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Can't say for now. Maybe a couple of updates before we get to see 31st December's update. Or maybe just 1. Depends on time that I get to complete them.How many update to 31st December and what about Tamanna
@nain11star aur avsji are just like professional writer . Ye bahut hi talented person hai.Sab tamhara sath de rahe hain revo deke toh hum bhi de hi deta hoon
Tamhara hausla badhega
Maine aaj tak jitni bhi stories padhi un sabmein tamhari story sabse upar hai
Is liye nahi ki tumhare review jada hain ya phir tumhari story plot ke maamle mein sabse upar hai
Tamhari story padhke main sochne pe majbur ho jaata hoon ki kya koi insaan itni bhi mehnat kar sakta hai
Matlab hardwork dedication consistency
Ka level broke kar rakhkha hai tamne
Is poore phoram mein tamse jada kisi writer ne apni story pe itni mehnat nahi kiya hoga
Likhte hum bhi the lekin apna style dusra tha aur itna sab kuchh imagine bhi nahi kar sakte the
Lund boor chuchi bas isi mein reh gaye apan aur ab toh lugai ne likhna bhi chhudwa diya
Tamhara style bilkul unique
Aur upar se topnotch
Tam mere liye is phoram ke Christopher nolan ho
Jaise woh kehte hain na this is pure cinema
Waise hi main kehta hoon
This is pure writing
Tamhari jitni taareef ki jaaye kam hai
This is adult phoram
Aise platform pe ek aisi story likhna jo pure writing ho
Woh tumhare siwa koi nahi kar sakta
Aur woh bhi incest genre mein
Kehne ko hi hai bas incest genre
Tamhein nahi pata ab ham incess story nahi padhta
Lekin tumhare liye hamne woh rule Tod diya
you are the fucking best writer of this phoram
Details plot story telling insabmein tamhara koi jawab nahi
You know mere teen hi favourite writer's the phoram pe
Ek woh avi bhai dusre Nainster Bhai
Aur teesre hamare the man the myth the legend the fucking devil himself SANJU ( V. R. ) bhaiya
Lekin in sabmein Tam sabse upar ho mere liye Tam woh ho jisse Maine Bahut kuchh seekha hai
Tam woh ho jiski jitni taareef ki jaaye kam hai
Tam woh ho jo ek sex writer ko uske hi moot mein dubo de
Control
Sorry woh main control nahi kar paata
Lole ka control ham Aisa hi hoon
Ab dekho hamne yahan Bahut si story padhi
Hamne bahut si novel padhi
Books padhi
Movies series itni dekhi ki saala naam bhi bhool gaya hoon
Lekin aaj tak itna maza hamein kabhi kisi cheez mein nahi aaya
Yahan tak apni lugaiyo ke sath
Control
Ab jo reader's yeh sochte hain ki Tam jaldi update kyun nahi dete
Kuchh reader's excitement mein aisa bolte hain kuchh itne bhole hote hain
Ki unhein yeh samajh nahi aata
Ki itna lamba update likhna kitna mushkil kaam hai
Free mein story likhna woh bhi bas shauk ke liye apni personal life se time nikaalke
Aadmi nahi kar paata lekin Tam karte ho
Isi liye Tam best ho
Nahi sirf best nahi Tam fucking legendwa ho
Aur kuchh reader's jo update na aane pe yeh kehte hain ki bhai tum jaldi update kyun nahi dete tumhein kuchh pata hai kitna time ho gaya update aaye hue
Jo matlab tamhein demotivate karne aate hain jo tamhein tamhari story ke liye hi bhashan dene aate hain
Unko ham bas yahi kahunga
Tamhare gand mein dum hai toh likho na aisi story jismein itna dimaag itni mehnat itni lagan itna time lagana pade
Biwi chodo erectile dysfunction ho jaayega tamhein.....
Group poori ladkiyo ka hai. Anaath ladkiyo ka. Male nahi hai. Aisa nahi hai ki woh sabhi males se nafrat karti hai. Lekin, woh females ke around zyada comfortable hai. And, for obvious reasons. Aage hum aur jaanenge Orphana ke baare me.Bahut badhiya katai jeher update
1. Ek nayi system holder ki entry hui ha or wo ek masiha ki tarah ha anath ladkiyon ke liye or uski oraganisation ka name ha Orphana jise captain ne khada kiya ha kher captain ki story to nahi batayi gayi ki usne kyon khada kiya ha use lekin andaje se to yahi lagta ha ki captain ka past painful hi ha tabhi wo un sabka dard samjhti ha isliye sabki wish puri karti ha isliye captain ko ye log itna mante han kher lekin inke group koi male nahi ha ya fir inhe male se nafrat to nahi kher captain ki story to tab hi sunne ko milegi jab shayd veer se mulakat hogi iski jiske chances bahut high lag rahe han
Hardships ke baad woh uss mukaam par pahuchi hai. Veer ke case me sirf endurance tha. Woh sab sehta tha.2. Captain ko bhi system tab mila jab wo almost dead hi ho chuki thi like veer uske case me bhi yahi same scene tha bas ek antar tha ki veer us samay jyada kamjor tha lekin captain pehle se powerful thi or ek warrior ki tarah thi or use system milna to samjh lo or power up hona jo ki dekh bhi liya
Sirf iss se ye nahi keh sakte ki Captain sabse strongest hai.3. bhai captain abhi tak strongest female system holder ha jaise ki uski fight hui ha abhi damian se kya fight hui ha bhale hi detail me nahi thi fir bhi damian ki fat ke hath me aa gayi bhai jisne renshu tak ko almost hara diya tha or usi chalaki se usne captain ko ghayal bhi kar diya tha lekin last me jo move use kiya ha captain ne damian ke uper damian bhigi billi ki tarah bhag gaya uske akele ki baski nahi ha captain ko harane ki lagta ha bad me kuchh bandobast karke captain per war karega
Yup! Already usne ek alliance ko join karne ka faisla le liya hai. Dekhna ye hai ki woh kaise join karti hai.4. Kher ye rabbeca captain ko bhi apne sath milana chahti ha damian ki halat to dekhkar yahi lagta ha ki wo rabbeca ke control me ha jaise ki rabbeca ki wo hypnotize wali skill ha usse usne damian ko control kiya hua ha nahi to kyon ek system holder aise kisi ki bat manega isliye captain ko bhi usi tarah control karna chahti ha ya fir Orphana ke roop me dhamki dekar ki wo uski organisation ko ujad degi kher captain ko bhi malum pad jana chhahiye ki aise agar us per system holders attack karte rahe to bachna mushkil ha akele wo kuchh nahi kar sakti isliye use madad chahiye hi hogi to shayd wo dhundhe ki koi achhe system holders bhi ho uski tarah jo uski madad kar sake ya fir wo renshu ki team bhi join kar sakti ha
Captain ka naam aage chal kar ujaagar hoga. Abhi uski zaroorat nahi. Sirf captain hi theek hai. Yes. Zero ek male hai unlike Pari and all.5. Captain ki power dekhkar to lagta ha ki captain is time jo long ke barabar nahi to usse thoda kam but veer ke barabar power rakhti ho or uski skills bhi kam nahi ha last me jo skill thi BANE BLAST katai jeher fad dene wali skill thi bhai agar ye ghusa muh ki jagah chhati per padta to ek or system holder kam ho chuka hota but damian lucky raha kher captain ke bare me jyada to nahi bataya gaya uska naam bhi nahi bataya gaya bas uske system ka naam pata ha ZERO jo ki male ha pehli ladki ha jiske pas male system ha warna to sab female ke pas to female system hi ha unlike rebecca uske bare me kuchh oata nahi shayd age chalkar or captain ke bare me pata pade or uska naam jald ujagar ho
Divya aur baakiyo ko bhi Veer ke parivar ke baare me dheere dheere pata chalta jayega. Uske liye unhe Veer ke sang aur samay bitaana hoga taaki ye baatein chhidh sake.6. Kher majedar part to pranjal wala tha matlab ki kutte ki dum kabhi bhi sidhi nahi ho sakti itna kuchh ho jane ke bad bhi pranjal waise ka waisa hi ha akhir kis bat ka attitude ha ise bhai hamesha apni gand tudwane ke liye ready rahta ha veer se is bar bhi veer ko anap shanap bakta raha jisse hamari pyari bhi is had tak naraj ho gayi ki agar uska bas na chalta to wo wahi Pranjal ko jamin me gad deti kher meri ek tamanna to thi ki jaise veer ke pariwar walon ko pranjal ki sachhai pata ha usi prakar se divya ava suhana or bhi ha jinko pranjal ki sachhai pata oade or wo in sabke samne hi veer ko anap shanap bake or khaskar divya ke samne jisse inka reaction bhi dekhne ko mile or ajj wahi ichha puri hui divya ne sidhe gun tan di pranjal per or ava ne bhi warning de di pranjal ko pata nahi ha veer kya ban chuka ha sahi me agar akele me pranjal ava ko mil jata to pakka hospital me hota
Filhal Veer ke mann me Madhuri ko lekar koi romantic feelings nahi hai. Aur, same case Madhuri ka hai. Madhuri bas curious hai aur shayad Veer se baat kar kaafi kuchh jaanana chaahti hai. Apart from that... There's nothing romantic going on for now.7. Madhuri ke samne veer ne apna mask hata diya or madhuri pahchan gayi veer ko or veer ne bhi pahchan liya use ki usne uski us time mada ki ti apna coat dekar or jis prakar madhuri veer se dosti karne ke liye tatpar thi or uske liye royi hi thi to kahin ye dosti se uper to nahi ha na kahin or ye scene
Kintu, Madhuri ek baat jaanti hai ki Pranjal shuru se hi Veer se jalta aaya hai. Ye baat woh bachpan me hi samajh gayi thi aur aaj bhi waisa hi hai woh samajhti hai. Aur wo galat nahi.Litteraly ye sabse favourite scene tha chahe anjane me hi hua ho jo socha tha wahi hua jali pranjal ki jali or bahut buri tarah jali or pari ne bhi bilkul hamare dil ki bat hi kahi ha kher abhi to shuruat ha bad me pata nahi kya ho kher madhuri ne to dono ko dost hi samjha ha use pranjal ki asliyat nahi pata ha ki kitna gira hua insan ha wo or jaise ki madhuri or uski maa mumbai jaa rahe han to shayd hi pranjal ki asliyat jyada din tak chhipi rahe kyonki kya pata veer ke pariwar walon me se koi unhe mil jaye agar tej mil jaye to or maja aa jaye rahi sahi kasar tej puri kar degi
Kaera ko yaad hai ki Veer ke saath Casa Belle me kya hua tha. Uske baad se toh woh ab Casa Belle se koi rishta nahi rakhegi. Fir bhale hi Casa Belle sheher ki sabse luxury hotel hi kyu na ho.8. Or bahut dino bad kaera ka jikar hua ha wo dekhne ko mili ha or ate hi apne hi avtar me ha chalta firta bomb ha hamesha ki tarah or jis prakar cas bella ko chodkar veer ke hotel prestige me invest kiya ha kaera ne to eo koi bhi moka ab nahi chhodna chahti veer ke karib rahne ka or nahi uske against jana chahti ha isliye to cas bella me invest nahi kiya kyonki wo veer ka rival ha or aise kaise wo veer ke against jaye chahe kaise bhi sahi kaera ko bhi pata oad gaya ha ki ab use khud hi veer ko approach karna hoga warna to wo ab ane se raha ab najdikiyan badhani ha to najdik to rahna hi hoga na
Ye sab 31st December ke baad hoga. January me aane waali hai ICONGLOBE. Toh Sonia aur Kaera dono hi taiyaar rahengi. Dekhna hoga iss baar baazi kaun maarta hai.9. Kher last me jo hua ha usse to yahi lagta ha ki bahut badi rivalry dekhne ko milegi sonia or kaera ke bich ICONGLOBE ko lekar jahan kaera bhi is deal ko pana chahti ha to wahi sonia bhi pichhe nahi hatna chahti maja ayega jab ye dono amne samne hongi akhir dekhte han ki kon is baji ko mar pata ha or jo sonia itne time se shant ha to kya pata yahi wo time ha jab wo kuchh bahut bada hasil kar le or veer se jo sambandh me kadwahat ayi ha wo bhi dur ho jaye or in dona ka bond or majbut ho jaye kher hone ko to kuchh bhi ho sakta ha
Aisa kahi bhi mentioned nahi hai ki sabhi ko system ek hi time par mila.Bro Update to normal tha but your detailing skill is wonderful,
NOw come to the point:-
1) according to you 2 years back sabhi system holders ko system same time per mila, so how Mr. X knows that if Crimson kill other system so he got a other system's power?
Kya lagta hai? Kya Veer apni family ko unprotected chhor ke jayega???2) Not going too deep bcos all is fiction of your mind butt we know veer don't know about gaon ka gabru( baap dada sabka badla lega that one) but he knows about case bella owner he planned something big, and veer left whole family without any security??
Again!!! Aisa kahi bhi mentioned nahi hai kahani me ki captain men ko hate karti hai. Toh fir ye assumption kyu???3) Now come to new System Miss Captain America. She hate man I think so bcos her system name is Zero. But as I suppose when veer meet captain, captain find veer is a lady man, and they fight for right.
Yes!! Not exactly. But captain ka past baad ke liye rakha hai maine. Sahi time pe darshaaya jayega.So I'm not here to suppose I'm here to ques. Captain ka past samne nhi aaya so are you waiting for a lovely meeting with veer, then captain reveal her past infront of veer.?
She's following X's orders. Whether puppet or not, we can't say, can we? But she's following his orders and in return she wants some kind of reports. X have those reports.4) Rebecca also a puppet of Mr.X. and she also wants to get out of this cage. So can we consider her as a game changer ?
It's a spoiler. Can't reveal much.5)Final and most important ques.
veer have 6 or more lady system so it is possible Mr. X have also more system may be males or both ??
And last I'm not only here to ask, I have a suggestion for you as well ( bcos I'm not selfish) and it's only upon to you
Are you suggesting ki Veer ke andar jitni bhi pari ki personalities hai woh apni marzi se switch kar paaye? Jab unka Mann kare?? Is that what you are suggesting?# Veer have 6 or more system so jese tumne last update me system se veer ki body switch krai, wese hi agar system bhi ek dusre ko switch kr paye to bcos all system have different capabilities like last one. And I think captain also use same Blood Hard punch jisme Blood ka use karke power badhti hai. May be I'm wrong.
But it's going be a crazy thing if veer's system can switch itself without any mission.
Thoda clearly likhne ka. I'm not able to understand what you are implying.As Last Veer's body switch with system, system also able to switch with another system
Swagat hai firse thread mebahut din bad Aaya form Bhai aur ek Sath do update padhne Ko Mila maja a Gaya Sach kahun to aapki story Mein pahle bhi teen se Char bar Puri start se ab Tak padh chuka hun lekin Har Bar Ek alag hi three Lagta Hai Isko Padhne Mein aur Sach kahun to yah last wale update Mein Pranjal aur Veer ke bich ki jo dikha rahe hain usko Padhne Mein Aur Bhi Jyada maja a raha hai main Shuru Se Hi dekhna chahta tha Pranjal aur beat Jab Ek hoyenge to donon Milkar Kya Karenge ki Bhale Hi Veer ke pass system Ho Pranjal ke pass Kuchh Nahin lekin Pranjal khurafati dimag Mein Veer ka bhi Baap hai Sidhi chij ko ulte tarike se sochne ka experience Jitna Pranjal ke pass hai na utna Veer ke pass Nahin Hai To Lagta Hai maja Aane Wala Hai Jab dono ek sath honge Kyunki Pranjal to Madhuri Ke Piche vahan Gaya aur Veer ko Madhuri Mein Koi interest hai Nahin to jahir si Baat Hai Ki Pranjal ko hi milegi vah Tujhe Peer ke pass to pure ke pura shopping mall and items ka to vah Kyon Bhala Madhuri Ke Piche jaega dekhte hain aage kya hota hai
bhai Sach bolo na to aap lajawab writer Ho Mujhe Puri ummid hai ki aap is Kahani Ko Iske Anjam Tak Jarur pahunchaoge
writer to pahle bhi अच्छे-अच्छे I is form per lekin Kahani Ko bich Mein chhodkar Ja Chale Gaye aapse bahut Si ummiden hain aap is Kahani per Achcha Anjam Jarur dena
That's what I'm planningYe 31st december kahi real wale se sync to nahi kar rahe ho na bhai kyonki ye date bhi 1 month baad hi hai real mein
Exactly!!!Really good update bhai
So aadesh ne ek spy hotel prestige me bheja jiska pata obviously veer ko lag hi jana tha but ab veer us spy ke jariye hotel case bela ka nuksan karvane ki planing kar chuka hai
Time will tell. Thanks a lot btw.Aur panchgani me veer ko deepu ki batayi baato se ye confirm ho gaya hai ki iske piche koi system holder hai
Jo ki lagta hai vahi psycho prisoner hai
But lagta hai koi or bhi system holder hai us prisoner ke sath in murders me
Bas dekhte jao abhi kya hota hai.Divya ka pati agaya hai Mumbai me and vo gaurav se milne ja raha hoga shuna ka pati and kahi vo jail wala pagal to India nahi agaya bhai ye pagal to vo director Rebecca ke bf se bhi jyada khatarnak lag raha hai
बेहतरीन उम्दा
दिव्या का पति आ गया क्या मुम्बई
ओर ये इतना घूम फिर क्यो रहा है। आवा भी प्यार में कैद हो ही गयी है।
अब लेखक जाने , कौन किस ओर मुड़ेगा
Behtarin update bhai veer ne divya ki bajYi or khuni ke bare kuch bate bhi pata chali lagta he ye vo jail todke bhaga tha vahi banda he jo bhi ho aage pata chal hi jayega
{I know Captain ka system ek male hai Per us system ka naam captain ne zero rakha which show Captain khudko men se superior samjhti hai ya nafarat krti h }Uska khud ka system zero ek male hai.
Veer ke ander jitni system hai wo ek dusre se or veer ki body se khud ko switch kr sake, but as we seen in last fight with veer's permission and according to situationAre you suggesting ki Veer ke andar jitni bhi pari ki personalities hai woh apni marzi se switch kar paaye? Jab unka Mann kare?? Is that what you are suggesting?
Or are you suggesting ki Veer ka system baaki system holders ke saath switch kare?
Nahi man. Zero naam dene se ye kaise siddh ho gaya ki Captain males se nafrat karti hai?{I know Captain ka system ek male hai Per us system ka naam captain ne zero rakha which show Captain khudko men se superior samjhti hai ya nafarat krti h }
May be bcos in past incidents??
Aisa possible nahi hai. Shayad ju ne update theek se nahi padha. Pari ki sirf wahi ek personality hai jo Veer ke shareer par takeover kar sakti hai. Veer ki permission milne ke baad. Abhi waali pari ne ye bataya bhi tha ki uss personality ke alawa koi bhi ye kaam nahi kar sakta.Veer ke ander jitni system hai wo ek dusre se or veer ki body se khud ko switch kr sake, but as we seen in last fight with veer's permission and according to situation
Without any task