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Congratulations lovely update

Thank you sam

 

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Bro purani story se alag likhoge ya usi ko continue karoge?

bro ussi ko continue rakhunga

 

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Bhai suru me to thoda fast rakho

kosis jari hai

 

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for new story thread
Nice introduction

Thank you

 

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Vikram ne bahot sahi kia Ghar chhod ker chala aisi zillat bhari Zindagi se
Ab dekhte h yeh accident ke baad kia life me change aate h Vikram ke
Badhiya shaandar update

lekin itni Kam umr me mere hisab se wo galat kiya hai

usse apni hunar se apne maa baap ka dil jitna chahiye tha

 

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Mast update hai bhai .... Ab dekhta hai kya hoga Vikram ka iss accident ka baad aur kya woh kabhi wapas aa payega tiya aur uski sago didi ka pass ...

 

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आपकी कहानी जिस कहानी से प्रेरित है, उसकी कमी थी जरूरत से ज्यादा हीरोइन का होना, हीरोइन 1 या 2 बहुत होती है पर उसमें 4 से 5 तक तो अधूरी कहानी में ही दिख गई थी, और मेरे खयाल से यही कारण था उसके बीच में ही बंद होने का।

आप फोकस बस हीरो और उसके परिवार पर ही रखें, स्टोरी ज्यादा अच्छी चलेगी

apke baton par jarur dhyan dunga

 

[Iron Man]

Update 3

iss tarh din nikal gai roj mujhe maar padti and Mai rota rehta

ab muje bi unse nafrat hone laga tha

AB mai ***** saal ka Ho gya tha to mere School Mai admission ke liye MAA ne dad se baat ki to unohne mana kar diya

But Mai *******,******** saal jitne baccho jitna samj sakta tha and mera body bhi kuch esa hi tha koi bhi dekhe to yahi lagta ki main ********sal ka hu


fir maa jese tese Kar Ke mera admission ek sarkari School Mai karva di

Mere baki sare bhai behen badi private School mai padte The

Mai morning Mai School jaata and baad mai ghar aake khana khata Apne room mai and Baad mai jab sab kam karne ke liye bolate the vah kam Karta Tha

kam ke liye Mana bhi nahin kar sakta Tha Agar kam ke liye Mana Karta to maar padte issse Achcha To fir kam karna hi tha isliye main chupchap kam kar Leta tha aur Unka torture bhi Sahan Karta Tha

Is Tarah Din nikalte Koi ab main ******* Sal ho gaya tha

mai study Mai kafi Acha tha ek bar jo Dekh liya aur padh liya usko wapis padhne ki jarrurat nai thi

Main Apne pari Ke saath kabhi kabhi Chhupke Chhupke se khel liya Karta Tha usko pata hi nahin tha ki main uska bhai hun

Ek Din sham ko waqt pata nahin ki dad Sharab pikar aaya tha Aur Main unke Samne a Gaya to FIR unhone mujhe bahut Mara main bhi Maar Khata Raha lekin Kuchh Kar Bhi Nahin Sakta tha
bad Mein Chala Gaya to raat ko meri Nind Bahar se aati Kuchh Awaaz se khuli to maine Chupke Se bahar ake sunne Laga to deka ki Mere Sab Parivar wale baat kar rahe the Mere Bhai Bahan ke alava

Arvind SINGH : bhai mai bol raha hu ki ab iss kutte ko yaha rakhne ka koi matlab nai iss Acha to hum Isko maar dete hai

Dad : ha baat to sahi Teri iss manhoosh se chutkara bhi mil jaayga

Mom : Mai bhi Yahi kehti Hu ji

NitaSingh and Naina SINGH - hum bhi yahi kehte hai

Jyda nuksan Ho usse acha to yahi hai ki maar daale kutte ko

mai to Ye sab sunne Ke baad hi kuch bolne ki haalaat Mai nahi tha

maine Socha nahi tha ki ye log itna nicche gir sakte hai Maine Soch liya tha ki mai kal School ke Baad bhag jaunga Kai dur

Ye log bi baat karke Sone ke liye chale jaate hai

meri nind kosho dur chali gai thi puri raat mai jaagta raha

next day
morning Mai

Mai : MAa mujhe kuch rupees de do kuch kaam hai

MA : ha Ye le waise Kabi paise to tune mange nahi fir aaj kyu

mai : kuch samn lena hai study related

MAA - thik hai beta

uss din to mera din hi kharb tha

Mai room se nikal ke jaa raha tha ki Amit bhai se takra gya jisse unhone muje maara aur bole

Amit bhai : kutte dekh Ke nai chal sakta kya

wo bahoot Jor se chillya jisse sab ghar wale bhi aa gaye

jab unko baat ka pta cha unhone bi bahoot mara

meri haalt bahoot buri Ho gai ti

maar Khaane Ke baad dhere dhere School ki taraf chala gya

but school nahi gya

mujhe bahoot gussa aa raha tha maine Ye thaan liya tha ki mai iss pariwar par esa grahn lagaunga ki inki rooh kaanp uthe

Mai School na jaake Railway Station chala gya waha pe Ek train chalne ki tayari mai tha
so Mai bhi beth gya

ek dibbe ke Kone Mein jakar chupchap baith Gaya

Meri Halat bahut Buri Thi lekin jaldi se Meri Halat theek ho gai yah To Mujhko Bhi Nahin Pata Tha ki Mere Ghao itni jaldi Kaise bhar Jaate hain lekin Mere Ghao Sara jaldi bhar gaye the

vo train chlne lagi iss tarh raat Ho gai

At home......

jab Mai gar nai pouncha tab sirf MAA and didi ko bahoot tension Ho gya

MA : malkin vikram abhi tak gar nahi aaya

mom: are wah kya khabar sunai hai wo Naa aaye to Acha Kahin mar jaay to Acha hai
Agr Idhar aa jaata to wese bi aaj usko marna tha haaaaa

Ye bol Ke hasne lagti hai

mom : acha hua manhoosh chala gya Hamara ghar surkashit Ho gaya

Ye sab baate bahar khadi Didi sun rahi thi AB unko bhi gussa aa gayaa and Andar aake boli

Didi - aap kya bol rehi ho mom wo mera bhai and apka beta ta

mom: kya bol rahi hai tum , bhai or Tera vo kutta tha and bhai to Tera amit ,rohan hai Samjhi

AB to vo nahi aayega Kahin mar gaya hoga haaa

ab koi rasta nai tha maa or Didi chali jaati hai didi room mai jaake rone lagi

tab room mai pari aa gai

vo **** saal ki Ho gai thi vo bhi samajhne lagi thi thodi bahoot baate

pari(Tiya ): kya hua Didi aap ro Kyu rahi hai

didi usko dekte Rona band karti hai and bolti hai
Didi : nahi sweety main Kaha ro rahi Hu

pari : didi juth mat boliye batyiye kya hua please didi Ye bol Ke vo bhi rone lagti hai

didi: rote hue bolti hai betu. ...... betu ... vo chala gya...... vo chala gya

pari : kon chala gya didi

didi: bhai chala gya Hamara bhai

pari : Didi Amit bhai and rohan bhai to yahi hai

Didi : vo nai Hamra saga bhai Vikram

pari : kya Didi vo Hamra bhai kintu vo to noukar tha Na

didi: nahi sweetu vo noukar nahi tha vo Hamara saga bhai tha

pari: kya wo saga Bhai tha Ye bolte hue vo bhi rone lagti hai

kyunki mai hamesa uske ko chocolate deta tha and uske saath khelta tha Kisi ko pata nai tha iss baare Mai

pari : didi ab bhai kabhi wapis nai aaynge kya

Didi : nahi vo aayega, Kabhi to usse hamri yaad wapis leke aayga

Ye sab mom dad and baki sabki wajh se hua hai

pari : ha didi sahi kaha apne hamesa unko marte rehte The Mai ab Kabhi baat nai karungi

did: Mai bhi sweety

ghar se main chala gya is khabar sunte hi sab kush ho jaate hain and ek badi party rakhte hai

In train....

ab kafi raat Ho chuki ti

train Mai kafi sannta ta.

mai bi chupchap so gya bhook to bahoot lagi but ab kar bi kya sakte hai

Next day....

Train ek platform par ruki thi mai bi utar gya waha pe board dekha to pata chala ki mai mumbai mai aa gay tha

maine jo maa ke pas se paise liye The usse kuch khana liya and kha liya jisse thodi bhook sant hui

Baad mai waha se chalta gaya chalte hue main bahut dur aa gya tha road bi sunsan tha

at home......

MAA ne bi muje dhudne ki koshi ki lekin kuch pta nahi chala

didi bi sabse bahot kam baate karti thi pari bhi thoda bahoot ese karti thi

baki sab to kushiya mana rahe the

back to me......

ab raat Ho gai thi main bi sunsaan sadak pe chal raha tha tabhi ek car udhar pichhe se aati hai and mujhe uda deti hai
jisse muje bahoot chot lagti hai Mai dur jaake gir ta hu



Baaki next update mai........

Shaandar jabardast Romanchak Update
Ab nayi shuruaat karega par kismat yaha bhi dhokha de diya

 

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Badhiya update diya ha aapne

Thank you aur queen

 

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Shaandar jabardast Romanchak Update
Ab nayi shuruaat karega par kismat yaha bhi dhokha de diya

Thank you