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Fantasy Kaisa Yeh Ishq Hai.... Ajab Sa Risk Hai...... (Completed)

Mbindas

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Raat ko bhi 2 updates dene ka bola tha par yaha to 1 hi update aya hai. Galat baat.

Wese superb update tha bhai.
 

Naina

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Nischal… “Aeee badmas bhul gayi kya, wahi jisse karne ke baad pata nahi mujhe kya ho gaya tha … Arre wahi re”….. “Kisssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss”


Nischal apne armaan kah kar muskurate huye niche dekhne laga, wahiṅ bistar par baiṭhi Jivisha usse ghurte apne naak sikoṛ li, aur wahiṅ se Nischal ko marne ke liye, tamatamayi daurne lagi… Lekin Jivisha ka reaction dekhte huye, Kasak ne uski dono baheṅ pakaḍ li, aur Nandni usse kamar se pakṛi hui thi….


Nischal jab sir uṭha kar bistar par chal rahe ghama-gahmi ko dekha to sab ko dant’te huye kahne laga….. “Chhor bhi do meri janeman ko, dekho to kiss dene ke liye kitni taṛpi ja rahi hai… ruko, tumhe ye log nahi aane de rahe to main he aata huṅ… apna chehara aage kar ke, yuṅ, yun gol-gol hont nikal lo”….


Nandni…. Kasak tu isse pakaḍ, main Nischal ko yahaṅ se le jati huṅ….


Kasak, Jivisha ke bahn ko chhor kar uski kamar tham li…. “Kasak chhor mujhe, sala blackmail karta hai ye. Aaj iss ka khun kar ke main to fasi par he chaḍh jauṅgi”
omg masoom ki aarmaan toh dekho... kuch zyada nahi maang liya jivu se ..:D
Nischal…. “Ye mera khun karegi, Arre chhoro mujhe… main isko abhi batata huṅ…. Bari aayi khun karne wali. Ittu si hai ye, aur muh itna chhota sa. Bandariya kahin ki”


Nischal ki baat par nandni joṛ-joṛ se hasne lagi, aur usse khinch kar jabardasti bahar le aayi… wahiṅ Kasak pure joṛ lagati Jivisha ko rokne me lagi hui thi… fir bhi wo kisi tarah se chhut kar bas Nischal se jhagṛa karna chahti thi….
kisto mein nahi...
ishe kahte hain original dhajjiyan uddana woh bhi ek hi baar mein :lol:
Nischal, Nandni ko ek side me rokte huye…. "Bus Nandu main nahi usse marne par utaru tha, jo ab bhi mujhe khinch rahi".


Nandni:- Oye ye Nandu kya hai, itne close kab se ho gaye hum.


Nischal:- Jab se main tumhare life me entry mara tab se. Khair jane do isse tum batao, college to shuru hone mein samay tha, fir itni jaldi Pune kaise pahunch gayi.


Nandni:- Bus aise hi. Thodi chinta ho rahi thi tumhari. Parso subah ki bahut si baten adhuri rah gayi thi, upar se tumhara wo kandha. Ghar me gahma-gahmi wale mahol mein, main bhul kaise gayi ki tum gambhir roop se ghyal ho gaye the.


Nandni ki chinta uske chehre se saaf pata chal rahi thi. Nischal pahli baar aisi bhawana se ru-baru ho raha tha. Usse apne ander ajib sa mehsus hone laga, jaise kisi apne ke bich hone ka ehsas...


Nandni:- Kya hua, aise ajib si shakl kyon banaye ho?


Nischal:- kuch nahi bus pahli baar laga aisa ki koi mera bhi hai. Ye ajib si feeling thi bata nahi sakta.


Nandni:- Buddhu, yahan koi paraya nahi hai. Haan bus tumhe unhe samjhne me aur unhe tumhe samjhne me thoda waqt lagega.


Nischal:- Haan so to hai. Waise Jivisha kamal ki hai Nandu, uske sath hone par aisa lagta hai, jaise wo khinch rahi ho mujhe apne ore. Alag hi aakarshan hai usme.


Nandni….. Oh isliye tumne sabke samne uss se kiss mang liya. Duffer, tumhe kya laga, Jivisha bistar se daur kar tumhe kiss dene aa rahi thi….


Nischal, apne chehre par muskaan lata….. “Nahi, main to janta huṅ, wo mujh se chiḍhi hui thi.. aur mujhe kiss dene nahi balki mujh se jhagṛa karne aa rahi thi”….


Nandni…. Smart haaṅ, matlab sab jante huye ye naṭak….


Nischal…. Chhoro bhi, waise bhi chiḍhata huṅ to wo mere pass rahti hai, bhale nafrat se he sahi… pyar se kitni bhi kosis kyoṅ na kar lun, wo jali kaṭi he sunayegi….


Nandni…. Hey, Nischal tum aise mayus achhe nahi lagte, Chalo smile karo. Waise Jivisha hai he dimaġ se paidal. Chhoro usse, uss se pyar ki koi ummid he nahi rakho….


Nischal….. Nah nandni, Jivisha to bahut he pyari hai. Wo to main he huṅ jo baat-baat par usse chher deta huṅ….


Nandni…. Achha bahut pyari hai wo… bahut pyari… aur main…. Main pyari nahi, meri tarif me to kuch kahte bhi nahi…


Nischal…. Tum bhi kiss do, to main tumhari bhi tarif karuṅga….


Nandni, aakhen dikhati….. “Kya bole”


Nischal….. Ab jo bhi bol diya usse adjust kar lo, baat karne ke naam par ek tum he to ho…


Nandni…. Haaṅ baat karne ke naam par to main huṅ, aur jhagṛa karne ke liye Jivisha….


Nischal….. Main jhagṛa nahi karta uss se nandni, bas thoḍa sa chher deta huṅ… taki ġusse se he sahi kuch waqt sath rahe….


Nandni…. Haaṅ dikh raha tha, tum usse chher rahe the ya chiḍhkar bandariya bol rahe the… aise koi laḍki se baat karta hai kya….


Nischal….. Opps !!!! Haaṅ wo thoḍa serious ho gaya tha…. Main bhi kya karuṅ Nandni, mujhse kisi ki badatamizi bardasht nahi hoti… aur main jaldi he ġussa ho jata huṅ…. Aise humare pahle bhi kai serious encounter ho chuke haiṅ, bawajood iske, wo mujhe behad pasand hai….


Nandni….. Hmmm !!! Samjh sakti huṅ main. Khair jitna sikhaya tha uss se bentrin performance diya hai tum ne…. Smart hote ja rahe ho. Lagta hai prithvi ki hawa lagti ja rahi hai…


Nischal…. Ji guru ji. Prithvi ki hawa bhi lag rahi hai, aur sath me aap se gyan bhi mil raha hai…. Pranam swikar kijiye….


Nandni…. Tatha astu bacha… tumhara kalyaṇ ho. Waise ek baat batao tum mujhe apni puri kahani kab bataoge, jab yahaṅ se chale jaoge tab…


Nischal….. Tumhe harbaḍi kis baat ki hai, abhi to yahin ho na. Abhi to tumhe bahut se kaam karne hai. Meri pyari Jivisha ko tumhe he pass lana hai. Yahaṅ jo feeling aayi hai, usse tumhe he manzil tak to pahuṅchana hai. Ab to uss din ka intzar hai jab wo bhi pyar se muskura kar mujh se baat kare…. Kya hasin pal honge wo mere liye….


Nandni…. Ohhh hooo, to mamla yahaṅ kuch jyada he serious lagta hai…. Achha suno meri baat….


Fir nandni ne Nischal ko college me admission lene ke sare upay bata diye, aur usse apne ġusse par kabu rakhne ki salah di.
Kya yeh sab nandu ne training di thi nischal ko :o....
par joh bhi ho nischal aur jivu karib aa rahe hai...
Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skill nainu ji :applause: :applause:
 
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Naina

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Jab Nandni aur Nischal dono bahar chale gaye, tab Kasak ne Jivisha ko chhor diya aur apni kalai ko dabane lagi…


Kasak…. Teri to jivi, tu khati kya hai, kalai ki haḍḍi chaṭka di. Tujh par kahin bhut to sawar nahi tha….


Jivisha… Haaṅ bhut he sawar tha !!! kasak, jaan se maar duṅgi usse… Kaminey ki himmat kaise hui, mujh se aise baat karne ki…


Kasak…. Jivi tumhe nahi lagta ki tum kuch jyada he over-react kar rahi ho… uss ne kya ġalat kaha… tum station par kisi anjaane ko chum sakti ho, fir jo tumhari madad kar raha usse kyoṅ nahi. Jab tum ne he usse rasta dikhaya hai, to ab ussi baat par aisa react kyoṅ kar rahi….


Jivisha…. Lekin Kasak, wo situation kuch aur he thi….


Kasak…. Kaun si situation jivi… kahin wahi situation to nahi, jisme tumhe apna swarth sadhna tha. Wahan tum ne ek aise ladkey ko kiss kiya, jisse tum ne na to pahle kabhi dekha, aur na he uss ke bare me janti thi. Kya ladkey kaise hote haiṅ tumhe pata nahi, uss ki jagah koi aur hota na tab samjh me aata….


Jivisha…. Par uss ki jagah koi aur kyoṅ hota….


Kasak…. Kyoṅ, tumhe to jaan bachani thi, isliye tum kisi ko bhi kiss kar sakti thi, fir chahe wo Nischal ho ya uss ki jagah koi aur….


Jivisha…. Tum bhi na gadheri…. Najar uṭha kar maine survey kiya tha…. Mujhe Nischal kafi masoom aur innocent dikha, aur haaṅ sath me thoḍa lallu bhi. Usse dekh kar man kiya ki isse kiss karuṅ so kar liya… mujhe kya pata tha meri kismat aise rang layegi aur wo ghar tak pahunch jayega….


Kasak…. Hunnn hunnnn … hunnn… hunnnnn, matlab Nischal tumhare man ko bhaya tha isliye mukhiya ji se bachne ke liye filmy kiss ka sahara liya… warna koi aur upay ḍhuṅḍhti….


Jivisha…. Not exactly darling… mujhe pata hai ki tumhare ishare kis taraf hai, par main tumhare batoṅ ke jaal me nahi fsungi…. Nischal hota ya uss ki jagah koi aur, par koi na koi hota jaroor…


Kasak…. Tu man ko kitna bhi bahla le, pahli mulakat ka kuch na kuch asar to tha he… mujhe to, gup-chup, gup-chup, gup song gane ka dil kar raha hai… lagta hai abhi ga dun… do dil mil rahe haiṅ magar chupke-chupke.


Jivisha… Aisa hai, aisa hai to abhi dekh…. Mammi… papa… mammi… ummmmmmmiiieee… chup kyoṅ kara rahi hai mujhe….


Kasak…. Tere dimaġ me chal kya raha tha pagal… tu chilla-chilla kar kya nautanki karne wali hai…


Jivisha… Sab sach-sach bata kar usse ghar se bahar karwauṅgi, bas itna he…


Kasak…. Pagal aise me to tu he fasegi…


Jivisha…. Fasti huṅ to fasne de, kam se uss pagal ke blackmailing aur tumhare iss faltu ke samiksha se chain to milega.


Kasak…. Ye jyada naṭak ho gaya haaṅ…. ab chup kar.


Jivisha…. Na na main to hamesha he natak he karti huṅ na. Tum logoṅ ne mujhe serious liya he kab hai… ab to main sab ko bata kar he rahuṅgi….


Aahhhh, kya adaa thi Jivisha ki… Kasak ne jaise he Jivisha ko shant rahne ki liye kaha, Jivisha ko mauka mil gaya apni bhaḍas nikalne ka… par tab tak Jivisha ka chillana sun kar Nandni aur Nischal bhi lauṭ aaye, aur unke pichhe-pichhe Priya aur Himanshu aur pura pariwar bhi pahunch chuke the.


“Kya batana hai, Jivisha aise chillayi kyoṅ” … dono baat me itne leen the ki unhe kisi ka aana pata bhi nahi chala. Aur jab Priya ki baat sun kar dono ne pass ka najara dekha to pura pariwar wahan jama tha…. Jivisha ki najar aise jaise bhutoṅ ka basera pass me khada ho gaya ho…


Kasak, isharo me hath dikhati, dhime se apne hont hilayi…. “Le sab aa gaye, ab kah de”


Jivisha dime se apni gardan hilati, Kasak ko na me ishara ki…. “Ye tum dono ke ishare fir shuru ho gaye, waise he mera dimaġ ghuma hai upar se tum dono. Kya kiya hai tum dono ne” dono ke isharon me chal rahi baat par Priya chidti hui kahne lagi…


Kasak….. Main batati huṅ…


Jivisha…. Kuch nahi mamma, maine cockroach dekha tha… kasak tu bhi na… heee heee heee


Kasak… Koi coacroach nahi tha yahaṅ… ye to bas ye batane ke liye chillayi ki, iss ki shadi nakli hai, aur bhare ka pati ye ghar lekar aayi hai….


Kasak bina ruke ek sans me apni baat kah gayi….. Shocked, shocked, shocked…. Sab ke sab shocked ho gaye…. Jaise abhi-abhi kisi ne pure khanḍan ko “statue” kah diya ho… jo jis mudra me the, muh khole ussi mudra me khaḍe, bas apne-apne gardan ghuma kar ek dusre ko dekh rahe the
Yeh kasak ne Jan bujkar boli naa saari raaz ki baat :mad: lekin kyun....
udhar shayad priya ne bhi kuch aur hi aandaza laga rahi hogi.... :sigh:
yaar ab sab gharwalo ko bhi pata chal gaya...
Khair ab log kya karne wale hai
Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skill nainu ji :applause: :applause:
 

Naina

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Dekhiye ab Kasak ka anuman kitna anumanit hota hai .. filhaal to hulchal aur bhuchal ka mahol shuru hone wala hai .. aur sab ko ulajhana shuru hoga fir to himalaya pahunch kar hi sabke uljhan ko mukti milegi :D .. (yahan himalya kewal mukti dham ke liye likha hun)

Aaj aise comment wahan mile hote .. main pura kar deta story :D
waise yeh bhi ek sach hai ki aapki har kahani mein har ek kirdaar ki mahattva hai.. I mean to say ek kirdaar bhi hata diya jaye toh kahani adhuri hai... ab ishi kahani ko dekh lijiye.. ashis, is kirdaar ko ek chhota sa role diya aapne lekin agar woh nahin hota toh kya nandu us situation ko sambhal paati..... haan yeh kah sakte hain ki iske jagah koi aur bikalp hota lekin baat wohin hai ki us jagah us situation sambhal ne ke liye bhi aap ko ek kirdaar lana hota... ya aisa kuch jugad lagana hota...
Ab rahi baat kasak ki.... yeh toh ek aham bhumika nibha rahi hai is kahani mein...
Hum hamesha hero heroine pe hi zyada dhyaan Kendrit karte hain... lekin yeh yaad rakhna chahiye ki baaki kirdaaro bin mul kirdaar kuch bhi nahin.... aur aap sabhi kirdaaro ke sath ek justify karte hain... Isliye aapki kahaniya favorite hai :D (now ismile plz :D)
 

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nice update ....nishchal to pyar karna chahta hai jivisha se ? ..aur priya ko nandini aur nishchal pe shak ho gaya ....par kasak ne to sabko shock hi de diya ,nakli pati batake ?,,,, ab kya nishchal koi jadoo karke sabko baat bhula dega ya jivisha kuch safayi dekar maamla handle karegi ? ...
 

Naina

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Ab kya hi kiya ja sakta hai ... Dono bahne jaan bhi chhidkti hain ek dusre par aur aur aur dono hi drama queen hai.. bechara nischal jab sahid na hua :D .. kab tak bacha rahega :D

Jitna lallu wo communication ke liye dikha tha wo utna bhi lallu nahi hai.. aap nahi thi tab surwat me jab Nischal ke charecter build up chal raha tha.. aur mujh me ek bimari shuru se rahi hai.. main pahle update se hi lead ko aamne samne le aata hun ..

To nischal ka charecter dekh kar kai reader .. ofcourse male reader .. jinhone 2-3 strong female charecter dekh liya tha..

Jo hi unhone mujhe comment me sunaya tha.. bhai itna fuddu kaise hero .. aisa hero hota hai kya.. kya aap ki story me ladkon ko itna weak kyon dikhate :D ..

Khaie once plot set up .. uske baad to kisi bhi kirdar ke charitr me main badlaw nahi karta .. wo apne flow me badhta hai.. but it was an amezing incidence.. which I usually face at the starting :D
Yeh to xp samay ki baat hai... woh daur gaya..bhool jaiye ushe
. yeh ek naya daur hai . nayi freshness ki sath nayi suruwaat honi chahiye .. :D
 
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mahadev31

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nandini me apnapan laga nishchal ko achchi baat hai par jivisha ne to usse kuch poochha bhi nahi shayad abhitak ( usne bhi chot dekhi thi ) ,,
jivisha me bachpana hai par wo kisiki care karna nahi jaanti shayad ? ....
 

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waise yeh bhi ek sach hai ki aapki har kahani mein har ek kirdaar ki mahattva hai.. I mean to say ek kirdaar bhi hata diya jaye toh kahani adhuri hai... ab ishi kahani ko dekh lijiye.. ashis, is kirdaar ko ek chhota sa role diya aapne lekin agar woh nahin hota toh kya nandu us situation ko sambhal paati..... haan yeh kah sakte hain ki iske jagah koi aur bikalp hota lekin baat wohin hai ki us jagah us situation sambhal ne ke liye bhi aap ko ek kirdaar lana hota... ya aisa kuch jugad lagana hota...
Ab rahi baat kasak ki.... yeh toh ek aham bhumika nibha rahi hai is kahani mein...
Hum hamesha hero heroine pe hi zyada dhyaan Kendrit karte hain... lekin yeh yaad rakhna chahiye ki baaki kirdaaro bin mul kirdaar kuch bhi nahin.... aur aap sabhi kirdaaro ke sath ek justify karte hain... Isliye aapki kahaniya favorite hai :D (now ismile plz :D)
Kya baat hai ... Bus bus bus .. pata chala aise to meri kahaniyon par pura research kar chuki hongi... Kirdar sabhi aham hote hai... Kabhi kabhi mujhe khud me afsos hota hai yadi maine kisi kirdar ko sahi se justify nahi kar paya to..

Aapne bilkul sahi aaklan kiya hai.. lead charecter lead isliye hote hain kyonki unke aas pass maujood kirdar wo situation paida karte hain .. jis karan wo ahmiyat dikha pate hain, ek chhota sa vikalp bhi bahut aham ho jata hai fir ..

Isliye mai har kirdar ko lekar chalne me viswas rakhta hun ... Isse waise mujhe bhi fayda hota hai.. kabhi bhi mujhe achanak se kisi kirdar ko entro karwana nahi parta.. suspence aur thrill ke liye ek dum se kisi ko samne nahi lekar aana parta..

Aur isi fayde ke maddenajar main surwat me hi kahani ke lagbhag sabhi aham kirdar ko dikhana pasand karta hun .. jaise yahan ke 20 update me hi .. Zoren aur aizem grah aa chuka hai.. unki kya planning hai.. un grahon ke mukhya log bhi...

Atleast reader ko to kam se kam pata rahe kahani itne logon ke bich chal rahi hai.. ab kahani kya chal rahi hai aur sari ghatnayen kyon ho rahi wo pata lagate rahiye..

Thanks a lot .. mujhe khushi hui ki aap ne un baton ko bhi highlight kiya jo main stream comment me kahin gum ho jate hain .. kuch aham charecters .. jinhe wo tawaojjo nahi milti
 
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