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You Are Right...!And here's my review...
Last 2 updates se mne review ni dia ... Sorry... I was just a bit busy...
Let's start with Divya nd Veer's scene... What was that?? Right at the petrol pump? Divya horny ho gyi Veer ko dhyan se dekhte hi... I mean ... Koi bhi ho jaegi .. Veer is that handsome...
But Ava ki presence me ye sab Veer ne hone dia?? Don't u want Ava... Veer u mofo...
Agar lily ne sunn lia hoga na sab to wo Ava ko pok degi... Aur fir Veer tum to gaye .. have some shame... You want Divya? Take her to a motel or something... Don't fucking do it in front of ur future wife...
Anyways... Coming to the next part... It's evident ki wo serial killer kon h ... That fucking mad man... Wo hi khulla ghum rha h har jagah... Nd his description... I got chills all over my body...
What was that description? Straight out of horror movie... Khule lambe safed Baal... Aankhon ki putlia baahar ko aati hui... Sadistic nd heinous smile... White coat... His weird sentences...
Pure Goosebumps... Deepu ki to halat kharab ho gyi hogi use dekh k ... Even crimson was afraid to make a move on him...
Deepu ne to pant me hi chor di hogi apni ...
So Pranjal nd Madhuri nd her mother went back to Mumbai... Veer ne unhe apne flat me bheja h ... I wonder ki Pranjal ko kesa mehsoos ho rha hoga... Pretty sure wo jealous feel kr rha hoga... Wo soch rha hoga ki kaash main Madhuri ko rukne ki jagah de paata... Like apne khud ke ghar me .. lekin wo ye kar ni sakta kyuki karunesh bhi ghar me h... Aur uske paas uss flat ke alawa aur kuch h nhi abhi ... Truly poor...
Aise me Veer ne sab intezam kar dia... Jali to hogi... Upar se Madhuri Veer ki taraf zyada focused lag rhi h... Jabki bagal me hi Pranjal baitha h ... The bus scene... Let's see how Madhuri will play her role in the story... Sirf itne se scene k liye to aap use laoge nhi story me... Am I right???
Aadesh is the real dog in this world... Use samajh hi nhi aa rha ki wo kis se panga le rha h... I mean... Yaar jab tumne apni aakho se dekh lia ki Mumbai ka don balhar Veer ke aage peeche ghoomta h ... Uske saath uske connections h ... Uske baad bhi tumhare andar itni himmat kaise aa gyi ki tum jaa ke Veer se firse bhido???
He's either too smart or just too dumb. And, I'm assuming it's the latter. Khud ka spy bheja... Ek second me pakda gya... Aur ab Veer use galat info feed karta rahega jo wo casa Belle me send karta rahega...
I'm pretty sure Veer's aim is to make casa Belle empty their pockets ... Uske baad Veer kuch dhamal karega... Pretty sure... Wait... Yarnia is about to launch... Yessss... Veer might be planning to empty their pockets before the grand launch of the Yarnia...
But Yarnia to showroom h... Not a hotel... Shayad kuch zyada soch lia maine ... But I'm sure Veer kuch to karega... Something grand... Nd then wo suddenly reveal bhi karega aadesh ko ki uska spy pehle hi pakad me aa chuka tha...
As usual... Your narration was just something else... No other writer have this ability to paint the picture this vividly for me here other than u...
I have seen many writers... Some of them are really very good... But they have never written a story this long while maintaining their writing skills till the last moment. They usually write a shorter story rather than sticking to a longer one.
U on the other hand are the exact opposite. Initially I thought you might have screwed up when I first saw how long this story was going to be... But no... It just keeps getting better and better ....
Your writing skills have evolved substantially... It feels like reading a high quality novel. There are many other system based stories here... For the curiosity... I ventured into some of those... Just to take a look... But no one comes close to this mastery ... Nothing...
Other stories on other side... Nd this one stays in its own league. There's no comparison at all. Only an avid reader who pays attention to the minute details like me would be able to understand why I'm saying this ... This one just slaps...
Thank u for ur continuous efforts nd entertaining us with ur masterful skills... Just one update of this story makes my entire week lovely... Nd plz take care of yourself nd ur family member as well... Health is wealth... Stories can be completed later too... Take care nd keep updating us with ur health too... Come online time to time so that we'll know that u are here nd fine...
Thnx... Keep writing sir... 🩷
Yes!!!Have you started writing the update
Waiting for your update brotherNote : Update 191 will come on 7th December at night. The situation at my house has stabilized. I have started writing the next update. I might give you another update — 192 before we get to see the Yarnia's launch update on 31st December. You can expect 3 updates this month. But if not... Then, there'll be at least 2 updates for sure. Agle update se action start ho jayega thoda thoda. Aur, update 192 se toh poora chaos hi hai.
Toh saath bane rehne ka... Readers mujhe nazar nahi aa rahe hai. Dheela dhaala josh rakhoge to updates utne hi thande baste me jaate jayenge. Remember this.
Ding quorosity itni baàd gayi hai werewolf bhai what is next impassnately wating for next update best of luck for your great workNote : Update 191 will come on 7th December at night. The situation at my house has stabilized. I have started writing the next update. I might give you another update — 192 before we get to see the Yarnia's launch update on 31st December. You can expect 3 updates this month. But if not... Then, there'll be at least 2 updates for sure. Agle update se action start ho jayega thoda thoda. Aur, update 192 se toh poora chaos hi hai.
Toh saath bane rehne ka... Readers mujhe nazar nahi aa rahe hai. Dheela dhaala josh rakhoge to updates utne hi thande baste me jaate jayenge. Remember this.