Adultery LLL- Love , Life & Luck (tragedy of life)

[The Thinker]

Ekdum dhansu vala apdate mja aa gya
Gaav ki kheti ke pratirup ka shandar varnan bhai
vastav me dosti sabd ka asli matlab vhi samaj sakta hai jiski kabhi sachi dost nibhai ho
Sala yaha to mamla hi ulta pad gya in kamino ke kya khurafat chal rhi hai jo pooja ke mann me avi ki khilaf jeher hilne me tule hue hai
Aur isne to ate hi hamare hero ko egnor mar diya hamare hero ko bhi pooja ki ankho me ankhe dal kar ek bar bhayankar gusse se dekhna chahiye tha
Jindagi bhar ass pass bhi nhi bhatakti aur attitude gand me ghus jata

Ab hoga asli mahabharat jab avi ko sachai pta chalegi

Abe ye kya ye accident vali ladki to ritika nikli
Agla apdate kafi romanchak hoye

By the way nice apdate keep posting

Pooja ko nafrat kisi ne nahi bataya ...hostel me sirf uski maa milne jaati thi ...nafrat ki vajah h uski maa ka avi ko jyada pyar krna ...usko apne se door kr dena ...
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[The Thinker]

Nice update ..ab dipbag singh konpata chle ga avi kya cheek hai...lekin ritika ka accident kyu krwaeya usme?

Next update aane wala h ...usme dekh lijiyega kyu karwaya h
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[Avir]

Nice One

 

[The Thinker]

First of all
mana ki it's too late... par first revo hai is liye congratulations

Kahani - kul milake chaar pariwar leke ye kahani adharit hai....
jahan present time mein bhi kahani chal rahi to flashback bhi chal rahi hai...
waise kayi baar bina flashback kahani hi adhuri reh jaati hai... kyunki flashback ya atit ek aham kadi har us kahani ke liye jisme kayi sare raaz chupe hote hai....
well present mein teen aham samne udhar ke aaye... inme se ek rakesh jiske chalte na chahte huye bhi avi ne flashback kahna suru kiya....
waise kahani ki suruwati daud mein kahani ke Nayak Avi ke chalte jo khaufnaak manjar dekhne ko mili present mein sach unbelievable thi... par thi dilchasp ... par itni saririk shakti, furti aur fighting skills kaha se sikh ke aaya ye bhi gaur talab baat hai....
Khair..... pehle I thought ki ye rakesh kyun in dono chacha Bhatije ki jindagi mein ghuse jaa rahe hai anchahe mehmaan ki tarah... par gaur karne wali baat ye bhi hai ki agar wo kirdaar nahi hota to shayad hum readers flashback bhi padhne ko itni jald nahi milta.... kyunki puri flashback padhne ke baad yahi lage ki asal kahani to yahi chupi hai....

flashback....... kul chaar family ko leke hai...
jinme se shivraj ji ke pariwar positive characters ke roop mein bhumika nibha rahe...
wohi dusri taraf baaki teen pariwar negative kirdaar ke role mein hai waise in pariwaro mein se se do pariwar shivraj ji ke pariwar ke samandhi bhi ban gaye hai... haalaki in pariwaro mein kuch ek positive kirdaar hai...
Jaise naina, avni ratna etc....

Kahani padh ke yahin lage ki kaise log power paise ke liye bhukhe hote hai... kaise apne ahankar ke chalte kisi bhi jaan lene se piche nahi hatte, kaise fake ego ko bachane ke liye pith piche bhi waar karte hai.... ye bhi nahi sochte ki khud ke bhi kayi nuksan ho sakte hai... Kaise khaukhli zidd aur shaan aur ego ke chalte ek bhai apni hi bahan ke ghar ko ujarne pe tule hai... wo bhi nihayati nich kisam ke log ke sath deke.... yeh bhi nahi sochte ki jinko barbad karne jaa rahe hai ya karte aa rahe hai wo bhi apne hi hai....

so...... kahani mein kaafi mod hai, kaafi pehlu hai, aur kirdaaro ki bharmaar wo to puchiye hi mat

isliye kuch aham kadi aur kirdaaro ke leke vichar kar lete hai...
Guru ji - guru hi to hai jo hum sabhi sathik raah dikhaye... gyan ki aur le jaaye agyanata dur kare.... uchit soch vichar ke liye, apne pero par kadhe hone ke liye taiyar kare... jitni bhi baatein balu utni kam hai guru ke liye... thik waise hi hai avi ke guru ji bhi... ek turning point leke aaye wo avi ki life mein... sahi maarg dikhake gaye wo ushe,.... aaj agar avi ki jindagi mein wo na aate to shayad ye kahani itni dilchasp hi na hoti shayad
Hero yani ki Avi/Aravind - kahani ka Nayak... bachpan se hi kuch kamjor sa par guru ji ke kripa se wo pehle jaisa nahi raha... shakti, bal, budhi mein kayio se aage nikal chuka hai...
apno ke liye jaan bhi de de, sabka khayal bhi rakhe har dam .. Jo nyaay ke anusar jo dand diya jaana chahiye usse adhik hi deta hai ...hamesha ek aisi soch kayam rakhne wala Avi jo daya karta hai ..aur shastra bhi uthana jaanta hai ...dharm ki paribhasa ke anusaar galat aur sahi ka faisla karna jaise use achi tarah se aata hai... ..Nayak ke baare mein jitni baatein karu wo kam hi pare par itna jarur hai ki as a reader meri nazar mein wo sach mein is kahani ka Nayak kehlane ke layak hai... har taraf se har gun se paripurn..

Priya - chulbuli natkhat par hai samajhdaar aur sath hi masoomiyat se bharpur... Rohit aur Naina ki eklauti beti....
shayad kisi kaaran vash apne chacha sang kisi door aake aise bas gayi hai.. Maybe pariwar kuch hua ho.. koi ghatana.... I think present time mein Rohit aur Naina jinda nahi hai shayad...
un gundo ne jo utha le gaya to priya ko to dar hi gayi thi... par jab Avi jaisa Nayak ho kahani mein to kahe ki fikar.. even priya uski Bhatiji kam beti ho to kisiki mazal jo nazar uthake bhi dekhe... btw priya meri favorite kirdaaro ki list mein aa chuki hai

Shivraj - ghar ka mukhiya... bahot kuch dekha hai sukh dukh ki ghadi apne jivan kaal mein aur tajurba bhi inko bahot...
Khair.... lekin jo jo dukhad ghatanaye ghati inki life mein phir bhi khud ko sambhaale Kade hai kisi majbut deewar ki tarah sachme kabile tarif hai.. sachme us hawali ke mul niv ke taur pe khade utre har waqt, har lamha, har haalat mein...

Raghubiri devi- inke baare mein bas yahi kahu ki agar ye na hoti shayad Shivraj ji ka samast pariwar kab ka bhikhar jata... ek dori mein bhand ke rakhne mein jo yogdaan kabhi patni ban ke to kabhi maa banke to kabhi devrani banke to kabhi saas banke ya kabhi mukhya ke roop mein, sach mein apne apme bemisaal hai..

Nayika /rajni yaani - khatarnak par shenhmayi....
mana ki shayad kayi heroines ho is story pe par meri nazar mein yahi one & only lead heroine hai...

yahan pe ek important baat... jo positive kirdaar na rahe ab, unke baare mein ullekh nahi hogi....
Haan kyunki jo maare gaye apni hi galtiyo, asavdhani aur beparwahi ki wajah...

Raju - dost ke liye jaan l bhi sakta hai aur de bhi sakta hai.... true friend... waise kaafi dilchasp aur hanshmukh bacha hai

Padma - mamtamay jo apne bete avi ke liye kya kuch nahi kiya... jo balidaan di hai usne sach mein apne apme bemisaal hai..
Ye wo kirdaar hai hai jo saamaj ko ek sikh de jaaye.... Agar Padma jaisi maa ho to aur beta ho avi jaisa to ye sautela jaisa apshabd hi gayab ho jaaye saamaj se...

The great Naina - bas itni si baat hai ki Naina mahan hai.. iske samne baaki ke kirdaar sab chai kam paani hai..

Omkar - my favorite kirdaar... bhale hi sidha sidha bol deta hai par jo bolta hai wo sach ke sath sath aane wale kal ki baatein bhi include hoti hai un baaton mein... ek tarah se inki baat maani jaaye to shayad pariwar mein koi afat hi na aaye I think....

Shubham - ye bhi kaafi interesting kirdaar hai... baaki bhaiyo se agal.. hanshmukh....

Khair ye wo kuch ek kirdaar jo meri nazar sabse zyada dilachasp hai....

( negative characters ke baare mein vichar vimarsh karne se pehle mujhe aapse permission chahiye The Thinker sahab )

1) shivraj ji rajao ki tarah rasuk that baat tha us pure ilake mein apne bete aur bete saman Bhatije ke marne ke baad is kadar kamjor ho gaye ki ab bas sadharan se thakur hi reh gaye... upor se omkar jo taane maarte hai so alag... par shayad avi purana daud wapas lauta de apne dada ji ko...

2) pariwar mein pehle jaisi khushi ka mahol nahi raha lekin shayad ab laut aaya hai avi ke roop mein.... par kab tak

3) raghubiri ji jis baat ko leke dar rahi hai... aane walo dino mein jo hone wala hai usko leke chintit hai wo koi jhuth nahi hai balki ek tarah se sach hai... phir se ladayi hogi... khoon bahega shayad inme se kuch ek apne bhi ho..

4) avi jo bachpan se tarasta aa raha tha dada dadi ke liye akhir ka mil hi gaya sath hi bhara pura Pariwar bhi... Par ab bhi is baat se anjan ki uski asli maa koun hai... aur dusri baat ab bhi puri tarike se apne family ko accept nahi kar paya hai... Ye bhi gaur karne wali baat hai..

5) avi anjane apne hi bhayio se lad baitha yahan tak ki apne baldev se bhi... jo uske bade dada ji hai...

6) sabse aham kadi to guru ji rahe avi ke jindagi mein, utni hi aham bhumika padma bhi nibha rahi hai uski life mein...

6) apne bhai aur bhabhi naina ki shaadi karane ke chakkar mein apni jaan tak dene mein piche nahi hata....
waise dekha jaye to ravindar se is mamle bilkul hatke dono bhai mein bharti prem atut hai...

7) villain logis....
Ab inke baare mein kya hi kahu...
Bas itni si baat hai ki...is kahani ke sab ke sab villain logis gatar ki paidaiyash hai fakir jhole mein jane kounsa dana kiska... yeh hai in villain logis ke parichay .. aur nahi
jab tak The Thinker sahab permission nahi dete tab tak koi baat nahi in villain logis ko leke ........... Well shayad isliye abhi ke liye ye review adhuri hai..

8) insects ka tadka do teen jagah pe dikhne ko mili par...
yaar ye megha to sach mein tharki nikli... jab jaan gayi hai ki avi uska bhatija hai hai phir bhi aage physical relationship rakhna chahti hai.. Kamal hai.. kya gajab ki insects lober aurat hai

9) aur wo Radha ko shayad insects ka badha aaya ho isliye wo bhi dore daalne lagi apne hi bhai avi pe
aur seema to ushi line mein kadi hai

Khair..........

Sabse zyada pasandida kirdaar?

RAJU...

dosti kaise nibhana hai koi is kirdaar se sikhe aur comedy... uff... hansh hansh pet mein dard ho jaye..
Btw priya, padma aur omkar bhi hai favorite ki list mein par is kirdaar Raju ki baat alag hai..... Kamal ki sense of humor hai.....

Kahani ka koi sabse zyada Pasandida bhag aur kyun?

well.... pasandida bhag bahot sare hai par sabse zyada pasandida bhag jab Avi aur uske pariwar wale ek ho gaye.. actually puri story mein ishi baat to intezaar thi mujhe ki kab avi apne dada dadi se milne wala hai.... warna to us rohit ne kabhi milne hi nahi deta avi ko apne hi pariwar se..

Kuch vishesh prakar ke drishya likhe gaye the... udaharan ke liye koi dukhad ya tanavpurn drishya?

sukh dukh do pehlu hote hai... Story ke kirdaaro ke liye bhi aur humari jindagi mein bhi...
well is kahani mein ab sabse tanavpurn drishya jab priya kidnapped ho gayi thi aur jab ushe wo log maarne wale the...
sabse zyada dukhad jab jab bina wajah padma ji ko maarte the ravindra...

Kya kahani ne ab tak hanshaya ya rulaya?
mujhe rula de aisi to situation paida nahi huyi hai ab tak is kahani mein...

Haan kuch ek situation jarur hai jaha dil kholke hanshne ko jee kare....
Jaise ki first time jab Raju avi ke sath guru ji se milne gaya tha tab uska wo dialogue...
"Acharya & yog guru ..baba shri jamyang Sheri ....
Bhutan ke matth me 2 saal ,china me 4 saal ,japan me 1 saal , aur nepal me 6 saal ....baba hai yaa aatanki ....kahi tik hi nahi raha """ padhke main hansh hansh ke lot pot
sach mein writer sahab Kamal hi kar diya aapne to...

Koi guess kahani ko leke?

well abhi nahi....
STORY COMPLETE HONE KE BAAD

Kya kirdaar vastavik lage? ya nahi lage...... kyun?
Yep..
saamaj aisi ghatanaye ghatti rahti hai... lalach, hinsa, jalan, paise power ke liye kisi bhi had tak jana.. shayad writer sahab inhi baaton pe gaur karte huye ye kahani likhne ki koshish ki hai apne jaaduyi shabdo ki jariye jo sach mein kabile tarif hai..

Kya kahani ne ant tak jure rahne ke liye majboor kiya...?

Ji bilkul.... kahani jis dilchasp tarike se likh ke prastut ki hai wo sach mein adbhut aur nirala hai....
suruwat se leke ab tak har ek mod ke sath...
readers se yahin request hai is kahani ek baar jarur padhe aur apne sameekshaye aur mat lekhak sahab ke samne rakhe ki kaisi lagi kahani.. Sachme bahot hi meaningful kahani hai...

Kuch mann ki baatein - - maana ki anyaay aur julm ke khilaaf awaaz uthani chahiye lekin badle ki aag bahot buri fitarat hoti hai... kabhi kabhi ye aag pehle insaaniyat ko khatam kare aur phir insaan ko... isliye kuch bhi karne pehle ek sathik roop se hosh-o-hawas mein jarur mann mein hi vichar kar le... ya apne ghar ke bado se Salah mashwara kar le... waise un pariwar ke un bade log salah leni chahiye jo uchit vichar aur salah de sake.. jaise raghubiri ji ... I think baakiyo se zyada wo uchit aur sathik salah de sakti hai .

ant mein kuch shabd writer sahab ke liye - -meri nazar mein jis udasya se aapne yeh kahani likhke hum readers ke samaks pesh ki hai suruwat se ab tak usme aap kamyab rahe... chaahe sakaratmak ho ya nakaratmak sabhi kirdaaro ke karya ko, julm ko, dusmani ko, maa na hoke bhi apni mamta ki saaya tale ek bachhe ko is kabil bana dena ki is saamaj mein khud ke pero khada ho sake.. , ek guru aur sishya ko lekar jikar, , unki bhavnao ko , unke dukh dard ko, unke jivan sangharsh aur jo muheem uthayi un kirdaaro ne anyaay ke khilaaf.. in sabhi ko aapne sathik mod, sathik roop se darsane ki kosish ki hai.. jisme aap sampurn roop se sarthak rahe ab tak... hope aage bhi rahenge...
aise hi aage bhi likhte rahiye aur readers ka manoranjan karte rahiye...

Shayad is revo pe story related bahot si baatein ullekh nahi hai... hope ki aane wale reviews pe ullekh kar du...


Brilliant story line with awesome writing skills The Thinker sahab...

Aapne to poora update hi likh daala .......
Vaise aapka review sabse acha laga mujhe ...aur permission ke liye aapko jarurat nahi honi chahiye ...main apni story me ye baat jarur kehta hu kisi ko daubt ho ya koi baat ho keh dijiye ....aur kisi jaat biradari se bair nahi h mujhe ...na aap rakhna agar is story me bura dikhaya gaya h kisi ko ... ...main kisi ki cmnt ka bura maan kar bhagne walo me se nahi hu ...
Maine likhna b isliye start kiya kyuki kuch writer apne aapko bhagwan mante hai ...unhe readers ki ijjat karna nahi aata ...kosis yahi h ki is site per mera naam bhi avi123 (main meri family mera gaon ) ki tarah yaad kiya jaaye ...
Jo writer mujhe ache lagte hai main unse kuch seekhta hu ....baaki sab theek h lekin aapki ek baat ajeeb lagi ...
Story ko story ki tarah lena ... aapne fight ko shayad reality se joda ..dekhiye south action movie ki tarah kahani h ...varna in area me bhala kaha hota hai aisa ...speed se matlab itna hi tha ...bejhijhak kisi ki jaan lelena ...baaki speed kaha se aapne kahani me dekha hoga ....bas yahi laga jo aapne miss kiya ....guruji ne avi ko vo move sikhai h jo unhone kisi ko nahi sikhai ..sikhate ve usko b nahi lekin majboori thi unki.aur guruji main character me aayenge ...inka sath end tak h ... flashback jarur chal raha h lekin avi ko sirf vahi dhoondh rahe hai ...aur ravindra ko bhi unhone hi dhoondha hai (ye hint hai ) ...

Baaki aapne jo jo bataya h uske liye bahut aabhar ... aapne story ko dilse padha h ...iske liye dil se dhanyawad ...

Incest ki baat maine isme isliye daali hai taaki incest lovers ka bhi isme dhyan bana rahe lekin ye sab ek matraa ke anusar hi thik rahega ...finally to jaise movie me dikhate h ki koi poochta h aur hero batata h ...rakesh ko sirf utna bataya jayega jitna main h .... relation nahi ...sex ki baate kisi bujurg se nahi ki jaati ...
Lekin maine story flashback me chalane ka socha tha isliye is tarah se bataya ...main busy insaan hu lekin is site ka regular bhi hu ... isliye cmnt krke batata rehta hu ...koi celebrity nahi hu jo koi meri majaak le lega ...site se bahar sab ajnabi hai ....isliye naam b nahi bataye ...per maine apna area khola hua h main kaha se hu ...

Engima bhai se bahut kuch seekha hai. ..unka fan hu ...avi bhai ke baad SGP bhai ka fan hua tha ...uske baad ye ek bhai aise h jinhone mujhe sach me dikhaya life kya se kya ho skti h ....

Ab aata hu ganv k hisaab per ...chunav chal rahe h ...kal mere pados ka ek mandbuddhi aadmi tha jo sharab b peeta tha lekin usko ganv me pradhan pad ke liye chunavi mudda banane k liye raat ko peetkar maar daala ... parivaar ne dar se report b nahi ki aur usko jala diya ...jabki body per nishaan saaf h gale ki haddi tooti h reedh ki taraf se ...is saal me 4th case h aisa jisme police involve nahi h ....to ganv ka mahol aisa hota hai ... isliye kahani ko aisa mod de paaya hu ....kyuki main jaanta hu log kaha tak jaa skte hai ....


Isliye yaha apni vichar rakh deta hu ....main khud kabhi highlight tha ...maine ek story shuru ki thi jise maine sirf isliye band kiya taaki koi mera jannewala usko padhke mujhse poochne na aaye ...maine reality likhi thi usme kuch mix krke ...sex thoda badhaya tha bas ...baaki sab 90% real likh diya tha ...jo baad me mujhe meri galti lagi kyuki usme ganv ki ladkiyan b involved thi ...

Xossip per bhi tha main ab is per bhi hu ...
Aap bejhijhak revo dijiyega ...mujhe likhne me aashani hoti h ...kisi character ko bhool jau tab cmnt mujhe yaad dila dete hai

Dhanyawad ek Baar phirse ,

 

[The Thinker]

Nice update
Congratulations for complete 100pages

Thanks

 

[ragish7357]

Update -22






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"""waah ...ye jagah to sachmuch kamaal hai ...kitni shanti hai yahan ...in pedo ke beech me ye talaab ...aur iska neela pani ...pine yogya to nahi h lekin saaf dikh rha hai ..aur ye chidiya alag alag tarah ki in pedo me ...kitni hariyali aur thandi hawa se bhari ye jagah jannat se kam nahi hai ""Avi ne lambi saans kheechte hue is jagah ki poori halat byaan kr di ...jaise usko yaha aake sach me bahut jyada sukoon mila ho ..ritika bhi jaise khus ho rhi thi ki uska yaha avi ko laana safal rha ...koi bhale juban se kehta ho ki mujhe tareef pasand nahi ...vo bas ek complement hota hai jabki hum chahte h samne wala tareef kare ....

"""Hmmm...main isi vajah se yaha aati rehti hu ...yaha aajtak mujhe koi khatra nahi hua ... lekin ek baar dar gai thi ..ek bhalu pani peene aaya tha ya machchli pakadne lekin us din dar laga ...main khadi rahi hath me.kanpte hue bandook liye lekin usne mujhe kuch na kaha ...aur dekh kar chala gaya ...is jagah se mujhe bahut pyar hai ""

Ritika bhi hontho per smile liye kuch jyada khusi ke sath chehek rahi thi ...lekin avi ne jaise usko ek dwand me daal diya
Avi : mujhe yaha laane ki vajah jaan skta hu ...

Ritika : are tum ache ladke ho socha tumhe bhi ye jagah dikha du ...isse jyada kya ho skta hai

Avi : private cheeje usi ke sath share krte h jisse hum connect ho jaate h emotionally ...ab tum batao aakhir tumhe mujhme interest kyu jaga ..

Ritika : sach batau to main us din jab tum pehli bar mile ..mujhe laga tum chor ho lekin personality se lagte nahi ...to main thodi rude hui ..lekin jab tumne meri help ka kaha tab maine hath me pehli hi gun rakha tha sorry ...lekin jaruri tha ...tab tumne car ka gate band kiya ..aur chale gaye ...uske baad main ghar me gai aur mujhe dhyan aaya ki main important file to office me bhool aai hu ...tab main vaha se nikli to dekha door se tum jaa rahe ho paidal main tumhari taraf aane wali thi ki ek dum se ek bike ne tumhe takkar maari phir ve log tumhe marne aaye tab maine bhi gun nikali aur car se utar gai lekin ek dum se tumne jo unki hawa banai main chaunk gai ...vaise tum unko jyada bhi maar skte the lekin maara nahi iski vajah main nahi jaanti ...phir tum bus adde gaye ..tab bhi main tumhare peeche thi ... uske baad raat ko mujhe neend nahi aayi ..baar baar tumhara chehra meri aankho me aata ...phir tum us din tiptop hero jaise sadak per khade the ..man me aaya aisa fighting skill to ek commando me hota hai to pooch liya ..aage jaake tumne un ladkiyo ki raksha karke bata diya ki tum hifajat krte ho ...isliye main aur bhi jyada impress ho gai ...aur aaj tum kismat se mil gaye to yaha le aayi ..vaise shaam hone me abhi samay h lekin jungle me andhera jaldi ghir aata hai ...chalo chalte hai ..ab shayad main aur baat na kar pau ..isse aage abhi pls kuch mat poochna ...


Avi uski saari baat sunke samajh gaya ki uska sochna galat nahi tha ...lekin pyar krne ki ye koi vajah nhi thi ... avi aisa isliye soch rha tha ki jo feel usko rajni ko dekh kr aaya vo ritika ko dekh kar nahi aaya lekin ritika ki feeling ki kadra usko karni padegi ...

Avi.: Bas last ek baat

Ritika : bolo

Avi : agar main kahu ki main tumhara nahi ho skta tab

Ritika ye sunke pehle muskurai aur uski aankho ke kono me aanshu chhalak aaye ...lekin side hoke kaha ki """ye to kismat hai na ...isme hum aur tum kya kar skte hai ...per itna hamare hath me ...chand pyar ke lamhe sath me bitane se shayad vo bhi mana na kare ...tum ek baar uski permission jarur lena ...isse mujhe jindagi jeene me aashani hogi .."",

Avi : main vaada karta hu ...main tumhare sath rahunga ...jab hum un lamho ko jeena chahenge ...jab tum kaho ...

Ritika : bina usse pooche to galat hai na ...

Avi : vo agar mujhse pyar krti h to meri khusi me khus hogi naa ki mujhe pabandiyo me bandhke rakhegi ...

Ritika : hmmm ...chalo ab chalte hai

Avi aur ritika jab car ke pass aate hai tab unpe koi najar rakh rha hota hai ...aur pal pal ki jankari de rha hota hai ...avi aur ritika car me baithke jab nikal chalte hai tab avi ki najar pad jaati hai ki ve kisi ki najro me hai ...avi is jagah kaafi tej rehta tha ...vo ritika se kehta hai ki yaha se vo khud chala jayega ...usko thoda kaam hai tab ritika kehti bhi h ki vo ghar chhod degi tum kaam nibtao lekin avi bahana kr deta hai pata nhi kitna time lag jayega ...

Avi car se utar jaata hai ...dekhta hai ki jo car unka peecha kr rhi thi vo ab ruk gai ...avi ko santosh hota hai ki vo car avi ke peeche thi na ki ritika ke ...
Avi ab khali jagah dekhta hai aur usko thodi door sadak se niche jaata hua ek khali rasta dikhai deta hai ... avi us aur chal deta hai ..car bhi vahi aake ruk jaati hai ...avi dheeme kadmo se chalta rehta hai tab peeche se aawaj aati hai

"""Abe o hero ...ruk ...bada hero bana firta hai aaj herogiri teri gand me ghusata hu """

Vo 6 bande the driver sahit ...car se utarte hi unke hatho me ladki aur lohe ki rodes thi ...ve avi ki taraf aa rahe the ...avi khada unhe dekh rha tha ...ek baar ko to ve bhi soche ki banda bhaag nahi raha ...lekin unka kaam hi yahi tha isliye aage aa rhe the ...jaise hi ek aage aake bhaaga aur avi ko maarne ke liye hath uper kiya ...jisme rod thi ...avi ne niche baith ke uske lund ke uper thoda pet se niche ek mukka maara ...vo itna jor daar nikla ki us aadmi ne apne hath rod chhodke seedhe vahi rakhe ...aur niche baith kar ek side ko gir gaya .. baaki bhi ruk gaye ...avi ab khada ho gaya ...

Dusre ne usko dekhte hue aake avi per hamla kiya ...lekin avi yaha bhi chooka nahi ...pehle ki rod uthake uski tango me aisi maari ki ekdum tange jawab de gai vo bhi niche gira vaise hi ...jidhar se rod lagi thi ...ab 2 ne avi per hamla kiya ...avi ne niche jhuk kar apne aap ko bachaya aur uthke ek ke sir me maari rod ...jisse uske hath sir per aaye aur vo behos ho gaya ...last ke 2 hi halat kharab ho gai aur ve chillane lage lekin bhage nahi .. unhone bhi avi ki taraf bhagke avi ko maarne ki kosis ki lekin 4th jo 3rd ki sath usne avi ki kamar me ek danda jama diya ...avi ne uske sir me bhi rod de maara ...uski bhi aankhe fati aur niche gira behosh ...

5th and 6th banda abhi bhi danda aur rod ke sath the aur avi ke chakkar kaat rahe the ki ek ne jaise harkat ki tab avi ne apne hath ki rod ko peeche turn kiya ...jo avi ke peeche the uske sir me rod lagi ...aur phir samne wali ki kanpati per ...ab vaha per 2 behsoh aur 4 buri halat me the ...avi ne ek sahi sa tha usko pakda baithke ...

"""Kisne bheja ??""

Banda : bhai bhai ... ritika madam ke baap ne hamko bola tha tumhe maarne k liye ...hame jaane do bhai ...hum to bas paiso ke kiye kaam krte hai

Avi : kisi ki bhi jaan le loge agar koi paise de ..aajtak na najane kitne logo ko maar diya hoga ...main jaan leke rakshas nahi banna chahta lekin tum jaiso ko sahi salamat chhodna aur bhi jindagi barbad karne jaisa hai ..

Ye kehke avi ne unke hath todne shuru kr diye. ..aur cheekhein goonj rahi thi ...jab avi ne ritika ko dekha jo sadak per khadi ye sab na jaane kabse dekh rahi thi ...vo ab vaise hi khadi hui thi ...
Avi uske pass gaya aur uska hath pakad kar gaadi me baithaya
""Gaadi chalao ... mujhe chalani nahi aati ""

Ritika bas dari sehmi si car chalane lagi lekin uska dhyan avi per tha ...car dagmagati hui chal rahi thi tab avi ne usko car ko side lagane bola jab ritika ne car side lagai tab avi ne ritika ka chehra dono hath me liya aur uske hotho per apne hoth rakh diye ...jisse ritika ki aankhe aur bhi jyada badi ho gai . .inka kiss thoda lamba chala ..jab avi ne kiss toda tab ritika ne najre jhuka li thi ....

Ritika ab dar nahi rahi thi ...usko ab avi per pyaar aa rha tha ...avi ne kaha ritika ko ek baar phir car rokne ka kaha
""Bura naa mano ek baat kahu ?"",
Ritika ne apni maun swikriti de di ...aur avi ko dhyan se dekhne lagi ..tab avi ne apni baat kehni shuru ki
""Tumhe shayad bura lage ...lekin ye gunde tumhare papa me bheje the ...aur main ab unse milna chahta hu ..."""

Ritika to sunkar ek baar ko chaunki kyuki uske pita aisa bhi kar skte hai ye kaise ho skta hai ...lekin usko ab avi per jyada bharosa tha kyuki avi uske baap se seedhe milne ka bol rha tha

Ritika : papa to kisi se milte b nahi h ...mujhpe hi call aata h kai baar to ...tum kaise miloge

Avi : unki beti ka sawal hai ..jo company me aadhe share rakhti hai ..ab ye mat poochna mujhe kaise pata ..bhale main tumhe abhi jaanta nahi sahi se ..

Ritika : okay ...per papa aisa kyu karenge

Avi : vahi Jake pata kar lena


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"""Vo ladki aakhir thi kaun ...tujhe nahi lagta jaise humne usko kahi dekha hai ..."",
Rajni kajal se abhi bhi pooch rahi thi ..aur gusse me bhi thi thoda ...usko raat bhar sahi se neend nahi aayi thi ...subah hi college gai aur thoda time bina vajah aaj class me spend kiya ... phir kajal ke sath uske ghar chali gai ...

"""Yaar lag to mujhe bhi rahi thi humne usko kahi dekha hai ...arreeee tu bhi vahi soch rhi h jo main soch rhi hu ??"",,,,
Kajal ne aankhe badi krte hue kaha jaise usko kuch yaad aa gaya ho ki vahi thi na 3 baar best bussiness woman ka award jeet chuki hai aur log uske jaisa banna chahte hai ...kabhi kabhi TV per bhi advertisement aata hai ...

Rajni : yaar isi liye usne idhar ka area chuna hai kyuki vo ab khulke nahi ghoom sakti aur idhar ke log usko jaante nahi ...right

Kajal : lekin avi ko vo kaise jaanti hai ?

Rajni : ye to pata lagana hoga ...agar mujhe jara bhi shaq hua na tab dekhna main uski kaisi halat krti hu

Kajal : vo sab baad me pehle pata karo ... akahirkaar vo ladki avi se milti kaise hai ..kya rishta h unka ...kahi avi usko paiso ke kiye to ?

Rajni : chup ...agar vo aisa hota tab mujhse mana nahi krta ..main paise ke sath power b rakhti huv

Kajal : haan ye baat to hai ...


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"""Sir apne cabin me baithe hai ...aap ja skti hai """
Jab ritika ne poocha ki uske papa office me hai ya nahi tab ek bahar baithi receptionist ne kaha to ritika ko gussa aa gaya Kyuki avi ne jo bhi kiya usko acha laga lekin jab baat uske papa ki aayi tab vo thodi confuse ho gai ...usko jaldi thi isliye 3 ghante ke safar me avi bas sota raha aur ritika gusse me car daudati rahi jaise uski driver ho

""Tujhse poochne ki jarurat nahi h mujhe..chalo avi ...papa uper hai """
Ritika jaldi me thi jabki avi shant kr rha tha khudko kyuki jis aadmi se koi dushmani nahi usko samjhane se kaam chalega ya nahi kyuki uske pass paisa hai to kam hi samajh aayega ghamand ko uper rakhte hue ...
Ritika jaake bina knock kiye gate open krti h jaha per Dhananjay mehra ek file me nigaah gadaye hue baitha tha ...

"""Aao beti ...ye kaun hai ? ""
Dhananjay apni beti ko yaha dekhke delhi me chaunk gaya kyuki uski beti usse kam hi milti thi bussiness ke silsile ki vajah se lekin aaj bina bataye vo aa gai ...koi vajah hogi lekin jab nigaah avi per padi ...vo ek dum se bola ...tab ritika ne kaha
"""Papa iske uper aaj hamla hua hai ...kuch gundo ne ispe pehle najar rakhi phir isko maarna chaha """

Dhananjay ye sunke chaunk gaya ki usne isi ladke ko maarne ki kosis karwayi hai ...lekin ab uska physic aur chehra dekhke usko lag rha tha ki usne bina jaane apne aadmiyo ko bola ...usko aur aadmi bhejne the jo isko maar daalte ..abhi ye soch hi rha tha uski soch bhang hui


""Poochenge nahi papa ...un logo ka kya hua ...??"",
Ritika ne jab chutki bajake kaha tab Dhananjay to bas jo khoya tha ek dum se bola
""Han haan kya hua ?,"",

Ritika : papa isne unko is tarah maara hai ki ab ve 6 month se pehle thik nahi honge ...vaise umeed nahi h ki dobara ve kabhi apne hath se kaam kar payenge ...

Dhananjay : kya baat kr rhi ho beti ...mere sabse behatreen gunde the ve log

Ritika : papa avi behtar nahi h ...aapne ye acha nahi kiya

Dhananjay : beti main is ladke ke liye mana nahi karunga ...ye chahe to meri company me.job kr skta hai

Ritika : aap aisa kaise soch sakte hai papa ...ye avi hai

Dhananjay : to saaf kaho na ..iski nigaah tumhari daulat per hai ...

Avi jo kabse in dono ki baat chupchaap sun rha tha aur apne aapko shant kr rha tha ...usne dekha ki ritika ka baap apni beti ko dekhne ke baad bhi apni makkari se baaj nahi aa rha tab avi aage aaya aur ritika ko ek side karke Dhananjay ke kandhe per hath rakha... Dhananjay to jaise dab sa gaya tha ...

"""O uncle ..aap honge bade bussiness man ...main apni marji se jeeta hu ...aur apni family ke aage jhukta hu ...varna mujhe jhukane wala aajtak paida nahi hua ...aur jo tumne cheap harkat karwayi h ...main chahu to abhi ke abhi tumhara namo nishan mita kar rakh dunga ...laash b nhi milegi ...lekin guruji kehte the ki mujhe rakshas nahi banna hai ...lok kalyan karna hai ... isliye thoda hadd me raho ...vajah kya thi jo tumne mujhe marwane ka plan kiya ?"",

Avi ki aawaj me garmi dekh dhananjay kanp gaya lekin ritika jo sab sun rahi thi usko bura lag raha tha ...usko pata tha avi kya kar skta hai lekin apne baap ki beijjati hote dekh usko bhi taav aa gaya
""Avi chhodo papa ko ...tumhari himmat kaise hui mere papa se aise baat krne ki ...samajhte kya ho khud ko jo papa ko dhamki de rhe ho ...??"",
Avi ritika ki baat sunke bas muskura diya aur gate tak gaya ...phir ek dum peeche mudke khada ho gaya
""Mr. Dhananjay mehra ...tumharu problem solve ...ab aage se mere raste me aane ki jurrat na karna ..tumhari beti ab tumhare pass hai ...""",,

Avi ye kehke nikal gaya ...ritika shocked usko jaate hue dekhti rhi ...peeche led me cemera lage the uspe uski nigaah thi aur avi bahar niche jaake ek riskhsaw pakad kr nikal gaya ...idhar ritika aur Dhananjay ek dusre ko dekh rhe the ...
Jabki ritika ki aankho me ab aanshu aane lage the ... dhananjay bas apni beti ko rota hua dekh rha tha ...

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"""Aye sushila ..jaldi dekh seema ka hath jal gaya ...ye ladki bhi na ...kaha dekhti h aur kaha baat krti h jaldi baldev ji ko dekh ...vo yahi honge ...ye subham aur ajay aur ajeet dekh khet per hai kya ...isko le chalo ...ye jala kaise ...""",

Raghubiri poore ghar me chilla rahi thi ...jiski aawaj sunke sabhi ikatthi ho gai aur seema ki halat dekh sabke ankho me aanshu aa gaye ...hua ye tha ki vo soch me gum thi ...jo baate itne din se parivaar me chal rhi thi ...unhe sunke usko bhi ashcharya ho rha tha ki is parivaar ka ek hissa bahar bhi rehta hai aur vo itna famous bhi hai ki uske baare me ve log baate kr rhe h jo itje jyada busy rehte hai ...

""Meri bachchi ye kya karwa liya tune ...kitni baar kaha dekh kar kaam kiya karna ..."""
Sushila ne seema ko dekhte hi bola ...lekin seema to jalan ko dabaye baithi thi...usko sabki najro se dar jo lag rha tha ...aakhir usko sab dekh rhe the aur aisa hi hota hai ...jab sab gher lete hai tab insaan nervous ho hi jaata hai ...
Aanan fanan me seema ko baldev aur subham ek pass ke hospital me le jaate hai ...tab us hospital me ek doctor hota hai jo kehta hai ki hath jyada jal gaya hai lekin aap ek kaam kr skte hai ...aap bas paiso ka bandobast kijiye ... doctor nahi jaanta tha ki vo thakur parivaar se baat kar rha hai ...

""'doctor paise ki chinta mat kar ...jitna kahega utna dunga ...isko pehle jaisa kar """
Baldev parivar per jab aati hai tab bahut jyada gussa hota hai ...jis din ye hadd par kar dega ...us din shayad hi kisi ko pata ho lekin itna bhi taqatwar nahi hai ye ...vaise hai to hathi hi ...aur doctor dar bhi gaya ...ab doctor ko ye baat pareshan kar rhi thi ki usne haan kar to di ...lekin uska dost under training hote hue bhi specialist hai kyuki jaha ve padhte the vaha per teacher ka chaheta sirf ek student tha ..."Rohit"

Ab doctor rohit ko call krta hai aur batata h ki usko jaldi aana hoga varna bhai thakur uski jaan le lega ...rohit bhi apne dost ke liye haan kr deta hai ...bina ye jaane ki aakhir vo hai kaun ...per ye baat alag h ki rohit ko jab pata chalta tab rohit dauda chala aata ... rohit bhi apna ek cab book krke nikal padta hai ...

Rohit jab ander jaata hai tab apna huliya operation ke liye tayyar karke sabhi ko bulwata hai aur aur treatment start kr deta hai ...gharwalo ko bhi pata chal jaata hai ki koi naya doctor hai ...subham bechaara bhaagdaud me laga rehta hai ...usko bhi bahut jyada chinta thi ...4 ghante lag jaate hai ...kaafi skin jali hui thi ...lekin rohit ne apne teacher se seekha hua sab aaj sabit kr diya tha ...

Jab rohit bahar aata h tab baldev phir se usi aawaj me bolne lagta hai lekin jaise hi rohit mask alag krta hai tab rohit ki shakal thodi ajeet se milti dekh vo chaunk jaata hai ... fark aankho aur naak ka tha bas ..varna hoobahu ajeet dikhta ...baldev chup ho jaata hai ...sabhi usko dekh rahe the ... raghubiri bhi aaj kho gai thi dekhkar ki ye doctor kyu apna sa lagta hai ...jabki sushila is baat per dhyan nahi deti ...aur rohit ki taraf chal deti hai ...

"""Doctor sahab ab kaisi hai vo ...uska hath pehle jaisa ho jayega na ... doctor sahab bataiye na ""

Rohit to pehle hi hang hua pada tha jab uski najar baldev per padi thi ...per jab raghubiri ko dekha to rohit bilkul jamm gaya ...peeche se ek hath uske kandhe per aaya ...
""Yaar tune to bilkul hadd kardi rohit ...itna bada kaam tune aise kr diya ...wakai sir ko tujhme vo dikha jo hamme kabhi tha hi nahi ...maan gaye bhai ...tera talent ""

Doctor aaya aur apne dost rohit ko badhai dene ke sath tareef krne laga ...aur nikal gaya vo ...rohit ki jaise tabdra bhang hui vo raghubiri ke pass gaya aur bola "" daadi namastey """

Raghubiri bhi uske sir per hath rakh deti hai ...aur ashirwaad diya ...aur dekhne lagi ...ki ye ladka usko kaise jaanta hai
""Beta tum kaun ho ? ..aur hame kaise jaante ho ?"",
Rohit ab sochne lagta hai ki uska parivaar uske samne hai aur vo kaise bataye ki main kaun hu ...jubaan sath nahi de rhi lekin bataye bhi to kya ...itne saal vo kyu nahi aaya ...aata to pehle b aa skta tha ...

Rohit : vo maaji ...aap meri dadi jaisi dikhti hai ...isliye apne aapko rok nahi paaya

Raghubiri : pata nahi kyu beta ...lekin mujhe lagta h jaise tum bhi mere apne ho

Rohit : maa ji ye to ittefaq ho skta hai ...dono ki soch ek jagah chal rhi hai lekin maa ji main to Delhi me rehta hu ...bahut din yaha ho gaye h isliye parivaar ki yaad aa rhi hai

Raghubiri : beta jab yahi ho tab aao kisi din ghar ... apni is dadi ko mayoos na karna ...main intejaar karungi

Rohit : maaji mera bhai bhi yahi aaya hua hai ..arvind

Arvind ka naam sunte hi raghubiri sahit subham aur sushila ke sath sath baldev bhi chaunk gaya...baldev bhale shant rehta ho lekin usko khabar sab rehti thi ...bas ye nahi pata tha ki uske pauto ki pitaai b kr chuka hai ..baldev jo kaafi der se dono ko dekh rha tha alag bench per baitha hua vo uth khada hua aur rohit ke kandhe per hath rakhta hua bola

Baldev : beta shayad ham us ladke ko jaante hai ...dekha nahi h lekin ye naam hamne bhi suna hai ...aap jarur usko ghar leke aana ...hame milne ki gujarish hai ...vaise maine aajtak ye baat kisi se nahi kahi hai

Subham : dada ji milna to main bhi chahta hu ...bas fark ye hai aapki milne ki vajah nahi pata lekin mujhe jarur pata h mujhe kyu milna h usse ..

Subham ka tevar thode badle hue the ...dara hua tha vo is naam se lekin ego samne aa rha tha ..kyuki inhe koi peet nahi paaya tha aur us raat ek akele ladke ne challenge deke peeta baad me naam bhi bata gaya ...
Doctor aa gaya ab inke beech ...agar baat aage badhti to na jaane kya kya baat nikalti lekin yahi ruk gai ...

"""Sir aap apni beti ko le jaa skte hai ...ab unki halat pehle se behtar hai ...aur maine dawaiyan likh di hai ...patti badalne ki abhi jarurat nahi h lekin aap unhe ek hafte baad le aaiyega ... surgery hui to dekhna padega ...thode nishan cream se chale jayenge """

Rohit : gentamicin b likh dena ...agar kabhi thodi chees lagi to use lagale ...jale hue ka asar h to time lag skta hai

Doctor ne haami bhari aur chala gaya ...rohit ne jaane ki aagya li aur aane ka vaada bhi kiya ...rohit aaj khus tha apni family ko dekh kar ...lekin ab is asamnjas me tha ki maa ko bataye ya nahi ...agar gharwalo ko uske baare me pata chala tab shivraj dada aur bhi jyada nafrat karenge ...kyuki sushma mar chuki thi ... Ravindra ki laparwahi na hoti tab vo jinda hoti ... shivraj dada ye kabhi bardast na karenge ...

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Avi auto me baith kar ghar ke liye nikal gaya ...jab ghar pahucha tab dekha ghar ka taala laga hua hai to avi vahi baitha raha ...ek family car se aai aur apne ghar ke samne kisi ko baitha dekhkar jaldi avi ke pass aaye ...

""Kaun ho bhai aur yaha kyu baithe ho ? ..kisse milna hai ?"",
Us aadmi ne jab poocha to avi hairani se use dekh rha tha aur phir ek dum se bol pada
""Aap kaun hai ...ye mera ghar hai ...aap bataiye aap yaha kyu aaye hai ?"",

Ab vo aadmi samajh gaya ki ye shayd koi unka rishtedaar hai jo makan bechkar gaye hai
""Beta ye makaan hamne 15 din pehle liya hai ... ravindra ji ne hame ye makaan diya hai aur ve ab na jaane kaha rehne lage hai ""

Avi to sunke jaise pairo tale se jameen nikal gayi ... akahir mummy ne bataya kyu nahi ...agar makaan becha to naye adress ka bata dete lekin aisi kya majboori rahi jo makaan bechna pada ....
Ek aadmi ko pakad kar avi ne mobile liya aur call krne laga ...call padma ne uthaya
""Hello kaun ...kisse baat karni h aapko ""

Avi : maa main avi bol rha hu ...aap kaha ho ?

Padma : beta main ghar per hu

Avi : maa ghar main khada hua hu ...ye makaan aapne bech diya aapne bataya nahi ...

Padma ab thoda dar gai ki avi ko ab kya jawab de ...ki uske jaane ke baad MP ne unka jeena haraam kr diya tha ...sath me raju ke parivaar ka bhi ...tabhi unhone raju ko ghar se nikaal diya aur ve bhi ghar bech kar chale gaye ...raju ko pata bhi nahi tha uski family ab kaha rehti hai ...

Avi : abhi aap batao aap kaha ho ... main vahi aake baat krta hu

Padma : beta tum yaha delhi ******######****** aa jao ...aur last me teesra ghar hai ... bahar likha hoga sushma nivaas ...

Avi : ab maa ye sushma kaun hai ?

Padma : beta aap aa jao ...main sab bata dungi

Avi mobile vapis krke us aadmi ko thode paise deta hai ...aur auto pakad kr nikal jaata hai jab ghar jaata hai tab padma usko batati hai ki kaise police un logo ko pareshan kr rhi thi ...aur vicky ronnie ke baap ne unke sath kitni badtameeji ki ...avi shant man se soch rha tha aur sun rha tha ...

Padma : beta avi ..tum abhi yaha se chale jao ... phir hum punjab ghar lenge ...aur vahi raha karenge ..

Avi : maa lekin

Padma : bas avi ...isse aage mat poocho ... maine decide kiya hai aur tumhare papa ne ...unhe bhi bahut gussa aaya ...vo to keh rhe the ki MP ko jaan se maar dunga ... lekin jab usne tumhe maarne ki dhamki di to ve dar gaye aur phir yaha le aaye

Avi soch rha tha ki uske baap ne avi ko gaali nhi di kya ...ya maa se jhagda to nahi kiya ...lekin avi ne poocha nahi ...
Tabhi padma ne sawaal kiya
Padma : vaise beta tum yaha kya kar rhe ho ? Aur rohit kyu nahi aaya

Avi : vo maa main ek dost ke sath aaya tha lekin vo ab kuch din yahi rahega ... isliye maine socha aapse milke jaunga ... lekin yaha to mamla hi kuch aur hai ...bhaiyya ko bhi nahi pata hai abhi to ...

Padma : to beta tum yaha se jao ...abhi ham panjab me ghar dekh rahe hai .. phir tum apne bhai ke sath vahi aa jana ...jao ab

Avi : maa main chala jaunga ...pooja kab aayegi

Padma : beta vo ab aana chahti thi lekin yaha ke mahol ki vajah se leke nahi aaye ...vaise panjab vo aa jayegi ...bas kuch dino ki baat h ...aur abhi tumhari chuttiyan b chal rhi hai .. admission se pehle hum nikal jayenge ...tumhari TC b katwa li hai

Avi : love u maa ...ab main chalta hu ... apna khayal rakhna ...

Avi padma se baat krke jaldi nikalna chah rha tha ... raste me kai auto walo ne toka lekin avi soch me gum tha ...tabhi usko idea aaya ki ab gharwale bhi safe hai ...kyu na MP ko sabak sikhaya jaaye ...avi nikal padta hai auto se ...aur MP ke nivas per pahuch jaata hai ...jaha per guard rokta hai tab avi kehta hai ki jao MP se kehdo ki uske bete ko maarne wala avi aaya hai ...

Avi ki daring aur shareer dekh kar guard ki himmat nahi hoti ki vo avi ko kuch kahe bas ander jaake bata deta hai ...tab ander se Ronnie jo vicky se milne aaya tha aur MP khud ..uska bada beta ...bahar nikalte hai ...avi ander jaata hai tab vi ky aage badhne ko hota hai lekin MP rok leta hai .

"""Yaha apni maut bulane aaya hai ...bahut din ho gaye the ...tune mere bete ko maara tha na ...aaj dekh main tera kya haal karwata hu"",,
MP itna bol apne bade bete ko ishara krta hai vi bhaagke avi ki taraf aata hai aur jaise hi avi ko mukka maarne ko hota hai avi uske mukke ko ulte hath me pakad leta hai ...aur seedhe hath se uske pet me ek maarta hai ...aur ek laat uske pet me maarta hai ...vo niche gir jaata hai tab avi usko bori ki tarah uthata hai ...avi ko imagination me dikhta hai ki uski maa ke sath badtameeji kar rhe hai ..avi ko itna gussa aata hai ki vo MP ke bete ko apne ghutne ko mod kar uspe maarta hai ...uske muh se khoon nikal aata hai ...MP aankhe faade dekh rha tha ...
Apne bhai ki ye halat dekh kar vicky ko gussa aata hai . Aur vo chillakr bhaagta hai avi ki taraf ...avi usko bhi jaise intejaar me tha ...avi uski taraf bhaagke thoda side ho jaata hai ..vicky ka vaar khali jaata hai tabhi avi usko pakadta hai aur hath pakad kr aise marod ke peeche laata hai phir seedha krke apne dusre hath se kohni per se pakad kr ek jhatka deta hai ...hath kohni se toot kar peeche ki aur mud jaata hai ... vicky ki itni bhayankar cheekh nikalti hai ki ronnie ka pant me peshab nikal jaata hai ...avi ab MP aur Ronnie ki taraf jaa rha hota hai ki MP avi ko dhamki deta hai ...
""'ye tu acha nahi kr rha bacche ...jaanta nahi hai tu tera kya haal hoga .."""
MP ye kehke mobile nikalta hai apne kurte ki jeb se ...aur number dekhne lagta hai ...bahar ka guard jo kaafi der se dekh rha tha vo gun liye aata hai aur avi ki taraf krke bolta hai
""Ruk jaa bachche ...varna goli seene ke aarpar kr dunga ...""
Avi uski taraf gusse se dekhta hai tab guard ke hath kaanpne lagte hai ..guard kanpne lagta hai ...aur peeche ko hat jaata hai ...guard jab goli chalata hai tab avi side ho jaata hai aur goli mantri ki chest me lagti hai ...dil se thoda uper ki taraf ...mantri vahi gir jaata hai ...ronnie jo kaafi der se khada tha avi usko ek laat maarta hai aur Ronnie gir jaata hai ...guard ki gaand fat gai thi MP ko goli lagte hi ... vo bandook chhodke bhaag jaata hai ...avi bhi ab nikal jaata hai...kuch log jo ye najara dekh rahe the ...ve muh faade khade the ki ek akela ladka aaya aur in sab ki ye halat kr gaya ...kuch police ko phone kr dete hai ...avi ab vaha se teji se nikal jaata hai ...aur auto pakad kr bus aade jaake bus me baith jaata hai ...bus bhi nikal padti hai aur peeche ki seat per jaake so jaata hai ...ab usko sukoon aur thoda dar tha ki aage kya hoga ...

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[The Thinker]

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[Nautica M]

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""bhaiyya ye sab hamare khet hai ..yaha majdoor lage hue hai ...ye sab bhi hamare liye jeete h ...inhr agar koi dikkat hoti h tab hum parivaar ki tarah inka khayal rakhte hai ...papa kehte hai ..dharti maa hai ..jaise maa bacho ko paalti hai ..vaise hi dharti maa bhi hame paal rahi hai ..maine b.tech kiya hai ..apni class me topper aaya hu ..lekin dharti se judaav h isliye papa se mana kr diya maine job k liye ..main ab yahi work karunga ...vaise b mota ho gaya hu ..fat b kam hoga ..heheheh"", billu avi ko apne khet per leke aaya tha ...jabki raghubiri ne saaf mana kiya tha usko ki mama ke ghar nahi jaana ...avi b kehna nahi taalta tha ..per aaj ghoomte hue billu ke sath vo log khet per aa gye ..billu avi ko bata rhaa tha ki unke pass kitni jameen hai ...jab sushma ka rishta tay kiya gaya tha ..dahej k bina shadi hui thi ...ulta Shivraj ne jameen de di thi ...yahi jameen avi ke mama ke pass thi ...abhi avi ko insab k baare m pata nahi tha .

Billu avi ke sath bada khus hota tha ye dono idhar lage hue the jabki raju ajeet ajay subham alag ...raju sharab peene laga tha ...jo ajay k sath laga hua tha ...aur avi ko gaaliyan de rha tha ..

""Ye saala avi dhokhebaaj hai ajeet bhaiyya ..main iske liye jaan de deta ...isne bataya nahi ki iske sath yaha kya hua ...vo b chalo theek h lekin ye chup hai ? ... saala main abtak gaand faad deta uski kya naam h uska ... somendra chaudhary ki ..aviiii ...mera dost nhi h tu ..."",raju nashe me in teeno ko bata raha tha ki vo avi le liye kuch b kar skta hai ...ab uski family usko chhod gai thi .. to avi hi iske liye sabkuch tha ..aur avi ki ye halat hui usne bataya nhi ..ye baat raju ko chubh rahi thi ..aur ab vo nashe me dil halka kar raha tha ...nashe me bhi uski aankh m aanshu the ..jise dekh subham ajay aur ajeet samajh sakte the ki inki dosti sach me bemishaal hai ...

Sach baat h ...dil se kahi baat aur dil se nikle aanshu ...aap jhooth ka roke dekho ..aanshu nahi aayenge ...jab baat dil per loge tab aayenge ...aadmi agar aanshu bahata hai samajh jaiye ki dil se baat krta hai ..varna jhooth ka rona aanshu nahi aane deta ...aanshu hamesha dil se aate hai ..ek 2 nahi ..bahut saare ..varna aankh masal kar b aanshu dikha dete h log ... sach kadwa hota hai aisa duniya kehti hai ..lekin kadwa vo jhooth hota hai jise sach maar deta hai ..uski jagah khud aake khada hota h ..aur uske liye hum aanshu bahate hai ..

Ajeet bechara aaj samajh raha tha ki usne dost banaye nahi ..vaaki dono bhi yahi soch rahe the ... family se bahar unhone soch nahi rakhi ..varna dost kitna jaruri ho skta hai ye to vahi jaan skta hai jisne sachchi dosti hashil ki ho ..lekin kya kar sakte hai ..aaj jamana fareb se chalta hai ...
Avi billu ke sath khet dekh rha tha ...billu ki behen b aaj khet per aayi hui thi ...jisne avi ko dekhte hi uske pass gai

""Billu ye kaun h ..aur ganv me aapka dost kaise ban gaya ..aap to kehte the ki yaha ke log ache nahi hai ""jahnvi n aate hi billu se kaha..

""Behna ye bua ka ladka hai ...sushma ka beta arvind ..bua to humne dekhi nahi lekin papa kehte hai ki halaat aise the ki hum mil na sake ..ab mil lo ..bua na sahi beta hi sahi ...bhai h Tumhara ", billu ne baat to kehdi ..lekin usko nahi pata tha ki avi ne jo suna hai vo uske kaan bhed chuka hai ..avi ne abhi baat aage na badhake sirf jahnvi per dhyan diya ..jahnvi aage aake avi ke gale lag gai

""Bhaiyya aap jante ho .. Billu bhaiyya bhi seher chale gaye ..yaha mera koi khayal rakhne wala nahi tha ..maa hamesha kaam karwati h ..papa bhi khet me rehte hai ..school me12 ke baad padhaya b nahi ..meri koi dost b nahi hai ..ab aap mujhe milne aaya karoge na .. aap ghar kyu nahi aate ? ..pata h maa itni khus hogi ki main bata nahi sakti ..bhaiyya ghar chaliye na ", Jhanvi ek bachchi jaisi baat krti thi. Jawani me kadam rakhna shuru kar diya tha lekin ganv k mahol me chuhalbaaji dekhte hue vo abhi tak bachchi bani hui thi ..avi bhi usko baho me liye khada tha ..billu aankho per najar ka chasma utaarta hue bola

""Bhaiyya ki dadi ji ne mana kiya hua lh..varna main to kabka inhe ghar le aata ..tujhe to plata hi h ..vo ajay aur ajeet ...mujhe kitna torture krte hai ..mujhe chidhate hai mota kehke ..lekin bhaiyya vaise nahi h ..main b bhaiyya jaise gym krke body banaunga ..",billu bechara avi se bada tha .. lekin vo avi ke samne chhota lagta tha .. usko pata b nahi tha ki vo bada hai ..bas avi ko bhaiyya bulata tha ...
Jahnvi jo avi ko ek side se hug kiye hue thi ..uski chuchiyon ki ragad avi ko pareshan kr rahi thi .. jo avi k hath ko boobs k beech lagaye hue thi. .

""Acha jahnvi ab hame chalna chahiye ...jis din daadi permission de dengi us din main ek mahina ruk ke jaunga ..aapke vaha ...chal billu chalte hai ...i promise jahnvi ..",avi ne promise b kr diya jab jahnvi udaas hui ...avi ne usko apne se lagakar aisa kaha ...per pata nahi vo kar payega ya nahi ...
Dono ab ghar aa chuke the ...billu avi ko chhodke nikal gaya tha ...ghar me tayyari chal rahi thi ...aaj raghubir ji bhi ghar per aaye hue the ... ravindra to apne bachpan ke mitro ke sath khus rehta tha ...jab padma ghar per hi kaam krne lagi thi ...padma ne avi ko bhi kaha ki uski behen aa rahi h ...aur unko mandir me chalna hai ..vaha per pooja ke liye pooja rakhwai gai hai ..aur ghar me itni khusi aane k liye bhi ...avi ne bhi okay kaha aur khana khake apne kamre ki taraf chal pada ... doepeher ka samay tha .. krne ko kuch tha nahi ...sabhi apne apne kamre me band the ..lekin 3 sakhs bechain the ...megha ...radha to avi ke sath sambandh banane ke liye ...aur surekha ji uske sath baat krne k liye ...lekin avi to avi hai ..vo to har kisi ke sath adjust ho jaata hai ... yahi usne ab kiya ...jab megha ji kamre me aa gai ...

""Soye to nahi ..main baith sakti hu yaha ?",megha ji ne aate hi kaha ...avi ne unko apne jaage hone ka bataya aur baithne ka ishara kiya jagah deke ..megha ji ne avi ke pass baithkar pehle darwaje ki taraf dekha aur boli

""Avi mujhe yaha aaye hue bahut din ho chuke hai ..ab phir se school khul gaye hai. .kamse kam ab to mere sath waqt bitao avi ..tum to jaise hamare is rishte ko mahatva nahi dete ...main bhale hi ek shadishuda aur tumhari bua hu ...lekin avi jo hua usme meri marji bhi shamil thi .. tumhare sath bitaya hua pal yaad krke bhi khus ho jaati hu..mujhe tadap hoti hai .. tumhe chot lagi thi isliye main nahi boli lekin ab to khayal karo ",megha ji ne apni duwidha bata di ..jise avi badi gaur se sun raha tha. Megha hi uski sex teacher thi .. vaise koi kehta ho ..lekin sex koi nhi sikhata ..ye automatically dimaag me aa jata h .. varna janwar ko kaun sikha deta h ..seekhte to insaan ki tarah janwar k sath sambhog na krte ..ye insaan hi h jo ulte seedhe kaam anjane me kr leta hai ...

""Aap chinta na kariye ..main aapki ichcha jarur poori karunga ..lekin isse pehle aap abhi idhar aaiye ..",avi ne itna batake megha ko baho me bhar liya ..vo jaan gaya tha usne apni baat krke poori nahi ki thi ..aur megha ko khus krne ke liye filhal usne baho me bhar liya tha ...jisse megha ji khus ho gai ..avi ne unke hoth se hoth milake thoda waqt unhe diya ...jab unhe santusti ho gai tab megha najre churane lagi ...abhi ye dono aur bhi baat krte ki tabhi surekha ji aa gai ...bahar kamre ke radha b chakkar laga rahi thi ..jo surekha ji ko ander jaate dekh man masos ke reh gai ..

""Kya baate ho rahi hai bua bhateeje me ?..are bhai hum bhi yaha hai ..ab to bas apne dadaji ke sath waqt bitata hai ..aur dadi ne na jaane kosni ghutti de di hai jo unki baat taalta hi nahi .. avi bete hame bhi kuch bataya karo ..jabse ghar me aaye ho tabse khusiyan hi khusiyan hai ..najar na lage is ghar ko ..",surekha ji ab jis tarah bolne lagi thi agar koi b dekhe to kahe ki ye sab avi ki sangat ka asar hai ...apne aap me rehne wali aurat jab khulke bolne lagi tab sab log khus the ...megha ji b ab khusi se muskura kar is baat ka jawab diya ..avi to bas chup dekh rha tha ..

""Ye hamari baato ko najar na lagaiye bhabhi ...mera bhateeja mujhe ab mila hai ..baate to karungi hi .. vaise b bahut saari baate hai ...agar aapka b man nahi lag raha tab aap bhi aa Jao .. kisne mana kiya hai aapko ",ab surekha muskurai aur is baat ke jawab ko pyar se dene lagi

""Ye hai hi aisa ..isse to jitni baate karein utni badhti jaati h ..man nahi bharta didi ..aap hi dekhlo ..apne bachche hostel me chhod rakhe hai aur yaha ispe pyar luta rahi hai ",surekha ne tanj bhari baat kahi thi . Jise sun megha ji samajh gai .. per ve bhi pyar se boli ..

""Kya karein ...pyar krna hi isne sikhaya h diidi. Varna main bachcho ko pass b na fatakne du. .bas ye na jaane kaise mere dil me bas gaya ",megha ji ne bhi soch samjh kar jawab diya tha lekin iska matlab surekha ne kuch aur hi nikaal liya ..

""Mujhe to lagta h bua bhateeje me kuch aur hi tarah ka pyar ho raha hai. Chalo ghar ki baat ghar me reh gai ..varna na jaane kya kya hota . ..khayal to ache se rakha jaa raha h na ?",surekha ne haste hue ye sab baat kahi thi. Jo buri to nahi .lekin sharma jaane wali jarur thi. Megha ji bhi samajh gai thi baat kaha se kaha aa gai hai ...lekin ab unhone aisi baat keh di jiski vajah se surekha ji ko dukh hua

""Aap to varsho se akeli hai ..aapko b pyar krne wala chahiye tha ..lagta hai aap bhi vahi talaas kr rhi hai ..agar meri koi madad chahiye to batana ..avi khayal ache se rakhta hai ..aapko bhi to garmi lagti hogi ", baat to ek tareeke se sahi bhi thi lekin ek mare hue ki yaad dila gai ..jiski vajah se surekha bura maan gai ..aur kamre se bahar chali gai .. unhone bas itna kaha ki main abhi aati hu ...avi ne aankh ke koro me aaya pani dekh liya tha. Vo samajh gaya tha ki taai bura maan gai hai ...isliye abhi usne waqt ka takaja lagate hue kuch na kehna theek samjha ...

Ab megha ji bhi avi se phirse ek baar vada leke chali gai. Lekin ye baat aise hi khatam nhi hone wali thi. Avi soch me pad gaya tha ki ek to uski bua se uske sambandh ..aage uske ghar me 2 aur tayyar hai .. kya usko aisa karna chahiye ..bua se uske sambandh tabse h jab vo jaanta b nahi tha lekin kya usko aage badhna chahiye ...radha sw vaada b kar liya hai lekin aajtak usse bachta aaya hai ..per kab tak vo aisa rahega ...ab uske pass na uska bhai tha na guru jiske kehne se vo aage badhta aa raha tha ...avi soch hi raha tha ki uske dimaag me teesra option aaya jo thi uski maa ... lekin maa ko shaq ho gaya to ...poochega kis tarah ..baat ko ghuma sakta hai lekin maa ko jara b bhanak lagi tab shayad kya kuch ho jaaye ...


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""Doctor emergency hai ..inko saans lene me dikkat aa rahi h agar car me thoda aur takkar maarta koi tab inka bachna namumkin tha ...truck ne aakhir takkar b tagdi maari hai ..lekin kisine help nahi ki ..log aajkal darte bahut hai ..kisi se lena dena na samajhkar aise hi dekh kar chale jaate h vo to ek sajjan purush ne mujhe khabar kar di varna ye ladki mar hi jaati ..", sub inspector ko yaha niyukt hue 2 din hue the ... promotion jab hua tha raghubir ji ne isko yaha bulane ki bahut kosis ki thi aur ab yaha aa gaya lekin ye ladka jaise apne aapme kuch tha. Handsome .. perfect body shape ..aur rang b gora lekin chehra iska aise lagta jaise ye kitna kathor hai . Per masoomiyat iski seerat me thi naa ki soorat me ..


""Aap chaliye aur form fill kar dijiye ..hum poori kosis karenge inhe bachane ki ..blood b kaafi nikal chuka hai ..hath me chot hai aur pet per dabaav pada hai ..jisse pasliyan shayad crack h ..aap dawa laa dijiye ..aur inke relative ko khabar kar dijiye. ", doctor ne abhi bas thoda hi bataya tha jabki halat usse b buri maloom padti thi .. inspector ne uska mobil dekha jisper khoon laga tha ..usko chalaya tab lock nahi tha ...aur number dekhne shuru kr diye the. Pehle usne dekha ek number per daddy likha hai uspe call krke bata diya ki situation ye hai ...udhar se bhi yahi sab dohraya gaya jo jawab hone chahiye the ..main abhi aa raha hu kehke call kaat di gai ..

Inspector ne Raghubir ji ko call lagake masla bataya aur tehqiqat krne ki permission mangi ..jise raghubir ji ne bata diya ki jaldi karo ..aur chupchap ..bada clue mile to action nahi lena pehle inform karna ..aisa bolke raghubir Parivar ke sath ghulmil gaya ...
Subah sab uthkr fresh hoke mandir jaane ki tayyari krne lage .. kareeb 3 car me aab adjust hue ... shivraj ke sath ajeet aur subham roopwati aur surekha aur madhu the ...baldev ke sath ajay omkaar maala sushila aur bhanu the jo ek car me the ...

Teesri car me avi ke sath padma ravindra Raghubiri
Aur surekha the ....chauthi gaadi raghubir ki thi ..jo raadha seema ke sath pooja ko station se laane gaye the ...unhe padma ne ek photo de di thi apni beti ki ...inko seedha mandir pahuchna tha ...avi baaki sabke peeche tha ... ravindra car chala rha tha .. raghubiri avi ko samjha rahi thi ki usko kya kya karna hai ... vyavastha ka khayaal rakhne ke liye bahari logo ke sath Shivraj ne apne khas bande bhi lagaye hue the ...pehle ek baar hamla ho chuka tha ghar me hi ...mandir ka risk nahi liya jaa skta tha ...

Raghubir ne phone krke bata diya tha ki unhe pooja milgai hai ..pooja bhi naye log dekhke khus hui lekin thodi mayus bhi kyuki uski maa aur papa usko lene nahi aaye ...padma ne socha b tha per baad me mana legi aisa sochke usne chhod diya ..mandir gaanv ke bahar tha ...jo teen rasto ko jodta tha. ..iska garden b kaafi bada tha ... deewar ki taraf kele ke ped aur baagwani ki gai thi ...yaha rehne wale log iska khas dhyan rakhte the ..avi to bas dekh raha tha ... raghubiri khaas avi ke sath thi ...uski najro me ek baar phirse maa ki mamta dikhai padti thi ..
Bahut saare log the jo thakur parivaar ke aate hi apne kaam me aur bhi jyada masgool ho gaye ..kisi baat ki kami nahi honi chahiye thi ...jab car aake ruki raghubir ki ...jisme se ek ladki utri jisne jeans aur t shirt pehna hua tha ...uske chehre per alag hi tej tha ..vo badi pyari masoom si gudiya jo jawani me kadam rakh chuki thi ..jo bhi usse milta usse vo bade hi utsaah se milti ...usko raghubir ne car me hi sab bata diya tha ki kaise uska baap ganv chhodke chala gaya ..phir kya kya hua ...aur kaise sushma ki maut hui ...baad me padma ne shadi ki ...pooja ke man me ek baat baitha di gai thi ...ki avi aur rohit uske sautele bhai hai jinki vajah se uski maa ko kast sehna pada .sath me usko bhi maa se door rehna pada ...lekin usne jahir na hone diya ...

Avi ko jab pata chala pooja aa gai hai tab vo bhi pandit ji ke pass se uthkar bahar gaya ...pooja ko shivraj apne seene se lagaye khade the aur aankhe nam thi ...abhi avi peeche se nikal kar aankho per kaala chasma lagaye aage badha ...aur pooja ke kandhe per hath rakha ... pehle to pooja ne usko dekha phir ignore krke daadi ke pass chali gai aur charan sparsh krke unse b gale lagkar mili ...baad me sabhi se jab milna hua tab padma ke gale lagke rone lagi ...abhi vo ro rahi thi ki ek hath uske kandhe per pada ..jise vo anjane me jhatakne wali thi lekin shakal dekhte hi thandi pad gai ...ye hath ravindra ka tha ... pooja thoda ghabra gai ki uske baap se vo kaise mile lekin jab ravindra ne usko bola ""beta i am sorry ..meri galtiyon ki vajah se tumhe itne din bahar rehna pada ..main tumhara gunehgar hu . Ab main tujhe kahi nahi jaane dunga ..tumhe jo pyar na de saka vo pyar main apne is bache hue jeevan me tumhe dunga beti ..mujhe muaf krde beti ..",

Ravindra ki aankho me aanshu aa gaye ...tab pooja bhi rote hue uske gale se lag gai ... lekin avi ek side thaga sa khada tha .usne apna chasma utaar diya tha kyuki aankho me aai nami se chasme se dhundhla chamakne laga tha.. usko bas pooja se baat krni thi ...vo pooja ke baare me hamesha sochta tha jab padma usko batati thi ...usko ek gudiya ki jarurat thi ..jo usne apni imagination me pooja ko banaya hua tha ...abhi usko peeche se aankho per kisine hath rakha jab hath rakhne wale ki ungliyan bheeg gai tab usne turant hath hatake uska chehra ghumaya tab avi ki aankhe dekhke ek baar to vo kho gai ...kisi heere si chamakti laal aankhe ...lohri aankho me laal rang ki chamak bareek si ...aur usme se nikalte maheen aanshu ...moti se lag rahe the ...rajni ekdum se avi ko gale se laga li ...aur usko pakad kar ek side jaha per mandir ke bahar car park thi vaha le gai ...aur car me baithke usne avi se poocha ..

""Kya hua jaan ...aise kyu ro rahe ho ..pooja aai h aisa mujhe seema ne bataya ..per tum ro kyu rahe ho ..ye to khusi ki baat hai ..kisine kuch bola h kya ..tum ek baar batao main uski khaat khadi kar dungi .. phir chahe dadaji kyu na ho ",jab rajni ne ye baat kahi tab avi ke chehre per muskurahat aa gai ..usne rajni ki taraf dekhke smile krke najre jhuka li ...

""Are..tum aise bhi hoge mujhe pata nahi tha ..chalo ab haso ..dekho main sirf yaha aapke liye aai hu aur aap aise kr rhe ho ..chalo haso varna main rape kar dungi aapka ..mera bachcha .. muuuaaaaah "", rajni avi ko hasane ki bharpoor kosis kar rhi thi ... phir jab avi soch me khoya dikha tab usne avi K chehre ko uper krke uske hotho per hoth rakh diye ..uski aankhe badi ho gai ..
Idhar sab milne ke baad mandir me jaane lage tab padma ne kaha
""Are avi kaha reh gaya ..jara usko bulao to ..na jaane kaha ghoom raha hai ye ..uski behen aai h aur vahi gayab ho gaya ..",

""Abhi to yahi aaya tha vo ..pooja se milne phir ekdum se gayab ho gaya ...na jaane kidhar gaya hai ..are haan ..vo ladki thi na hospital wali ..vo aai thi abhi shayad uske sath gaya h ..kya naam tha uska rajni .. haan yahi naam bataya tha usne ..", Raghubiri ne bataya jo usne dekha ..yaha kisi ko nahi pata tha avi ki halat ki baare me ...usko pooja se ye ummeed to na thi ...usme dimaag me vahi ghoom raha tha kaise pooja ne uski shakal dekhke rude behave kiya ...

""Are dadi ji aap chalo bhi ab .. vo aa jayega ..main itne din baad ghar aai ..aur aap abhi der mat karo ..mujhe dekhna h ye sab ganv me kaise hota hai .. main to bachpan se ghar se bahar rahi hu na ..jab pairo se Chalke ghar se bahar kadam rakhne lagi na jaane kaise main bahar ki hoke reh gai daadi ...ab mujhe itni badi family mili hai mujhe sabke sath rehna hai ",pooja ne jab ye baat kahi raghubiri ne usko ek side se laga liya ...lekin bechain nigaahe avi ko dhoondh rahi thi ...ajay aur ajeet subham ke sath apni nayi behen se milne ke baad khus the .. jinse pooja bhi badi khushi se mili ...aur bade hi khusmizaz andaj se kaha ki rakshabandhan ke saare uphaar usko ek sath chahiye .. jise sun ajeet ne bhi keh diya ki vo tayyar hai ...jab uski behen kahegi tab vi shoping karwa dega. Uske aane se khusnuma mahol ho chuka tha ...

Mandir ke bahar deewar se taank jhaak karte ye 2 admi aur koi nahi ...tony aur john the ...jaha john chaku chalane me mahir tha vahi tony apni gun me goli check krke deewar se dekh raha tha ...usko laga nahi tha ki car me koi ho skta hai ...mandir ke bahar ke log jaise unpe najar nahi rakhe the ...john hath me cemra liye aise khada tha jaise tourist ho ...usne is baat ka fayda uthaya tha kyuki bada mandir tha to yaha log aa jaate the ghoomne ke liye ...majdoor log unpe dhyan nahi de rhe the ...tony ne apne fenkne wale chaku jo kareeb 3 inch lambe the ...is tarah se lagaye hue the ki hath aage kare aur chaku nikal kar samne wale k seene me ghus jaaye ...

"""Isss...aise kaun karta hai ..billi ho ekdum ..mera hoth dekho kata h kya ... dard ho raha h isme ",avi ne apna Hoth seeshe me dekhne ke liye mirror niche krke side mirror me dekha ...tab usko peeche 2 aadmi jo gore the ve taank jhaak krte dikhe. Unki nigaah se avi pehchan gaya ...kyuki vo log baar baar ye dekhte ki unhe koi dekh to nahi raha. ..

""Kya dekh rahe ho itni gaur se ...kya h isme ",rajni ne avi se poocha jo sgaure me un logo ko dekh raha tha aur harkate note kr rha tha ..avi car me rajni ko ek ungli hoth per rakh chup rehne ka ishara kiya aur badi hi chupchap tareeke se utra lekin tabhi usne dekha ek ne ek chaku apni shirt me se na jaane kaha se nikala ..avi uske peeche ja khada hua ...john me ek kami thi ..seedhe hath ka prayog krna ...vo right handed gora ab ek chaku ungli me set krke ..bas fenkne wala tha ki avi ne peeche se uska hath pakda aur ek hath muh per rakha ...uska hath tod diya peeche ki taraf ...uski cheekh uske muh me dab gai avi ke hath ki vajah se ...tony jo deewar se hatke peeche ghooma usne dekha paasa palat gaya h isliye usne b ek gun apni pant ki belt ke niche se nikaali jo vaha khosi hui thi ...

Lekin avi ki taraf ki jisse avi bach gaya aur fire hote hi kadak ki aawaj ke sath gun niche gir gai ..
Aur tony ke muh se cheekh nikal gai ..lekin avi ne yahi rukna theek na samjha ..aur dusra hath b tod diya. John jo uth chuka tha usne ulte hath se avi ke uper vaar kiya lekin rajni jaise cheekhi vaise hi avi hat gaya aur chaku shirt ko cheerta hua side se nikal gaya ...avi ne jaise ghoor ke dekha un dono ki gaand fat gai ...aur ve bhaagne lage ...avi ne unko pakadne ko kosis ki lekin rajni ne rok liya ...

Ve ab jungle me jhadiyo me gayab ho gaye ...goli ki aawaj sunke sab bahar ki taraf aaye ..sabse pehle subham ajay aur omkaar aaye jo bahar hi the baundry ke ander ke ander ..jo mandir me the ve bhi ab bahat aa gaye ...padma ko apne bete ka khatra tha. .. isliye vo bhi ek dum daud ke bahar aa gai ..aate hi usne avi ko dekha aur usko pakda apne gale se lagake chhodke usko ek chaanta maara ...padma rone lagi thi aur avi ko phirse gale se laga liya ...rajni omkaar aur baakiyo ko bata rahi thi ki kya hua hai ... ravindra ne avi ke kandhe per hath rakhke usko gale se laga liya . Ravindra ne uska chasma lagane kaha.aur phir apne bete ka kandha thapthapake sabse kaha ki ""chalo ..aisa to hota rehta hai ..ye mera beta hai ..dushman ise chhu b nahi skta ...avi beta ye lo tum mera kurta pehno ...aur jaake ander pooja karwao ...",..

Shivraj ko dukh tha is ghatna se ...lekin usne jo aadmi lagaye hue the unse poochtaach ki tab pata chala ki ve ganv walo jaise bhes me the shaq na gaya lekin angrej jaise lage ...unhe laga ki ve kabre(safed phool) wale aadmi h ...per jab hathapai hui tab ve door the is vajah se pakad na paaye lekin avi ne unke sath kya kiya ye sunke Shivraj bhi chaunk gaya ...usko pata chal gaya ki avi saja dena b jaanta hai .. Shivraj ko ek heera mil gaya tha lekin usko khona bahut badi kurbaani thi uske liye .. apne chahete bete vikram aur kuwar singh ko khone ke baad usne apne aapko shant kr liya tha lekin idhar avi usko jaise raakh ke dher me se sona nikalna jaisa tha ...tapa hua sona ...

Baldev gaadi me baith ke nikal liya . raghubir ne thane me phone krke bataya aur security bulwa li ..baldev gusse me tha jiske sath ajeet tha jo sirf ye dekhne gaye the ki aakhir ye hamla somendra ne karwaya hai ...lekin somendra sirf 2 aadmi nahi bhejta isliye shaq ka aadhaar usko nahi bana skte hai ...ye dono sadko ko chhaan kar Nikal aaye ...mandir me ab pooja ka dhyan bas avi per tha jo aisi ghatna hone ke baad aise behave kr rha tha jaise kuch hua hi nahi ...shant chehre se anuman lagana kisi ko bhi sansya me daal deta hai ..

Pooja ka dhyan avi per ek baat ke liye aur bhi tha ki parivaar ke log usko kitna pyar krte hai ...per usko ye baat samajh na aai ki avi aankho per chasma kyu lagaye hue hai ...ye to usko raghubir ne bhi nahi bataya tha ..
Raghubir thoda tension me dikh raha tha usko laga ki notice jo chhipaya jaa raha tha kya somendra ko uski khabar ho gai hai ... raghubir bhale kanoon me ho lekin uska hastakshep isme nahi tha ...usko chup baithna padta .. apne pita ki taraf se vo lad skta tha lekin kanoon uska sath nahi deta ...

Avi ne khusi khusi saara karykram nibtaya ...baaki sab bhi sath me ab khus the lekin man me phirse ek baar purana dar baith chuka tha ...is baar gaadi me sab vaise hi baithe bas 2 jagah badal gai thi ...avi ke sath gaadi me raghubir tha .. ravindra badal le seema radha aur pooja ke sath tha ...poore ganv se bahar tak charcha thi is baat ki aur log avi ka naam jaan gaye the ki Shivraj ka pauta jo ravindra ka beta hai ...shareer se aisa hai aur 2 admi ki halat buri kar di usne ...sab avi ki jagah usko arvind bula rahe the ...

Ghar pahuchne per police chali gai ... inspector ka phone aaya tab ki isme dilbaagh singh shamil hai ..jis ladki ka accident hua hai ...aur usko hosh aa gaya hai ...uska baap bhi usse milne aa chuka hai aur bhai ke sath bhabhi aur maa bhi ... raghubir ko avi se baat krni thi ...isliye usne avi se baat krne k liye apne sath ke jaana theek samjha ...yaha avi ye jugat laga rha tha ki kab pooja se baat kre jo usko ignore kr rhi hai ...avi ko to pata b nahi tha ki usko kyu najarandaaj kiya jaa raha hai ... Raghubir ne aake avi se kaha ki uske sath chalna hai ...

Avi bhi tayyar hua aur sath me ajeet bhi chal pada ..teeno car me the ...ajeet car chala tha ...jo raghubir ki personal thi ... raghubir ne avi ko kaha ki usko yaha savdhaan rehna hoga ...ye delhi nahi h ...yaha log mar bhi jaate hai aur pata b nahi chalta ...usko sabse jyada chinta karni chahiye kyuki parivaar me ab sabse jyada uske liye log fikrmand hai ..ajeet b chupchap sun raha tha aur bade bhai hone ke naate usne kaha ki ""avi main tumhara bada bhai hu ... lekin yaha ke halaat main jaanta hu iske liye tumhe vo sabkuch janna hoga jo yaha beet chuka hai aur ladaai ki jad kya hai ...aaj raat tum mere sath farmhouse per chaloge ...ghar per (baldev )dada aur (omkar )papa chacha aur chhote dada ji hote hai ..hum charo bhai vaha baithke baat karenge ...tau ji main isko sab bata dunga ...",


Hospital aa gaya tha aur teeno ander jaa rahe the ...thodi roktok rakhi gai thi ...hamla hua tha isliye police ander nahi jaane de rhi thi checking ke bina ... raghubir ji ko dekhte hi teeno ko ander jaane diya ..pehle to ajeet aur avi ne kaha ki aap ho aaiye lekin raghubir ne kaha ki nahi tum dono sath chalo ..
Jab avi room me gaya tab us ladki ke muh per oxygen mask laga hua tha ...lekin jaise hi avi ne uske uper nigaah daali
"""Ritikkaaaa""

Mtlb bhai gjb
Bhot hi bhdia update hr ek update pechle se bhtreen
Aur ye kya pooja ne apne dil m nai hi dharna bna liye dekhna hoga ki ye khtrnak hogi ya nhi aur kb tk rhgi

 

[Naina]

Aapne to poora update hi likh daala .......
Vaise aapka review sabse acha laga mujhe ...aur permission ke liye aapko jarurat nahi honi chahiye ...main apni story me ye baat jarur kehta hu kisi ko daubt ho ya koi baat ho keh dijiye ....aur kisi jaat biradari se bair nahi h mujhe ...na aap rakhna agar is story me bura dikhaya gaya h kisi ko ... ...main kisi ki cmnt ka bura maan kar bhagne walo me se nahi hu ...
Maine likhna b isliye start kiya kyuki kuch writer apne aapko bhagwan mante hai ...unhe readers ki ijjat karna nahi aata ...kosis yahi h ki is site per mera naam bhi avi123 (main meri family mera gaon ) ki tarah yaad kiya jaaye ...
Jo writer mujhe ache lagte hai main unse kuch seekhta hu ....baaki sab theek h lekin aapki ek baat ajeeb lagi ...
Story ko story ki tarah lena ... aapne fight ko shayad reality se joda ..dekhiye south action movie ki tarah kahani h ...varna in area me bhala kaha hota hai aisa ...speed se matlab itna hi tha ...bejhijhak kisi ki jaan lelena ...baaki speed kaha se aapne kahani me dekha hoga ....bas yahi laga jo aapne miss kiya ....guruji ne avi ko vo move sikhai h jo unhone kisi ko nahi sikhai ..sikhate ve usko b nahi lekin majboori thi unki.aur guruji main character me aayenge ...inka sath end tak h ... flashback jarur chal raha h lekin avi ko sirf vahi dhoondh rahe hai ...aur ravindra ko bhi unhone hi dhoondha hai (ye hint hai ) ...

Baaki aapne jo jo bataya h uske liye bahut aabhar ... aapne story ko dilse padha h ...iske liye dil se dhanyawad ...

Incest ki baat maine isme isliye daali hai taaki incest lovers ka bhi isme dhyan bana rahe lekin ye sab ek matraa ke anusar hi thik rahega ...finally to jaise movie me dikhate h ki koi poochta h aur hero batata h ...rakesh ko sirf utna bataya jayega jitna main h .... relation nahi ...sex ki baate kisi bujurg se nahi ki jaati ...
Lekin maine story flashback me chalane ka socha tha isliye is tarah se bataya ...main busy insaan hu lekin is site ka regular bhi hu ... isliye cmnt krke batata rehta hu ...koi celebrity nahi hu jo koi meri majaak le lega ...site se bahar sab ajnabi hai ....isliye naam b nahi bataye ...per maine apna area khola hua h main kaha se hu ...

Engima bhai se bahut kuch seekha hai. ..unka fan hu ...avi bhai ke baad SGP bhai ka fan hua tha ...uske baad ye ek bhai aise h jinhone mujhe sach me dikhaya life kya se kya ho skti h ....

Ab aata hu ganv k hisaab per ...chunav chal rahe h ...kal mere pados ka ek mandbuddhi aadmi tha jo sharab b peeta tha lekin usko ganv me pradhan pad ke liye chunavi mudda banane k liye raat ko peetkar maar daala ... parivaar ne dar se report b nahi ki aur usko jala diya ...jabki body per nishaan saaf h gale ki haddi tooti h reedh ki taraf se ...is saal me 4th case h aisa jisme police involve nahi h ....to ganv ka mahol aisa hota hai ... isliye kahani ko aisa mod de paaya hu ....kyuki main jaanta hu log kaha tak jaa skte hai ....


Isliye yaha apni vichar rakh deta hu ....main khud kabhi highlight tha ...maine ek story shuru ki thi jise maine sirf isliye band kiya taaki koi mera jannewala usko padhke mujhse poochne na aaye ...maine reality likhi thi usme kuch mix krke ...sex thoda badhaya tha bas ...baaki sab 90% real likh diya tha ...jo baad me mujhe meri galti lagi kyuki usme ganv ki ladkiyan b involved thi ...

Xossip per bhi tha main ab is per bhi hu ...
Aap bejhijhak revo dijiyega ...mujhe likhne me aashani hoti h ...kisi character ko bhool jau tab cmnt mujhe yaad dila dete hai

Dhanyawad ek Baar phirse ,

phir se soch lijiye ek baar.... ki villain logis ko lekar revo pe jikar karu ki na karu...
(Btw wo alag baat hai ki jo story character mujhe pasand nahi uski aisi ki taisi ho jaani hai... Khas kar villain characters ki... )

 

[Naina]

Aapne to poora update hi likh daala .......
Vaise aapka review sabse acha laga mujhe ...aur permission ke liye aapko jarurat nahi honi chahiye ...main apni story me ye baat jarur kehta hu kisi ko daubt ho ya koi baat ho keh dijiye ....aur kisi jaat biradari se bair nahi h mujhe ...na aap rakhna agar is story me bura dikhaya gaya h kisi ko ... ...main kisi ki cmnt ka bura maan kar bhagne walo me se nahi hu ...
Maine likhna b isliye start kiya kyuki kuch writer apne aapko bhagwan mante hai ...unhe readers ki ijjat karna nahi aata ...kosis yahi h ki is site per mera naam bhi avi123 (main meri family mera gaon ) ki tarah yaad kiya jaaye ...
Jo writer mujhe ache lagte hai main unse kuch seekhta hu ....baaki sab theek h lekin aapki ek baat ajeeb lagi ...
Story ko story ki tarah lena ... aapne fight ko shayad reality se joda ..dekhiye south action movie ki tarah kahani h ...varna in area me bhala kaha hota hai aisa ...speed se matlab itna hi tha ...bejhijhak kisi ki jaan lelena ...baaki speed kaha se aapne kahani me dekha hoga ....bas yahi laga jo aapne miss kiya ....guruji ne avi ko vo move sikhai h jo unhone kisi ko nahi sikhai ..sikhate ve usko b nahi lekin majboori thi unki.aur guruji main character me aayenge ...inka sath end tak h ... flashback jarur chal raha h lekin avi ko sirf vahi dhoondh rahe hai ...aur ravindra ko bhi unhone hi dhoondha hai (ye hint hai ) ...

Baaki aapne jo jo bataya h uske liye bahut aabhar ... aapne story ko dilse padha h ...iske liye dil se dhanyawad ...

Incest ki baat maine isme isliye daali hai taaki incest lovers ka bhi isme dhyan bana rahe lekin ye sab ek matraa ke anusar hi thik rahega ...finally to jaise movie me dikhate h ki koi poochta h aur hero batata h ...rakesh ko sirf utna bataya jayega jitna main h .... relation nahi ...sex ki baate kisi bujurg se nahi ki jaati ...
Lekin maine story flashback me chalane ka socha tha isliye is tarah se bataya ...main busy insaan hu lekin is site ka regular bhi hu ... isliye cmnt krke batata rehta hu ...koi celebrity nahi hu jo koi meri majaak le lega ...site se bahar sab ajnabi hai ....isliye naam b nahi bataye ...per maine apna area khola hua h main kaha se hu ...

Engima bhai se bahut kuch seekha hai. ..unka fan hu ...avi bhai ke baad SGP bhai ka fan hua tha ...uske baad ye ek bhai aise h jinhone mujhe sach me dikhaya life kya se kya ho skti h ....

Ab aata hu ganv k hisaab per ...chunav chal rahe h ...kal mere pados ka ek mandbuddhi aadmi tha jo sharab b peeta tha lekin usko ganv me pradhan pad ke liye chunavi mudda banane k liye raat ko peetkar maar daala ... parivaar ne dar se report b nahi ki aur usko jala diya ...jabki body per nishaan saaf h gale ki haddi tooti h reedh ki taraf se ...is saal me 4th case h aisa jisme police involve nahi h ....to ganv ka mahol aisa hota hai ... isliye kahani ko aisa mod de paaya hu ....kyuki main jaanta hu log kaha tak jaa skte hai ....


Isliye yaha apni vichar rakh deta hu ....main khud kabhi highlight tha ...maine ek story shuru ki thi jise maine sirf isliye band kiya taaki koi mera jannewala usko padhke mujhse poochne na aaye ...maine reality likhi thi usme kuch mix krke ...sex thoda badhaya tha bas ...baaki sab 90% real likh diya tha ...jo baad me mujhe meri galti lagi kyuki usme ganv ki ladkiyan b involved thi ...

Xossip per bhi tha main ab is per bhi hu ...
Aap bejhijhak revo dijiyega ...mujhe likhne me aashani hoti h ...kisi character ko bhool jau tab cmnt mujhe yaad dila dete hai

Dhanyawad ek Baar phirse ,

Btw Avi12 3 ka to pata nahi par aap favorite writers ki list mein aa chuke hai...