Incest Wo ALBELA SA

[MAD DEVIL]

Bahut mast he

Ky mast hai
story
Ya
Update nhi aarha

 

[Sunli]

Weating for next apdet Bhai

 

[DINNA]

nice starting, but we have read this in the "

वो तो है अलबेला "​

 

[DINNA]

nice going sir

 

[DINNA]

super update

 

[DINNA]

nice update, Apna hero aa gaya

 

[DINNA]

gajab update

 

[DINNA]

are boss kaha gayab ho gaye ho, jaldi story aage badhao

 

[asadjee]

Dekho writer ji... mene aate hi ek baat boli thi aapki to story ke comments me...aapne shyad na use padha or shyad na ab meri is baat ko samjhange......
Phali baat aap story resstart kar rahe ho a very good job but yaar maximum audience yaha purani h jinhone (ye to albela h wali ke total update padhe honge .........rahi baat wo story band hone ki ...uske comments and views dekh sakte h aap... Wo us time pe 3rd most popular story thi...to mene tan (jab aapne ek do update diye the)bhi bola tha ye story yaha Tak sabke jhan me h ....me khud ki bhi bolu to ye story h hi itni pyari ki ek ek seen yaad h yaar....mene phala bhi bola tha thoda sa background daal ke new updates dedo....ab purane update pe kese rewiws de??..jo hum already padh chuke h......Maan aap thoda bhot parivartan daal rahe ho but aap restart ki jagha usi ko thoda short dalke aage se suru kariye ....


Believe me bhot alg level ka apka storyline plus popularity badhagi.......

Rahi baat like Target ki to that's not a big deal but aapne gusse gusse me sab audience ko Target me le dala to phali baat yaha itni sari stories likhi gyi h koi pese ke liye nahi likhta ....sab apni Khushi se likhte h......
Or reword milaga to wo jab competition aata h tab prize pool bhi hota or bhot kuch xforum deta bhi h....

But wo kismat ki baat h ager ab aap lalach ke chalte story likhna chahate ho to wo Mera hisab se na apke liya aacha h na hamare liye.....
I reapet again Target dena coments review ke liya bolna good...but ..guss nahi please calm down I are a writer also a well educated student also a. Future. Dr......to sir please it's a humble request....
Me end me yahi bolungi...chalo me dungi har update ka rewiws per fir timely and aache se updates de paoge????,not possible ji ...so here so many writes jo apne sokh se likhte h even some are big business men and readers are also at next level...so please thoda patients rakhe.......

And ha umeed ha aap agla update jaldi denge ....but ho sake to story line se aage..........

And yep this is not a order or shikayat ya problem..... it's just a opinion form me.
.. please bura mat Maan na ....and ha all the best aap life me ajo bhi karo aacha results mile ..good bless u

Bhai ye bahut chutiya writer hai yarr

Bahut hi chutiya writer hai ,iske kahne se koi comment thodi karega waise bhi isne puri story alag mod de diya hai ,isne Sandhya ko alag dikha Diya hai wo Raman se raaz janne ke liye ye sab ker rhi hai ,chutiya writer update Dena ho de nhi to mat de tere kahne se koi comment nhi karega jab story aachi lagegi to sab comments karega

Bhai Mai kal dunga update 1:00 pm
Aapko to pata hoga wo story pahle se hi hai Mai to usme bas pics aur gif add kerke post ker rha hai ,maine writer se baat bhi ki thi , permission leker unhone bola ki jaha tak pahle story hai wah tak pahucha doon uske baad sayad wo story ko complete karenge

Okk bro Mai kal new update posted karunga

Bhai log Gaali maat du yaar ............ Writer aur Shayar ko bass Comments ki zurat hoti woh bhot acha l7kh raha hai uska haq banta comments ka ..............

Mai na karne wala koi coment
Is story ke sare sur or taal hi badal gai hai

Khani ka bagroun kya tha or kya bna diya gya hai
Jitna pda tha us hisab se khani me chacha hi main villen hua tha ab isme purana khandahar purane makan ka koi jikar hi nhi hai
Hero badala bhi le rha tha purane tarike se ........
Isme to sare story hi badal diya gya hai

Bilkul sahi kaha aapne puri story ki ma chod di writer ne Sandhya ko ramn ka raz janne ke liye chudwa rahi hai bataya hai aur ye sab abhi ke liye kar Rahi hai likha hai
Agar raz janne aur abhi ke liye karti to Sandhya ramn ke ek bar bulane par chudne nhi jati
aur na hi abhi jab Sandhya ko apne pass sone ke liye bola to apne kamre me jakar rote huye nhi kahti ki mujhe maf kar de lalla aur apne jhothi muskan ke sath ramn k pas nhi jati
blki raz janna hota to ramn ko apni sexy adao se hi fasa sakti thi kyuki ramn usse pyar karta tha
Ramn Sandhya ka kuchh raz janta hai tabhi ramn Sandhya ko blackmail kar chod Raha hai aur Sandhya apni sabut pane ke liye chudwa rahi hai
Tabhi to namard ramn ke ek bar bulane par randi bankar chudne chali jati hai jaise ramn ke ek bar bulane par uske pass jakar chudwane ke liye majboor ho
wo to hai albela ke writer update nhi de Raha to ye writer uski story ki ma chod kar apna gussa nikal raha hai
Aur Jo reader comment nhi kar Raha hai usko gali de Raha hai jaise reader iski ma ke yaar ho
Waise bhi tumhari story me kuchh dum nhi shiway bakwas ke
Ab chahe tum story likho ya na likho padne me koi interest nahi hai
to
Tata bay bay

Story likhna ho likho ni to bhad me jaao kitne update de diye ho Jo umeed kar rahe ho ki koi tumhare update pe 30 comment kare abhi story dhang se suru Hui ni hai noutanki aise dikha rahe ho ki pata ni kitne bade writer ho himmat ho to time se ache-ache update dete jaao fir dekho 30 ni 60 comment aane lagenge aur agar noutanki karni ho to story band karke baitho....jisko story achi lagegi vo ache comment karega tumhare kahne se koi comment ni karega

Yrr kahaani ka rupantran mast hai.. Kyo Band kr diya... Bhai lekhak ap update do.. Jisko nhi pdhna na pdhe humen toh pdhna hai.. Badla lete hue dekhna hai... Sandhya ko tadpte hue d3khna hai... Jisko kahaani nahi pdhna na pdhe... Forum pr or bhi kahaaniyan hai... Wahan ull julul baate krne jao...

Bhai es bande ko apna story likhna chahiye jaise jaise readers ko update pasand aayega waise waise story me comments bhi milega lekin nhi inko aise comment chahiye Bina kuch likhe hi

Attitude dikha Raha hai jaise story likh kar reader par ahsan kar raha hai
Ab ye story likhe ya na likhe isko comment hi nhi karna
Aur waise bhi eski story me koi dum hi nhi hai
Likhta hai Sandhya ramn ka Raj janne ke liye chudwa rahi hai aur sab abhi ke liye kar Rahi hai
Par story pade se saf pata lagaya hai ramn Sandhya ko black mail kar chod Raha hai tabhi to namard ramn ke ek bar bulane par chudne chali jati hai aur ramn se chudwane aur ramn ke mazak udane pr hasne ki jaise koi majboori ho

7 saal ka bachcha apni ma ko gaali de Raha hai sath hi mar bhi diye
Jab itna hi mature tha aur apni ma se nhi darta tha to jab chudai dekh Raha tha
tabhi un dono ke samne chale Jana tha
Ye jhatu chand Wo to hai albela story ki ma chod kar rakh Diya

Isliye lodo chand ki story ko
Tata bay bay khtm

Tum sub jo bhi bolo ....ye Banda talented to hai ...ye sare loopholes ko clear kerta ja Raha hai .....aur iske deep lines story ko aur intresting banate hai ...

Buss bande me atitude hai ....aur mujhe legta hai ye Banda teenager hai....isko pyar se samjho ....bhut acha likhe gaa yee.....

Aur Banda mast mola hai yaar...ise koye fark nhi padta ......kisi audience ko he galyaan de rha hai .. bahi shabbbbbb..I think he doesn't care ....

Kya hua bro update nahi dena hai kya to wo bhi bol do kamse kam wati to nahi karenge update ka

Sale chutiye update Dana hee doo da warma fuck off

Aap update nahi aa raha hai kuch reason hai kya

ni aayega bhai update.....iske bas ka ni h story likhna......abhi 1-2 hi update diye h isne aur itna attitude.......30 like ka kha tha isme 60+ ho gye h...kl kha tha update dunga phir lapta ho gya.....abhi bhi online aa kr reply ni ......ye story bs yhi tk thi isme pehle b ise adhuri choda tha ab bhi whi kr rha h......is story ko DEVIL MAXIMUM bhai hi complete kr skte h...unki ek story running h jo jld hi khtm hogi aur phir whi is story ko complete krenge....@soank ke bs ka ni h is story ko likhna

Hahahahhaahahahhahahahavav tere bas ki ni he story rehne de

Chhodo yaar iski ghatiya aur bakwas storyko kahta hai ramn ka raz janne ke liye chudwa rahi thi agar raz janne ke liye chudwa rahi thi to bete ke bhagne ke bad bhi chudwati rahti aur ramn ko chodne se mana nhi karti aur na hi ramn ko lato se marti
devil maximum Bhai bahut jaldi albela naam se story shuru karne wala hay

Start to soank ne ki hai ye story to wo complete kaise krega aapka DEVIL bhai

Devil maximum Bhai wo to hai albela jisko hemantstar111 ne adhura chhod Diya hai aur Jo galti story me ki kya hai usko sudhar kar fir se Albela naam se shuru se start karega
Is chutiye ki story ko nhi

Jane kyu dusre writers is story ko likh rahe hai unhe bas readers ki gali hi hasil hogi kyuki original writer ne galti hi itni ki aur uske dimag mai kya chal raha tha wo sirf writer hi jane original writer hi continue kare tohi acha hai phir bhi kisi ko likhna hai to new story with new character aur thoda iske jaisa plot lekar likho apne andaz mai apna story original ke sath ched chad mat karo

Bat shi khe aapne bhai
Mai agree ho aapki bat se
Lekin bhai aapbi to socho ye story ka plot suru se hai ye itne acha
Agar koi writer ise fir suru krne se kaise khud ko rok skta hai
Bat sochne ki hai
Aap istrh se smjo bat ko
Ki agar aap writer hote to ky aap khud ko rok paate esa krne se
Thinking bhai thinking
Sirf sochne ko bol rha ho mai
Kisi ka pakch nhi le rha ho

Hmm tumhari baat bhi sahi hai bhai...
Waise to sonak bhai ne story achi hi likhi hai but Jo ki ye story emotions aur suspense wali hai is liye mai kuch jyada overreact kiya... khair I hope ye writer is story ko original se bhi behtar likhe... hemantstar to gayab hi hogaye hai

Ye story agay bhry ge ya nh

Ky mast hai
story
Ya
Update nhi aarha

Hello My all dearest mitro.....
ek samay tha. jab mai XP se anjan tha. before covid tak xossip se bhi ajnan tha.. xossip band hui to xforum wajud mein aaya.. yahan old xossip aur new stories ki bharmar dekh main achambit rah gaya tha.. itni zayada woh bhi kamal kamal ki stories dekh main surprised rah gaya tha.
bohut khush bhi hua tha.. kuch hi samay mein kuch bekar se stories ko chhod baki sari ki sari read kar daali..
yahin ek aur anhoni hui... xforum mere liye, milne wale sabhi platforum se unique platforum sabit hua.. every genre mein likhi stories isse pahle mujhe kabhi dekhne tak ko nahi mili thi. padhne ki baat to alag thi.
bass fir kyaa tha. padhte padhte awen hi achanak se mann bana aur main likhne ki soch gaya. likhari banne ka koi talent nahi tha mere andr.. fir bhi ichha badhi aur likhta chala gaya.
anyway.. baat kahin ki kahin nikal gai.. is post ko likhe ke maksad ko bayan kar daalun.
jab maine likhna start kia to stories padhni band kar di. tab jab mai jo jo stories read kar raha tha.. werewolf ki story top story thi.. 55 ke bad ki koi bhi update regular nahi padh saka..
fir sandeep bhai ki raj hero of the family padhne laga.. woh bhi puri nahi padh saka..
ek to samay ki kami dusre likhne ka junoon..
kahani padh nahi paya..
lekin.....
lekin.....
lekin.....
hementstar ki stroy woh to hai albela ke speed se badhte views, aur comments padh mere andr curiosity ne janam lia.. aur aisa mujhe pareshan kia.. main [woh to hai albela] read karne laga..
aur kyaa hi kahun.....
mere pass shabd hi nahi han.. jo main kuch likh paun... nahi likh sakta. is story ka plot aisa plot laga mujhe.. aisa laga, aaj tak aisi koi story likhi hi nahi gai. jaise andaz mein likhi gai.. padhte hue khud ki story likhni bhul jaya karta tha..
fir samay guzra... aur meri tarah, dusre kai writers ki tarah ye wali story bhi adhuri rah gai... writer meri tarah bhagoda nikla.. aur readers ke emotions ke sath khel kar nikal gaya..
main bhi aisa kai bar kar chuka hon.. i am too bad person like others..
itna samay guzr jaane ke bad bhi log is kahani ko, kahani ke ek ek kirdar ko bhul nahi sake han.. ye iklote aisi kahani ban gai hai.. jise koi bhi writer, kaise bhi likh kar puri kar daale..
readers ko sweekar hoga.. bass readers kahani ka end chahte han.. sare screts reveel chahte han..
sandhya kyun is hadh tak gir gai. jaanna chahte han. raman itna ghatya kyun han.. jaane bina chain nahi milega kisi ko..
abhay kya karega.. apni maa ko maa karega.. kab karega.. karega bhi ke nahi..
ye sabb jaanne ke liye to mai bhi bada bechain raha hon..
jaise jaise kahani aage badhti chali ja rahi thi.. sandhya ka kirdar shuru se hi meri nazaron mein bura nahi tha.. ek shatir person seedhe saadhe logo ki buddhi apne vash mein kar hi lia karta hai.

sandhya ko abhay se bohut pyar tha.. hai aur hamseha rahega.. akhir uska iklota beta jo tha.. kaise usse badhkar kisi aur ko chah sakti thi. kaise uski nazron mein gir sakti thi..
story padhte padhte bohut kuch maine imagine kar lia tha.. andaze laga liye the. raman kyun sandhya aur abhay ke sath aisa kar raha hai.. hawasi to raman ha hi.. lekin aur bhi bohut kch ha woh.. kya hai.. ye bhi maine apne hisab se soch lia tha..
puri ki puri kahani saala meri dimag ne create kar dali thi.
ab yahan kuch writers famous unfamous [woh to ha albela] ko likhna chah rahe han. aur ek to koshis kar bhi daali. aur mai yahan readers ke emotions dekh surprised rah gaya..
aisi koi story shayad hi is forum par kabhi likhi jaaye..
last year mera khud ka kai baar mind bana. is kahani ko mai pura karun..
[lekin XP ke payare readers ke EMOTIONS ki KASAM......]
main himmat nahi kar paya.. khud ke kai thread start karke pending chhod gaya.
is kahani ko shuru karke kisi ke emotions ke sath khelne ki gustakhi nahi kar saka..
warna jahan itni saari stories likh kar adhuri chhod gaya tha.. wahan ek ye bhi rah jati to ghanta kisi ko fark padne wala tha..
lekin.....
lekin.....
lekin.....
is kahani ke sath jude emotions ke chalte readers ke dilon par ghavo ko badhana bohut galat hai..
main to yahi kahunga.. ise koi start na kare.. kare to woh kare.. jo ise har surat puri kar sake..
warna.....
warna.....
warna......
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
kaash main ise puri kar sakta.....
[no more words to write]
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[paand]

Hello My all dearest mitro.....
ek samay tha. jab mai XP se anjan tha. before covid tak xossip se bhi ajnan tha.. xossip band hui to xforum wajud mein aaya.. yahan old xossip aur new stories ki bharmar dekh main achambit rah gaya tha.. itni zayada woh bhi kamal kamal ki stories dekh main surprised rah gaya tha.
bohut khush bhi hua tha.. kuch hi samay mein kuch bekar se stories ko chhod baki sari ki sari read kar daali..
yahin ek aur anhoni hui... xforum mere liye, milne wale sabhi platforum se unique platforum sabit hua.. every genre mein likhi stories isse pahle mujhe kabhi dekhne tak ko nahi mili thi. padhne ki baat to alag thi.
bass fir kyaa tha. padhte padhte awen hi achanak se mann bana aur main likhne ki soch gaya. likhari banne ka koi talent nahi tha mere andr.. fir bhi ichha badhi aur likhta chala gaya.
anyway.. baat kahin ki kahin nikal gai.. is post ko likhe ke maksad ko bayan kar daalun.
jab maine likhna start kia to stories padhni band kar di. tab jab mai jo jo stories read kar raha tha.. werewolf ki story top story thi.. 55 ke bad ki koi bhi update regular nahi padh saka..
fir sandeep bhai ki raj hero of the family padhne laga.. woh bhi puri nahi padh saka..
ek to samay ki kami dusre likhne ka junoon..
kahani padh nahi paya..
lekin.....
lekin.....
lekin.....
hementstar ki stroy woh to hai albela ke speed se badhte views, aur comments padh mere andr curiosity ne janam lia.. aur aisa mujhe pareshan kia.. main [woh to hai albela] read karne laga..
aur kyaa hi kahun.....
mere pass shabd hi nahi han.. jo main kuch likh paun... nahi likh sakta. is story ka plot aisa plot laga mujhe.. aisa laga, aaj tak aisi koi story likhi hi nahi gai. jaise andaz mein likhi gai.. padhte hue khud ki story likhni bhul jaya karta tha..
fir samay guzra... aur meri tarah, dusre kai writers ki tarah ye wali story bhi adhuri rah gai... writer meri tarah bhagoda nikla.. aur readers ke emotions ke sath khel kar nikal gaya..
main bhi aisa kai bar kar chuka hon.. i am too bad person like others..
itna samay guzr jaane ke bad bhi log is kahani ko, kahani ke ek ek kirdar ko bhul nahi sake han.. ye iklote aisi kahani ban gai hai.. jise koi bhi writer, kaise bhi likh kar puri kar daale..
readers ko sweekar hoga.. bass readers kahani ka end chahte han.. sare screts reveel chahte han..
sandhya kyun is hadh tak gir gai. jaanna chahte han. raman itna ghatya kyun han.. jaane bina chain nahi milega kisi ko..
abhay kya karega.. apni maa ko maa karega.. kab karega.. karega bhi ke nahi..
ye sabb jaanne ke liye to mai bhi bada bechain raha hon..
jaise jaise kahani aage badhti chali ja rahi thi.. sandhya ka kirdar shuru se hi meri nazaron mein bura nahi tha.. ek shatir person seedhe saadhe logo ki buddhi apne vash mein kar hi lia karta hai.

sandhya ko abhay se bohut pyar tha.. hai aur hamseha rahega.. akhir uska iklota beta jo tha.. kaise usse badhkar kisi aur ko chah sakti thi. kaise uski nazron mein gir sakti thi..
story padhte padhte bohut kuch maine imagine kar lia tha.. andaze laga liye the. raman kyun sandhya aur abhay ke sath aisa kar raha hai.. hawasi to raman ha hi.. lekin aur bhi bohut kch ha woh.. kya hai.. ye bhi maine apne hisab se soch lia tha..
puri ki puri kahani saala meri dimag ne create kar dali thi.
ab yahan kuch writers famous unfamous [woh to ha albela] ko likhna chah rahe han. aur ek to koshis kar bhi daali. aur mai yahan readers ke emotions dekh surprised rah gaya..
aisi koi story shayad hi is forum par kabhi likhi jaaye..
last year mera khud ka kai baar mind bana. is kahani ko mai pura karun..
[lekin XP ke payare readers ke EMOTIONS ki KASAM......]
main himmat nahi kar paya.. khud ke kai thread start karke pending chhod gaya.
is kahani ko shuru karke kisi ke emotions ke sath khelne ki gustakhi nahi kar saka..
warna jahan itni saari stories likh kar adhuri chhod gaya tha.. wahan ek ye bhi rah jati to ghanta kisi ko fark padne wala tha..
lekin.....
lekin.....
lekin.....
is kahani ke sath jude emotions ke chalte readers ke dilon par ghavo ko badhana bohut galat hai..
main to yahi kahunga.. ise koi start na kare.. kare to woh kare.. jo ise har surat puri kar sake..
warna.....
warna.....
warna......
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
kaash main ise puri kar sakta.....
[no more words to write]
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