Incest ये तो सोचा न था…

[Strange Love]

Nice story brother...but you could have used this opportunity to create more sexual tension between shalini and her jeth which was missed.

Okey let's see what happens in next update.

 

[rakeshhbakshi]

Nice story brother...but you could have used this opportunity to create more sexual tension between shalini and her jeth which was missed.

Okey let's see what happens in next update.

Agreed. yet i am not master in the skill Sir. Nice of you to read my story...

 

[Strange Love]

Agreed. yet i am not master in the skill Sir. Nice of you to read my story...

See brother whatever you write, we readers will always remain by your side supporting you. I know it's very difficult for a new writer to create erotica but some of the scenes in your story very very erotic.

I guess if you double down on this aspect, your story would shoot up in views becoz they foundation of story and story plot looks very solid.

Regards

 

[rakeshhbakshi]

See brother whatever you write, we readers will always remain by your side supporting you. I know it's very difficult for a new writer to create erotica but some of the scenes in your story very very erotic.

I guess if you double down on this aspect, your story would shoot up in views becoz they foundation of story and story plot looks very solid.

Regards

Thanks but i am not sure what does it mean by // double down///
but thanks anyway for your concern and tip.

 

[Strange Love]

Thanks but i am not sure what does it mean by // double down///
but thanks anyway for your concern and tip.

Double down means...pehle se aur bhi jyada focus karna. Eg- Virat Kohli double down on his batting practice after poor performance. Matlab Virat kohli ne pehle se bhi jyada focus kiya hai batting practice pe...

So in this case double down on erotica means include focus more on sex, sexual dialogues, dirty erotic conversations etc to spice things up, after all we are at a adult forum to get fun and not philosophy...mind you we readers don't have any problem with philosophy but sex should be more and philosophy should be less so that the story does not become boring.

This is just my genuine advice as a fan of your story.

Regards

 

[rakeshhbakshi]

Double down means...pehle se aur bhi jyada focus karna. Eg- Virat Kohli double down on his batting practice after poor performance. Matlab Virat kohli ne pehle se bhi jyada focus kiya hai batting practice pe...

So in this case double down on erotica means include focus more on sex, sexual dialogues, dirty erotic conversations etc to spice things up, after all we are at a adult forum to get fun and not philosophy...mind you we readers don't have any problem with philosophy but sex should be more and philosophy should be less so that the story does not become boring.

This is just my genuine advice as a fan of your story.

Regards

Thanks again.
i got what you want to convey.
I may be wrong writer for the forum.
because i do not dominate my characters to follow what i want, i flow with them and narrate.
This can be my shortcoming.
Nice of you to make me understand.

 

[Strange Love]

Thanks again.
i got what you want to convey.
I may be wrong writer for the forum.
because i do not dominate my characters to follow what i want, i flow with them and narrate.
This can be my shortcoming.
Nice of you to make me understand.

Bro ultimately it's your own story and you should only add something if you feel that is right for the story even if people like me give you advice you follow your own heart and write your story as you want to write it without any external pressure..

 

[rakeshhbakshi]

Bro ultimately it's your own story and you should only add something if you feel that is right for the story even if people like me give you advice you follow your own heart and write your story as you want to write it without any external pressure..

I am obliged for such a open view Sir ____/\____

 

[Lib am]

आप की प्रतिक्रिया पढ़ कर अच्छा लगा. मुझे लगा की पाठक शालिनी का सेक्स एक्स्पेक्ट कर रहे है और मैं फिलॉसफी से पका रहा हूँ. ...

नहीं दोस्त सेक्स वाली कहानियां तो इस फोरम में भरी पड़ी है मगर ऐसी कहानी काम ही मिलती है मैं पढ़ता हर तरह की कहानियां हूं मगर जहां स्टोरी लाइन अच्छी हो और भावनात्मक हो तो पढ़ने में मजा आ जाता है। ऐसे ही लिखते रहिए।

 

[rakeshhbakshi]

Bro ultimately it's your own story and you should only add something if you feel that is right for the story even if people like me give you advice you follow your own heart and write your story as you want to write it without any external pressure..

I am obliged for such a open view Sir ____/\____

नहीं दोस्त सेक्स वाली कहानियां तो इस फोरम में भरी पड़ी है मगर ऐसी कहानी काम ही मिलती है मैं पढ़ता हर तरह की कहानियां हूं मगर जहां स्टोरी लाइन अच्छी हो और भावनात्मक हो तो पढ़ने में मजा आ जाता है। ऐसे ही लिखते रहिए।

तहे दिल से शुक्रिया इस होंसला अफझाई के लिए सर ---