Gadrayi Maa
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wah! bahut h mast kahaani, bahut acha writing! bahut khoob!bahut maza agaya,dil kush hogaya yaar!
Kya maza hai maa aur behen ko kisi aur se chudte dekh kr I don't like
Tumhara khoon he shayad paani ho gya dost![]()
Mere khas mitra jo ki mere writting guru bhi hai, Mr. Shikari_golu ne pahle hi ek baat boli thi.
Ki jab tumhara likha hua logo ko mirchi lagane lage, tab samjh lena ki tum wo likh rahe ho, jise saamne wala feel karta hai, tabhi to mirchi lagti hai.
To tumhara comment dekh kar samjh aa gaya, ki main theek likh raha hu.
Aur rahi tumjari baat, ki lund dekha aur bahak gai, to dhyaan se padho, ye to wo scene hai jo dusron ne dekhe, koi suruwaat nhi, suruwaat jab aaygi, tab is baare me bahas bhi kar lege.
Baki tumhari marji, padho ya niklo, i dont care, but story to likhi jaygi, aise