Adultery BHABHI MAA (Completed)

[Chutiyadr]

so kahani apne bakchodi waale charam bindu par pahuch chuki hai...

aur wo laal saadi wali sindoor lagaye mahila.. aur koi nahi .. balke kajal ya poorvi mein se ek hogi .. aur yaha kareem ki maarne ke liye jaal bichaya gaya hoga...

kyonki kareem ne mahima ko kidnap karke.. seedha tiwari se panga le liya...

dhanywad ff bhai

 

[Chutiyadr]

Nice

dhanywad RK bhai

 

[tabishqureshi]

Intyzar rahy ga update ka

 

[Chutiyadr]

Super

dhanywad shah bhai

 

[Chutiyadr]

Hmmmmmmm
Good updates
All are good
Mostly last 52.....very good....

50and 51 thode disappointing the.....or iska reason he.....bina kisi kaaran ke fantasy ki shuruwat hona.....
Jabki aapne kanhi bhi fantasy or supernatural ya magic ko tag nahi kiya he....
Dusri chij SUSPENSE or THRILLER tab tak hee dam dar hota hai jab tak ki usme fantasy ko na milaaya jaaye....

Ise aise dekh sakte hai ki....fantasy ko aap kabhi bhi kaise bhi mod sakte ho.....mare ko Zindagi kar sakte ho....Zindagi of mar sakte ho....kisi ko bhi god level power me dikha sakte ho....

Lekin suspense or thriller aisa jo ak bar likh diya jata hai...wo waisa hee rahta hai....fantasy ki tarah usne baad mai sadharan a hi kiya jaaye sakta....

bro aapki bat main samjhta hu , ye sahi bhi hai , but ek chij me thoda aapko correct karunga ki aap magic aur supernatural thing ki jagah fantasy word ka use kar rahe ho , fantasy to har chij hi hai , puri story hi fantasy hai , insect aur adultry bhi to fantasy hi hai wo real thode hi hai ...
aap story me aaye magic aur supernatural powers ki bat kar rahe ho ,to ynha kahna chahunga ki ..
abhi ye confirm thodi hai ki ye supernatural powers hi hai

Third.....jiva ka to pahle hee pata the ki use komal se koi khas laga available nahi hai..use paisa or power chahiye Saath hee don ban na he....
Lekin use kaise pata ki komal aisa kuch power hai jo hidden hai.....Saath hee wo markat karegi to iska fayada hoga....
Use to sanskrit padhna nahi aata....prabha a uske baba ne use kuch bataya tha....

Ha last wala update52 kaafi jyada achcha tha...khas kar tab jab Shiva naam use karne wala koi or hee nikla jo ki abhi tak chhupa hua hai....

Ankit agar komal ko pahle se jaanta tha to use iss baat ka kaise pata nahi ki aarti kis gaanv ki hai or agar pata tha to use iss baat ka bhi pata hona chahiye ki ak hee gaanv me ak hee shak all else 2 logo ka hona coincidence nahi ho sakta.....

Ya to use pagle se pata tha ya phir aapne kuch loop chhod diya...

ye bat mujhe samjh nahi aayi ki aap kya bolna chahte ho
ankit ko to hamesha se pata tha ki aarti kaha se hai , kyoki uska bhai janha se padha tha wahi to aarti ke pariwar ki dukan thi ...
ise thoda explain kijiye ki aap kya punchh rahe hai

Khair Dekhte hai aage kya hota hai
Anyways
Good update
Thanks

dhanywad vikram bhai

 

[Chutiyadr]

Hmmmmmmm
Very good update

Mahima ki story kaafi heart touching thi....or satya ne bhi Kaafi bahaduri dikhaai lekin gundo or politics walo ke Saath bahaduri nahi chalaki ki jarurat hoti hai....
Lekin jab tak ye baat satya ko ka maja aati der ho gayi thi.....

Ab story ka ak or point nikla hai ki satya ko aapne marta hua nahi dikhaya hai.....to ye kahna galat hoga ki wo mar chuka hai ya Inn sab se connected nahi hai....

Dusri chij....mana ki daya ne unn dono ko dhokha diya....lekin ye baat itni bhi badi nahi thi jis se ki tino ak dusre ka khoon kar de....

Khair Dekhte hai aage kya hota hai
Anyways
Very good update
Thanks

dhanywad vikaram bhai

 

[Chutiyadr]

Hmmmmmmm
KYA KAHU KUCH SAMAJH NAHI AA RAHA.....CHALO LAST SE SHURU KARTE HAI.....

Update ka last part kaafi achcha tha... dono ki Tadap.....pyar....or milan kaafi achcha laga....or use aapne kaafi achche se describe kiya hai....very good.....ha bas ye train wala scene kaafi jyada ho gaya....lekin koi na....


Ab baat karte hai main part ki jisme ki flashback wala scene tha.....bahut se logo ne....na na bahut se nahi lagbhag sabhi ne update ko behatrin or awesome bataya hai....lekin sach kahi to meri soch is mamle mai kuch alag hai....

I just want to say.....hhhmmmm not a good update....or reason bahut Saare loops or unlogical and un relatable.....
Ab lagta hai mujhe pura explain karna Padega..... OK.....to bat chit thodi lambi chaegi......so.....
Start.....

Mahima or komal ko Dr ne milwaya tha....good lekin ak bar aapne kaha tha....ki aarti ki maa kisi jagah par chai ki stole lagati hai....lekin kyo or kaise....
Jabki dono kaafi padhe likhe hai....or gaanv mai agricultural ke alawa bhi Kaafi kaam hote hai jo wo kar sakte the...
Dusri baat...tea stole par aksar anjan log bhi aate jaate rahte hai.. kaise bar to musafir or dur wale log bhi....agar tea stole unhone ye soch kar lagaya tha ki wo uss par rahkar sabse chhup sakti hai to ye kaise possible hai....tea stole jaisi jagah par... wo bhi itna famous chahra lekar....

aapki bat me point to hai
aisa hai ki tea stole college ke pas ka hai , aur college kisi kasbe ka hai jnha se wo shahar door hai janha jiva ya tiwari soch bhi nahi sakte ki komal ynha aisa kaam kar rahi hogi
jnha tak padhe likhe hokar bhi chay bechane ka kaam hai to jaisa un logo ka situation tha unhe jarurat paise ki nahi balki shanti ki thi , aur kuchh log kahte hai ki gurbat me shanti hoti hai , shayd komal ne ise sahi maan liya

Kareem ko aapne starting mai kaafi bada don bataya tha... jisko hata kar jiva don ban na chahta tha... OK....or Tiwari ne kareem ko maar diya or jiva ne uski gang ko hathiya liya... iska matlab ab uske haath mai....khud ki or kareem dono ki gang ka control tha..

Means ki wo pahle kareem jo tha us se bhi bada don ban gaya tha ab.. Tiwari se politics ke kaaran dur rahne ki baat dusri hai....
To jab jiva don ban hee gaya tha to use aarti ki jarurat kyo thi...jabki uske competition mai koi tha hee nahi... or jiva khud itna takatwar ho kar kyo kisi anjan ladki se takat lena except karega... jabki uske pass pahle se hee hai....or use us ladki ya uski maa ke baare mai ya unki hidden powers ke baare mai kuch pata nahi hai...

Kyoki jiva ke baap ne bas itna bataya tha ki ye special hai....iske alawa nahi....phir jiva kaise samjha ki iske andar kuch powers hai....or use kya jarurat padi kisi ladki ki jabki uske pass sabkuch hai....
Main baat unhe kaise pata chala ki dono mai powers hai jabki book ko Bhuwan or komal ke siwa kisi ne nahi padha....

Dusri baat jiva ke pass sabkuch hai or wo ab bada don bhi hai phir use kisi chhoti see baat ke liye ak na Dan ladki ki jarurat hai....baat kuch logical nahi lag rahi....

pahli bat ynha ye samjhne ki hai ki tiwari ne kareem ko mara lekin kaise ye abhi clear nahi hai aur isme ek locha bhi hai jo bad me pata chalega
jiva komal ka use tab karna shuru kiya jab kareem jinda tha
dusari ki jiva ko komal ki shakti ka koi pata hi nahi tha na hi use confirm hai ki aarati me wo shakti hai , komal ke bare me use pata tab chala jab usne katleaam kiya tab jakar usne apne baap ki bat ko seriously liya tha, use bas ye pata hai ki jo bhi shakti hai use sirf wo hi control kar sakta hai ki jisse wo ladki pyar karti hai ..
ab isi base wo aarti ko bhi try kar raha hai, wo khud confirm nahi hai (aur ye line to maine likhi bhi hai shayd )
ek aur chij kareem ke marne ke bad jiva powerful bana ki nahi ye to waqt hi batayega

KOMAL wanha party mai thi achchi baat hai...lekin jab hungama hua or jo jo bina invitation ke aaye the unhe pakad liya gaya jisme ki mahima or aarti mili....tab komal ko kyo nahi pakda gaya....janha tak main samjhta hu....komal ko bhi invite nahi kiya gaya hoga....

koaml shatir thi isliye nikal gayi jaise aarti ke sath aaya hua shakhs bhi nikal gaya, mahima aur aarti aisi chijo me experiance nahi the isliye fans gaye

Komal ke anusar party me kuch karna nahi tha bas ak pal ke liye aarti ko Tiwari ko dikha kar use wanha se bahar nikalna tha....Jo Ki kajal ne kiya...to kya ye maan na thik nahi hai ki kajal bhi unn logo se mili hui hai jo Tiwari ke against hai....
Or kya ye nahi maan sakte ki kajal pahle se hee mahima or aarti se mili hui ho....or komal jise ki party me pakda nahi gaya....use bhi kajal ne hee chhupaya ho.....

ye mana ja sakta hai , sachchai to story ke khatm hone par hi samjh aayegi
kuchh loops janbuchkar chhode jate hai jo ki aage jakar clear hote hai

Maine kaafi Saare sawaal hai....ho sakta hai inke jawab aapke pass ho..lekin ye bhi sahi hai ki ye loops hai... or ab ye dekhne wali baat hogi ki aap Inn sab ko kaise JUSTIFY karte ho.....

INTEZAAR RAHEGA AAPKE REPLY KA.....

Khair Dekhte hai aage kya hota hai
Anyways
............update
Thanks....

dhanywad vikram bhai

 

[Chutiyadr]

Hmmmmmmm
Good update

Aap to jaanta honge sex ke baare mai kuch bhi nahi likha hu.....
Ha lekin aarti ki fight thik thi...or thodi odd bhi....
Khaskar naked ladna....kaafi azib concept tha.....koi na

Khair Dekhte hai aage kya hota hai
Anyways
Good update
Thanks

dhanywad vikram bhai
mujhe odd chije karne me hi maja aata hai bro, khaskar sex scene likhne ke mamle me mujhe kuchh alag aur ajib karna bahut pasand hai
kyoki jyada sex scene to likhta bhi nahi , jitana likhta hu wo bhi ek jaise ho to sala maja hi kya aayega

 

[Chutiyadr]

kya hui nahi party abhi tak .. Dr. saab ? .. ya fir wahi hilane baith gaye .. yaha iss behari laal saadi aur sindoor wali abla ko to in bhediyo ke beech mein laa patka .. aur aapko party ki padi hai .. sharam karo .. Bhabi-Maa aapke baare mein kya sochegi ...

baki ki bate chhodo pahle ye batao ki ye lolipop kiska chus rahe ho

 

[Chutiyadr]

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