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Madhuri ke baap ke marne ke baad hi to china town arc shuru hua thaAre
Matlab Chinatown Arc isse bhi pahle finish hua...mujhe lga abhi just ki baat hai
Aise reviews se to Writer Sahab ko Aanand aata haikaafi fuck update hai bhai... Gaadi raftaar pakad chuki hai kha pehle 5-6 k ka update size hota tha ab.... 9-10k ka update hone laga hai.... Samjh sakte hai bhai itna time kyun lagta hai update likhne aur post karne mai...
Kaafi time se Review pending tha meri taraf se uski tarf baad mai aate hai... Pehle Mai appreciate Krna chahunga aapke efforts ko...Naman hai aapko... Bas ab 20k ka update aur de Dena orgasm hi aa jayega padhne ki jarurat nahi padegi...
1- jaisa ki maine last review mai kaha tha veer abhi maar dhaad chod kar family ke saath time spend karega that's what happening right now... But ghar par jo veer ka haal ho raha hai sab log usko pana chahte hai veer kisko chahta hai koi puchega nhi aur veer ko khud nahi pta Alpha nature usper haavi h woh chahta hai koi use chod kar na jaye... Na hi woh kisi ko chod sakta h ajeeb si confusion hai... Jinko pta hai veer ke relation ke baare mai unko bhi jalan ho rahi hai ek dusre ko shak ki nigaah se dekh rahe hai... Ki kisi tarah veer sirf unka bankar reh jaye jo hona mushkil hi nahi na mumkin hai... { Ragini , Tejal } Ab dekhna yeh hai itne sare relations ko veer kaise handle karta hai...
2- Ab Woh waqt door nahi jab Action dhama dham hone waala hai... Veer ke kaafi dusman ek saath usper humla karne ko ready hai... Veer bhi fighting ki practice kar raha hai... But ek saath itne logo ka humla karna veer ke kisi chahne waale ke liye khatra na saabit ho...Ek taraf police slogan ke khooni ko dhoond rahi hai... Dusra taraf Bhanu Pratap ka poora jo fauj lekar aa gya hai.... Ek taraf Damin hai jo Vakeel shahab k kaan bhar gaya hai toh Durai taraf Hotel casa Nova ka owner.... Fuuuuuu... Kaafi saare dusman ek saath ekkthe ho gaye hai.... Aise mai ek aur 31 th aane waali har baar iss date par kuch na kuch boom baam hota hi hai maja aayega action start hone ho wala hai bas kisi main character ko kuch ho na jaye iska Darr hai sabse jayada Bhavna ka
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3- Sonia ki favaurility kam ho jana jayaj hai itne time Tak main character se door rahegi toh yahi hoga... Saath me kuch characters ki 120+ hona hmmmBumika ko bhi ho hi gaya pyaar ka bukhar....
Usko kya pta line mai woh kitne peeche hai... But ek cheez iss duaraan mai khush hoon finally keara aur veer ki one to conversation hone waali hai....
Veer jayega keara ke pass usko yarnia brand ke kapde pehnane ke liye
{ Alpha hokar kapde pehna raha hai } Finally Vanvaas khatam hoga aisa lag raha hai ab shayad... Unke beech relationship mai kya hota hai dekhne layak hai...
4- Toh aakhir pehla No. Lag chuka hai... System ne mission veer ko de hi Diya... Veer ko serial killer ko dhoodna hai 14 din ke ander... BC samjh nahi aata har baar usko Divya ki wajah se mission kyu mill jata hai... Chinatown mai bhi yaha bhi... Divya ko assest karna hai... But Dara Dene waali hai mission failure... Loss of loved ones...Kaafi time business mai dimaag khapa Dene ke baad ab thoda action karte hue dekhne ko milega....
baaki Mr. X , Rebecca , Unknown , Damien kya mission execute karne waale hai iske beech kya baat cheet chal rahi koi idea nahi bass writer sahab ne daal diya dimaag lagane ko...
Next update ke liye kuch cheezon ko hold par rakh raha hoon... Maybe next waale mai answer mill hi jayega... Baaki milte hai next 20k update par... Peace out![]()
Dekho writer sahab itte sundar sundar or fantastic reviews mil rahe hain aapko..apke 12k ki mehnat k Fal mil rhe hain i hope ab is antibiotic se apko koi slump wlump nhi honge kyuOutstanding Excellent![]()
bole to ekdum jhakaas....
Always happen with every update.....ek slow pace dramatic scene shuru se hoti hai aur end ek cliffhanger pe hota hai.
After a hard battle and long time, finally ek family gathering hui...sab sath the.
Sivay Brijesh, Karunesh aur Pranjal Vivek ke.
Bhawna as always master of hiding her expression, concerned about her kids and want that their children should have a clear mind about whatever they are doing. Tej ne job chhod di jise vo bachpan se karti aa rahi thi, but she was sure that why she is doing, so bhawna gladly accepted.
Aur maybe bhawna bhi samjhti hai ki apne bete se jis duri ko usne 20 saalo tak saha hai, vahi Tej bhi apne bhai se alag rahi hai, and she has that chance jo shayad Bhawna ke pass nahi hai.
Arohi to jane ki taiyari me hai 2 saal ke liye....matlab kya uske baad hi Veer ki bhidant Gaurav se hogi IT sector me. Vaise bhi bina gaurav ko niptaye to Suhana ka matter pura sultega nahi.
Waise ek IIM Powai me bhi hai, udhar bhi jaa sakti hai, ahemdabad jana compulsory nahi hota
Now talk about bhumika,,,iske kya ho gayaek dum se ishq ka bukhar lagne laga hai shayad.
You chose a quite different approach with bhumika. Matlab jo bhi ab tak Veer aur Kavya, Tej, Arohi ke sath hua yaa hoga usme ek transformation hai pyar ka from bhai behan to lovers.
Lekin bhumika wala scene thoda weird but interesting hai
Arohi aur Kavya bhale shuru se Veer ke kareeb na rahi ho, but they are his sisters. Aur vahan par ye najar aata bhi hai. Tez 20 saal alag rahi lekin phir bhi kuch hadd tak shuruaat me vo bhai behan hi the, ab kuch aur ho gaye hai.
Lekin bhumika kabhi uski behan nahi thi, they were strangers living under same roof, Veer bhumika ke liye uske sautele pita ka beta tha uska bhai nahi. Phir vo uska aur shweta ka saviour ban gaya aur ab? Veer ko upar vala bachayeek aur line me lag gayi hai. Veer ke laude lagna tay hai.
Shweta iska kya kahu, I had told enough things about her many times. Jis din Bhawna se aage nikalne ki icha mann se nikal degi, jab uss se inferior feel karna chhod degi tab hi uske barabar aa jayegi.
Ragini gayi to usi irade se thi, jiska darr tha lekin hopefully vo hua nahi. Varna Veer to Veer main bhi support nahi kar pata. Nidhi ke case me koi bakchodi pasand nahi apne ko.
Kahi na kahi nidhi ki achai aur purity ne Ragini ko intimidate kiya, aur anjane me sahi nidhi ki kahi baato ne hi nidhi ka dil tutne se bacha liya, varna to ragini irada pakka karke aayi thi.
This sentence hold a message in itself, maybe eventually ragini will accept Nidhi lekin kab aur kaise? Aur Nidhi ke alawa jo line lagi padi hai, uska kya
Ek hota hai phate me taang adana...lekin ye trisha madam to phate me letne ko taiyar hai. Mumbai me murder pe murder ho rahe hai, city high alert pe hai aur inhe slogan ke katil dhundhne ka adventure karna hai. Khair kaan aise pakdo ke vaise...rasta koi bhi ho aana Veer tak hai.
Par apne ye sidhe sadhe ashiq karan bhaiya fas gaye police vali ke chakkar me
Aakhirkar Suhana aur Tez ki mulakat ho hi gayi....tez aayi to thi bahut kuch soch ke aur kuch hadd tak use vahi mila bhi. Lekin Suhana ne bhi saste me nipta diya. Purani Suhani hoti to naa jane kya karti
Suhana is timid and weak in front of Veer but she still holds that aura and charm against others. Haa utni strong aur rude nahi hai jaisi pehle thi, lekin utni weak bhi nahi jaisi Veer ke sath hoti hai.
Tej aayi to thi Suhana aur Veer ko jaan ne, lekin Suhana me batein Tej aue Veer par laa di. Bhery inteligent.
Damian ko Rebecca ne Australia bhej diya, kisi nayi husn pari ko handle karne,
aur mumbai me Divya ko mission de diya, anjane me kahi kisi din iski vajah se Veer ke sath koi kaand naa ho jaye
Why the hell this weird one came to India from US, murders to vahan bhi kar sakta tha, sirf logo ko marne to yahan tak nahi aaya hoga, yaa ho bhi sakta hai pagal hai saala, kuch bharosa nahi
2 batein hai yaa to ye murderer sach me pagal hai yaa ise system se koi mission mila hai, maybe some kind of task.
Ek jagah par murder me dono kaan gayab the, ek jagah dono hath, prabhakar ke case me gardan ka bada hissa nahi tha, and in this murder lumber part is missing.
Murder karne ka lagbhag ek jaisa tarika and without wappen, definitely using some type of skill or card given by system.
Is he collecting different body parts of people for something.
To Veer ko mission mila and limit is 14 days, aur daanv par hai loved ones family, friends etc.
Ab is arc ki jyadatar ghatnayen isi 14 din ke andar hongi, sab kuch bahut escalate hone vala hai. Sare dushman trap bana chuke hai, police bhi Veer tak pahuch jayegi, Prisoner to murder kar hi raha hai, aur limit sirf 14 din
Mujhe to Nidhi par khatra najar aa raha hai
And these small details of scene 'uske hath coffee cup par kas gaye', 'Cup ko pakadne se uski ungaliya safed ho gayi' and many more... aisi details hi pure scene ko aur jyada imaginative, living realistic bana deti hai.
Hats off to your writing skills and dedication
Super excited to see what coming ahead
Great story, awesome update![]()
Ek 20k vala update do, Damha aur _ABHAY to bina padhe hila hilakar marr jayenge![]()
....Dekho writer sahab itte sundar sundar or fantastic reviews mil rahe hain aapko..apke 12k ki mehnat k Fal mil rhe hain i hope ab is antibiotic se apko koi slump wlump nhi honge kyu![]()
also one more ability in Writer's hand...?I 100% agree...
This is what sets a skilled writer and just a writer apart...
Anyone can write the description... If I know the plot then Main bhi likh sakti hu ki aaj Veer ghar pe tha... Sunday tha... Wo naashta banane me laga tha... Baaki sabhi ka aagman hua... Anyone can write...
But I think these are the sentences which tells us that how excellent the narration is -
These few sentences show us that how skilled he is in narration...
Our mind synchronisationMaybe the system holder prisoner, who escaped from county jail in crimson arc.
When crimson break the jail to make free jim the slippery.
Can i tell you a fun factRight... He fits the description....
But then... Use mad kehna zyada apt ni hoga? Ya pagal? Ya fir psycho? Werewolf sir hume gumrah kar rhe h kya?![]()