha raha hai. Saindhav Rane, kaaphi dhanavan vyakti hain, ek MLA ka pratishthit pad rakhate hain, jo unake vyaktitv mein raajanetik vajan jodata hai, sath hi import/export ka bhi business sambhale huve hai.

Sumitra Rane, Saidhav Rane ki wife, 50 saal ki aurat. Sumitra apna jyadatar kam ghar ki dekhbhal karna, nokar chakar ke kamo ko dekhna, aur jab bhi time mile bhagwan ni pooja karna. Sumitra ka jyadatar time Ghar ki char diwaro ke bich hi guzarta.

Shaindhav aur Sumitra ke 2 bete hai. Bada beta Surya Rane and Chota Aditya Rane.

Ishita Rane, Suyra Rane ki patni. Marriage ke 6 month ke bad hi Suyra ko kisi ne mar mar ke maut ke ghat utar diya tha, aur dharavi ki tang galiyon me fek diya tha. Tab se Ishita Suyra ki vidhava banke Rane family ke sath hi rehti thi. Shaindhav aur Sumitra Rane Ishita ko apni beti ki tarah manke ji rahe the.

Aditya Rane, 28 saal ka naujawan ladaka, awargi aur lafade bazi me hi uska jyadatar time gujazarta. Nashe ki aesi koy aadat nahi jise usne hath na lagaya ho. Aditya apne pita ke power ka bharpur fayada uthata, aur apne dosto me apna dabdabba kayam rakhta.

Durga Rane, umar 45 saal, Shaindhav Rane ka chota bhai. Durga Sara business sambhalta aur Shaindhav Rajnaitik kamo me rehta. Dono bhai aapas me mil kar rehte. Durga apne bade bhai ka pita saman adar krta, aur uski kahi har bat ko pathhar ki lakir man kar pura karta.

Kavita Rane, Durga Rane ki patni, Umar 38 saal. Wo bhi sumitra ki tarah ghar me rehti, aur kabhi kabhar apne pati ke sath office pe bhi jati. Kavita aur Durga ki koy santan nahi thi, Doctor ka kehna tha Kavita ke gharbh dharan karne ki khsamta me kami ke karan unki kabhi santan nahi ho sakti. Dono ne kafi bar try kiya par kabhi huva hi nahi, aur gharbh rehta to 3 mahine ke bad hi gharpat ho jata. To thak har kar dono ne umid hi chor di, aur Shaindhav aur Sumitra ke beto ko hi apni santan man kar ji rahe the.

Ye pura Rane pariwar Juhu beach ke pass bane asli saan banglow me rehte the, Banglow kehna to chota rahega, aesa kaho ki badi haweli thi. Aeiso aram ki life chal rahi thi. Pura banglow vilayati furniture se saja huva tha. Ghar ka aesa kona nahi tha jo mehngi chizo se saja huva na ho.

Isi banglow ke bane ek kamre mai betha Shaindhav kuch soch raha tha, aur khidki se lagatar bahar ki aur dekh raha tha. Samne samundar ki aati lehro ko dekhe ja raha tha. Tabhi ek mithi si awaz ne uski soch ko badhit kiya.

Papa ji, kaha khoye huve ho!!

Shaindhav apni soch se bahar aate huve piche ki aur dekhta hai, uske samne Ishita khadi thi. Safed dress mai, bade hi sagdi ke sath. Lambe khule baal jo uski kamar se niche tak aate, apne sar ko odhni se dhake huve.

Shaindhav: Ha!!! Kya kaha?

Ishita: Maine pucha, kaha khoye huve ho?

Shaindhav: Kuch nahi beta, bs kuch kam ke soch me duba huva tha, tumko kuch kam tha?

Ishita: Nahi, bass aapka ashirwad lene aayi thi, aaj se college suru ho raha hai na, to aapka ashirwad lene aayi thi.

Shaindhav: Mera ashirwad to hamesa aapke sath he beti.

Ye kehte hi Shaindhav apna ek hath Ishita ke mathe par rakh deta hai, aur muskura ke kehta hai.

Shaindhav: Bhagwan aapko khub gyan de, aur aap hamre business ko asman ki uchaio tak pahuchane me hmari madad kre.

Ishita, Rane ke pair chuti hai, aur bahar ki aur chali jati hai. Main hall main aake Ishita Sumitra aur Kavita se bhi ashirwad leti hai
aur callage ki aur chal deti hai.

Very nice

 

[Riky007]

कहानी अलग तरफ जाती लग रही है।

अब इसके खुलने का इंतजार है।

 

[mrDevi]

कहानी अलग तरफ जाती लग रही है।

अब इसके खुलने का इंतजार है।

Aage aage dekho hota hai kya.

Meri dikkat ye he ki mai character aur scene ko detail me express nahi kar pata, Varna kahani ka sama aur bandh deta readers ke liye. Shikhenge dhire dhire

 

[Riky007]

Aage aage dekho hota hai kya.

Meri dikkat ye he ki mai character aur scene ko detail me express nahi kar pata, Varna kahani ka sama aur bandh deta readers ke liye. Shikhenge dhire dhire

टाइटल और मुख्य कहानी में अंतर लग रहा है मुझे।

शायद ये रिवेंज से ज्यादा प्रेम कहानी है।

बाकी कहानी के खुलने पर ही पता चलेगा।