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ab tak aapne dekha k Abhi ne Rimpy ko apna sach bata diya....
aur addu ki Pranshakti se hospital mein uss Ladki ko thik karke ghar lekar aaya
ab aage......
College mein kuch khas nahi hua....bas thoda yr dosto se milna...
thodi padai......Sports practice.....aur Rimpy k saath thodi masti...
Sham ko jab mein college se ghar aaya....toh mom muzhe lobby mein hi baithi hui mili
mein - hii mom....aur unke paas hi sofe par baith gaya...
mom - arre mera betu.....shukar hai aaj apni mom k paas baith gaya.......kitne din se tuzhe sahi se dekha tak nahi.....
mein - mom ki godi mein sir rakhkar lete hue..
Mom aap toh sab jaanti ho ......college aur Rakshak ...Sangharak.....bas issi mein itna ulaz gaya hu ...k chahkar bhi mein samay nikala karta.......
mera bhi bahut mann karta hai aapki mamata ki chav mein thoda aaram kar lu......
mom mere baalo mein haath pherte hue .....
jaanti hu mere bacche......aur samzhti bhi hu ...........tu har din kitne khatro ka saamna karta.......usse ...dekhkar ...kabhi kabhi ek maa ka dil ghabra jaata hai.....
aur maa ki aankhon se do bund aansoo k mere chehre par aa gire
mein mom k ansoo ponchte hue.....
mein - kyu chinta karti ho mom......
aapke bete ko kuch nahai ho sakta.....
accha mom...uss ladki ko hosh aaya k nahi.....
mom - haa beta hosh toh aagaya lekin usse apna naam tak yaad nahi......
pahele toh bahut der woh gumsum si thi lekin Addu ki baato ne uss normal kar diya
abhi addu aur deepu bhi ussi k saath hai........thodi hi der mein Addu usse itna ghulmil gayi
mein chalo mom dekhte hai , Mein bhi jara dekhu toh......
aur mein mom k saath uss room mein chala gaya....waha jaakar dekha toh waha teeno Tv par Jurassic world dekh rahe the.....woh Addu k piche dubakkar baithi hui thi aur dheere se addu k piche se garden nikalkar Tv k taraf dekhti aur phir Dubak jaati...
usski iss harkat ka Addu aur Deepu khub maza le rahe the.....
mein - Gudiya yeh kya chal raha hai....
Deepu - Dekho na bhai yeh didi tv par yeh dinosar dekhkar dar rahi hai ...kahti hai yeh muzhe kga jaayega.....hiii...hi...hi...
Addu - Haa bhai isse toh kuch bhi pata nahi hai ...kabhi tv dekhkar dar jaati hai.....kabhi...light dekhkar......
mein - tv band kar deta hu......
mom - Addu galat baat.....aise kisi ki hasee nahi udate beta....
Addu - sorry mom.......
Mom - uss ladki k paas jaate hue.....
kaise ho beta ab ......dekho tum isse apna hi ghar samzho....
mein usske paa jaakar.........ab kaisi tabiyat hai tumahari......
woh garden niche karke baithe hue thi....aur waise hi apni aankho ko upper karte hue........
muzhe kya hua hai........muzhe toh mere naam bhi nahi pata..........kal maine tumhe dekha tum muzhe maar rahe the na.....
Addu - arre buddhu ...(.apne sir par haath maarte hue....) bahi maar nahi rahe the tum hosh mein aakar bhai k gale lagkar ro rahi thi......
woh - mein buddhu nahi hu ....aur kisi choti si bacchi k tarah muh fulakar baith gayi..
uski iss ada par muzhe bahut pyar aaraha tha.....dil kah raha tha k abhi gale laga lu...
mom - arre kyu pareshan kar rahi ho isse aur usske sir par haath pherte hue....
Meri taraf betu isse toh apna naam yaad nahi hai.....lekin kuch toh naam hona chahiye...
Mein - mom isska naam Sulekha hai.......
Sulekha - meeeeraa naam Sulekha ..haa.....lekin muzhe kuch yaad kyu nahi aaraha hai......
phir sir padakar.....muzhe dard ho raha hai...........ahhhh......
tab meine usske sir par haath rakhkar apne healing power ka istemal kiya toh usska dard khatam hi gaya.........aur woh meri taraf dekhne lagi
Sulekha - kya aap muzhe jaante ho......muzhe kyu aisa lag raha hai k meine aapko dekha hai
maine usske aankon mein usske jeewan ki kuch zhalkiya dekhi....usske mata pita...sakhi saheli......aur usska woh meri painting banana......
lekin uske saath kya hua kaise woh ghayal hui aur yaha pahunchi.....
yeh sab nahi dikh raha tha....jaise koi anjani shakti muzhe rok rahi thi...
ab mein usska mere prati pyar jaan chuka tha....
mere prati usska itna gahra prem dekhkar k woh apna naam tak bhul gayi ....lekin dil se meri tasveer bhula na paayi......tabhi toh hosh mein aate hi jab muzhe apne saamne dekha.........
gale lagkar maano aansoo se apne judai ka dukh bayan kar rahi ho, uske iss pyar ko dekhkar meri aankhien bhi nam ho gayi.....
Sulekha - aap kyu ro rahe ho....aapko aise rote dekhkar mera bhi rone ka mann kar raha hai...
Mein - arre mein kaha ro raha hu..woh toh bas aankhon mein kuch chala gaya hai...
aur mein waha se nikal gaya......
apne Room mein aakar sochne laga ki woh kaunsi aisi shakti hai jo muzhe Sulekha k past tak pahunchne nahi de raha hai.......
pahle toh mein usse heal bhi nahi kar paa raha tha.......lekin aaj.......lagta hai kisi bahut powerful shakti ne isspar koi magic kiya hai.....
jo addu k pranshakti se thodi kamjor ho gayi....
ab sulekha ghar mien ghul mil gayi thi
Addu aur Deepu k saath khub banti thi....
meine kai baar notice kiya ki usski aankhien muzhe hi dhunti rahti thi.....
aur jab mein ussase baat karne jaata....toh sarmakar bhag jaati....
Khair aise hi din bitne lage......aur Mahashiv raatri ka din nazdeek aaya.....
Hum log har saal apni Shivraatri gaon k Rana mahal mein hi manate the ..
toh maine college se 4 din ki chutti li......Rimpy bhi humare saath jaarahi thi......Addu Aur Deepu ne bhi school se 4 dino ki leave le li thi......
MahaShivraatri k 2 din pahele hum nikal gaye gaon ki taraf.....
Pahli gadi mein mom aur dad the....
dusri mein main baith gaya toh meri dono taraf Rimpy aur Sulekha baith gayi
Sulekha ko mere saath bahith dehkar Rimpy ko gussa aaraha tha aur Rimpy ko mere pass baithe dekhkar Sulekha usse kha jaane wali nazar se dekh rahi thi
aur dono k bich mein main fasa...tabhi meri jaan addu ne bachayi
Addu - bhai muzhe aur Deepu ko aapke saath baithna hai
Rimpy - Gudiya Tum Sulekha di ko lejao
Addu - nahi .....muzhe bhai k saath hi jana hai
aur phir Rimpy aur Sulekha Ritu di k saath baith gayi aur mein baccha party k saath.....
Sham hote hote hum gaon pahuche, Panchi apne gharo mein laut rahe the , unhe dekhkar hume bhi aise laga k duniya ki bhaga daudi kar ke hum apne ghosle mein aagaye ho.....
Dada dadi Gate par hi badi besabri se humara intejar kar rahe the
pahle Dad aur Mom ne unka aashiwad liya
phir jaise hi main pair chune laga tih dad ji ne muzhe kas kar gale laga liya...
Dada ji - Aa gale lag jaa mere sher...
kaisa hai mere bacche....
mein - aapke aashirwad se ....accha hu dada ji
phir Ritu di .....Rimpy.....Addu ..Deepu...aur Sulekha bhi dada dadi se mile
Dadi ji ne Sulekha k baare mein pucha toh ....Dad ne unhe sab bata diya
Dada ji - badi pyari bacchi hai....(sir par haath pherte hue) kuch yaad nahi toh kya hua .....ab hum hi tumahara pariwar hai....
phir hum sham ko sham ko gaon ke nadi kinare ghumne chale gaye....
waha ki shudh hawa , pahadi charo taraf hariyali...aur nadi ka bahta kal kal karta hua paani , sahar se dur prakriti k paas ......sab ek dum khush the......
Rimpy toh mera saath chod hi nahi rahi thi.....aur Sulekha bas dur se dekh dekh kar ..udaas si ho rahi thi......
nadi k kinare chalte chalte hum pahadi k najdik ek band pade mandir k paas pahunche......iss mandir ka darwaja band tha.......jane kitne sadiyo se band tha.....yeh mandir aam mandiro se alag tha mandir charo taraf .....Dragon jaise kisi jeev ki murtiya bani hui thi.....
maine socha dada ji ko iss baare mein jarur pata hoga.....unse hi puch lunga.....
phir hum wapas mahal aagaye........
Dada ji se jab uss mandir k baare mein pucha ...toh unhone taal diya.......kaha samay aayega toh tumhe khud hi iss baare mein pata chalega.....
aise hi do din bit gaye aur ab aaya Maha shivraatri ka din.......
Mahal mein subah se hi pooja aur hawan ki tayari chal rahi thi........
mein dada ji aur dad k saath Mahal k gupt Shavalya gaye....
waha humne Rudraabhisek se Bhagwan bholenath ka poojan kiya...
pooja khatam hi hui thi k mere gale mein pada locket chamakne laga.......
toh mein samaz gaya ab yaksha lok jaane ka samay aagaya hai.....
mein - dad ab muzhe apni pahli shakti prapt karne k liye jaana hai ........
lekin samaz nahi aaraha Aaj k din mere na rahne par sab kya sochenge......
tabhi mere locket se ek aur Abhi nikla jo bilkul meri hi tarah tha......mein sochne laga ki yeh ab kaha se aagaya.....meine toh isse nahi pragat kiya .........
Tabhi waha GK pragat hua ......mitra yeh Shivali ki mayavi vidya dwara rachit hai ....
jab tak aap apna waha ka karya poora nahi kar lete tab tak yeh yahi rahega.....
phir mein GK k saath nikal gaya Bhuva lok mein sthit Kuber ji ki nagri Alkapuri..
yaha pahuch kar maine apne sukshma sharir ki urja ko badaya ....toh muzhe woh nagar dikhayi diya....
aur mein pahuncha Waha k mukhya Shivalya.....Shivali se milne ki umang mere mann ko sungandhit kar rahi thi......
aaj k liye itna hi.....
agla update kal........
ab tak aapne dekha k Abhi ne Rimpy ko apna sach bata diya....
aur addu ki Pranshakti se hospital mein uss Ladki ko thik karke ghar lekar aaya
ab aage......
College mein kuch khas nahi hua....bas thoda yr dosto se milna...
thodi padai......Sports practice.....aur Rimpy k saath thodi masti...
Sham ko jab mein college se ghar aaya....toh mom muzhe lobby mein hi baithi hui mili
mein - hii mom....aur unke paas hi sofe par baith gaya...
mom - arre mera betu.....shukar hai aaj apni mom k paas baith gaya.......kitne din se tuzhe sahi se dekha tak nahi.....
mein - mom ki godi mein sir rakhkar lete hue..
Mom aap toh sab jaanti ho ......college aur Rakshak ...Sangharak.....bas issi mein itna ulaz gaya hu ...k chahkar bhi mein samay nikala karta.......
mera bhi bahut mann karta hai aapki mamata ki chav mein thoda aaram kar lu......
mom mere baalo mein haath pherte hue .....
jaanti hu mere bacche......aur samzhti bhi hu ...........tu har din kitne khatro ka saamna karta.......usse ...dekhkar ...kabhi kabhi ek maa ka dil ghabra jaata hai.....
aur maa ki aankhon se do bund aansoo k mere chehre par aa gire
mein mom k ansoo ponchte hue.....
mein - kyu chinta karti ho mom......
aapke bete ko kuch nahai ho sakta.....
accha mom...uss ladki ko hosh aaya k nahi.....
mom - haa beta hosh toh aagaya lekin usse apna naam tak yaad nahi......
pahele toh bahut der woh gumsum si thi lekin Addu ki baato ne uss normal kar diya
abhi addu aur deepu bhi ussi k saath hai........thodi hi der mein Addu usse itna ghulmil gayi
mein chalo mom dekhte hai , Mein bhi jara dekhu toh......
aur mein mom k saath uss room mein chala gaya....waha jaakar dekha toh waha teeno Tv par Jurassic world dekh rahe the.....woh Addu k piche dubakkar baithi hui thi aur dheere se addu k piche se garden nikalkar Tv k taraf dekhti aur phir Dubak jaati...
usski iss harkat ka Addu aur Deepu khub maza le rahe the.....
mein - Gudiya yeh kya chal raha hai....
Deepu - Dekho na bhai yeh didi tv par yeh dinosar dekhkar dar rahi hai ...kahti hai yeh muzhe kga jaayega.....hiii...hi...hi...
Addu - Haa bhai isse toh kuch bhi pata nahi hai ...kabhi tv dekhkar dar jaati hai.....kabhi...light dekhkar......
mein - tv band kar deta hu......
mom - Addu galat baat.....aise kisi ki hasee nahi udate beta....
Addu - sorry mom.......
Mom - uss ladki k paas jaate hue.....
kaise ho beta ab ......dekho tum isse apna hi ghar samzho....
mein usske paa jaakar.........ab kaisi tabiyat hai tumahari......
woh garden niche karke baithe hue thi....aur waise hi apni aankho ko upper karte hue........
muzhe kya hua hai........muzhe toh mere naam bhi nahi pata..........kal maine tumhe dekha tum muzhe maar rahe the na.....
Addu - arre buddhu ...(.apne sir par haath maarte hue....) bahi maar nahi rahe the tum hosh mein aakar bhai k gale lagkar ro rahi thi......
woh - mein buddhu nahi hu ....aur kisi choti si bacchi k tarah muh fulakar baith gayi..
uski iss ada par muzhe bahut pyar aaraha tha.....dil kah raha tha k abhi gale laga lu...
mom - arre kyu pareshan kar rahi ho isse aur usske sir par haath pherte hue....
Meri taraf betu isse toh apna naam yaad nahi hai.....lekin kuch toh naam hona chahiye...
Mein - mom isska naam Sulekha hai.......
Sulekha - meeeeraa naam Sulekha ..haa.....lekin muzhe kuch yaad kyu nahi aaraha hai......
phir sir padakar.....muzhe dard ho raha hai...........ahhhh......
tab meine usske sir par haath rakhkar apne healing power ka istemal kiya toh usska dard khatam hi gaya.........aur woh meri taraf dekhne lagi
Sulekha - kya aap muzhe jaante ho......muzhe kyu aisa lag raha hai k meine aapko dekha hai
maine usske aankon mein usske jeewan ki kuch zhalkiya dekhi....usske mata pita...sakhi saheli......aur usska woh meri painting banana......
lekin uske saath kya hua kaise woh ghayal hui aur yaha pahunchi.....
yeh sab nahi dikh raha tha....jaise koi anjani shakti muzhe rok rahi thi...
ab mein usska mere prati pyar jaan chuka tha....
mere prati usska itna gahra prem dekhkar k woh apna naam tak bhul gayi ....lekin dil se meri tasveer bhula na paayi......tabhi toh hosh mein aate hi jab muzhe apne saamne dekha.........
gale lagkar maano aansoo se apne judai ka dukh bayan kar rahi ho, uske iss pyar ko dekhkar meri aankhien bhi nam ho gayi.....
Sulekha - aap kyu ro rahe ho....aapko aise rote dekhkar mera bhi rone ka mann kar raha hai...
Mein - arre mein kaha ro raha hu..woh toh bas aankhon mein kuch chala gaya hai...
aur mein waha se nikal gaya......
apne Room mein aakar sochne laga ki woh kaunsi aisi shakti hai jo muzhe Sulekha k past tak pahunchne nahi de raha hai.......
pahle toh mein usse heal bhi nahi kar paa raha tha.......lekin aaj.......lagta hai kisi bahut powerful shakti ne isspar koi magic kiya hai.....
jo addu k pranshakti se thodi kamjor ho gayi....
ab sulekha ghar mien ghul mil gayi thi
Addu aur Deepu k saath khub banti thi....
meine kai baar notice kiya ki usski aankhien muzhe hi dhunti rahti thi.....
aur jab mein ussase baat karne jaata....toh sarmakar bhag jaati....
Khair aise hi din bitne lage......aur Mahashiv raatri ka din nazdeek aaya.....
Hum log har saal apni Shivraatri gaon k Rana mahal mein hi manate the ..
toh maine college se 4 din ki chutti li......Rimpy bhi humare saath jaarahi thi......Addu Aur Deepu ne bhi school se 4 dino ki leave le li thi......
MahaShivraatri k 2 din pahele hum nikal gaye gaon ki taraf.....
Pahli gadi mein mom aur dad the....
dusri mein main baith gaya toh meri dono taraf Rimpy aur Sulekha baith gayi
Sulekha ko mere saath bahith dehkar Rimpy ko gussa aaraha tha aur Rimpy ko mere pass baithe dekhkar Sulekha usse kha jaane wali nazar se dekh rahi thi
aur dono k bich mein main fasa...tabhi meri jaan addu ne bachayi
Addu - bhai muzhe aur Deepu ko aapke saath baithna hai
Rimpy - Gudiya Tum Sulekha di ko lejao
Addu - nahi .....muzhe bhai k saath hi jana hai
aur phir Rimpy aur Sulekha Ritu di k saath baith gayi aur mein baccha party k saath.....
Sham hote hote hum gaon pahuche, Panchi apne gharo mein laut rahe the , unhe dekhkar hume bhi aise laga k duniya ki bhaga daudi kar ke hum apne ghosle mein aagaye ho.....
Dada dadi Gate par hi badi besabri se humara intejar kar rahe the
pahle Dad aur Mom ne unka aashiwad liya
phir jaise hi main pair chune laga tih dad ji ne muzhe kas kar gale laga liya...
Dada ji - Aa gale lag jaa mere sher...
kaisa hai mere bacche....
mein - aapke aashirwad se ....accha hu dada ji
phir Ritu di .....Rimpy.....Addu ..Deepu...aur Sulekha bhi dada dadi se mile
Dadi ji ne Sulekha k baare mein pucha toh ....Dad ne unhe sab bata diya
Dada ji - badi pyari bacchi hai....(sir par haath pherte hue) kuch yaad nahi toh kya hua .....ab hum hi tumahara pariwar hai....
phir hum sham ko sham ko gaon ke nadi kinare ghumne chale gaye....
waha ki shudh hawa , pahadi charo taraf hariyali...aur nadi ka bahta kal kal karta hua paani , sahar se dur prakriti k paas ......sab ek dum khush the......
Rimpy toh mera saath chod hi nahi rahi thi.....aur Sulekha bas dur se dekh dekh kar ..udaas si ho rahi thi......
nadi k kinare chalte chalte hum pahadi k najdik ek band pade mandir k paas pahunche......iss mandir ka darwaja band tha.......jane kitne sadiyo se band tha.....yeh mandir aam mandiro se alag tha mandir charo taraf .....Dragon jaise kisi jeev ki murtiya bani hui thi.....
maine socha dada ji ko iss baare mein jarur pata hoga.....unse hi puch lunga.....
phir hum wapas mahal aagaye........
Dada ji se jab uss mandir k baare mein pucha ...toh unhone taal diya.......kaha samay aayega toh tumhe khud hi iss baare mein pata chalega.....
aise hi do din bit gaye aur ab aaya Maha shivraatri ka din.......
Mahal mein subah se hi pooja aur hawan ki tayari chal rahi thi........
mein dada ji aur dad k saath Mahal k gupt Shavalya gaye....
waha humne Rudraabhisek se Bhagwan bholenath ka poojan kiya...
pooja khatam hi hui thi k mere gale mein pada locket chamakne laga.......
toh mein samaz gaya ab yaksha lok jaane ka samay aagaya hai.....
mein - dad ab muzhe apni pahli shakti prapt karne k liye jaana hai ........
lekin samaz nahi aaraha Aaj k din mere na rahne par sab kya sochenge......
tabhi mere locket se ek aur Abhi nikla jo bilkul meri hi tarah tha......mein sochne laga ki yeh ab kaha se aagaya.....meine toh isse nahi pragat kiya .........
Tabhi waha GK pragat hua ......mitra yeh Shivali ki mayavi vidya dwara rachit hai ....
jab tak aap apna waha ka karya poora nahi kar lete tab tak yeh yahi rahega.....
phir mein GK k saath nikal gaya Bhuva lok mein sthit Kuber ji ki nagri Alkapuri..
yaha pahuch kar maine apne sukshma sharir ki urja ko badaya ....toh muzhe woh nagar dikhayi diya....
aur mein pahuncha Waha k mukhya Shivalya.....Shivali se milne ki umang mere mann ko sungandhit kar rahi thi......
aaj k liye itna hi.....
agla update kal........
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Superb , Shandar fantastic Review bhai
Bhai bilkul sahi jaana aapne.....baaki toh pata chalega ki kya hua ...jab Sulekha ki yaadast wapas aayegi.....
aise hi saath banaye rakhe
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Fantastic, awesome and lovely review Naina jiKamal hai... yeh abhi toh har kiski ankhon mein dekh kho jata hai....
Woh bhi bichari addu k samne hi
Btw kaafi mehnat ki updates mein.... har baari ek lay ki sath ek turn li story ne aur fantasy stories mein yeh jaruri bhi hain...
Brilliant update writer sahab... Great going
Ab kya kare Naina ji Abhi bechara dil ka maara......
Daap bas aise hi apna saath banaye rakhe.....jisse muzhe aur accha likhne ki prerna milte rahegi ...???
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