
Sir ye kya chal rha hai,
Pahle to mai aapse naraz hu , chandini aise kaise kisi anjaan vyakti ke saath ja skti hai aur wo bhi apne devar ko marne ke liye chor ke
ye to ho hi nhi skta , bilkul nhi ho skta
aur zara sochiye agar chandini ko andhere me bhagaya js skta hai to to jugal ko kyu nhi , sach me ajeeb laga
aur chandini ka yu bina kisi jijhak ke ek anjaan mard ke saath yu chale jana ye to bahot hi galat tha , agar story ki demand thi ki chandini ko akele hi bhagna hai to aapko thodhe aur convincing situations banane chahiye the ki jisse lage ki han chandini ke paas aur koi rasta nhi tha aur chandini ko majburan sab karna padha
par yaha to aisa lag hi nhi rha
Shalini - Jagdish me to aap bahot shi likh rhe ho kahani sach me , ek dum realistic lag rha hai , bahot ache se erotic situations banaye ja rhe hain aur aab to ek aur mahila aa gayi hai jagdish ke liye
aur ek aur baat smjh nhi aayi , kis jiski bahan ka rape hua ho aur dosshi aapke samne ho to aap kaise use zinda chor skte ho
anna ko aise kaise vishwaash ho gaya itni jaldi ki jugal ne uski bahan ka rape nhi kiya , aur jhanak kaha se aa tapki
ek taraf to lag rha hai ki bahot umdaaa likh rhe ho aap , kyunki ek bhi clue nhi mil rha hai ki kya ho rha hai story me
aur vahi ye bhi lag rha hai ki badhi betuki story hai , kahi bhi kuch bhi ho jaa rha hai
Jo bhi HO AAP erotic scenes likhne me bahot umda aur awwal ho
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK , AND KEEP UPDATIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!