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I'll try to add Flashback to the upcoming plot but before that, I'll add a character.

Finding good pictures is difficult, I'll post without images. I'll leave it to your imagination.

Maine abhi decided nahi kiya hai, pahle main a new character add karouga uske baad future may decide karounga flashback add karne ke jarurat hai ya nahi.

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Chapter 6Parvez mummy ke aankho may dekh raha tha aur mummy sharam ke karan baar-baar apni najar jhuka rahi thi.Parvez: "Kaisa laga?"Mummy ne koi jabab nahi diya, aur apni najar jhuka li."Bataou na aaj ki chudai kasi thi.""Mujhe nahi pata."Aur mummy ne apna chehra sharam ke karan...

Chapter 5Main dhire se aage badha, aur bahot hi savdhani se maine window se kamre may jhakha. Kamra pura khali tha. Main fir aage badha, agla window bhi ussi room ka tha so maine usko skip kiya aur aage badh gaya. Jaise jaise main aage badh raha tha mujhe wo aawaj aur tej sunai de rahi thi...

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Chapter 4Lagbagh 2 week beet gaye the iss ghatna ko aur hamari life bilkul normal thi. Mujhe inn do week may mummy ke behavihour may kuchh bhi aisa nahi laga jo alag ho. Main lagbhag Parvez wali ghatna ko bhool chuka tha.Aaj main college se ghar jaldi aa gaya. Ghar me Mummy ek lady se baate...

This is not going to be incest, and as you rightly pointed out about the title, there will be more characters. Also, this story is written from the Son's point of view, so there will be some gray area. Son won't have access to everything mother is doing. I want to make it as real as possible.

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Chapter 3 Parvez ki baate mere dimag may gunj rahi thi aur meri mummy ka wo chechra job wo chudai karwa ke aayi thi, mere aankho ke samne baar-baar aa rahi thi. Mujhe samajh nahi aa raha tha ki mummy aisa kaise kar sakti hai, maie apni mummy ko bahot hi sanskari aur sushil samajhta tha. Haa wo...

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Chapter 2Maine dekha Mummy aur Parvez aapas may bate kar rahe the aur iss bar mummy kuchh jayada hi sharma rahi thi baat karte huye. Fir kuchh der ke baad Parvez uuth kar niche chala gaya aur uske baad Mummy mere paas ayi to boli."Chintu (Mere ghar ka naam) chalo ghar chalte hai, shaadi to...

Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3Chapter 4 Chapter 5 Chapter 6Chapter 1Pure Ghar may shaadi ka mahoul tha. Baraat aane wali thi sab log usi may busy the. Main bhi apne kuchh dosto ke saath baraat ke swagat karne ke liye gate par khada tha. Kuchh hi der may baraat aa gayi, naach...

Rahul jo uske bete ka dost hai usko wapas se story may laou.

One more feedback I would like to give. I have noticed this in the majority of mother-related stories. In the beginning the mother was portrayed as a shy women which was dominated by the boy but after 2-3 plot author change the character of the mother and put her in the dominated position. In...

Bahot hi achchi story likhi hai aapne aur bahot hi achche dhng se likha hai.Kuchh feedback meri taraf se. 2nd plot may chudai ko thoda aur detail may likha jaa sakta tha, jaise pahle plot may tha. Ek naya plot aur add kiya jaa sakta hai jismy beta train may maa ko dekhta hai chhup kar jaise...