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Ajay chauhan said:
Hmm to puneet or puja ke rishte mai saq ki chingari lagayi ja chuki hai wese pujha bhi apne asli rang main aane lagi hai


But bro ye puneet ke project ka kya huva jisko karan ne kai baar barbaad kardiya tha

Or ab sawal ye uthta hai ki puja aakhir ais akyu behave karti hai mujhe to lagta hai ab ek chingari kafi hai inka rista tod nai main


Yaha to sab apne apne matlab nikalne par tule huye hai wese malik bhoskika thappad bhi jhadta hai pyaar se chut main bhi jhadta hai

Abse bade bhosdi wale ye rijwaan or rubina Sala In dono ka to carecter hi pakad main nahi aaraha hai

Well lagta hai ab hum punit ke point of view se story dekhenge maza ayega par puneet ke point of view main dard e dil jarura hoga maza ayega sachme

Mujhe ye dead wale kisse padhne main bahut maza aata hai pata nahi kyu par maza aata hai

Baki outstanding update bro
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Shaq to paida ho raha hai.....par puja ke rang aage samjh aayge.....aur uski wajah bhi....

Rubina, rijwan , malik aur mahira ki chaale ab parde ke pichhe hogi....kyoki story puneet ke hisaab se aage jaygi....aur use in sajisho ka kuch bhi pata nhi chalega saayad....

Well....aage aapko dard bhi milega aur maza bhi....kuch khatta to kuch meetha....sab hoga....

Thanks buddy.......
 
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khemucha said:
... thanks for the update ... and the moral lesson ... par kahani ki raftar bhadni chahiye ... updates ki baat nahi kar raha houn ... but kahani ki ... kuch action ho ... kuch events ho ... koi kuch kare ... koi react kare ... scenes repititive lag rahe hain ... suspense aur dischaspi tab bhadti hai jab reader ko yeh na lage ki writer jaan bhooj kar details nahi bata raha ... befajool ka suspence banane ke liye ... reader ko lagna chahiye ki usse sab jaankaari mil rahi hai ... jaise jaise events ho rahe hon ... usse lage ki usse sab samjh aa raha hai ... par writer ka dimaag chupke se kuch aur hi kar raha ho ... reader ko lage story follow kar raha hai ... aur achanak kuch aisa ho jaye jo woh expect na kar raha ho ... somthing that does not fit the reader's understanding of the story till then ... tabhi to aapki baat sach hogi ki ... jo dikhta hai wo hota nahi aur jo hota hai wo dikhta nahi ...

... yahan to Malik, Mahira, Rubina aur Rijhwaan ke dialog aur soch se jabardasti ka suspence banya ja raha hai ... nobody can understand what they are thinking or what they are talking about ... too many unexplained plot references ... sab dhundhla dhundhla hai ... yeh kahan ka suspence ... yeh to jabardasti ka suspense hua ... jab sab adhi adhuri pahelion me bolenge aur sochenge ...

... Puneet, Puja, Karan, Rajni, Rajesh aur woh office wali ladki ki soch aur boli me to clarity hai ... they may be plotting too and most probably are, but atleast we don't get to read jabardasti ke riddles and a constant barrage of unknown/unexplained plot references from them like we see with Malik, Mahir, Rizwan and Rubina ... these 4 characters are not being handled properly. Sorry for this critique, but this is how I see it till now.

Aur ... dekh rahe ho na Vinod ... kaise Puja ne abhi tak uss lunch ke baare me Puneet ko kuch nahi bataya ... aise hi log apni chita tayyar karte hain ...
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Main totally agree karta hu ki yaha kafi kuch hai jo readers ko utna accha nhi lag raha hoga.....means wo saare suspences...but ye story ki demand hai....agar abhi sab open kar deta to aap log padte hi nhi....

Aur ye bas ek base dikhaya tha.....taki readers ko pata rahe ki sajis koun kar raha.....nhi to pahle hi puneet ke point of view se story likhta....tab saayad kuch bhi samjh nhi aata...ki kya ho raha hai...aur kyo...

To ab base ready hai.....isliye ab puneet ki juwaani suno ki uski life death tak kaise pahuchi.....ok


I think aage aane wale updates me aapko saari sikayat door ho jaygi....story bhi badegi aur bahut kuch events bhi hoge....jo puneet ko mout ki taraf le jayge....bas thoda wait kare.....

Thanks buddy......
 
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