Fantasy MANHOOS (REVANGE BY KILLER )
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Bahot behtareen shaandar updateUpdate 10
Flashback
mai apna 10th complete hone ke baad apna 11th ko pas ke ek college me complete Kiya tha isi bich
mera physical and computer and sabhi fight ki traning complete ho gai thi ab bas latest gun vagera ka traning baki tha sath me kuchh khass kisam ke martial arts ke bare me janna baki tha jis ke liye usa jana tha jack ne bola tha because vaha sabse latest guns hai aur martial arts ke mahaguru ab usa me hai isiliye traning asani se mil sakti hai
fir 11th ke baad mai, jack and maria usa aa gye
usa land karne ke baad hum jack ke gar aa gye
jack: ye gar hai VIKRAM
me: gar to Acha hai
fir vo muje gar ke niche bane under ground training ground mai le gai
vaha pe tarh tarh ke guns and baki hatiyar rake hue te
next din meri traning start ho gaiand study bi chalti thi
Gun ke training ke sath hi me jack sath chal kar martial arts ke mahaguru se milkar mere training ke bare me puchha .
unhone pehle mere test kiye
unke sare test me pass ho gaya
jisse me unse training lene keliye pura kabil hua
unhone mujhese khus hue aur mujhe training Dene ko Raji ho gaye
mene bahut jaldi sare martial arts me maharat hasil kar liya
isi bich mene apna 12 th wahi par khatam kar liya aur Bachelor ki study bhi suru kar diya
Mere sar par ab sirf
REVENGE ka bahut sawar tha jiske liye mujhe takat ke sath sath dhan ki bhi abasyakta hoga .
Mujhe malum hua ki Vaha pe street fights hoti usme maine part liya ta maine ek mask pehne hue tha jis mai mera chera nai dikhta tha vaha pe fights kiya jis ke bare mai kis ko pta nai ta because mai ye bol ke niklta tha ki ghum ke aata hu
vaha pe mai as Killer name fight kiya tha jis mai maine vaha ke sabse bade fighter ko tapka diya jiss se muje kafi paisa mila
so maine ek company register karva liya
ek din mai raat ko vapis gar jaa raha ta so raste me ek larki mili jo indian lag rahi ti jo behos thi maine usko hospital le gya and vaha pe usko hosh aaya and lta chla ke uska name "Myra" hai
usne mba kiya hua ta uski anko mai muje achiye najr aye maine usko company ke bare mai btya usko md banne ka kaha jis par uane mana kar diya but kafi manne ke baad vo mani
fir company st ki as TNJ groups of company
meri traning bi chl rahi mai street figts mai mashhoor ho gya ta baad maine fbi ke computer ko hack kiya and vaha ke sabse bade don ke bare mai pta lagya
fir maine direct boss ki info mili thi usse pta chla ki vo street fights Vahi host karta hai jo badi badi fights hoti hai vo ese hi ek fight mai usko mila maine uske phone ko hack kar liya ese to bahoot hard tha but jis fight mai mila tha usme mai jit gya tha vo mujse mila and bate kar raha tha uss dauran maine phone no exchange kiya tab vo do minutes ke liya bahar gya tab maine ek link uske no par beja and vo download ho gya so uska phone mere control mai
baad mai ghar aane ke baad regular jo hota tha vo hota raha
meri company bhi ab bahoot achi chl rahi ti
iss trh time niklta gya mere traning bi complet hone ko aye thi
meri company 1 sal pura hote hote ab worlds top 10 mai thi but kisi ko owner ka nam pta nai tha
Ab mere india aane ke time ho gya ta 3 days baki thi flight ke tab maine ek din pehle boss ke phone se sabhi gundo ko ek jagh bulya jaha pe boss pehle se maujd tha
va pe sabko dekh ke vo shok ho gya isse pele vo kuch bolta maine vaha pe jo bomb laga rakha tha vo blast kar diye jis mai sabi tapk gye fir mai vaha jaldi vaha pauncha and killer ka tag lga diya and vaha se nikl gya uske pass ke sabi cameras mere control mai the
fir kya kisi ko pata nai chla and next din flight se india vapis
maine last din Isliye rakha ta because vaha se safe nikla ja ske
ab killer name pure world mai famous ho gya ta
flashback end
meri bate sunne ke dad ka rang ud gya ta
dad: waahhhh kamal kar diya killer
me: thanks dad
dad: YA FIR KAHUN "AGENT VIDYUT"
me: Ahh dad
dad hasne lage
dad ne muje apna id and offical gun diya ab mai shock mai tha
muje dek ke
dad: mere naak niche tum raw join karoge aur mujhe pata nahi chalega
wo bhi raw chief ko
Me - lekin dad apko pata chalne me pure 1 saal lag gaye
Dad - sahi kaha Bikram
tab me raw chief nahi tha na aur jinhone tumhe recruit kiye the unhone sare agent ka details ko confidential rakhte the
jo bhi ho ab mujhe pata chal hi Gaya isi liye tumko Aaj jakar tumhara yaha deposite hue I'd aur tumhara fav gun dene ka soubhagya mujhe mila
me: thanks dad
Dad - thik hai ab tum Ghar jao me saam ko tumse milta hun
fir mai gar aa gya
meri company ke branch india mai bhi suru ho gye the idhr bhi achi grow ho rahi thi
ab mera college open hone keliye ek din baki tha
Next day
mai roj ki trh utha exercise kiya and 7 baje janvi ko uthya and fresh hoke break fast kiya fir college ke liye niklne lage
bahr niklte hi muje ek new super bike dike jise dek mai shok ho gya
mom dad has rahe te
janvi to bahoot kush ho gai ti bike dek ke
me: dad ye sab kya hai
dad: surprise hai ab isse college jana
mai bhi mana nai kar pya
Age ka next update mai..........
Street fight kerke killer ka tag Mila or saath me company bhi Chalu Kari Jo safalta ke saath chal Rahi h
Or India aate Rwa ki ID mil gayi Agent Vidyut
Sahi h
Ab dekhte h college ka pehla din kaisa hota h
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Yeh tow bada fast forward ho gaya dekhte dekhte Shaadi bhi ho gayiUpdate 11
Muje bhi bike pasnd aa gya tha
fir mom dad ko by bol ke bike leke mai or janvi nikal gye college ke liye
janvi mere piche beti thi mai bike thoda tez chala raha ta fir hum college pahunch gaye meri bike ki entry hote hi sabhi humari or dekhne lage
fir janvi nikal gye apni class ki or mai ek saksh ko dhudne laga baad mai pata chala ki usne college chhod kar chala gaya hai mai bhi nirash ho gya fir apni class mai chala gya
(us saks ke baare mai age pta chelga)
class mai jyadatar students mere purane school ke the to mujhe wo sab jante the fir class ke lecture chalte rahe mai padhta raha iss tarah college ke lectures khatam hue
fir parking mai
janvi: bhai aaj ice cream khane ka man kar raha hai chalo na Ice cream khate hai
me: ohk my sweet angel
Fir maine bike start ki or janvi beth gai uske baad maine bike ice-cream parlor ki or mod li
vaha pe jake janvi or mai tabel par beth gaye
Me: excuse me
waiter : yes sir
me:2 chocolate ice cream
waiter : ohk sir
fir waiter chala gya thodi der baad humara order aa gya
thodi der baad ice-cream finish karne ke baad hum ghar chle gye
fir mai gar paunch ke mai room mai jake fresh hua fir room lock karke
apna laptop leke beth gya or Mumbai ke dada logo ki list tayir karne lga thodi der baad list tayir ho gai iss dauran maine sweetie ko bola tha ki muje koi disturb na kare Isliye kisne disturb nai kiya
iss list ko tayir karke maine mumbai mai jitne bi cameras te un sab ko hack kar diya but kisi ko pta nai chla iss tarh raat ho gai fir gate nock hua
sweetie: bhai darwaja kolo
me: ha bas 2 min
fir maine darwaja kola
janvi: bhai dinner ready hai chalo
fir mai janvi ke saath niche aa gya mere pass janvi beth gai
mom: aaj ka din kesa gya
me: good
mom: hmm.
fir gum sab dinner karne lage fir thodi der isse hi baate chlti rahi
fir sone ke liye aa gye sweetheart bhi aa gai
fir mai so gya and mere bagl mai sweetie so gai mere se lipt ke
next day mai roj ki tarh 4 baje uth gya and bhar jogging karne chla gya garden mai fir kuch exercise kiya iss tarh 7 bajne aaye
mai gar ki or aaya to gar ke garden mai dad exercise kar rehe te
(humre ghar ke pass mai hi ek bada garden hai mai vaha pe gya ta)
me: gm dad
dad: gm beta
dad: kya kar rehe the kal sham ko
me shock ho gya ki inko kese pta chl gya
dad: ab chonko mat mai janta hu tum ese hi room mai ese hi lock nai kerte hai me: kuch nai dad bas criminals ki list tayar kar raha tha
dad: ohh. Kaam chlu aate hi
me: yes dad
dad: tum akle hai krne vale ho yaa koi team ke baare mai socha hai
me:dad abtak to mujhe team ki jarurat nahi padi thi lekin iss kaam keliye team ki jarurat hogi .
team to chiye
but members ko mai select karunga. Iss bar me kuchh khatarnak karne ka soch raha hun
dad: ohk.tik hai tum list de dena mai bulva lunga
me: ohk and thanks
fir hum gar mai aa gya
mai room mai jaake sweetie ko utya
Me: gm mya angel
Janvi: gm bhai or muje gaal pe kiss kiya or maine bi gaal pe kiss kiya
fir mai fresh hone chla gya janvi bi fresh hone uske room mai chli gai
fir mai niche aya
me: gm mom
mom: gm beta
fir mom ne breakfast serve kiya or hum breakfast karne lage fir mai or sweetie college ke liye nikl gye
college khtm hone ke baad mai apne room mai aa gya fir fresh hone ke baad maine laptop open karke apni team members ko select karne laga fir uski list dad ko send kar diya
iss tarh smay bit ta gya ek din sham ko mai or sweetie ese hi car leke gumne nikla ta ki road pe aage bhid jama hui thi maine car side kiya
and
vaha jake deka to accident hua tha vaha pe
ek aurat gir huie thi or
log photos kich rahe the
muje bahoot gussa aa raha tha
fir maine vaha jake aurat ko goud mai utha ke apni car ke pass leke gya or sweetie ne door khola maine unko piche laita diya or nikl gya hospital ki or
vaha pe hospital mai mna kar rehe the ki ye police ka mamla hai fir maine dad se baat karyie fir unko jaldi ot mai leke gye aurt ka jaha accident hua ta vha pe muje mobile bi mila ta jo maine apne pass rak liya ta
thodi der mai or sweetie vha bethe rehe tab muje aurt ke mobile ke baare mai yaad aaya to last phone kisi Rani ko kiya hua ta maine dial kiya or karke unko sab kuch bta diya and unko aane ke liye bol diya
thodi der baad vaha pe ek 21 year ki ladki rote hue aayie or us aurat ke baare mai puchne lagi
fir usko maine sab kuch bta diya
uasko thoda sant kara diya and vaha beta diya tab tak 1 hour ho gya ta mai, sweetie and rani bahr bete hue te
rani abi bi thoda thoda ro rahi ti
thodi der baad dr bahr aay
dr: unke saath kon hai
me: ji mai hu
dr: ji unko hosh aa gya hai but jayda wakt nai hai
itna sunte hi rani rone lagi rote hue vo andr chli gai uske piche mai or sweetie bi andr chali gai
rani us orat ko lipt ke ro rahi ti jab orat ne mujko deka tab boli
rani mom: beta tumhare bahoot sukriya muje yaha tak laane ke liye warna aaj le jamne mai kon karta hai
me: ji nai ese koi baat nai ye to mera farj ta
r mom: beta meri ek akri icha hai vo puri kar do.
me: ji boliye
r mom: beta meri beti ke mere alva koi nai usse shadi kar lo
mai and rani ye suun ke shock ho gye
me: auntie aap mere baare mai kuch bi nai janti or
Bich mai r mom: nai beta aaj ke jamne mai bi tum dusro ke liye itna kar rehe ho muje Tumhari aankho mai sachiaye najr aati hai
maine ek baar rani ki or deka jo uski maa ki. Baate suun ke kadi ho gai thi but uski najr niche ki or thi
maine usse dekha to vo bahoot sundar or Masoom dikh rahi thi
pta nai muje kya hua maine vaha pe pda knife utya and angute pe cut maar ke rani ki mang bhar di fir humne r mom ka assirwaad liya
rmom: sukriya beta or utna bolte hue unki sanse ruk gai ye dek ke rani rone lagi
maine usko sant karne ke liye maine usse gale lga diya vo bi mujse lipt ke rone lagi
thodi der baad maine uksko sant karya and mai usse le ke bahr aay and sweetie ko and bahar akar mene ek taxi rukwaya
taxi rukne ke baad usme sweety ko bethaya
Me - dekho sweety ab tum Ghar jao me kal tak ghar aa jaunga
mere phone me battery Kam hai sayad switch off ho jae to tension mat lena
mom dad ko bata dena me kal aunga
Janvi - aap nahi chaloge
me - abhi nahi . me tumhe sari baat kal ko bataunga
janvi - thik hai bhaiya
me - driver bhaiya in madam ko ****** address me pahuncha Dena
yeh rakho paise
mene driver pese dekar sweety ko ghar bhej diya
Ab hospital ke samne me aur Rani reh gaye
Me aur Rani unki maa ke mrit sarir ke pas gaye
jaha Rani unki maa ko pakad kar fir se Rona suru kar deti hai
me thodi der unko rone ke liye wahi chhod
diya
pshycology ke anusar agar admi ke rone se uska dukh halka ho jata hai
me unko wahi chhod hospital ka sare paper works khatam kiya
aur fir aa gaya Rani ke pas
me rani ko samjhaya aur unhe ab sant hone ko kaha
me - dekho rani jo hona tha ho gaya
ab wo to wapas nahi aasakenge
lekin unki atma ke Santi keliye aapko apna hosla buland rakhna hoga
ab inki atma ki Santi keliye hame inki kriya karm bhi karne honge
Rani subakte hue mere gale lag gayi
aur behosh ho gayi
bahut der rone ki wajah se kabhi kawar esa hota hai
me unhe hosh me laya aur fir swargrath me baitha kar unke kriya karm sampann karne keliye samsan ghat le gaye
jaha unki partihv sarir ko riti anusar jalaya gaya
Unko sarir jalne ke baad asthi ko laya gaya aur pani me ham dono milkar visarjan kiye
ab rani thodi had tak khud ko sant kar chuki thi
nadi me sare bidhi sampann hone ke baad ham dono car ke pas agaye
fir ham dono car me baith gaye
itne sab kam ke bich mujhe rani ki kapde me dhyan nahi gaya tha
jab ham car me baithe to paya ki rani ke sarir me jo kapde hain wo fate aur purane hain
mano Kai saal ki purani kapde ko baar baar si kar pehen rahi ho
to mene car ko ek mall ki aur dauda di mall me pahunch kar ham andar chane lage
rani abi mujse chipk ke chl rahi ti maind bhi kuch bola nahi or uske liya kuch kpde liya
fir usko vahi change karne ke liye bola usne kuch nai kiya or change kar liya
aur unke purane kapde ko mene wahi mall ke samne ek kude dan me dalkar jala diye
yeah dekh rani ko ascharya hua
fir mai car leke hotel ki or aa gya vaha ek room le liya
fir usko Fresh hone ke liye. Kaha maine khna order kiya or mai balcony mai aa gya or ek sksh ke baare mai sochne laga tab meri anko mai ansu aa gye
ab next update mai..................
Ab dekhte h Vikram ke mom or dad ko pata chalega tab unka kia reaction hota h
Sweety ka kia reaction hota h
Ab Vikram kisko yaad kerke Rona laga
Dekhte h aage kia hota h
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Nice updateUpdate 11
Muje bhi bike pasnd aa gya tha
fir mom dad ko by bol ke bike leke mai or janvi nikal gye college ke liye
janvi mere piche beti thi mai bike thoda tez chala raha ta fir hum college pahunch gaye meri bike ki entry hote hi sabhi humari or dekhne lage
fir janvi nikal gye apni class ki or mai ek saksh ko dhudne laga baad mai pata chala ki usne college chhod kar chala gaya hai mai bhi nirash ho gya fir apni class mai chala gya
(us saks ke baare mai age pta chelga)
class mai jyadatar students mere purane school ke the to mujhe wo sab jante the fir class ke lecture chalte rahe mai padhta raha iss tarah college ke lectures khatam hue
fir parking mai
janvi: bhai aaj ice cream khane ka man kar raha hai chalo na Ice cream khate hai
me: ohk my sweet angel
Fir maine bike start ki or janvi beth gai uske baad maine bike ice-cream parlor ki or mod li
vaha pe jake janvi or mai tabel par beth gaye
Me: excuse me
waiter : yes sir
me:2 chocolate ice cream
waiter : ohk sir
fir waiter chala gya thodi der baad humara order aa gya
thodi der baad ice-cream finish karne ke baad hum ghar chle gye
fir mai gar paunch ke mai room mai jake fresh hua fir room lock karke
apna laptop leke beth gya or Mumbai ke dada logo ki list tayir karne lga thodi der baad list tayir ho gai iss dauran maine sweetie ko bola tha ki muje koi disturb na kare Isliye kisne disturb nai kiya
iss list ko tayir karke maine mumbai mai jitne bi cameras te un sab ko hack kar diya but kisi ko pta nai chla iss tarh raat ho gai fir gate nock hua
sweetie: bhai darwaja kolo
me: ha bas 2 min
fir maine darwaja kola
janvi: bhai dinner ready hai chalo
fir mai janvi ke saath niche aa gya mere pass janvi beth gai
mom: aaj ka din kesa gya
me: good
mom: hmm.
fir gum sab dinner karne lage fir thodi der isse hi baate chlti rahi
fir sone ke liye aa gye sweetheart bhi aa gai
fir mai so gya and mere bagl mai sweetie so gai mere se lipt ke
next day mai roj ki tarh 4 baje uth gya and bhar jogging karne chla gya garden mai fir kuch exercise kiya iss tarh 7 bajne aaye
mai gar ki or aaya to gar ke garden mai dad exercise kar rehe te
(humre ghar ke pass mai hi ek bada garden hai mai vaha pe gya ta)
me: gm dad
dad: gm beta
dad: kya kar rehe the kal sham ko
me shock ho gya ki inko kese pta chl gya
dad: ab chonko mat mai janta hu tum ese hi room mai ese hi lock nai kerte hai me: kuch nai dad bas criminals ki list tayar kar raha tha
dad: ohh. Kaam chlu aate hi
me: yes dad
dad: tum akle hai krne vale ho yaa koi team ke baare mai socha hai
me:dad abtak to mujhe team ki jarurat nahi padi thi lekin iss kaam keliye team ki jarurat hogi .
team to chiye
but members ko mai select karunga. Iss bar me kuchh khatarnak karne ka soch raha hun
dad: ohk.tik hai tum list de dena mai bulva lunga
me: ohk and thanks
fir hum gar mai aa gya
mai room mai jaake sweetie ko utya
Me: gm mya angel
Janvi: gm bhai or muje gaal pe kiss kiya or maine bi gaal pe kiss kiya
fir mai fresh hone chla gya janvi bi fresh hone uske room mai chli gai
fir mai niche aya
me: gm mom
mom: gm beta
fir mom ne breakfast serve kiya or hum breakfast karne lage fir mai or sweetie college ke liye nikl gye
college khtm hone ke baad mai apne room mai aa gya fir fresh hone ke baad maine laptop open karke apni team members ko select karne laga fir uski list dad ko send kar diya
iss tarh smay bit ta gya ek din sham ko mai or sweetie ese hi car leke gumne nikla ta ki road pe aage bhid jama hui thi maine car side kiya
and
vaha jake deka to accident hua tha vaha pe
ek aurat gir huie thi or
log photos kich rahe the
muje bahoot gussa aa raha tha
fir maine vaha jake aurat ko goud mai utha ke apni car ke pass leke gya or sweetie ne door khola maine unko piche laita diya or nikl gya hospital ki or
vaha pe hospital mai mna kar rehe the ki ye police ka mamla hai fir maine dad se baat karyie fir unko jaldi ot mai leke gye aurt ka jaha accident hua ta vha pe muje mobile bi mila ta jo maine apne pass rak liya ta
thodi der mai or sweetie vha bethe rehe tab muje aurt ke mobile ke baare mai yaad aaya to last phone kisi Rani ko kiya hua ta maine dial kiya or karke unko sab kuch bta diya and unko aane ke liye bol diya
thodi der baad vaha pe ek 21 year ki ladki rote hue aayie or us aurat ke baare mai puchne lagi
fir usko maine sab kuch bta diya
uasko thoda sant kara diya and vaha beta diya tab tak 1 hour ho gya ta mai, sweetie and rani bahr bete hue te
rani abi bi thoda thoda ro rahi ti
thodi der baad dr bahr aay
dr: unke saath kon hai
me: ji mai hu
dr: ji unko hosh aa gya hai but jayda wakt nai hai
itna sunte hi rani rone lagi rote hue vo andr chli gai uske piche mai or sweetie bi andr chali gai
rani us orat ko lipt ke ro rahi ti jab orat ne mujko deka tab boli
rani mom: beta tumhare bahoot sukriya muje yaha tak laane ke liye warna aaj le jamne mai kon karta hai
me: ji nai ese koi baat nai ye to mera farj ta
r mom: beta meri ek akri icha hai vo puri kar do.
me: ji boliye
r mom: beta meri beti ke mere alva koi nai usse shadi kar lo
mai and rani ye suun ke shock ho gye
me: auntie aap mere baare mai kuch bi nai janti or
Bich mai r mom: nai beta aaj ke jamne mai bi tum dusro ke liye itna kar rehe ho muje Tumhari aankho mai sachiaye najr aati hai
maine ek baar rani ki or deka jo uski maa ki. Baate suun ke kadi ho gai thi but uski najr niche ki or thi
maine usse dekha to vo bahoot sundar or Masoom dikh rahi thi
pta nai muje kya hua maine vaha pe pda knife utya and angute pe cut maar ke rani ki mang bhar di fir humne r mom ka assirwaad liya
rmom: sukriya beta or utna bolte hue unki sanse ruk gai ye dek ke rani rone lagi
maine usko sant karne ke liye maine usse gale lga diya vo bi mujse lipt ke rone lagi
thodi der baad maine uksko sant karya and mai usse le ke bahr aay and sweetie ko and bahar akar mene ek taxi rukwaya
taxi rukne ke baad usme sweety ko bethaya
Me - dekho sweety ab tum Ghar jao me kal tak ghar aa jaunga
mere phone me battery Kam hai sayad switch off ho jae to tension mat lena
mom dad ko bata dena me kal aunga
Janvi - aap nahi chaloge
me - abhi nahi . me tumhe sari baat kal ko bataunga
janvi - thik hai bhaiya
me - driver bhaiya in madam ko ****** address me pahuncha Dena
yeh rakho paise
mene driver pese dekar sweety ko ghar bhej diya
Ab hospital ke samne me aur Rani reh gaye
Me aur Rani unki maa ke mrit sarir ke pas gaye
jaha Rani unki maa ko pakad kar fir se Rona suru kar deti hai
me thodi der unko rone ke liye wahi chhod
diya
pshycology ke anusar agar admi ke rone se uska dukh halka ho jata hai
me unko wahi chhod hospital ka sare paper works khatam kiya
aur fir aa gaya Rani ke pas
me rani ko samjhaya aur unhe ab sant hone ko kaha
me - dekho rani jo hona tha ho gaya
ab wo to wapas nahi aasakenge
lekin unki atma ke Santi keliye aapko apna hosla buland rakhna hoga
ab inki atma ki Santi keliye hame inki kriya karm bhi karne honge
Rani subakte hue mere gale lag gayi
aur behosh ho gayi
bahut der rone ki wajah se kabhi kawar esa hota hai
me unhe hosh me laya aur fir swargrath me baitha kar unke kriya karm sampann karne keliye samsan ghat le gaye
jaha unki partihv sarir ko riti anusar jalaya gaya
Unko sarir jalne ke baad asthi ko laya gaya aur pani me ham dono milkar visarjan kiye
ab rani thodi had tak khud ko sant kar chuki thi
nadi me sare bidhi sampann hone ke baad ham dono car ke pas agaye
fir ham dono car me baith gaye
itne sab kam ke bich mujhe rani ki kapde me dhyan nahi gaya tha
jab ham car me baithe to paya ki rani ke sarir me jo kapde hain wo fate aur purane hain
mano Kai saal ki purani kapde ko baar baar si kar pehen rahi ho
to mene car ko ek mall ki aur dauda di mall me pahunch kar ham andar chane lage
rani abi mujse chipk ke chl rahi ti maind bhi kuch bola nahi or uske liya kuch kpde liya
fir usko vahi change karne ke liye bola usne kuch nai kiya or change kar liya
aur unke purane kapde ko mene wahi mall ke samne ek kude dan me dalkar jala diye
yeah dekh rani ko ascharya hua
fir mai car leke hotel ki or aa gya vaha ek room le liya
fir usko Fresh hone ke liye. Kaha maine khna order kiya or mai balcony mai aa gya or ek sksh ke baare mai sochne laga tab meri anko mai ansu aa gye
ab next update mai..................
Iron Man
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Shaandar jabardast Romanchak UpdateUpdate 9
Next day bi roj ki tarh bit gya
Delhi....... Vikram ke purane gar
Vikram ke jane Ke baad Kisi ko kuch bi farq nai pada sab Apne mai mast enjoy kar rahe the manhoosh chala gya tha Isliye
but didi(nisha didi) and Tiya gar valo Se narj The Isliye vo unse jyada baat nai karte The Bas kaam ki baat karte The unka Ye bartaav dek Ke sab ko thoda shock laga tha liken kisne kuch kaha nai jesa chlta tha vesa chlta rehne diya
•••••••••>hero side
mera traning bi chalu ta mai bahoot jald sab kuch sik raha ta
iss tarh samy bitta gya
After 13 years..........
Ab me 20 sal ka Ho gya hu mera body 6 pack hai and dekne mai 25 ka lagta Hu
aaj muje 3 sal ho gya tha USA Mai
aaj meri traing puri Ho gai ti
in 13 sal Mai Maine sabhi fighting skill and sabhi weapons mai expert and computer hacking mai full expert tha
training completely puri karne ke Baad aaj wapis india jana tha
Mai flight Mai bet gya ta Soch raha ta ki 3 sal Mai sab kese hoge
fir mai so jata Hu
flight land karti hai mai Mumbai airport se bahr ata hu vaha par dad, mom and janvi merko receive karne aaye hue te
mai airport se bahr aate h janvi jese muje dekhti hai doud ke ate h and merko rote hue gale lag jaati hai jisse uske ubhre hue mumme mere bisal chhati me dhas jate hain
lekin hamare man me sirf bhai behen wala pyar hi tha to mai bhi usko gale laga leta hu meri anko mai bhi ansu the
me: kesi hai meri angel
janvi: mai tik hu bhaiya
hmm
mom: hum se bi mil lo hum bi yahi hai
fir mai mom se milta Hu
dad: aa gya mera sher
me: yes dad
fir hum gar aate hai and mai room mai fresh hone chla jata Hu
fir mai niche aata Hu
dining table pe sab mera intajar kar rehe the fir mai bi aa jata hu
for sab lunch karne lagte hai
janvi: bhai aaj muje apko shopping karne le jana hoga and abi tak apne muje apna gift bhi nai diya hai
me: gift?
mai ese react karta hu jese muje shock laga Ho
mom: kya hua beta
me: mom darsal vo mai sweetie ka gift lana bhul gya hu
itna sunte hi sweetie rone lagti hai apne room mai chali jati hai
mom : beta ab jaa usko uska gift de de muje malum hai tu majk kar raha hai
dad: kya tu majk kar raha hai
maine half mai gardn hilla di
dad: merko to laga tu sach mai uske liye gift nai laya
me: are ese kese bhul jau aap dono ke liye bi gift laya hu
thodi der baad bell bajta hai mai darwaja kolta Hu and gift leta hu jo bahoot bada ta
(Ye gift maine USA mai karida ta and delivery ke liye Bol diya ta)
mai fir jaldi gift leke sweetie ke room mai jata Hu vo abi bi ro rahi ti bed pe lete hue
mai uske pass Jake
me: kya hua meri angel ko
janvi : aap bahoot gande ho mere liye gift nai laaye
me: are kisne kaha mai gift nai laya ye deko gift
mai usko gift dikata hu
gift ka name sunn Ke h vo ek dum uth jaati hai and gift ko dekti hai jo maine side mai raka hua ta
vo bed set utr ke gift kolne lagti hai
gift kulne ke Baad gift dekti h vo bahoot kush ho jati hai and chikti hui and nachti hue mere gale lag jati hai
gift mai ek pink colour ka bada sa teddy ta
janvi: thanku thanku bhiya I love you bhai
me: I love you 2 my angel
fir vo mom dad ko gift dikhane lagti hai
mai mom dad ko bi unka gift deta hu
mom gift kolti hai usme bahoot h sundr necklace ta and dad ke gift mai ek bahoot kimti watch ti
fir iss tarh sham hone lagti hai
sham ko mai and janvi shopping pe jate hai car leke
car Mai
me: aaj ka kya plan hai my angel
janvi : bhai sabse pele movie deknge fir shopping and dinner
me: Ohk. Let's go
fir hum mall aa jate hai and movie ki tickets leke movie dekne lagte hai
movie Ke baad shopping karne lagte hai mai thodi bahoot apne shopping karta hu because thode din baad scl bi st hone vala ta
dad ne mera admission BSC final year mai karva diya ta and sweetie bsc 1st year mai
shopping Ke baad hum dinner karte hai
tab tak 10 baj gye Te mom ko pele h bol diya tha maine
fir hum gar aa jate hai and mom dad se thodi bahoot baat karke so jate hai sweetie mere sath soie hui ti
subh mai 4 baje ut jata Hu mai sweetie ko side mai karke uth jata Hu and gar ke bahr aake jogging karta hu and exercise karta hu
(Jack and Maria traning dene Ke baad wapis lout gye The)
mai 7 bje tak exercise vgra karta hu wapis gar aata Hu vaha garden mai dad exercise kar rehe te nai unke pass jata Hu
Me: gm dad
dad: GM beta
dad: traning kesi ti
me: good
dad: hmm. Breakfast ke Baad mere sath ana kuch kaam hai
me: ohk dad muje pta hai kya kaam hai
dad: Tuje kese pata hai
me: Baad mai bta dunga
dad: hmm.chalo AB
Fir hum gar mai aata jate hai mai room mai jaake dekta Hu to sweetie abi tak so rahi ti
mai usko forehead pe kisa karke uta ta hu vo uth ke merko gaal pe kiss karti hai
me: good morning my angel
janvi: gm my sweet Bhai
me: chl ab jaldi fresh hone jaa fir breakfast karna hai
for vo chali jati hai Apne room mai
mai bi fresh ho jata hu and niche jata Hu and mom ko GM wish karta hu vo bi gm wish karte hai
iss tarh breakfasht Ke baad mai room mai ake change karta hu and niche aata Hu vaha pe dad bi ready go chuke Te
me: chle dad
dad: ha chalo
mom: kaha jaa rehe ho aal log
dad: are kahi nai bas mai isse le jaa raha hu kuch kaam hai
Janvi: KYa kaam hai Dad
dad: are kuch nai office jaa raha hu ese scl mai kuch kaam hai to Maine kaha mai chod dunga (juth)
momhk
fir mom and janvi ko byy bol Ke hum nikl jate hai
dad ki office CBI head quarter
vaha pauchne ke Baad dad Apne cabin mai jate hue
dad: sab jaldi dek lene ke baad cabin mai ana
me: ohk
Mai to dek raha ta sab kese work karte hai vagara
fir thodi der baad mai cabin mai jata hu and chair pe bet jata Hu
chair pe bet ke
me: so mujse kisko baat karni hai mere dad ko ya Raw chief ko
meri baat sunne Ke baad dad ko jese shock laga Ho
because dad Raw chief Ye baat kuch logo ko hi malum ta merko nai btya ta
dad: Ye baat tumko kisne btya
me: vimram ko pta nai hoga but "Killer"
Ko to pta hoga na dad
meri baat jesi hi puri hui dad ko firse jatka lga
dad: means USA mai underword ka safaya karne vala killer or koi nai mera beta vikram hai
maine ha mai mundi hila di
dad ko firse jatka lga
dad ne pani piya and thodi der baad bole tum killer kese
me: uske liye apko 1 sal piche jana hoga jab Mai usa gya ta
baki next update mai....................
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कहानी बहुत तेजी से आगे बढ़ा दी अपने। खैर सही ही किया, वरना एक एक दिन लिखना कोई जरूरी नहीं है।
लेकिन कुछ सवाल हैं यहां पर।
१. ओरिजिनल कहानी में हीरो के पास काली शक्तियां थी, शायद आपने वो नहीं रखी।
२. ओरिजिनल परिवार को कब पता चलेगा कि वो लोग गलत सोच रहे हैं हीरो के बारे में?
३. ये जो एकदम से नया कैरेक्टर लाया आपने, वो ही हीरोइन है या फिर किसी और को बनायेंगे, क्योंकि ओरिजिनल कहानी incest में थी।
ये सवाल इसीलिए, क्योंकि आपने खुद लिखा कि कहानी उस कहानी पर बेस्ड है।
लेकिन कुछ सवाल हैं यहां पर।
१. ओरिजिनल कहानी में हीरो के पास काली शक्तियां थी, शायद आपने वो नहीं रखी।
२. ओरिजिनल परिवार को कब पता चलेगा कि वो लोग गलत सोच रहे हैं हीरो के बारे में?
३. ये जो एकदम से नया कैरेक्टर लाया आपने, वो ही हीरोइन है या फिर किसी और को बनायेंगे, क्योंकि ओरिजिनल कहानी incest में थी।
ये सवाल इसीलिए, क्योंकि आपने खुद लिखा कि कहानी उस कहानी पर बेस्ड है।