Thriller Dead Or Alive

[Death Kiñg]

for starting the new storyyy.

Thnx Jaguaar Bhai..

 

[Death Kiñg]

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PROLOGUE UPDATE​

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TANNNN... TANNNN... TANNNN...

“Chal re 513... Koyi milne aaya hai terese!!”

Yerawada Central Jail, Pune... Yahin ka nazara tha ye jahaan ek Cell ki salaakhon par ek dande se maarne ke baad, uske taale ko kholkar andar zameen par baithe ek yuvak se kahe the ye shabd, hawaldaar saahab ne. Pratikriya mein wo yuvak chehre par jigyasa liye utha aur uss hawaldaar ke peechhe hi chal diya.

Chehre par cuts ke nishaan, badhi huyi dadhi aur halke lambe baal uski appearance ka hissa the. Saath hi uske jail ke kapdon par likha number – 513... Jiss se hawaldaar ne usse pukaara bhi tha dekha jaa sakta tha. Wo dono chalte huye pahunche meeting window ke kareeb jiske baad wo hawaldaar side mein chala gaya.

Wahin ye yuvak window ke doosri taraf khade ek badi si physique ke hatte – katte aadmi ki taraf prashan janak nazron se dekhne laga jispar wo aadmi bas ek kameeni si muskaan bikher diya!! Wo muskaan dekh kar ye yuvak laghbhag uchhal pada. Iske chehre se khushi tapak nahi balki beh rahi thi.

Iski ye haalat dekh kar wo aadmi bhi muskurane laga,

Yuvak (Prisoner) – Haashhhh... Aakhir, aakhir mera badla poora hua!! I'm the best, I'm the bloody best. Mujhe koyi nahi Hara sakta.

Aadmi – Mera nahi hamara badla launde...

Yuvak (Prisoner) : Haan yaar wahi, waise kaise Maara usse?? Aasan maut to nahi di naa...

Jaise saare jahaan ki jigyaasa iske hi chehre par apna thikaana banaaye huye thi ye sawaal poochhte waqt,

Aadmi – Aasan Maut!? Huhh...

Ek vyangya sa kiya usne in shabdon ko bolte huye. Jisse sunkar koyi aur to shayad chidh jaata par wo yuvak, uski aankhon mein chamak dikhne lagi...

Aadmi : Pehle kutte ke jaisa maara usse... Aur jab tasalli ho gayi aur saath hi saara gussa nikal gaya fir... Fir uske chehre par tezaab daalkar pet mein chaaku ghonp diya...

Ek shaitaani hasi hanste huye iss darindagi ki kahani sunaayi thi iss aadmi ne jisse sunkar uss yuvak ki to jaise banchhe khil gayi... Wo pehle to Raavan ke jaise hasa aur fir oopar ki aur dekh kar chillakar bola...

Yuvak – Ye hota hai nateeja... Mujhse... Armaan se bhidne ka!!! Maine kaha tha ke tu mar jaayega aur tu mar gaya re... YOU'RE DEAD... YOU'RE DEAD VISHWAS...


A Day Earlier {Ek Din Pehle} :-

Ek bada sa bangla hai ye jiske hall mein ek Raja ke jaisi kursi par Royal andaaz mein hi baitha hai ek ladka. Chehre par ek jung jeetne waali smile hai aur uske saamne baithi ek ladki uski taraf excitement se dekh rahi hai... Par wo ladka kisi aur hi soch mein hai. Tabhi wo achanak se khada hua aur dheere se budbudaya...

Ladka – Tumhe laga tum meri maut ka kaaran ban jaaogi aur main mar jaaunga... Nahi... Main Amar hun!! Amar hun main & my friend Armaan... I'M ALIVE BUDDY... I'M ALIVE...




Stay Tuned...

 

[Jaguaar]

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PROLOGUE UPDATE​

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TANNNN... TANNNN... TANNNN...

“Chal re 513... Koyi milne aaya hai terese!!”

Yerawada Central Jail, Pune... Yahin ka nazara tha ye jahaan ek Cell ki salaakhon par ek dande se maarne ke baad, uske taale ko kholkar andar zameen par baithe ek yuvak se kahe the ye shabd, hawaldaar saahab ne. Pratikriya mein wo yuvak chehre par jigyasa liye utha aur uss hawaldaar ke peechhe hi chal diya.

Chehre par cuts ke nishaan, badhi huyi dadhi aur halke lambe baal uski appearance ka hissa the. Saath hi uske jail ke kapdon par likha number – 513... Jiss se hawaldaar ne usse pukaara bhi tha dekha jaa sakta tha. Wo dono chalte huye pahunche meeting window ke kareeb jiske baad wo hawaldaar side mein chala gaya.

Wahin ye yuvak window ke doosri taraf khade ek badi si physique ke hatte – katte aadmi ki taraf prashan janak nazron se dekhne laga jispar wo aadmi bas ek kameeni si muskaan bikher diya!! Wo muskaan dekh kar ye yuvak laghbhag uchhal pada. Iske chehre se khushi tapak nahi balki beh rahi thi.

Iski ye haalat dekh kar wo aadmi bhi muskurane laga,

Yuvak (Prisoner) – Haashhhh... Aakhir, aakhir mera badla poora hua!! I'm the best, I'm the bloody best. Mujhe koyi nahi Hara sakta.

Aadmi – Mera nahi hamara badla launde...

Yuvak (Prisoner) : Haan yaar wahi, waise kaise Maara usse?? Aasan maut to nahi di naa...

Jaise saare jahaan ki jigyaasa iske hi chehre par apna thikaana banaaye huye thi ye sawaal poochhte waqt,

Aadmi – Aasan Maut!? Huhh...

Ek vyangya sa kiya usne in shabdon ko bolte huye. Jisse sunkar koyi aur to shayad chidh jaata par wo yuvak, uski aankhon mein chamak dikhne lagi...

Aadmi : Pehle kutte ke jaisa maara usse... Aur jab tasalli ho gayi aur saath hi saara gussa nikal gaya fir... Fir uske chehre par tezaab daalkar pet mein chaaku ghonp diya...

Ek shaitaani hasi hanste huye iss darindagi ki kahani sunaayi thi iss aadmi ne jisse sunkar uss yuvak ki to jaise banchhe khil gayi... Wo pehle to Raavan ke jaise hasa aur fir oopar ki aur dekh kar chillakar bola...

Yuvak – Ye hota hai nateeja... Mujhse... Armaan se bhidne ka!!! Maine kaha tha ke tu mar jaayega aur tu mar gaya re... YOU'RE DEAD... YOU'RE DEAD VISHWAS...


Same Time –

Ek bada sa bangla hai ye jiske hall mein ek Raja ke jaisi kursi par Royal andaaz mein hi baitha hai ek ladka. Chehre par ek jung jeetne waali smile hai aur uske saamne baithi ek ladki uski taraf excitement se dekh rahi hai... Par wo ladka kisi aur hi soch mein hai. Tabhi wo achanak se khada hua aur dheere se budbudaya...

Ladka – Tumhe laga tum meri maut ka kaaran ban jaaogi aur main mar jaaunga... Nahi... Main Amar hun!! Amar hun main & my friend Armaan... I'M ALIVE BUDDY... I'M ALIVE...




Stay Tuned...

Prologue padh kar toh maza aagaya.

Armaan jail mein hai aur woh Vishwaas ko maarna chahta hai. Aur usse lag raha hai ke Vishwaas mar gaya. Par vishwaas zinda hai.

Toh Armaan se milne wale aadmi ne usse jhoot kyo bola. Aur woh ladki kaun hai jo Vishwaas ke saamne baithi hai.

Bahot se raaz hai dheere se dheere jarur sab pata chal jayega.

 

[Kingfisher]

Sarvpratham Sabhi Ko Mera Namaskar ​

Main yaani Death Kiñg haazir hoon aapke samaksh ek chhoti si peshkash ke saath!!

Aapme se kuchh log shayad mujhe jaante honge aur jo nahi jaante wo bhai iss story ke baad jaan jaaenge. Mujhe story writing ka kuchh zyada experience nahi hai par ye ek chhoti si koshish hai meri aur se. Hope aap sabko pasand aayegi.

Tag to Thriller hai kahani ka so thrill aur suspense ka ek mixture samajh sakte hain aap iss story ko. Haan thoda bahut Romance bhi dekhne ko milega, kyonki wo apun ka favourite genre hai. Story zyada lambi nahi hogi, matlab kuchh hi updates mein aapko The End likha dikhaayi de jaayega.

Kaaran ye ki filhaal main ek story likhkar apni writing skills ko thoda check karna chahta hoon isiliye short story likh raha hoon. Aasha hai ke aap logon ko ye kahani pasand aaye. Jald milenge pehle Update ke saath.

Thanks...

Bahut bahut hardik shubhkamnaen Bhai ek masterpiece story shuru karne ke liye ...

 

[Kingfisher]

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PROLOGUE UPDATE​

---

TANNNN... TANNNN... TANNNN...

“Chal re 513... Koyi milne aaya hai terese!!”

Yerawada Central Jail, Pune... Yahin ka nazara tha ye jahaan ek Cell ki salaakhon par ek dande se maarne ke baad, uske taale ko kholkar andar zameen par baithe ek yuvak se kahe the ye shabd, hawaldaar saahab ne. Pratikriya mein wo yuvak chehre par jigyasa liye utha aur uss hawaldaar ke peechhe hi chal diya.

Chehre par cuts ke nishaan, badhi huyi dadhi aur halke lambe baal uski appearance ka hissa the. Saath hi uske jail ke kapdon par likha number – 513... Jiss se hawaldaar ne usse pukaara bhi tha dekha jaa sakta tha. Wo dono chalte huye pahunche meeting window ke kareeb jiske baad wo hawaldaar side mein chala gaya.

Wahin ye yuvak window ke doosri taraf khade ek badi si physique ke hatte – katte aadmi ki taraf prashan janak nazron se dekhne laga jispar wo aadmi bas ek kameeni si muskaan bikher diya!! Wo muskaan dekh kar ye yuvak laghbhag uchhal pada. Iske chehre se khushi tapak nahi balki beh rahi thi.

Iski ye haalat dekh kar wo aadmi bhi muskurane laga,

Yuvak (Prisoner) – Haashhhh... Aakhir, aakhir mera badla poora hua!! I'm the best, I'm the bloody best. Mujhe koyi nahi Hara sakta.

Aadmi – Mera nahi hamara badla launde...

Yuvak (Prisoner) : Haan yaar wahi, waise kaise Maara usse?? Aasan maut to nahi di naa...

Jaise saare jahaan ki jigyaasa iske hi chehre par apna thikaana banaaye huye thi ye sawaal poochhte waqt,

Aadmi – Aasan Maut!? Huhh...

Ek vyangya sa kiya usne in shabdon ko bolte huye. Jisse sunkar koyi aur to shayad chidh jaata par wo yuvak, uski aankhon mein chamak dikhne lagi...

Aadmi : Pehle kutte ke jaisa maara usse... Aur jab tasalli ho gayi aur saath hi saara gussa nikal gaya fir... Fir uske chehre par tezaab daalkar pet mein chaaku ghonp diya...

Ek shaitaani hasi hanste huye iss darindagi ki kahani sunaayi thi iss aadmi ne jisse sunkar uss yuvak ki to jaise banchhe khil gayi... Wo pehle to Raavan ke jaise hasa aur fir oopar ki aur dekh kar chillakar bola...

Yuvak – Ye hota hai nateeja... Mujhse... Armaan se bhidne ka!!! Maine kaha tha ke tu mar jaayega aur tu mar gaya re... YOU'RE DEAD... YOU'RE DEAD VISHWAS...


Same Time –

Ek bada sa bangla hai ye jiske hall mein ek Raja ke jaisi kursi par Royal andaaz mein hi baitha hai ek ladka. Chehre par ek jung jeetne waali smile hai aur uske saamne baithi ek ladki uski taraf excitement se dekh rahi hai... Par wo ladka kisi aur hi soch mein hai. Tabhi wo achanak se khada hua aur dheere se budbudaya...

Ladka – Tumhe laga tum meri maut ka kaaran ban jaaogi aur main mar jaaunga... Nahi... Main Amar hun!! Amar hun main & my friend Armaan... I'M ALIVE BUDDY... I'M ALIVE...




Stay Tuned...

Prolong dekhkar hi samajh sakte hai kahani kis kadar dadar machaayegi . Bahut hi shandar prolong tha king bro

Yarvda prison . Es jhel ka itihaas hi esko bakiyon sevhatke banata hai . Ek trahh se ye rastrapita ka adda tha us time ... Prolong padne se hi mann me bahut sare sawal uthte hai ki akhir koun hai ye Armaan ? Jhel me ane se pehle eski history geography kaisi thi ? Or akhir ye kis badle ki baat kar rha ? Eske intention dekh kar lagta to yhi hai ki yhi Jonny gaddhar hai

Vaise ye bangle me Aram Farma rha mahashay koun hai ? Enki bato se to lagta hai ki armaan or eska kafi gehra yarana lagta hai ( phool bor kante type ) I thik Armann jo jhel me us unknown shaks se kisi ke murder ka jikr kar rha tha, uska or es ladka ka connection hai ... Well It is not possible to guess correctly from Prolog .2-3 update padne ke baad hi pta chalega ki asal majra hai kya

Well prolong bahut hi behtrinn tha or usse bhi behtrin apki writing skills . Drishya ka ekdum jivant varnann kiya gya hai jaisa apne kaha hai ki first time likh rhe ho but aisa lagta nhi . Khair dekhte hai aage kya hota hai . best wishes Bhai

 

[DARK WOLFKING]

romanchak update ..arman jail me hai aur wo apne dost vishwas ko maarna chahta tha aur shayad iske liye hi usne kisi ho supari di ho ya uska koi dusra dost ho .

par aisa lagta hai vishwas mara nahi hai ,
inke dushmani ki wajah kya hai ye shayad aage pata chale ..
par wo aadmi kaun tha aur kya usne sach me vishwas ko maar diya yaa jhoothi kahani sunayi armaan ko .

 

[Death Kiñg]

Prologue padh kar toh maza aagaya.

Armaan jail mein hai aur woh Vishwaas ko maarna chahta hai. Aur usse lag raha hai ke Vishwaas mar gaya. Par vishwaas zinda hai.

Toh Armaan se milne wale aadmi ne usse jhoot kyo bola. Aur woh ladki kaun hai jo Vishwaas ke saamne baithi hai.

Bahot se raaz hai dheere se dheere jarur sab pata chal jayega.

Thanks Jaguaar Bhai. Sahi kaha aapne, dheere dheere sab pata chal jaayega. Thnaks Again.

 

[Death Kiñg]

Prolong dekhkar hi samajh sakte hai kahani kis kadar dadar machaayegi . Bahut hi shandar prolong tha king bro

Yarvda prison . Es jhel ka itihaas hi esko bakiyon sevhatke banata hai . Ek trahh se ye rastrapita ka adda tha us time ... Prolong padne se hi mann me bahut sare sawal uthte hai ki akhir koun hai ye Armaan ? Jhel me ane se pehle eski history geography kaisi thi ? Or akhir ye kis badle ki baat kar rha ? Eske intention dekh kar lagta to yhi hai ki yhi Jonny gaddhar hai

Vaise ye bangle me Aram Farma rha mahashay koun hai ? Enki bato se to lagta hai ki armaan or eska kafi gehra yarana lagta hai ( phool bor kante type ) I thik Armann jo jhel me us unknown shaks se kisi ke murder ka jikr kar rha tha, uska or es ladka ka connection hai ... Well It is not possible to guess correctly from Prolog .2-3 update padne ke baad hi pta chalega ki asal majra hai kya

Well prolong bahut hi behtrinn tha or usse bhi behtrin apki writing skills . Drishya ka ekdum jivant varnann kiya gya hai jaisa apne kaha hai ki first time likh rhe ho but aisa lagta nhi . Khair dekhte hai aage kya hota hai . best wishes Bhai

Arree Kingu, ju to sahi mein badhiya revo dete ho. Well, tareef ke liye dil se dhanyawad. Sahi kaha, 2-3 update baad hi cheezein khulengi. Thanks Again.

 

[Death Kiñg]

romanchak update ..arman jail me hai aur wo apne dost vishwas ko maarna chahta tha aur shayad iske liye hi usne kisi ho supari di ho ya uska koi dusra dost ho .

par aisa lagta hai vishwas mara nahi hai ,
inke dushmani ki wajah kya hai ye shayad aage pata chale ..
par wo aadmi kaun tha aur kya usne sach me vishwas ko maar diya yaa jhoothi kahani sunayi armaan ko .

Thanks Leon Bro. Jaldi hi sab sawaalon ke jawaab milenge. Thanks Again.

 

[SANJU ( V. R. )]

सबसे पहले आप को अपनी पहली स्टोरी लिखने के लिए बहुत बहुत बधाई ।
" Dead or Alive "
" जिंदा या मुर्दा " कहानी का शीर्षक है । और कहानी थ्रीलर है ।
वैसे थ्रील तो पहले अपडेट से ही कर दिया हमें आपने । अरमान को लगता है कि विश्वास मारा गया जबकि वह जिंदा है और ऐशो आराम से भी है ।

दो जानी दुश्मन के बीच की कहानी लग रहा है " डेथ एंड एलाइव " । शायद अरमान के जेल जाने के पीछे विश्वास का ही हाथ हो ! मुझे लगता है अरमान के दोस्त ने उसे सही खबर ही दिया होगा । शायद विश्वास की चालबाजी के कारण वो बेवकूफ बन गया हो ।

खैर ! जो भी हो , राइटिंग स्किल लाजबाव है आप की । एक बेहतरीन कहानी बनने वाली है इस फोरम की यह ।
" You're dead. You are dead Viswas "
" I'm alive buddy. I am alive "

दोनों डायलॉग , सच में , काफी रोमांचित कर गया मुझे ।
आउटस्टैंडिंग एंड अमेजिंग अपडेट डेथ किंग भाई ।
पहला अपडेट ही जगमग जगमग कर गया ।