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All in one hi likh dete...lekin shukriya sirjiChapter 9: Comment
Achcha Update tha - seduction, history, present situation, fight scenes, destruction and thrill sab tha....
Itne jaldi aisa kuch nhi Milne wala (incest toh nhi).. bedroom mein bas xxx karne hi jate hai kya... hmmmLast update ke baad laga ki Akansha aur karan ke beech kuch hoga... lekin hamari writer mahodya ne kuch aur hi socha aur usey itihas ka path mein badal diya... haha![]()
Woh toh obvious hai...khud hi socho main aisa kyu likhungi itne easy koi mausi seduce ho jayege?Akansha ke irade wese bhi thik nahi lag rhe (karan ko baar baar apne bade bade boobs dikha rahi hai)..... aur jis tarah us ne beech mein Karan ki baat kaati usse daal mein kala lag raha hai.. ya wo abhi kuch batana nahi chahti
Love herPayal chintit hai lekin usey apne bhai ki bhi fikr dikh rahi hai...
Haha you're too gullible maine bhi yeh sab stories padh chuke hai...lekin woh sab baar baar padh ke I'm sure yahan sab bhi bore ho gye honge...thoda spice toh chaiye life mein bhi!ab wo shehro ko suraksha check karne khud ground par utregi... aur apne bhai ko Vanrajya bhi dikhayegi lekin raat mein ..... yhaan to kuch hoga,,,,![]()
Wahi yhaan Vinashika ki jhalak humein dikhi.... aur uska sevak Agrahak... bhai gazab ka daanav hai yaar....
Tbh Thansala sabse weak tha...lekin usmein koi doubt nhi hai Traas cannot enter AnantRajya...nature has it's own laws against monsters like them.BC ye itni powerful hai to Traas ke baaki sevak ko kya power hoga...
Pura ek rajya tehes nehes kar diya.....
Meher is just too lazy...jab usko feel hota hai tabhi kuch bolti hai...nhi toh mere tarah sote rhete haiLekin ab Uski nazar Vanrajya par hai...
aur Karan ki talwar akhir gayi kahan... Meher ki to awaaz hi nahi suni last 2 update se....
Dekh rhe hoon pata chal jayega thodi der main kal tak possible hai ke nhi
Thanks Maxall update is good![]()
Aise hi silly humor...real life mein bhi hum persons ke expression se thoda guess toh kar hi lete hai ke woh man mein kuch soch rha haiWhy payal said" tum ne kuch kaha kya Karan " can payal feels Karen's mind thoughts
Why would someone meddle in someone's affair jab wahan ke sena hi un logon ko bacha nhi rhe the? Aur abhi sandhi nhi hue haiAkshaya and Sonali ne sirf Karan ko un narbhediyon se ladte dekhte rahe bas . Un ko to Karan ki madad karna chahiye thi kyonki wo dono hi rajkumar aur rajkumari the.
I think aajkal stories mein bahut Jayda heroism dikhaye jane lage hai...jahan sab musibat mein fase logon ke madad karte hai...lekin I try to write somewhat based on true human nature.Aur vanrajya se rishta banana chapter hai to madad to karni hi chahiye thi lekin nahi kya unke liye praja kuch bhi nahi chair chhodo
Nooo...tumhe kaise pata chala...khair koi nhi abhi bhi bahut story hai unkiAur mujhe lagta hai aap Sonali ke sath Karan ki thodi hate chemistry Lana chahti hai tab kya hoga jab ye baat Karan ko Pata chale gi vo vivah ka prastav laye hai ,
Payal aur Akshaya? Should I do itkya reaction hoga payal ka kuch feel hoga ush ko Karan ke liye ya nahi
No doubt...he is very cautious about his every move.Sharavas is claver minded fighter because he is guardian of kaljay as logn time
Dekhte hai...Ravisha does not have a single ounce of mercy...main toh uske liye jayda excited hoon jab woh aur Nandani milengeAur ravisha(aakansha) ko jab ye Pata chalega ki ye sab Karan ne kiya hai tab mana ayga,kya kare gi wo..
I replied to his earlier.Last I honestly I don't like payal's look in this update ,sosorry
Thanks dear....this was just a comment not a review....hum jese tuchh reader kisi bhi writer ko koi review nahi de sakte..All in one hi likh dete...lekin shukriya sirji
Itne jaldi aisa kuch nhi Milne wala (incest toh nhi).. bedroom mein bas xxx karne hi jate hai kya... hmmm
Woh toh obvious hai...khud hi socho main aisa kyu likhungi itne easy koi mausi seduce ho jayege?
Ab toh back story bhi aane baake hai uske Raaz toh aage aa hi gaya hai!
Love hershe cares a lot about Karan
Haha you're too gullible maine bhi yeh sab stories padh chuke hai...lekin woh sab baar baar padh ke I'm sure yahan sab bhi bore ho gye honge...thoda spice toh chaiye life mein bhi!
Bro was in fear of his death too. Imagine Vinashaka's fury
Tbh Thansala sabse weak tha...lekin usmein koi doubt nhi hai Traas cannot enter AnantRajya...nature has it's own laws against monsters like them.
Meher is just too lazy...jab usko feel hota hai tabhi kuch bolti hai...nhi toh mere tarah sote rhete hai
Thanks a lot for this amazing review
Maza aaya padh ke![]()
Ok i change this nameThanks Max(I wish you chose this name instead
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I understand . I felt she feel his thought .
Ye bhi to ho sakta hai ki sena ko Pata hi nahi chala ho abhi aur pahuchi hi nahi.aur vo ek yuvraaj hai aur kabhi ye rajya uska dost bhi thaWhy would someone meddle in someone's affair jab wahan ke sena hi un logon ko bacha nhi rhe the? Aur abhi sandhi nhi hue hai![]()
Toh use Tarah se to Karan bhi hero hi hai other storys ki Tarah sabse vohi lad raha hai vo bhi sirf mehar ki vajah seI think aajkal stories mein bahut Jayda heroism dikhaye jane lage hai...jahan sab musibat mein fase logon ke madad karte hai...lekin I try to write somewhat based on true human nature.
bas ayse hi vayse I like prachi's character more then Sonali.Nooo...tumhe kaise pata chala...khair koi nhi abhi bhi bahut story hai unki![]()
No....please, payal loves only Karan..Payal aur Akshaya? Should I do itlove triangle laun kya
YesNo doubt...he is very cautious about his every move.
Me toDekhte hai...Ravisha does not have a single ounce of mercy...main toh uske liye jayda excited hoon jab woh aur Nandani milenge![]()
I am waitingI replied to his earlier.
thank you kya hota hai..aur aysi koi baat nahi boli MaineThanks a lot for this amazing reviewMX
Stay tuned!
Bhai tu jaysa hai vaysa hi rahPS; Rudra Roy kuch seekho mx se review dena![]()