Erotica जोरू का गुलाम उर्फ़ जे के जी

[Anish sinha]

Komal ji apse request hai ki mohe rang de ki tarah isme bhi sirf ek character ke sath hi masti mat katwana sab ke sath katwana chahe bhabhi ho salhaj ho koi bhi ho

 

[Anish sinha]

Solahwa sawan me bhi aap sirf guddi se hi masti karwati uske bhai se baki sabke sath nahi to please yeh dhyan me rakhiyega

 

[Siraj Patel]

For completing 100 pages on your thread.
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[komaalrani]

Komal ji apse request hai ki mohe rang de ki tarah isme bhi sirf ek character ke sath hi masti mat katwana sab ke sath katwana chahe bhabhi ho salhaj ho koi bhi ho

aapki baat sahi hai, Mohe rang de ki kahani Husband wife ki ek soft story hai , phir bhi ajkal vanhan bhi Hubby ki apni sis ke saath,...

aur JKG men... to hubby ki to ,... Geeta, Manju Bai. unki saas, ,,,,

han aapki baat sahi hai , kahaani ki heroine abhi tak,...

what do you think Jija ke saath,... Jija saali ka to chalata hai na,... will be waiting for your opinion,....

aur koyi specific suggestion ho to bataaiye, but i liked your suggestion, dekhti hun,


Thanks again,....

 

[komaalrani]

100

 

[komaalrani]

Solahwa sawan me bhi aap sirf guddi se hi masti karwati uske bhai se baki sabke sath nahi to please yeh dhyan me rakhiyega

sure will try to work on your idea

 

[pprsprs0]

100

Congratulations

 

[komaalrani]

Congratulations

Thanks sooooooooo much

 

[komaalrani]

Thanks to all the frnds who supported in this journey to 100 pages

 

[komaalrani]

Komal ji apse request hai ki mohe rang de ki tarah isme bhi sirf ek character ke sath hi masti mat katwana sab ke sath katwana chahe bhabhi ho salhaj ho koi bhi ho

ek baat aur, aap ki baat sahi hai lekin there are two reasons.

One my stories involve 'change' and i am interested in recording those changes, factors which are causing the change and by the end of story, if you compare the character change is obvious.

aapne Solhavan Saavn ki baat ki story is centered around a young teenager who is inquisitive has desires but which are passive. Now once she is in a village, all the restrictions of close family control, issues of city where everybody is watching vanishes and slowly she changes. It was her friend who introduces her to new joys of body and then there are others.

In JKG too story focusses on change of ' his' with a lot of other factors. and these issues make that normally all my stories revolve around a few perons.

secondly, i mostly write in first person, persona of the main character and normally should try to avoid description where I, being narrator is not there. But i do sometimes take liberty but restriction is there.

But i still agree with your view and try to bring some variety, some more 'action' beginning with Jija Saali in this story. Opinion of other readers are also welcome.