★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2020 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Chutiyadr]

Story:- Gaand ka showroom


writer:- Chutiyadr


Review:- yaar sach me end level story pehle to main ne socha gaand ka showroom kaisa naam hai lekin jab story ke start ke words parhe na


“Bokachoda universe ke chitiyapa grah ke gandiyaapa desh me aaj utsaw ka mahol tha ..


Baat Dr. chutiya sanwat 2000 ki hai jab pura gandiyaapa desh mahan philosopher Dr. chunnilal Tiwari yarwada wale urf Dr. chutiya ki 2000 vi Jayanti mana raha tha , unke samman me samay ko ab unke janm ki tarikh se mapa jata tha , aur ise Dr. chutiya sanwat ke naam se jana jata tha ”

Is per mera sirf ek reaction tha ye ka bawaseer bana diye ho Bus story parte huwe jo meri hansi nikalni shuru huwi hai pucho mat tum Yaar pehli maa daikhi hai jo iss liye kama rahi thi ke Bete ko chut aur gaand gift ker sake aur jo tum ne beech me baar baar khud ki pooja karwai hai Us ke to kya he kehne Shekh ka chutiya ban gaya aur shekh ko pata bhi nahi chala Sahi khel gaya londa


Yaar sach me gandu story with chodo words mera matlab great story with funny words best of luck for contest
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dhanywad bro for this funny review
aisi story bhi kabhi kabhi likh deni chahiye jise padhne wale ek alag hi karan se yaad rakhe , chutiyape se bhari hui story

 

[-:AARAV143:-]

Story :- Pyaar karti ho mujhse.....

writer :- Adirishi

link:-

https://xforum.live/threads/%E2%98%85%E2%98%86%E2%98%85-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2020-entry-thread-%E2%98%85%E2%98%86%E2%98%85.16291/post-1506836

Story bahut hi achi hai adi bhai..
mujhe khushi hai ki aapne ek bahut hi achi love story ke madhyam se
dharm ke aade na aake jafar aur ragini ki shadi dikhayi..

aapki story ne mujhe kk ki story ki yaad dila di
usne bhi aisi hi short story likhi thi bas
ladka pandit tha aur ladki kisi aur jati..

aapki writing skills bahut achi hai..
title se thoda story thodi match na ho rahi hai
ab ye mujhe hi laga ya aisa hi hai aap samajo

well story kafi khubsurat rahi
simple & short romantic padhke maza aa gaya

best of luck for contest

Rating:- 4.8/5 stars​

 

[-:AARAV143:-]

story :- RITU-RAJ (Ek Naya Sansaar)

writer :-Shubham Kumar

link :-

★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2020 ~ Entry Thread ★☆★

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story bahut hi jabardast hai shubham bhai ?
story mein har kadiyon ko bahut sarlata se ek sath joda hai
aapki writing skills bahut hi achi aap chahe to is short story ko
aur bhi ache pemane par story section mein likh sakte hai
romantic story mujhe waise bhi bahut pasand hai..bas thoda bura laga ki incest hai..
wo to acha hua tumne story koi sex scene na dala warna mera revo aapko shyad pasnad na aata

2-3 jagah spelling mistake huyi hai lekin wo itna bhi important na hai
aapki story mein kam hi dikha ki koi problem huyi hai

main to chahta hu aap ek story ko story section mein chalu karo
readers ko bahut pasand aayengi

best of luck for contest

Rating :- 4.1/5 stars ​

 

[Chutiyadr]

Story - Balidaan



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...test-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1547580



Writer- ＤＥＸＳＴＥＲ



About story-

Bahut hi payari si sweet si story

Ek bhai ka apni bahan ke liye diya gaya balidaan , ye ek alag hi kism ka balidaan tha , us moh ka balidaan jo bade bhai ko apni chhodi bahan ke liye hota hai , uski natkhat shararto se dur jane ke balidaan , use pyar se gale lagane ka balidaan ..

Aur ye balidaan bhai ne apne choti bahan ke career ke liye kiya , taki wo khud kuchh ban paaye

Achcha plot tha aur achchi writing

Story ek achche flow me aage badhti hai jisse story kahi bhi bor nahi karti ..

Note for writer – dark blood bhai bahut hi payri story hai aapki , ek emotional touch bhi hai story ke ander jo ki bada hi payara laga ,

Good work

Aise hi likhte rahiye ?

Best of luck for contest ?

 

[Chutiyadr]

Story - SHATIR KATHPUTALI



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...test-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1550554



Writer- Ankitshrivastava



About story-

Shandar aur jandaar

Bahut badiya suspense raha , puri story bahut hi kasi hui thi aur kahi bhi thoda bhi hint nahi mil raha tha ki akhir katil koun hoga

Hint mil jaaye to fir suspense hi kam hone lagta hai ,

Last tak achchi pakad ke sath story chali , narration bhi bahut hi achcha tha , har ek point ko achche se explain kiya gaya jisse end clear ho gaya

Note for writer –

Ankit bhai kamaal ki story likhi hai aapne maja hi aa gaya

Har angle se story achchi hai , suspense story thi aur suspense kut kut kar bhara hai story me , kahi koi loos point nahi aur last me sab kuchh bahut hi khubsurati se samet bhi liya aapne sab clear kar diya

Aise hi likhte rahiye aur hame achchi achchi stories dete rahiye

Best of luck for contest ?

 

[Chutiyadr]

Story - Firauti



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...test-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1553337



Writer- Indian Princess



About story-

Wah wah wah

Kya twist aur turn wali story hai , maja hi aa gaya …

Bahut hi umda

Ab story ke bare me kuch kahna puri tarah se spoiler ho jayega isliye kuchh bhi nahi kahunga bas yahi kahunga ki maja hi aa gaya

Note for writer –

Indian princess ji kya mast story likhi hai aapne, pahle laga ki ye hoga fir bataya gaya ki ye hai

Aur fir last me ye niklta

Kul milakar mugembo bahut khus hua

Aise hi likhte rahiye aur aisi hi entertaining stories laate rahiye

Best of luck for contest ?

 

[Indian Princess]

Story - Firauti



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1553337



Writer- Indian Princess



About story-

Wah wah wah

Kya twist aur turn wali story hai , maja hi aa gaya …

Bahut hi umda

Ab story ke bare me kuch kahna puri tarah se spoiler ho jayega isliye kuchh bhi nahi kahunga bas yahi kahunga ki maja hi aa gaya

Note for writer –

Indian princess ji kya mast story likhi hai aapne, pahle laga ki ye hoga fir bataya gaya ki ye hai

Aur fir last me ye niklta

Kul milakar mugembo bahut khus hua

Aise hi likhte rahiye aur aisi hi entertaining stories laate rahiye

Best of luck for contest ?

Thank you so much for bina spoiler wala review

 

[Chutiyadr]

Story - Barshaat ki raat



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...test-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1555383



Writer- Ayush2017



About story-

Ye kya tha

Plot to achcha tha but story achchi nahi ban paayi

Kahi narration me kami rah gayi , ending ko thoda aur define karna tha to story achchi ban sakti thi …

Note for writer –

Ayush bhai koshis to aapki achchi thi lekin story me kuchh kami si rah gayi , ending bahut hi jaldi khatm ho gayi , sab kuch bahut hi sidhe sidhe likh diya jisse padhane me koi maja nahi rah gaya …

Khair likhte likhte, aur padhte padhte writing mature hote jaati hai

Ise thoda time dijiye , dusare writer jo achcha likh rahe hai unhe padhiye to samjh aayega ki kami kaha rah gayi hai …

Aapne jo koshis ki uske liye aapko bhadhai , aur aise hi likhte rahiye padhte rahiye



Best of luck for contest ?

 

[Lucky lerka]

Story - Apna Naseeb



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1532081



Writer- Lucky lerka



About story-

Kisi ka nashib use kaha se kaha le jayega ye koi nahi bata sakta , kab nashib palat jaaye ye bhi koi nahi bata sakta ..

Ek aam si majboor ladki ki kismat badalne ki ye story hai, jiske jivan me dukh aur takleefe bhari hui thi , lekin achank se uske jivan me kuch aisa hua ki uska pura jivan hi pariwartit ho gaya

Achchi story hai , good plot , bas narration me thoda weak laga story … koi bat nahi utna ynha par chalta hai

Note for writer –

Lucky bhai aapki story mujhe pasand aayi , aise hi likhte rahiye

Best of luck for contest ?

Thank you so much bhai apka bhot bhot shukriya aur ummed he app meri thread bhi per lo plzz ok apka review wah bhi chaye dena zaror plzzzok bhai thank you so much

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

Horror Hospital
writer - Damha bhai

vese to mai horror story padne me koi interest na hai,
Lekin apne likhi to socha ek baar pad leta hu
Kahani waqai bhut achi thi

Ye ek kadvi sachai h ki high class society ke log apne bacho, bujurg in sabko andekha kar apni image bnane me lge rehte hai

Aur kahani me vese ek scene aya tha ki larki Ahmad ko football ke liye bulati hai aur vo bhi chala jata hai,,ye jante hue ki uska bhai behosh icu me hai
Aur use football khelni hai

Baaki kahani lazwaab thi damha ustaad

Best of luck for the contest