Adultery Loyal to whore - Radhika

[dragonslair]

Colonel making his move. nice update

 

[Shaitan king of seduction]

Bahot badhiya update hai zabardast story aise hi age badhai bhai gayab kaha ho jate ho

Bhai busy jyada rahta hu or jaldbaji me story kharab nhi karna chahta

 

[Riyasingh143]

Nice

 

[Manali Bose]

Story overall bohut acche chal rahe hain.. Lekin story mein bohut jyada characters aur pairs ban rahe hain..

Like-- 1) Suman aur Principal, 2) Suman aur Ramu, 3) Divya and Ramu, 4) Divya and Principal, 5) Divya - Kunal, 6) Radhika and her husband Kaushal, 7) Radhika and Ramu, 8) Radhika and Principal, 9) Radhika and her student Kunal, 10) Radhika and Colonel, 11) Colonel and Savitri, 12) aur aakhir mein Radhika ke pati kaushal ke sath Savitri.....

Itni saari plot se readers confuse ho sakte hain......

 

[Manali Bose]

Story ke ander jo cheez mujhe acche nehi lagi voh hain ki aap ne school ko Ekta Kapoor ki series mein dekhaye hue sex schools ki tarah dekha diya, jahan principal, teachers, security guard, students sab sex kar rahe hain aur voh bhi school ke ander hei..

Story mein Radhika ke character ko jitni realistic aap ne dekhaye hain, utni hi unrealistic dekhaye hain aap ne school ke ander ke atmosphere ko..

 

[Manali Bose]

I think abhi aap ko Principal, Suman, yeh sab school ki character pe kam focus karne chahiye.. Abhi school ke scenes utni maat daliye.. Aur Ramu ka episode ho chuka hain, isliye baar baar Ramu ko ghasit kar Story mein le aane ke koi zaroorat nehi hain..

Aap ke story mei sabse important chemistry jin dono ke beech jam rahe hain, voh hain Radhika aur uski student Kunal ke beech.. Please aap sabse jyada focus Kunal aur Radhika ke chemistry par kariye..

Ramu ke sath toh ek do dafa ho chuki hain yeh sab, aur colonel ke character ko build karne mein bohut time lagega..

isliye better yehi hogi ki aap Radhika aur uski student Kunal ke chemistry aur episodes pad jyada focus kare..

 

[Manali Bose]

Ek kaam kijiye, Kunal ke tuition lagwayea Radhika ke ghar par.. Nehi toh Kunal aur Radhika close nehi aa payenge.. Kyunki school mein har koi har kisi ko dekh rahe hain, aur har kisi ko har kisi ke secret ke bade mei pata chalne lag rahe hain..

For example : 1) Radhika ne Kunal aur Divya ko dekhe sex karte hue, even Kunal ne bhi uss waqt Radhika ko dekha tha; 2) Suman ne Ramu ko Radhika ke sath dekha..

Aab aate hain school ke open secrets ke bade mein,

1) Radhika ko pata hain Kunal aur Divya school mein sex kiya hain.

2) Kunal ko pata hain ki Ramu aur Divya guards room mein sex kiya hain, aur Divya ko bhi yeh pata hain ki Kunal yeh sabkuch janta hain.

3) Radhika ko Suman ke bade mein sab pata hain, aur Suman bhi Radhika aur Ramu ke bade mein janti hain.

4) Principal ko pata chal chuka hain Radhika aur Ramu ke bade mein.

5) Ramu ko Principal aur Kunal ke bade mein sab pata hain.

So, saare secrets lagbhag sab hei ko pata hain.. Isliye Kunal aur Radhika ke relation ko secret rakhni jaroori hain, tabhi story mein akarshan bani rahegi. Story wahein sab popular hoti hain jiss story mein thriller yo yaa secrets ho, especially illegal relationship ke secrets..

So, please Kunal ka tuition lagwayea Radhika ke ghar mein.. Aankhir kab tak wo dono sirf chats karte rahenge..

 

[ARYAAA]

Great ideas

 

[luckysearch12]

Sorry Manali ji main aaki baat se puri tarah sehmat nahi hun..
Mana Secrets wali kahani jyada chalti hai par agar sab kahani ek jaisi hi hogi to boring hogi
Sach kahu to iss kahani ke 2 best part lage
1) Ramu jaise insan se baar-2 Radhika ka encounter hona
2) Kunal ka chat par hi dheere-2 Radhika ko seduce karna
aur haan muliple characters to honge hi kyunki kahani ka naam hi hai "Loyal to Whore" ... to dheere-2 aur bhi logon se encounter honge

Main yahan par writer ki soch se sehmat hun.. haan maine pehle bola tha ki kahani bore ho rahi hai par writer ne wapas se usme romanch la diye hai..

Writer ji se bas yehi umeed karunga ki wo thora jaldi-2 aur lambe update de nahi to romanch khatam sa hona lagta hai

 

[Swati chaudhari]

Ek kaam kijiye, Kunal ke tuition lagwayea Radhika ke ghar par.. Nehi toh Kunal aur Radhika close nehi aa payenge.. Kyunki school mein har koi har kisi ko dekh rahe hain, aur har kisi ko har kisi ke secret ke bade mei pata chalne lag rahe hain..

For example : 1) Radhika ne Kunal aur Divya ko dekhe sex karte hue, even Kunal ne bhi uss waqt Radhika ko dekha tha; 2) Suman ne Ramu ko Radhika ke sath dekha..

Aab aate hain school ke open secrets ke bade mein,

1) Radhika ko pata hain Kunal aur Divya school mein sex kiya hain.

2) Kunal ko pata hain ki Ramu aur Divya guards room mein sex kiya hain, aur Divya ko bhi yeh pata hain ki Kunal yeh sabkuch janta hain.

3) Radhika ko Suman ke bade mein sab pata hain, aur Suman bhi Radhika aur Ramu ke bade mein janti hain.

4) Principal ko pata chal chuka hain Radhika aur Ramu ke bade mein.

5) Ramu ko Principal aur Kunal ke bade mein sab pata hain.

So, saare secrets lagbhag sab hei ko pata hain.. Isliye Kunal aur Radhika ke relation ko secret rakhni jaroori hain, tabhi story mein akarshan bani rahegi. Story wahein sab popular hoti hain jiss story mein thriller yo yaa secrets ho, especially illegal relationship ke secrets..

So, please Kunal ka tuition lagwayea Radhika ke ghar mein.. Aankhir kab tak wo dono sirf chats karte rahenge..

Sorry if i offended you

But agar aap itna lamba chouda update apni latest story mein de to atcha rahega.. 2-3 update deke gayab ho gayi tum