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Incest संस्कारी परिवार की बेशर्म कामुक रंडियां। अंदर छुपी हवस जब सामने आयी ।
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first of all i want to congratulate the author for writing great erotica, i am fond of your unique style. you seem to have great grip on writing the scenario of daily routine, sex scene and dialogue writing. also you have great perspective on the story direction as well.
Then you input special touch with pics, it all great.
I understand writing erotica can be time consuming and exhausting, but i advise you to maintain your grip on the story.
I just have few points for you,
sex scene with dharamvir and upasana was explosively great, but you seem to have lost your taste on the details of sex scene when you presented scenes of pooja with dharmavir, and upasana with somnath. i advise you to put great details in sex scene as you did earlier in upasana with dharamvir (though i very much enjoyed the teasing games you wrote with two couples seducing each other).
Anyways great story keep up, also reading your another story of naina that's also amazing
first of all i want to congratulate the author for writing great erotica, i am fond of your unique style. you seem to have great grip on writing the scenario of daily routine, sex scene and dialogue writing. also you have great perspective on the story direction as well.
Then you input special touch with pics, it all great.
I understand writing erotica can be time consuming and exhausting, but i advise you to maintain your grip on the story.
I just have few points for you,
sex scene with dharamvir and upasana was explosively great, but you seem to have lost your taste on the details of sex scene when you presented scenes of pooja with dharmavir, and upasana with somnath. i advise you to put great details in sex scene as you did earlier in upasana with dharamvir (though i very much enjoyed the teasing games you wrote with two couples seducing each other).
Anyways great story keep up, also reading your another story of naina that's also amazing
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Waiting waiting waiting dharamveer chudai dhamaka waiting.....