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Bahut hi sunder update h bhai rahasya se bharpoor, ab dekhte h ye rahasya kab suljhenge
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NXT Update aaj hi raat ko aayega 12-1 baje tak

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Aapke Comment ka aanokha andaaz hamesha mujhe khus kar deta hai, aapke comment padke mujhe aur jada likhne ka man karta hai

Last time aapne jo idea 💡 diya tha, malish waala main use aage use karunga.. wo mujhe bahut acha laga

"Mera Or Meri Mummy ka Chemistry vi kuch asa hi ha, bas Chudai chod ka..."

Es line main dard hai 😉😉😉
(Just Kidding Bhai)

Aap Amazing ho aur aapke comment bhi aise hi mast aur amazing hote hai

N ye pura update Part #01 k usi khet wale update se jod k likha hai, aage bhi aise kai update aayenge jo aapko part #01 k kai update ki yaad dilayenge


Keep Reading Bhai

Thanks, Monu Bhai.......
Basa sach khu to, aa kahana galat nhi hoga..
Ki Sari Chudai ek taraf, or Savita Chachi ka Pichwara sa nikla awaj jo Subha Subha khet ki sari pakshi (birds) oko udwa da, oh ek taraf...

Basa,jitna Incest Beta ha, un sab ka Mummy sa Chemistry to accha hi hoga...
Sabki Gadrai Mummy ko, har koi bas hawas vari najro ja dektha ha, par saccha pyar incest beta hi karta ha.....
Kisi ki Bibi agar dusro sa chud jaya to babal ho jata ha, par incest beta ki Mummy agar apni marji sa chud jaya, to beta Mummy ka liya Cuckson vi ban jata ha, jasa Maalti Mummy ki incest beta Monu.......

Mera khayal sa to, har Gadrai Chudakkar Mummy ki saccha pyar uska incest beta hi ha..
Par Mummy log aa sanjha tab na.....
Bas is bat ka Dard ha......
Likin ha, Beta sa agar koi saacha pyar karti ha, to oh Mummy hi ha... Chaya beta Incest ho ya nhi...... Mummy sa pyara koi nhi......

Apna pahala vi, mera mang pura kiya ha, Kahini ma mera Fantasy dal ka...
Par mera Fantasy itna accha sa aap ko nhi bata paya, jitna accha or shandar tarikasa aap na Kahini ma bayan kiya ha...
Jo pad ka mujha apni Fantasy sa vi kahi guna accha jabardas laga......

Ek, prediction ha, kya Anokhi Avi vi jinda ha, or kya oh sala Bann-manush ya Tyagi na Anokhi Bhabhi ko kisi tarha bacha liya ha...... agar aa ho joya to accha ho, kuki Asi Gadrai Chudakkar Bhabhi aga Chal ka Gadrai Chudakkar Gaay jasi Mummy banti ha........

Chudai karta karta Monu Bhai Coma ma chala gaya, khi Chudai Dekhta Dekhta bapas na aa jaya Coma sa.... ha ha ha....
Jasa Savita Chachi ki Chudai Monu ki khatiya ma Satyam sa ho rhi jo , jab Savita Chachi Monu ki Dekh val ka liya uska pass ho,
or ghar hota khali...
Mauka dekh ka Satyam Beta,
Savita Mummy ki Chuthar pa baja rha ho tali...
Satyam ka Muh pa gali, bol rha ho...
"Dekh sala Monu..
Kasa Chud rhi ha meri bali...
Ha tuj ma dam...
To apna Mummy ka gand kar dhili..
Usma gus thi nhi tili....
Chud ta chud ta rha gaye teri Maa...
Khet ma Subha Subha Chodna bali thi Sali..
Ho jata tu mera beta, ban jata tera Bap...
Apni Gadrai Mummy ko bolta..."
"Kasa ho Bhoujai, Mast lag rhi ho aap..."


Mast Update tha, abb 3rd ki bari....

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Update #04

Puri tarah se jawan ho chuka Satendra yani Sattu charpai pe baitha hua aaj se theek 23 dino pehle k us khubsurat nazare me khoya hua tha jo usne us raat dekha tha jab wo Bhanu Fufa k yaha unhe aur apni Bua Sheela ko bulane gaya tha

Sattu es baare me jitna soch raha tha uske jism me utni hi aag lag rahi thi.. qki wo khubsurat nazara uski aankhon se dur hi nahi ho raha tha


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Sattu ki Maa yani Savita es samay Harshita k sath milkar Rasoighar me khana bana rahi thi aur uske Pitaji aur 'Chacha Kundan' ghar k bahar kuwe k pass baithe hue baaton me vyast thay

Veeru aur Bhanu kahi gaye hue thay

aaj kal pura pariwar ek hi chatt k neeche thay aur uski wajah Monu k sath jo hua.. wo thi

Sattu es samay usi charpai pe baitha hua tha jispe Monu beshoshi ki halat me pada hua tha

Asal main ye Mahendra yani Maalti k bade Jeth ji ka hi faisla tha ki Monu ko kabhi bhi akela nahi chora jayega, har samay kisi na kisi ka uske sath rehna jaruri hai

esi karanwas es samay Sattu Monu k pass hi uski Charpai pe baitha hua tha.. par wo alag hi khubsurat khayalon main khoya hua tha jismain kamukta hi halki milawat bhi thi

Sattu es lambi saans lete hue apne lower k uper se hi apne lund ko sehla deta hai aur kuch palon k liye uski aankhen band ho jaati hai jaha un band aankhon se bhi use ek hi drishya nazar aata hai

Uski Khubsurat Sheela Bua jo es samay puri tarah nivastr apne bistar pe so rahi thi.. Sattu ko apne khayalon me aisa lagta hai maano Sheela use apne pass bula rahi ho

Puri tarah jawan ho chuka Sattu in khubsurat yaadon me kho sa jata hai aur apne lund ko sehlate hue apni Bua k nange jism ko yaad karta rehta hai

tabhi uske kaano main halki si ahat sunai padti hai aur wo puri tarah sajag ho jata hai.. wo charo tarah dekhta hai jaha koi bhi khatra nahi tha

par tabhi uski nazar kamre k darwaje k bahar Jhadu lagati hui khubsurat Sheela ki jhalak milti hai


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Sheela es samay baith k jhadu laga rahi thi, jis wajah se paseene ki nanhi nanhi bunden uske khubsurat gol aur kathor urojo pe kisi moti ki tarah nazar aa rahi thi

ye jara si jhalak bhi itni kamuk thi ki thi Sattu ka lund puri tarah salami dene laga tha.. na cha k bhi Sattu apne lund ko uper se neeche.. neeche se upar tak sehlane laga tha

par ye nazara jada dair tak nahi chalta qki Sheela jhadu lagate hue darwaje k pass se aage bad jati hai aur khubsurat nazara khatam ho jata hai

Sattu- (Ek lambi si aaah bharte hue Behosh Monu ko dekhte hue kehta hai) ek baat batau Bhai.. pata nahi q aa kal har aurat main mujhe Sheela Bua hi nazar aati hai, kitni khubsurat hai na apni bua.. uffff kiya jism hai na Monu..

Sattu apni hi baat pe thoda sharma sa jata hai, par aage kehta hai
"waise sabse badi baat hai ki main apni ye khuwaish kisi ko bata bhi nahi sakta.. aur kiya kahunga ki mujhe 'Sheela Bua' achi lagne lagi hai"

Sattu ek lambi si saans chorte hue Monu k hath ko pakadte hue aage kehta hai
"Ye sab tujhse bata raha hua, par tu bhi kaha kuch sun raha hoga.. aisa nahi hai ki maine koshish nahi ki"

Sattu ek baar darwaje ki taraf dekhta hai aur phir aage kehta hai
"Maine bahut koshish kari ki Sheela Bua ko leke aisa kuch na Souchu, qki na hi ye samajik taur pe sahi hai.. na hi aisa kuch sambhav hai, par kiya karu Jeevan me pehli baar koi pasand aaya aur wo bhi apni hi Bua.. jo Shadishuda hai"

Sattu aage badta hai aur piyar se Monu k baalon ko sahi karte hue apni baat kehta rehta hai
"Main janta hu tujhe hasi aa rahi hogi ki Sattu Bhaiya ko ye kiya ho gaya hai ?

Par kiya karu main bahut koshish kar raha hu par sheela bua ko apne khayalon se nikal hi nahi pa raha hu.. har samay unka khubsurat chehra meri aankhon k aage ghumta rehta hai"

'ohooo.. kon hai wo khuskismat jispe hamare Sattu ka dil aa gaya.. jara mujhe bhi uske bare me batao"

Apne peeche se aani wali es aawaj se Sattu buri tarah dar jata hai, aur palat k dekhta hai toh andar aane waali aur koi nahi balki uski Bua Sheela hi thi

Bechare Sattu ki toh jaise saans hi atak gayi thi, chehra aisa neela padne laga maano kisi naag ne dash liya ho

Sheela- (Monu aur Sattu k pass aake wahi rakhi kurshi pe baithte hue) Batao batao.. kon hai wo khuskismat ladki ?

Sheela apne gale aur chehre se paseena pouchte hue.. apne hathon ko aise uthati hai maano angdai le rahi ho


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Sattu- (Buri tarah sakpaka sa gaya tha) Kon.. kon si ladki Bua.. kon si...

Sheela- (haste hue) acha ji apne Chote bhai ko abhi abhi bata rahe thay ki kisi ka chehra har samay aankhon k aage ghumta hai, aur ab main puch rahi hu toh mujhse natak

Sheela Monu k piyare se chehre aur mathe par sneh se hath firate hue
"Dekh raha hai Monu, tera bada bhai tujhse toh piyar karta hai.. apne dil ki baat bhi batata hai par apni Sheela Bua se use jara bhi piyar nahi"

Piyar jaisa sabd bolke Sheela ne jaise Sattu k jakhm hare kar diye thay esliye bechara thoda bhuja bhuja sa kehta hai
Sattu- (Chehre pe jabardasti ki hasi laate hue) nahi Bua aisi koi baat nahi hai, aap galat samajh rahi ho.. main toh bus aise hi Monu se baaten karne ki koshish kar raha tha

Sheela- rehne de rehne de.. aaj tune bata diya ki tujhe apni Bua se bilkul bhi piyar nahi

Sattu- nahi Bua aisi baat nahi hai.. aapse toh mujhe bahut piyar.. mera matlab hum sabhi piyar karte hai, sach main aisa kuch nahi hai

Sheela- Chalo theek hai, waise kabhi koi pasand aaye toh tu mujhe bata sakta hai.. tu toh janta hai na mujhe experience bhi hai

Sheela apne aur Bhanu k prem vivah ki taraf eshara karte hue kehti hai

Sattu bechara kuch bol hi nahi paaya.. kuch palon tak puri shanti rehti hai

Sheela- waise kaisi ladki pasand hai tujhe, mujhe bata main waisi hi dhund laungi

Sattu- (feeki si hasi haste hue) Aap nahi dhund paogi.. acha Bua mujhe jara kuch kaam hai, aap agar Monu k pass hai toh hoke aau

Sheela- ha.. ha jarur q nahi, waise sach me tujhe kuch kaam hai ya apni Bua se bhaag raha tha, waise bhi main dekh rahi hu aaj kal tu mujhse kuch kata kata rehta hai

Sattu- (Dar jata hai, maano uski chori padki gayi ho) nahi.. nahi Bua aisa kuch nahi hai, aap aise hi sab soch rahi hu bus.. main aata.. aata hu

itna kehkar Sattu jaldi se kamre se bahar chala jata hai.. maano use dar ho jaise wo waha aur ruka toh apne dil ki baat na keh de

Sheela ko bhi badi hairani hoti hai.. ki aaj kal ese ho kiya gaya hai, asal main Sheela Jab andar aayi toh usne sirf chehre waali baat hi suni thi esliye use jada kuch samajh nahi aaya

par phir wo esi nishkarsh pe pahuchti hai ki aaj kal ghar main har koi Monu ko leke pareshan hai.. esliye Sattu bhi esi se gujar raha hai

Sheela mamta bhari nazron se Monu ko dekhti hai aur piyar se uske mathe pe hath rakh k bolti hai
"tu jaldi se theek ho ja.. phir dono milkar Sattu k liye koi achi si ladki dhundenge"

Ab Sheela ko kon samjhaye uske Bhatije Sattu ko ladki nahi ek aurat ki chahat hai


Esi din shaam ko Gaon k bade bazar me Kundan apne kandhe pe apna gamcha rakhe hue bazar k beecho beech chala ja raha tha


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Kundan k dimag me ab bhi uska Beta hi chal raha tha jise abhi tak hosh nahi aaya tha

'itni Jaldi main kaha Chal diye Kundan Bhaiya"

tabhi koi Kundan ko aawaz deta hai.. Kundan aawaz dene wale ko dekhta hai toh wo aur koi nahi balki usi k Gaon ka Pahalwan tha

✍️ Ye wahi Pahalwan hai jiski Baat Tyagi aur Vanraj kar rahe thay 👇

Update #50, Part #01
https://xforum.live/threads/maa-k-kamuk-kisse-माँ-के-कामुक-किस्से.132410/post-9827277
"Itne saalon tak tumhe(Vanraj) sabse chupaye rakhne k liye hi maine Gaon k 'Pahalwan' k sath milkar aisi afwahen failayi ki es pahadi pe ek aatma ka vaash hai.. taki koi bhi yaha aane ki galti na kare"


In janab Pahalwan ka vistarpurvak parichay main aage dunga..

Kundan ko badi hairani hoti hai ki aaj samne se Pahalwan ne use aawaz kaise de di.. par kundan bhi uska pura samman karte hue
"Aap Bhaiyon ki kripa hai.. aap batayie kaise hai ?"

Pahalwan apne Sabdo me ras gholte hue
"kripa toh hamesha bade Bhai ki hoti hai.. aur wo aap hai, main toh aapka chota Bhai hu

waise aapke Bete k bare main suna bahut dukh hua"

Kundan k chehre pe bhi dard aa hi jata hai.. esliye wo kuch bol nahi pata bus ha me apna sar hila k reh jata hai

"Aao kundan Bhai yahi pass hi ghar hai, chalo ek ek cup chai ho jaye"

Kundan ko aaj Pahalwan ka andaaj bahut ajeeb lag raha tha jis aadmi se.. aaj se pehle kabhi uski baat bhi na hui ho, dono ek dusre ko dekh k apna apna rasta badal lete ho wo aaj itne piyar se baat q kar raha hai ?

Kundan- (Apni soch ko jahir nahi hone deta) jarur Bhai.. par aaj nahi aaj jara kuch kaam hai

Pahalwan- Chalo theek hai, koi nahi aap sayad mujhe apna nahi samajhte.. main toh aapko apna bada bhai hi manta hu

Kundan- nahi nahi Pahalwan aisi koi baat nahi hai, bus wo abhi sach me kuch jaruri kaam aur thoda jaldi main bhi hu.. bus esiliye

Pahalwan- acha theek hai bhai.. par agli baar aapki ek nahi sununga

kundan bhi haste hue
"Ha.. ha jarur Pahalwan"

itna keh k dono ek dusre ko alvida keh k aage bad jate hai

Pahalwan- (Kundan ko jaate hue dekh k hasne lagta hai aur khud se kehta hai) Behenchod teri wajah se mujhe pahalwani chorni padi thi na.. tujhe aise tadapte hue dekh k badi khushi ho rahi hai

Pahalwan apni muchon pe taav dete hue
"abhi toh teri pareshani aur tera ye dard aur badega.. jise dekh k mere dil ko asli thandak milegi

Aaj bhi main apni us beizzati ko nahi bhula hu jo teri wajah se hui thi.. saalon se es aag main jala hu main, par ab tere rone ka samay hai"

Kundan, Pahalwan k iraado se puri tarah anjaan apne kaam pe aage bad jata hai wahi Pahalwan bhi kuch dair tak use hi dekhta rehta hai aur phir wo bhi apne raste chal padta hai

Chaliye aage badne se pehle ye jaan lete hai ki aakhir ye mahoday hai kon ?

Sundarpur Gaon main 2 bazar lagte hai.. pehli Choti Mandi ya 'Chota Bazar' aur Dusra Bazar 'Bade Bazar' k naam se jana jata hai

Es Bade Bazar me ass pass k 5 Gaon k logo thok main anaj ko kharidane aur baichne ka kaam karte hai

Par Bade Bazar main sabse moti kamai hoti hai yaha ki anaj mandi se.. qki yaha ass pass k sabhi Gaon k Kishan apna anaj baichne aate hai aur phir yaha se ye sara anaj ass pass k bade sehro me jake baicha jata hai aur es anaj ki mandi ko sambhalne ka kaam 'Pahalwan' karta hai

Waise ye Anaj Mandi pe raaj karne wala ka naam 'Thakur Balwant Pratap Singh' hai aur Pahalwan unhi ka khas aadmi hai


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Pahalwan jiska asli naam 'Mangal Singh' hai wo kisi jamane main pahalwani kiya karta tha.. par phir aisa kuch hua ki use pahalwani chorni padi

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Aur tabse leke aaj tak ye Thakur Balwant ka khas hai

Thakur se nazar kuch log toh ese 'Thakur ka Kutta' bhi kehte hai

Pahalwan yani Mangal Singh k pariwar ki baat karu toh uske alawa es pariwar main 2 aur log bhi hai

Bulbul

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35 Saal ki sawali par behad khubsurat aur gol Chehre ki Bulbul bilkul apne naam jaisi hai

Jiski Saloni surat dekh k kisi ka bhi lund chehakna suru kar de

Jadatar saree pehnne waali Bulbul ko dekh k Gaon k mard aksar yahi kehte hai
'Pahalwan jaise langur ko Bulbul k angur mile hai'

Bulbul jab pallu chada k chalti hai, toh uske chalne ka andaaz aisa hota hai ki dekhne waalon k arman machal uthte hai

Uski hilti hui gand ko dekhne k liye log apni saansen lena bhul jate hai aur bade bade gaay k than jaisi uski Chuchiyon ka mardan karne k liye har koi apne hisab se apne apne khayalon me kho jata hai

Waise bata du ki Pahalwan aur Bulbul k koi bacha nahi hai

Pahalwan k ghar ka aakhiri sadasya hai

Hansini

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Jawani aur uski aag kiya hoti hai ye bus abhi abhi janna suru hi kiya hai esne

Kahaniyon aur filmon me Hero Heroine ko sath me piyar karte hue dekh k eska jism bhi akadne lagta hai.. ese bhi apni zindagi k Hero ka intizar hai

Aisa nahi hai ki School me kisi ladke ne koshish nahi ki, par Hasini ko na jane kiski talash hai aur wo kab jake puri hogi

Waise kabhi ye aur Monu ek sath ek hi class main hua karte thay.. par phir Monu k sath jo hua uske Karan use Delhi Jana pada aur uske baad se aaj tak ye dono mile nahi hai

Waise jin ladkon ne ese paane ki koshish ki hai usmain 'Satyam' bhi aata hai, par Hasini ne use theek waise hi nazarandaz kar diya jaise Election jeetne k baad 'Neta' desh ki janta ko karte hai

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Esi din raat main sabhi log Mahendra k yaha ghar k aangan main baithe hue thay.. aur inhe k sath Gaon ki ek do auraten bhi thi jismain se Monu k khas dost Khalid ki Ammi bhi thi jo ek taraf sabse alag apni hi soch main ghum Kundan ko dekhte hue kehti hai

"Kundan"

Kundan jaise achanak apni soch se bahar aate hue
"Ji Bhabijaan... kahiye"

Khalid ki Ammi 'Nasreen'
"waise us din hua kiya tha.. Monu tumhe mila kaise tha"

Nasreen ki baat sunkar waha har kisi ka dhiyan puri tarah Kundan pe aa chuka tha.. jismain sabse jada utawli Maalti thi

waise aaj es baat ko aaj 23 din ho chuke thay, par abhi tak Kundan ne us raat k bare main kisi ko kuch nahi bataya tha

Virendra urf Veeru, Kundan ka Chota Bhai
"ha Kundan Bhaiya.. us raat aapko Monu nadi main kaise mila tha.. hua kiya tha, aap nadi pe kaise pahuchne"

Kundan sabhi ki taraf dekhta hai aur ek lambi si saans lete hue jaise us din main wapas lautne lagta hai

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Esi samay Sarpa nadi k thande paani k beech se ek sawali par bhare jism waali kamuk si aurat paani se aise bahar aati hai maano wo sidiyon ko chadte hue uper aa rahi hai

Paani k bahar aate hi uski bheegi saree kuch jada hi jaldi sukhne lagti hai

par es samay es aurat k aankhen puri tarah laal thi, ghusse se uska har ang kaanp raha tha.. uske mukh se kuch sabd nikalte hai jo kisi jalte hue angaro se kam nahi thay
"Kundan.. tumne mere jal se ek jeevan ko bacha kar mera aahar cheena hai, tumne Maya k ghusse ko lalkara hai.. eska anjaam bahut dardaank hoga"


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Update #04

Puri tarah se jawan ho chuka Satendra yani Sattu charpai pe baitha hua aaj se theek 23 dino pehle k us khubsurat nazare me khoya hua tha jo usne us raat dekha tha jab wo Bhanu Fufa k yaha unhe aur apni Bua Sheela ko bulane gaya tha

Sattu es baare me jitna soch raha tha uske jism me utni hi aag lag rahi thi.. qki wo khubsurat nazara uski aankhon se dur hi nahi ho raha tha


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Sattu ki Maa yani Savita es samay Harshita k sath milkar Rasoighar me khana bana rahi thi aur uske Pitaji aur 'Chacha Kundan' ghar k bahar kuwe k pass baithe hue baaton me vyast thay

Veeru aur Bhanu kahi gaye hue thay

aaj kal pura pariwar ek hi chatt k neeche thay aur uski wajah Monu k sath jo hua.. wo thi

Sattu es samay usi charpai pe baitha hua tha jispe Monu beshoshi ki halat me pada hua tha

Asal main ye Mahendra yani Maalti k bade Jeth ji ka hi faisla tha ki Monu ko kabhi bhi akela nahi chora jayega, har samay kisi na kisi ka uske sath rehna jaruri hai

esi karanwas es samay Sattu Monu k pass hi uski Charpai pe baitha hua tha.. par wo alag hi khubsurat khayalon main khoya hua tha jismain kamukta hi halki milawat bhi thi

Sattu es lambi saans lete hue apne lower k uper se hi apne lund ko sehla deta hai aur kuch palon k liye uski aankhen band ho jaati hai jaha un band aankhon se bhi use ek hi drishya nazar aata hai

Uski Khubsurat Sheela Bua jo es samay puri tarah nivastr apne bistar pe so rahi thi.. Sattu ko apne khayalon me aisa lagta hai maano Sheela use apne pass bula rahi ho

Puri tarah jawan ho chuka Sattu in khubsurat yaadon me kho sa jata hai aur apne lund ko sehlate hue apni Bua k nange jism ko yaad karta rehta hai

tabhi uske kaano main halki si ahat sunai padti hai aur wo puri tarah sajag ho jata hai.. wo charo tarah dekhta hai jaha koi bhi khatra nahi tha

par tabhi uski nazar kamre k darwaje k bahar Jhadu lagati hui khubsurat Sheela ki jhalak milti hai


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Sheela es samay baith k jhadu laga rahi thi, jis wajah se paseene ki nanhi nanhi bunden uske khubsurat gol aur kathor urojo pe kisi moti ki tarah nazar aa rahi thi

ye jara si jhalak bhi itni kamuk thi ki thi Sattu ka lund puri tarah salami dene laga tha.. na cha k bhi Sattu apne lund ko uper se neeche.. neeche se upar tak sehlane laga tha

par ye nazara jada dair tak nahi chalta qki Sheela jhadu lagate hue darwaje k pass se aage bad jati hai aur khubsurat nazara khatam ho jata hai

Sattu- (Ek lambi si aaah bharte hue Behosh Monu ko dekhte hue kehta hai) ek baat batau Bhai.. pata nahi q aa kal har aurat main mujhe Sheela Bua hi nazar aati hai, kitni khubsurat hai na apni bua.. uffff kiya jism hai na Monu..

Sattu apni hi baat pe thoda sharma sa jata hai, par aage kehta hai
"waise sabse badi baat hai ki main apni ye khuwaish kisi ko bata bhi nahi sakta.. aur kiya kahunga ki mujhe 'Sheela Bua' achi lagne lagi hai"

Sattu ek lambi si saans chorte hue Monu k hath ko pakadte hue aage kehta hai
"Ye sab tujhse bata raha hua, par tu bhi kaha kuch sun raha hoga.. aisa nahi hai ki maine koshish nahi ki"

Sattu ek baar darwaje ki taraf dekhta hai aur phir aage kehta hai
"Maine bahut koshish kari ki Sheela Bua ko leke aisa kuch na Souchu, qki na hi ye samajik taur pe sahi hai.. na hi aisa kuch sambhav hai, par kiya karu Jeevan me pehli baar koi pasand aaya aur wo bhi apni hi Bua.. jo Shadishuda hai"

Sattu aage badta hai aur piyar se Monu k baalon ko sahi karte hue apni baat kehta rehta hai
"Main janta hu tujhe hasi aa rahi hogi ki Sattu Bhaiya ko ye kiya ho gaya hai ?

Par kiya karu main bahut koshish kar raha hu par sheela bua ko apne khayalon se nikal hi nahi pa raha hu.. har samay unka khubsurat chehra meri aankhon k aage ghumta rehta hai"

'ohooo.. kon hai wo khuskismat jispe hamare Sattu ka dil aa gaya.. jara mujhe bhi uske bare me batao"

Apne peeche se aani wali es aawaj se Sattu buri tarah dar jata hai, aur palat k dekhta hai toh andar aane waali aur koi nahi balki uski Bua Sheela hi thi

Bechare Sattu ki toh jaise saans hi atak gayi thi, chehra aisa neela padne laga maano kisi naag ne dash liya ho

Sheela- (Monu aur Sattu k pass aake wahi rakhi kurshi pe baithte hue) Batao batao.. kon hai wo khuskismat ladki ?

Sheela apne gale aur chehre se paseena pouchte hue.. apne hathon ko aise uthati hai maano angdai le rahi ho


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Sattu- (Buri tarah sakpaka sa gaya tha) Kon.. kon si ladki Bua.. kon si...

Sheela- (haste hue) acha ji apne Chote bhai ko abhi abhi bata rahe thay ki kisi ka chehra har samay aankhon k aage ghumta hai, aur ab main puch rahi hu toh mujhse natak

Sheela Monu k piyare se chehre aur mathe par sneh se hath firate hue
"Dekh raha hai Monu, tera bada bhai tujhse toh piyar karta hai.. apne dil ki baat bhi batata hai par apni Sheela Bua se use jara bhi piyar nahi"

Piyar jaisa sabd bolke Sheela ne jaise Sattu k jakhm hare kar diye thay esliye bechara thoda bhuja bhuja sa kehta hai
Sattu- (Chehre pe jabardasti ki hasi laate hue) nahi Bua aisi koi baat nahi hai, aap galat samajh rahi ho.. main toh bus aise hi Monu se baaten karne ki koshish kar raha tha

Sheela- rehne de rehne de.. aaj tune bata diya ki tujhe apni Bua se bilkul bhi piyar nahi

Sattu- nahi Bua aisi baat nahi hai.. aapse toh mujhe bahut piyar.. mera matlab hum sabhi piyar karte hai, sach main aisa kuch nahi hai

Sheela- Chalo theek hai, waise kabhi koi pasand aaye toh tu mujhe bata sakta hai.. tu toh janta hai na mujhe experience bhi hai

Sheela apne aur Bhanu k prem vivah ki taraf eshara karte hue kehti hai

Sattu bechara kuch bol hi nahi paaya.. kuch palon tak puri shanti rehti hai

Sheela- waise kaisi ladki pasand hai tujhe, mujhe bata main waisi hi dhund laungi

Sattu- (feeki si hasi haste hue) Aap nahi dhund paogi.. acha Bua mujhe jara kuch kaam hai, aap agar Monu k pass hai toh hoke aau

Sheela- ha.. ha jarur q nahi, waise sach me tujhe kuch kaam hai ya apni Bua se bhaag raha tha, waise bhi main dekh rahi hu aaj kal tu mujhse kuch kata kata rehta hai

Sattu- (Dar jata hai, maano uski chori padki gayi ho) nahi.. nahi Bua aisa kuch nahi hai, aap aise hi sab soch rahi hu bus.. main aata.. aata hu

itna kehkar Sattu jaldi se kamre se bahar chala jata hai.. maano use dar ho jaise wo waha aur ruka toh apne dil ki baat na keh de

Sheela ko bhi badi hairani hoti hai.. ki aaj kal ese ho kiya gaya hai, asal main Sheela Jab andar aayi toh usne sirf chehre waali baat hi suni thi esliye use jada kuch samajh nahi aaya

par phir wo esi nishkarsh pe pahuchti hai ki aaj kal ghar main har koi Monu ko leke pareshan hai.. esliye Sattu bhi esi se gujar raha hai

Sheela mamta bhari nazron se Monu ko dekhti hai aur piyar se uske mathe pe hath rakh k bolti hai
"tu jaldi se theek ho ja.. phir dono milkar Sattu k liye koi achi si ladki dhundenge"

Ab Sheela ko kon samjhaye uske Bhatije Sattu ko ladki nahi ek aurat ki chahat hai


Esi din shaam ko Gaon k bade bazar me Kundan apne kandhe pe apna gamcha rakhe hue bazar k beecho beech chala ja raha tha


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Kundan k dimag me ab bhi uska Beta hi chal raha tha jise abhi tak hosh nahi aaya tha

'itni Jaldi main kaha Chal diye Kundan Bhaiya"

tabhi koi Kundan ko aawaz deta hai.. Kundan aawaz dene wale ko dekhta hai toh wo aur koi nahi balki usi k Gaon ka Pahalwan tha

✍️ Ye wahi Pahalwan hai jiski Baat Tyagi aur Vanraj kar rahe thay 👇

Update #50, Part #01
https://xforum.live/threads/maa-k-kamuk-kisse-माँ-के-कामुक-किस्से.132410/post-9827277
"Itne saalon tak tumhe(Vanraj) sabse chupaye rakhne k liye hi maine Gaon k 'Pahalwan' k sath milkar aisi afwahen failayi ki es pahadi pe ek aatma ka vaash hai.. taki koi bhi yaha aane ki galti na kare"


In janab Pahalwan ka vistarpurvak parichay main aage dunga..

Kundan ko badi hairani hoti hai ki aaj samne se Pahalwan ne use aawaz kaise de di.. par kundan bhi uska pura samman karte hue
"Aap Bhaiyon ki kripa hai.. aap batayie kaise hai ?"

Pahalwan apne Sabdo me ras gholte hue
"kripa toh hamesha bade Bhai ki hoti hai.. aur wo aap hai, main toh aapka chota Bhai hu

waise aapke Bete k bare main suna bahut dukh hua"

Kundan k chehre pe bhi dard aa hi jata hai.. esliye wo kuch bol nahi pata bus ha me apna sar hila k reh jata hai

"Aao kundan Bhai yahi pass hi ghar hai, chalo ek ek cup chai ho jaye"

Kundan ko aaj Pahalwan ka andaaj bahut ajeeb lag raha tha jis aadmi se.. aaj se pehle kabhi uski baat bhi na hui ho, dono ek dusre ko dekh k apna apna rasta badal lete ho wo aaj itne piyar se baat q kar raha hai ?

Kundan- (Apni soch ko jahir nahi hone deta) jarur Bhai.. par aaj nahi aaj jara kuch kaam hai

Pahalwan- Chalo theek hai, koi nahi aap sayad mujhe apna nahi samajhte.. main toh aapko apna bada bhai hi manta hu

Kundan- nahi nahi Pahalwan aisi koi baat nahi hai, bus wo abhi sach me kuch jaruri kaam aur thoda jaldi main bhi hu.. bus esiliye

Pahalwan- acha theek hai bhai.. par agli baar aapki ek nahi sununga

kundan bhi haste hue
"Ha.. ha jarur Pahalwan"

itna keh k dono ek dusre ko alvida keh k aage bad jate hai

Pahalwan- (Kundan ko jaate hue dekh k hasne lagta hai aur khud se kehta hai) Behenchod teri wajah se mujhe pahalwani chorni padi thi na.. tujhe aise tadapte hue dekh k badi khushi ho rahi hai

Pahalwan apni muchon pe taav dete hue
"abhi toh teri pareshani aur tera ye dard aur badega.. jise dekh k mere dil ko asli thandak milegi

Aaj bhi main apni us beizzati ko nahi bhula hu jo teri wajah se hui thi.. saalon se es aag main jala hu main, par ab tere rone ka samay hai"

Kundan, Pahalwan k iraado se puri tarah anjaan apne kaam pe aage bad jata hai wahi Pahalwan bhi kuch dair tak use hi dekhta rehta hai aur phir wo bhi apne raste chal padta hai

Chaliye aage badne se pehle ye jaan lete hai ki aakhir ye mahoday hai kon ?

Sundarpur Gaon main 2 bazar lagte hai.. pehli Choti Mandi ya 'Chota Bazar' aur Dusra Bazar 'Bade Bazar' k naam se jana jata hai

Es Bade Bazar me ass pass k 5 Gaon k logo thok main anaj ko kharidane aur baichne ka kaam karte hai

Par Bade Bazar main sabse moti kamai hoti hai yaha ki anaj mandi se.. qki yaha ass pass k sabhi Gaon k Kishan apna anaj baichne aate hai aur phir yaha se ye sara anaj ass pass k bade sehro me jake baicha jata hai aur es anaj ki mandi ko sambhalne ka kaam 'Pahalwan' karta hai

Waise ye Anaj Mandi pe raaj karne wala ka naam 'Thakur Balwant Pratap Singh' hai aur Pahalwan unhi ka khas aadmi hai


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Pahalwan jiska asli naam 'Mangal Singh' hai wo kisi jamane main pahalwani kiya karta tha.. par phir aisa kuch hua ki use pahalwani chorni padi

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Aur tabse leke aaj tak ye Thakur Balwant ka khas hai

Thakur se nazar kuch log toh ese 'Thakur ka Kutta' bhi kehte hai

Pahalwan yani Mangal Singh k pariwar ki baat karu toh uske alawa es pariwar main 2 aur log bhi hai

Bulbul

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35 Saal ki sawali par behad khubsurat aur gol Chehre ki Bulbul bilkul apne naam jaisi hai

Jiski Saloni surat dekh k kisi ka bhi lund chehakna suru kar de

Jadatar saree pehnne waali Bulbul ko dekh k Gaon k mard aksar yahi kehte hai
'Pahalwan jaise langur ko Bulbul k angur mile hai'

Bulbul jab pallu chada k chalti hai, toh uske chalne ka andaaz aisa hota hai ki dekhne waalon k arman machal uthte hai

Uski hilti hui gand ko dekhne k liye log apni saansen lena bhul jate hai aur bade bade gaay k than jaisi uski Chuchiyon ka mardan karne k liye har koi apne hisab se apne apne khayalon me kho jata hai

Waise bata du ki Pahalwan aur Bulbul k koi bacha nahi hai

Pahalwan k ghar ka aakhiri sadasya hai

Hansini

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Jawani aur uski aag kiya hoti hai ye bus abhi abhi janna suru hi kiya hai esne

Kahaniyon aur filmon me Hero Heroine ko sath me piyar karte hue dekh k eska jism bhi akadne lagta hai.. ese bhi apni zindagi k Hero ka intizar hai

Aisa nahi hai ki School me kisi ladke ne koshish nahi ki, par Hasini ko na jane kiski talash hai aur wo kab jake puri hogi

Waise kabhi ye aur Monu ek sath ek hi class main hua karte thay.. par phir Monu k sath jo hua uske Karan use Delhi Jana pada aur uske baad se aaj tak ye dono mile nahi hai

Waise jin ladkon ne ese paane ki koshish ki hai usmain 'Satyam' bhi aata hai, par Hasini ne use theek waise hi nazarandaz kar diya jaise Election jeetne k baad 'Neta' desh ki janta ko karte hai

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Esi din raat main sabhi log Mahendra k yaha ghar k aangan main baithe hue thay.. aur inhe k sath Gaon ki ek do auraten bhi thi jismain se Monu k khas dost Khalid ki Ammi bhi thi jo ek taraf sabse alag apni hi soch main ghum Kundan ko dekhte hue kehti hai

"Kundan"

Kundan jaise achanak apni soch se bahar aate hue
"Ji Bhabijaan... kahiye"

Khalid ki Ammi 'Nasreen'
"waise us din hua kiya tha.. Monu tumhe mila kaise tha"

Nasreen ki baat sunkar waha har kisi ka dhiyan puri tarah Kundan pe aa chuka tha.. jismain sabse jada utawli Maalti thi

waise aaj es baat ko aaj 23 din ho chuke thay, par abhi tak Kundan ne us raat k bare main kisi ko kuch nahi bataya tha

Virendra urf Veeru, Kundan ka Chota Bhai
"ha Kundan Bhaiya.. us raat aapko Monu nadi main kaise mila tha.. hua kiya tha, aap nadi pe kaise pahuchne"

Kundan sabhi ki taraf dekhta hai aur ek lambi si saans lete hue jaise us din main wapas lautne lagta hai

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Esi samay Sarpa nadi k thande paani k beech se ek sawali par bhare jism waali kamuk si aurat paani se aise bahar aati hai maano wo sidiyon ko chadte hue uper aa rahi hai

Paani k bahar aate hi uski bheegi saree kuch jada hi jaldi sukhne lagti hai

par es samay es aurat k aankhen puri tarah laal thi, ghusse se uska har ang kaanp raha tha.. uske mukh se kuch sabd nikalte hai jo kisi jalte hue angaro se kam nahi thay
"Kundan.. tumne mere jal se ek jeevan ko bacha kar mera aahar cheena hai, tumne Maya k ghusse ko lalkara hai.. eska anjaam bahut dardaank hoga"


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Nice update 👍
 

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Sabse pehle to dirty_thoughts ko mera asankhya dhanyawaad ki unhone is lajawaab kahani ko aur romanchit karne ke liye is 'nayi kadi/part' ko humare saamne pesh kiya. Humare lekhak un khaas logo mein se hai jo paathako ki advice aur sujhaav par dhyaan dete hai. Aise lekhak bare bhaagya se Xforum or Xforum pe dekhne ko milte hai. Aur isi liye inki kahani padne hum sab pathak hafto hafto besabri se intezaar karte hai.

Main lekhak se aur baaki pathako se vinti karta hu ki mera sujhav ka bura na maane, aur is comment ko sirf ek 'sujhav' ke nazar se dekhe. Mera iraada lekhak ko protsahan deke sirf is kahaani ko aur bhi behtar banana hain. Time kam hi sahi, pathak bhi dete hai. Is kahani mein ji tod mehnat ki jaa rahi hai. Likhne ka passion aur potential dono bemisaal hai. Main nahi chahta iska engagement gire isiliye apne lambe comment ke liye sabse maafi chaahta hu!

So,

Is Kahani ka extended introduction zaruri tha, acha kiya apne doosri kadi pesh ki

LEKIN...

Introduction ki ek dikkat hai. Naye introduction aur naye kirdaar, kabhi kabhi original kirdaar,puraane context aur unke resolution ko peeche chor/adhoora kar dete hai aur kahani ulajh sakti hai.

Aam taur par, kisi bhi lekhak ke nazar se dekha jaaye to uske banaye saare kirdaar important hote hai par paathak se pucha jaaye to jawaab alag alag milenge.

Kuch kirdaar aur unki gatividhi lupt hoti dikhayi de rahi hai, jaise ki -

1. Maalti. Lekhak ke anusar, isne wo hawas laddoo galti se khayaa hai jisse iska apne aap par ab koi kaaboo nahi hai. Par anokhi ke murder ne kahani ka angle hi ghuma diya aur kuch had tak is kahani ko complicated kar diya hai. Maana ki monu ki haalat ki wajah se wo gamghin hai par kab tak? Maalti kahani ka mukhya kirdar hai par monu se chudai ke baad ab tak ispe koi khaas baat chit hui hi nahi! Kahani bas iske ird-gird (kabhi past kabhi present) mein hi ghoom rahi hai.

Main samajh sakta hu lekhak central character ko chudwa chudwa ke surprise khatam nahi karna chahte. Shayad update 2075 mein uski chudayi dhang se dekhne mile. Par Agar aisa hai to itni jaldi hawas ka laddoo maalti ko khilaya hi kyun? Maalti ko Bhaanu ka lund dikha kar rijhaaya kyun? Ab yeh naya thread aur unki kahani aur unka sex...(lekhak se anurodh karta hu ki kahani ka ek - DIRECTION SET KARIYE)

2. Jabbar - Yeh khoonkhar aadmi chupa chupa hi firta hai, isne abhi tak Maalti ke hawas aur akelepan ka koi fayda nahi uthaya. Aur sab chor chaar ke monu ko khatam karne ke chakkar mein laga hua hai. Kya murder is kahani ka theme hai? Nahi. Kya ye maalti se akarshit hai? Haan. Kya use wo chodega? Iska bhi koi ata pata nahi - direction is undefined.

3. Mahendra. Iska aur maalti ka angle aaj bhi incomplete hai. Isne bhi abhi tak maalti ke akelepan aur hawas ka koi fayda nahi uthaya (jabki ye past mein maalti ko uski jawaani mein mast ragad chuka hai). Monu ka koma mein hona - shayad maalti aur iska angle ko badhawa deta aur Hume shayad dono ke beech ki hawas dekhne ko milti par is naye thread mein naye characters la diye gaye. Kabhi ye bhai sahab aate hai, kabhi ye jaate hai aur filhaal maalti ka kandha bane hue hai. Na jaane choot kab maraange!

4. Bhaanu. Isne bhi abhi tak maalti ke akelepan aur hawas ka koi fayda nahi uthaya (jabki ye past mein, maalti ke laddoo khaane ke baad, maalti ko apna lund pant/dhoti ke upar se dikha ke garam kar chuka hai. Yeh maalti ko gabhin karke badla lena chahta tha. Us din dono ke beech almost kuch ho jata par lekhak ne khade lund pe last maar di! Lekhak ke anusaar ye wahi hai, jiska pura ghar pariwar aur rishetdaar Maalti ki wajah se khatam ho gaye hai. Logic to yahi kehta hai isko maalti ke upar Dore daalne chahiye, use fasa ke bistar par laane ki koshish karni chahiye. Taaki badla le sake. Par ye kar kya raha hai? Apni biwi Sheela ke saath romance.

Tyaagi - Ye bhai sahaab jari booti dhundne aur 'Vanraj' ko thik karne gaye the pahadi waale mandir pe. Yeh wait karke dekhna chaahte the "Bhaanu kya karta hai", par Bhanu ko to biwi ki gaar maarne se fursat nahi..lol. Aur Vaid ji koi ata pata nahi!

Vanraj - Yeh 90's ke Kaanti Shah ke filmo ka bhoot Maalti ko chod ke gabhin karna chahta hai. Par iska WL kabhi confirm nahi hoga kyunki Vaid ji lapata hai, Bhanu ko biwi ki gaar maarne se fursat nahi, Monu Koma mein hai aur Mahendra sirf maalti ko dekh kar hilaata hi hai, Heera aur Panna ki entry baaki hai - aur ye sab ke sab Maalti ke coach mein apna RAC - ab tak confirm nahi karwa paaye aur Part 1 khatam bhi ho gaya. Is naye thread mein lekhak to poore Sundarpur gaon ko dikha rahe hain. Vanraj to..g..g..giyo!

Savita aur Satyam. Ye hamare priya lekhak ke priya characters hai. Lekhak aksar inhe chudwa ke maalti ki chudayi taalte hai. Inka sex repetitive aur boring lagne laga hai kyunki Savita kabhi shareef aur pativrata thi hi nahi - pehle se hi badchalan aurat thi. Uska chudna kisi aam randi ke chudne maafik hi lagta hai chaahe use uska beta chode ya koi aur xyz aadmi.

Anokhi. Part 1 mein jab wo mar hi chuki hai to part 2 (is naye threead) mein uski flashback chudayi dikha ke zaruri kirddaro aur unke milan ko delay karna...mujhe sahi nahi laga. Mere hisab se Anokhi ke past par 'detailed description' lekhak aur pathak dono ka waqt bardaad hai.

Ye sab character aur inka milan abhi bhi adhoora hai. Aur uske pehle hi lekhak ne Sheela aur Sattu, Bulbul aur Thakur BP Singh, Pehlwan Aur Hansini.....naye characters ka angle dikha diya.
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Mera 2 hi hai anurodh hai. Chota se hai. Gaur kariye ga please.

1. Kahaani ki theme par dhyaan dijiye. Kahaani ko disha dikhaiye prabhu!


Ya to Incest+Adultery kariye, ya fir Suspense Thriller dikhaiye ya fir Horror dikhaiye. Har naya theme apna description,context aur time maangti hai. Sab theme mix karne se kahani sirf lambi hogi, dilchasp nahi!

2. Kahani mein aapke banaye sabse important "jodiyo/sex couples" ko - ek ek karke priority dijiye.

Finish one couple's seduction sex and then start another couple's, scene by scene. Act by Act. Jitne naye kirdaar utni zyada likhne mein mehnat, puraane character ke milan ka delay aur ussay bhi jyada painful - important updates ke liye pathako ka lamba wait. These days over two weeks of wait.

Sorry Agar bura laga ho to. But aapne hi review maanga tha. My views are personal. You and other readers can feel free to disagree.

Asankhya dhanyawaad aapke keemti waqt aur mehnat ke liye 🙏🏽🙏🏽🙏🏽
 
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