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gautamking19

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Jab ye kahani mene apne hath me li ye 1 page likha ja chuka tha. Aage ki puri kahani meri kalpnao pe aadharit he. Or dr chutiya sab ka fen hona matlab ye nahi ki unki story name change kar ke me chipka du. Meri puri story alag he. Jabar dasti kirdar match kar ke kya sabit karna chahte he log. Ek topic pe likhi story to kuchh bhi iljam de doge.
Aap meri bat nahi samjhi maine bola jab tapan ko aapne starting me dikhaya tha to us time namard type tha wo Taylor ka land dekh ke dar gya tha is ka matalab uska chota ya medium size hoga tav to dar gaya phir aap tin tin female character ke sath dikha rahe ho or jo dekhta hai tapan ko bas usse chud ke khus ho jati hai lagta hai insan nahi sex machine ho padhne me achha lag raha hai lekin logic ki bat yaha dur dur tak nahi hai
 

gautamking19

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Abhi likha jaega jo dill me aaega jise padhna vo padhe. Me kisi ki khusamat nahi karungi. Or Madhuri ka kirdar ek randi jesa he. Vo hi rahega. Ye mera kam he vo randi ko mahan kese sabit karna he. Vo me karungi. Me koi satisavitri ki kahani nahi likh rahi.
Aap ko jaise likhna hai waise likho koi dikkat nahi hai pahle se accha lag raha hai apna minde fress kar ke likho
 

Shetan

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Me ghar gaya. Aliya samne muje dekh kar smaile kar rahi thi. Aliya bahot hi pyari or sexy lag rahi thi.

Aliya ; aao jiju. Aap ke lie ek sapris he.

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Muje aliya bahot pasand he. Me us se bahot pyar karta hu. Aliya ne jesa look le rakha tha. Sayad muje laga vo hi sapris hoga. Mene hath badhaya vo meri baho me aa gai. Mera ek hath uski kamar pe or dusra hath uske hips pe chale gaya. Aliya ki chamkti zango se uske sort onepise ka kapde ko upar sarka kar uske hips pe panty ke upar se nene hatho se use masal diya.

Me ; muje tumhara saprais pasand aaya.

Aliya ; abhi to dekha kaha he aap ne!!!

Me ; to dikhao.

Me aliya ko niche se panty ke andar ungliya fasa ke gand ke chhed ko kuredne laga.

Aliya ; ssss jijuuu ye nahiii heeeeeeee.

Aliya ka face nashila hone laga. Uski ankhe band or hoth khul gae. Mene khule hue lips ko apne hotho se lock kar diya. Aliya ne ek hath mere gale me or dusra mere sar pe rakh diya. Vo mere balo ko sahelate kiss ka maza ke rahi thi.

Aliya ; aaj me nahi didi aap ko sapraiz degi.

Me ; lekin vo to der se aane vali he na.

Aliya hasne lagi or boli.

Aliya ; ya allah mere sohar bade bhole he. Meri ek didi nahi he. Dusri bhi he.

Muje aliya ki bato se jyada usne jo urdu boli uspe jyada hasi aai.

Aliya ; hasiye mat jiju aaj aap fresh ho jao fir aap ke hosh uddne vale he.

Aliya me ye badlav bahot hi muje khusi de raha tha. Jo ladki shilpa se pahele jalti thi aaj vo uska sath de rahi thi.

Me ; lekin muje madhu ya tum dono me se koi ek ke bina nind nahi aaegi.

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Aliya ka face bahot masum tha. Vo 18 19 sal ki bacho jesi bate karne vali ladki ab samazdar ho rahi thi. Andhera ho chuka tha.

Aliya ; to adat ko Change kijiye aap 2 nahi 3 mohtrama ke shohar ho abb. Aap ko apni 3no biwiyo se pyar karna he.

Aliya ; jaiye pahele fresh ho jaiye nachis aap ke samne najrana pesh karne ke lie betab he.

Muje aliya ki urdu bahot hi mast lag rahi thi. Jese filmo me koi bujurg vyakti bolta he vesi language ka uss kar rahi thi. Mene aliya ko ek or kiss kar diya me apne bedroom me ja kar kapde change kiye kurta or pajama pahen ke bathroom jane laga aliya khadi muje sexy nigaho se dekh rahi thi. Deevar ke sahare sar ko laga ke apni hips se bar bar deewar ko thokar marti or muje sexy nigaho se dekhti.
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Aliya samne ho ese look me to koi sapraiz bhul jae. Me use hi dekhta raha. Aliya muje hi smaile karte hue dekh rahi thi.

Me ; kya meri hone wali biwi muje apne hstho se nahla sakti he.

Aliya bhag ke mere pas aai muje gale laga kar baho me zul gai.

Aliya ; ye to meri khudkismati hogi janab. Aap andar chaliye ham tawal le ke abhi hajir hue.

Me bathroom me gaya aaj aliya kuchh jyada hi urdu bol rahi thi. Muje uski bato pe hasi aa rahi thi. Vo bada ajib lekin pyara bol rahi thi. Me apna kurta utarne hi vala tha ki aliya aa gai.

Aliya ; janab aap takluf mat kijiye ye jimma hamara he.

Me haste hue aliya please ye urdu mat bolo. Me tumhe dekh kar feeling le raha hu or tum ho ki hasae ja rahi ho.

Aliya ; ok ok nahi bolti.

Aliya mera kurta upar karti he. Me bhi apne dono hath upar kar ke use saport karta hu.

Aliya ; jiju aapne apni is sali ka kuvara pan le liya. Muje aage or pichhe dono jagah pyar kiya. Fir didi koooo.

Me ; tum kya kahena chahti ho alu??

Aliya ; ek to sali. Adhi ghar wali. Upar se puri he ban ne wali. Agar aa jae sali. To na jae kowari sali. Kuchh na kiya to ho jaegi maus sali. Kyo ke hone wali he wo puri ghar wali. Kuchh samze aapke samne pesh he hamare yovan ki thali.

Me ; baho khub alu kaha se sikha.

Aliya ; ye aap ke pyar ka jadu he.

Jab se shilpa sarmane lagi he aliya masti khor bante ja rahi he.

Aliya ; jiju didi ki chah thi vo aaj saj sawar kar aap ka intjar kare. Aaj vo redy he aap se gujaris he ki didi se bahot pyar se pesh aae. Didi ko dar or dard dono hi jyada hota he. Aaj vo kahi se bhi kawari nahi raheni chahiye.

Me ; fir muje tumhare bina nind to aa nahi sakti.

Aliya ; ye mene kab kaha ki me apne shohar ke bina so jaungi. Aap bistar pe sahensa ki tarah jaiye. Ye kanij aap ki khidmat me hajir rahegi.

Me ; alu fir se??? Ab tum tumhari didi jese muje koi raja mat banao. Mana muje tum teeno se pyar ho gaya matlab tum.

Aliya ; aap bhul gae didi kya bolti he. Jangale me sher ankela chalta he. Sherniya unke aage pichhe chalti he. Me pahele footboll khelti thi. Caption ke sar jit ka sahera 2 ya 3 straikar goll mar ke karte he. Didi ki ye bat muje samaz aa gai he. Bahetar hoga ki shilpa didi bhi samaz aa. jae.

Aaj aliya me muje tisra badlav dikh raha tha. Vo jese ek samzdar biwi ki tarah bhi pes aa rahi thi ek natkhat premika bhi or koi biwi ya premika apne pati ya premi ko bachane ke lie yamraj se bhi ladh jae vo bhi lady najor aa rahi thi.

Me ; kya tum hamari bate sunti ho ???

Aliya ; nahi mahesus karti hu. Didi sikar karegi tab me hamesa aap ke sath rahungi. Didi sayad sach hi kaheti hogi khatra dikh nahi raha he lekin he. Didi aap ko be fikar rahene ko kaheti he. Lekin me didi jesi nahi ban sakti. Muje aap ki madad ki jarurat he. Jab tak aap madad nahi karoge me suraxa ghera nahi bana paungi.

Me ; aliya tumhe kya ho gaya he.

Aliya hasti he or boli.

Aliya ; aap se be panah mahobbat. Gaherai tak sayad gaherai tak. Kayamat tak aap ka sath nibhane ka vada karti hu me.

Muje aliya aaj bahot badli badli najar aai. Me us se pyar karta tha. Aliya ki ankho me bhi muje pyar najar aaya. Lekin aaj jese vo badi ho gai thi.

Aliya ; ab ye sab chhodiye aaiye aap muje apna kam karne dijiye please meri bato pe jyaada dhyan mat do. Chalo me urdu nahi bolungi.

Aliya muje befikar karne ki nakam kosis karti he. Vo mera pajama utar ne lagi me to aliya ke lie taiyar tha. Jan buch kar me undarwer nahi pahena tha. Lekin aliya ki bato se mera mood change ho chuka tha. Aaj muje esa lag raha tha. Dushman sach me aas pas he. Lekin Madhuri or ab aliya muje kuchh bhi karne nahi denge.
Aliya mere land ko hath me lekar boli. Jese mere land se bat kar rahi ho. Muje hasane ki kosis kar rahi ho.

Aliya ; are kya kar rahe ho janab meri didi pichhe se kawari he or aap uddas ho. Lao me tumhe ek kiss deti hu. Tab tum bhi mere jiju jese sher ban jaoge. Kya kaha heeeee me kon hu. Are tumhe pata nahi me unki hone wali chhoti biwi hu. Lo kamal he. Sari duniya janti he. Aliya ko jiju se pyar he. Or tum kahete ho tum kon ho.

Muje hasi aane lagi aliya mere land se bat kar rahi thi. Khud hi land se sawal karti or khud hi land ko jawab deti. Usne sach me mera mood change kar diya.

Me ; ise bhi tumhare pyar ki jarurat he.

Aliya muje dekh kar smaile karti he. Vo mere land ka topa apne chhote patle lips se muh me bahrati he. Tope ke sirf chhed ke hisse ko. Aliya chhu le me taiyar na ho jau esa ho hi nahi sakta. Me use jakad na chahta tha. Vo muje rokti he or boli

Aliya ; ( smaile ) jiju me nahi didi.

Aliya muje khud hi bath tab me bittha ke nahelane lagi vo haste jati or nahlate jati. Vo pure sarir ko gila kiya fir muje sabun laga ne lagi mere sar se lekar pau tak. Mere land pe bhi khub mal ke sabun lagaya. Mera land sakt lohe ki rode me badal gaya. Vo mere pure body ko pani se saf kar ke. Muje khada karti he. Aaj meri ajib sewa ho rahi thi muje gam sirf ek tha Madhuri aaj bhi sath nahi he. Madhuri to meri asli pyas he. Aliya muje tawal se pochti he.

Aliya jiju kapde pahen ne ki koi jarurat nahi he. Aaiye.

Aliya mera land pakad ke aage matak ke chal rahi thi. Dhire dhire apni kamr ko matkate hue. Kya najara tha. Jese me koi aaiyas raja. Pura nanga. Meri rani aliya aage mera land ko pakad ke aahista aahista chhote kadam se kamar ko lachak deke. Bahot maza aane laga. Vo muje bahar sofe par bitthati he. Samane ek parda laga tha. Vo sayad unhone bad me arenge kiya hoga. Aliya jake parda hatati he to samne dekh ke mere hosh udd jate he. Me sirf itna hi bol paya.

Me ; wow silpaaaa....


Udhar Madhuri shetsn ke changul se nikal gai. Kabhi kabhi sikari sher par esa hawi ho jata he ki sher ko sikari se chakma de ke nikal jane me hi bhalai hoti he. Madhuri ne bhi vahi kiya. Aaj shetan ko bhi ye nahi pata tha ki vo jeet ki taraf badh raha tha. Vese to shetan ka maind wash ho raha tha. Lekin Madhuri ko bhi sex ka nasha chadhne laga tha. Vo apni manzil hasil nahi kar pati. Vo ab kache khiladi se dav khelegi. Shetan ke sath khelna abhi thik nahi hoga. Usman bhi rafik ki tarah lalchi nikla hawas ka. Kya pata Madhuri use raste se hata de ya rafik ki tarah kutta bana de.
Aliya me jo badlav aaya jab Madhuri ghar se ja rahi thi tab aliya ko ek chitthi ( latar ) de gai thi. Usme likha tha.

Madhuri ; muje nahi pata me tumse kyo kah rahi hu. Muje pata he tum aksar hame rat ko chhup kar sunti ho. Tum apne jiju ke photo ko bhi akele me chumti ho muskurati ho kyo ki tumhe bhi unse pyar he. Mere pas mere pati ke ikava kuchh nahi he me bahot nasib vali hu ke vo mere pati he.
Mene apne pati ko tumse bata he. Tumhe apni chhoti bahen mana he. Lekin aaj muje tumhari jarurat he. Agar tum kar sako to. Unke charo taraf ek esa ghera banao jo koi bhed na sake. Me sirf tum pe bharosa kar rahi hu. Shilpa is kam ke layak nahi he. Vo tumhari tarah bahadur nahi he. Tum ho hamare zund ki dusri sherni. Me sirf tum pe bharosa kar rahi hu kyo ki hamara pyar ek he.
Muje tumhari jarurat he chhoti bahena. Tumhe apni masumiyat ko chhodna hoga. Tab tak jagna hoga jab tak me karib na aau. Bhul jao tum apne aap ko. Apne bachpan ko chhod do. Ghat laga kar beth jao jo dushman aa raha he uske intjar me.
Yaad karo us wakt ko kese tumne us buddhe rafik se ladhi. Apni izjat apne aatma bachai. Swabhiman ko bachaya tha. Agar tum ye ladhai nahi ladhna chahti to bul jao sab. Me tumhari mushkan chhin na nahi chhahti. Chaho to jese raheti ho vese hamari tarah rah sakti ho.


Aliya ne ye khat ko padh ke jahen me uttara or khud se boli.

Aliya ; ab farz nibhane ka wakt aa gaya he. Jo namak khaya he uski halali ka wakt aa gaya he. Ya allah muje itni takat de ki apne shohar ko bacha saku. Didi aap maush nahi hongi.

Aliya is tarah apne Bachpan ko bhul ke badal gai vo bina trening ke bhi ladhai ke lie taiyar thi. Us dushman se jise usne pahele kabhi dekha tak nahi tha. Vo jag rahi thi. Kyo ki zund ki mukhiya sherni zund se dur thi.


Madhuri shetan ko dur dhakel deti he.

Shetan ; kya huaa.?????

Madhuri ; pahele kam. Bulao sab ko.

Shetan ; aa jaenge tum to nazdik aao.

Madhuri shetan se dur hati to uska chhota sa blouse khul chuka tha. Madhuri apne hatho se use chupake bed pe side me bethi thi. Madhuri ko dekh ke usman apna land hila raha tha. Vo bhi ese dekhta he kya ho gaya sayad use bhi moka mil jata. Shetan bhi apne aap ko rok nahi pa raha tha. Madhuri ke gore badan pe latakta huaa mangalsutra kayamat lag raha tha. Ab bhi sab ke dillo me erotic feelings jinda thi. Lekin ab Madhuri ne target badal diya tha. Vo ek bar usman ko dekhti he fir shetan ko bolti he

Madhuri ; muje is ke samne saram aati he ise bahar bhejo na please.

Shetan ke dill me chingari fir sole me tabdil ho gai vo Madhuri ko baho se khichta he. Jis se Madhuri ka hath boobs se hat jata he. Madhuri ke gore gore santre jese bade rasile boobs or gulabi nipples usman dekh leta he. Usman ka bhi dimak kam karna band kar deta he. Vo Madhuri ki panty apne land pe ghisne laga. Setan ne jab bahe pakad ke khichato Madhuri siskte boli.

Madhuri ; aauch ssssss chhodo nahi sssss. Ahh dekho na vo ksmina muje dekh ke kesa kar raha he.

Shetan ; are tum ho hi itni mast kayamat.

Madhuri ke khule bal or upar se kamar tak puri nangi. 2 boobs ke bich tak latakta mangalsutra. Mang me sidur. Mathe par bindiya dekh ke vo machal gaya. Madhuri puri houswife wali feelings de rahi thi.

Madhuri ; muje uske samne sharam aa rahi he. Sssss ahhhh please use bshar bhejo na.

Madhuri ki saree kamar se niche latak rahi thi use shetan ne fir se god me ulta betha liya tha. Samne usman apna land hila raha tha. Shetan Madhuri ki kabhi kamar pitth to kabhi boobs ko jor se masal deta. Jis se vo jan buch ke esi siskari leti taki dono mard hosh kho betthe. Lekin ab Madhuri bhi purane wakt me pahoch gai kese uska dada use apne dosto ke samne nagi ghumata. Unke samne chudai bhi karta. Kai bar apne budhe dosto ke land chuswata or chudva bhi deta.

Madhuri ; sss please pehele sab ko bulao please sss aahhh pahele kam please nahi. Sss

Shetan Madhuri ki jid ke aage nahi tik paya vo utthkar dusre room jaha main office tha apna mobail le aaya vo bed pe Madhuri ki taraf pitth kar ke lala ko phon lagata he.

Madhuri bhi dusri chal khelti he. Shetan ke pitth ke pichhe. Vo usman ko smaile deti he. Apna gira huaa saree ka pallu uttha ke usman ki taraf hath badha deti he. Usman khada ho kar pallu ko pakadta he or khichne laga. Madhuri ki saree nikal gai vo sirf ghaghre me thi. Madhuri ne usman ko ankh mari or hottho ko dabate huee ghaghre ka nada bhi use dikha kar gol gol ghumati he. Usmsn nada pakadta he or use khich deta he. Nada dhila ho gaya. Usman ka hath Madhuri pakad kar apni zang pe rakhti he.
Usman ko hotho pe apne hotth rakh ke chhoti si kiss deti he. Usman zang pe rakhe hath ko bhich kar ghaghre ke kapde ko mutthi me samet leta he. Madhuri usman ko vo feeling de rahi thi. Jese shetan Madhuri ka pati he or uski pitth ke pichhe Madhuri usman ko chance de rahi ho. Notty smaile. Hottho ko apas me ragadna dato se katna. Usman ke lie badi hi erotic feeling thi. Jese hi usnan mutthi me bhare kapde ko khichta he. Madhuri puri nangi ho jati he.

Usi wakt lala se call ko kat kar ke shetan pichhe mudta he. Madhuri girgit ki tarah rang badal chuki thi. Vo masum or dukhi ghabraya huaa face bana kar sukud jati he. Jese usman Madhuri ke sath jabardasti karne ki kosis kar raha ho. Shetan ye najara dekhta he to gussa ho jata he. Vo chatak de kar ushman ke gal pe rasid kar deta he.

Shetan ; sale kutte tu nokar he nokar mere mal pe najar mat dalna. Sale bad me jutthan chhod dunga vo kha lena.

Madhuri shetan ke pitth piche usnan ko gandi smaile karti he jese kah rahi ho maja aaya. Usman badle ki bhavna le ke pas me betth jata he. Shetan use gusse se dekhta he.

Shetan ; lala ko to bula liya vo aa raha he thapad bhi aa raha he magar sala kumar ashok ka pata nahi chal raha. Sala uske bina kese kam chalega????

Madhuri shetan ka hath pakadti he

Madhuri ; koi bat nahi aao mud mat kharab karo me sab sambhal lungi.

Shetan beth jata he. Madhuri bhi vapas premika ban kar shetan ko niche gira ke. Uske upar chadh jati he.

Madhuri ; Aao na tumhara mood thik karti hu.

Madhuri dohari chal khel chuki thi. Vo puri nangi shetan ke upar land pe beth jati he. Shetan ka land khada tha. Madhuri shetan ke shirt ke boton kholne lagi. Shetan ki ankho me dekh ke muskurane lagi. Shetan khush ho jata he. Sochta he ye meri diwani sirf muje chahti he. Madhuri har gair mard ko yahi to bhram deti he. Vo shetan ko bhi hone laga. Madhuri apni adae dikhati hui shetan ko bhi pura nanga kar deti he.
Shetan leta huaa tha. Madhuri shetan ke zango par bethh jati ke. Shetan zang pe Madhuri ki hips or darar ko mshesus karta he. Shetan ka land lohe jesa sakht ho gaya. Madhuri shetan ke land ko apni nokili ungliyo se pakadti he. Or apne lips se ragadti he. Shetan ki ankhe band ho gai mano jese vo swarg me pahoch gaya. Madhuri ka ye roop dekh kar fir se ushman apni bejati tak bhul gaya vo fir jamin pe beth gaya. Madhuri ne bhi ye mahesus kiya.
Ek or mard ghasita bhi ye sara khel dekh raha tha. Uska bhi land jese fatne ko hone laga. Vo bhi ye sara khel dekh raha tha. Madhuri shetan ke land se apni lips pe lipstick laga rahi thi. Muh khola or tope ko muh me le liya. Madhuri ne apni najre ushman ki taraf ghumai. Ankho ki bhavre ko up down kar ke ushman ko puchhti he kesa lag raha he? Usman bhi sirf thuk badi mushkil se nigal paya. Madhuri pure land ko muh me nigal gai. Shetan ki bhi halat kharab ho gai. Vo Madhuri ki gili gili jeebh ki ghisahat mahesus karne laga. Use bada maja aa raha tha. Madhuri land ko muh me le kar chusne lagi or usman ki taraf dekhti rahi.
Ushman ki halat kharab hone lagi. Sath upar se dekh raha ghasita bhi. Bhul gaya vo yaha kyo aaya tha. Madhuri shetan ke mand ko sidat se chusti rahi or ushaman ko garan karti rahi. Madhuri kuchh det bad khadi hui or shetan ke face ki taraf pitth kar ke shetan ke land pe betth gai. Ek hath se land ko pakad ke chut ke chhed pe rakhti he. Ye sara najara vo janbuchkar ushman ko dikhati he. Ushman ke sath ghasita bhi ye dekh raha tha. Dono mard apna land nikal kar hilane lage. Madhuri aahista se niche ki taraf betth gai.
Shetan ka pura land Madhuri ki chut ne nigal liya. Ushman or ghasita dono ye najara dekh ke sakhti se apne hath ko chalane lage. Madhuri apna sexy face se or siskariyo se ushman ko pagal bana rahi thi.

Madhuri ; ammmmmm sssss ahhhhhh as

Madhuri ki siskariya bhi itni nasili thi ki vo khud bhul gai. Vo sex ke nashe me bahe gai. Vo shetan ke land pe jamap marne lagi. Shetan bhi hosh kho betha vo sirf pada pada hafne laga. Madhuri ke uchhalne se uske boobs bhi hawa ne uchhalkar apni mojudgi bata rahe the. Madhuri kabhi slow kabhi fast pura andar tak land ko nigal rahi thi. Apni ek ungli se ushman ko nazdik aane ka hisara kiya.
Ushman dhire dhire karib aaaya. Madhuri ne hath lamba kiya or ushman ko balo se pakad kar apne pas khicha. Ushman ke gande se kale hottho par apne hotth rakh diye. Madhuri joro se use chusne lagi. Vo shetan ke land ki jor jor se sawari karti. Or ushman ke land ko sakhti se pakad ke hilane lagi. Madhuri ne ushman ko samne khada kiya. Or zatke se pura nigal gai. Ushman bhi aapa khone laga use Madhuri ki muh ki garmi esi lagi jese uska land jal jaega. Vahi shetan bhi yahi feel kar raha tha. Madhuri ki chut ki garmi sach me itni jyada badh gai ke shetan ko land me jalan hone lagi
Madhuri ushman ka land ko ese chuse ja rahi thi jese vo koi amrit chus rahi ho. Use ye pata chal gaya ushman ab zadne vala he. Madhuri ne ekdam se jor se ushman ko dakka mara usman dur jamin par gir gaya. Girte hi uska pani chhut gaya. Madhuri ye dekh ke hasne lagi or ushman ka mazak uddane lagi. Ushman ne sharam se ankhe zuka li. Shetan bhi har gaya or Madhuri ki chut me pichkari chhut gai Madhuri khadi hui or shetan ke face ke upar dono tango ko sar ke aaju baju rakh ke khadi ho gai. Shetan ke land ka pani Madhuri ki chut se tapakta tapakta shetan ke face pe girne laga.
Madhuri zadi nahi thi. Vo shetan ke face pe hi beth gai. Apne chut ko shetan ke face pe ragadne lagi. Shetan ki sanshe rukne lagi vo chhatpatane laga. Madhuri ki pichkari shetan ke pure muh ko gila kar diya Madhuri sant hui or shetan ko baxte hue khadi hui. Vo kabhi shetan ko dekhti kabhi ushman ko dekhti.
 

Shetan

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Aap meri bat nahi samjhi maine bola jab tapan ko aapne starting me dikhaya tha to us time namard type tha wo Taylor ka land dekh ke dar gya tha is ka matalab uska chota ya medium size hoga tav to dar gaya phir aap tin tin female character ke sath dikha rahe ho or jo dekhta hai tapan ko bas usse chud ke khus ho jati hai lagta hai insan nahi sex machine ho padhne me achha lag raha hai lekin logic ki bat yaha dur dur tak nahi hai
Us wakt tapan ko normal inshsn dikhaya he. Napushak nahi. Uska purja normal inshsno ki tarah he. Vo 1 st page likhne vale ki galti he. Is lie muje maf kare or aage ki kahani ka lift utthaiye
 

kamdev99008

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Jab ye kahani mene apne hath me li ye 1 page likha ja chuka tha. Aage ki puri kahani meri kalpnao pe aadharit he. Or dr chutiya sab ka fen hona matlab ye nahi ki unki story name change kar ke me chipka du. Meri puri story alag he. Jabar dasti kirdar match kar ke kya sabit karna chahte he log. Ek topic pe likhi story to kuchh bhi iljam de doge.
Yar kamal ki bat he ek hi blem diya ja raha he. Apne aap ka kya pruf kiya jae. Isi vajah se kal ka update muje chhodna pada
Meri story koi puri tarah se pahele se sochi samzi ya likhi nahi he. Jo kalpana ki vo likh diya.
Aap meri bat nahi samjhi maine bola jab tapan ko aapne starting me dikhaya tha to us time namard type tha wo Taylor ka land dekh ke dar gya tha is ka matalab uska chota ya medium size hoga tav to dar gaya phir aap tin tin female character ke sath dikha rahe ho or jo dekhta hai tapan ko bas usse chud ke khus ho jati hai lagta hai insan nahi sex machine ho padhne me achha lag raha hai lekin logic ki bat yaha dur dur tak nahi hai
Aapki creativity aur narration dono ka prashanshak hu mein.... Aapki ye pahli kahani hai... Tab bhi aap sabhi links ko jodkar chal rahi hain... Lekin fir bhi bade bade anubhavi writers bhi loopholes chhod dete hain..... Jisko samne lane ke liye hum readers hain hi....
Rahi bat apki lead character to jaruri nahi ki wo positive image hi ho... Negative bhi ho sakti hai... Isliye kahani jo apke man me hai usme badlav karke madhuri ko mahan banane ki koshish na karein....

Aur real batau.... Madhuri ko lekar jo story ka flow banta hai.... Ye jabardasti justification ke liye aaliya, shipa ya wo doctor dost... Ko tapan ke sath chipkana.... Boring lagne lagta hai... Senseless...

To ap wo likho jo ap likhna chahti ho... Humare samne madhuri ko justify karne ke liye... Bekar ka kachra naa badhayein... Characters ko jarurat ke hisab se kahani me space dein

Golu bhai se bhi request hai meri... Itna demotivate na kare writer ko.... Criticize karo lekin wek had tak
 

Shikari_golu

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Yar kamal ki bat he ek hi blem diya ja raha he. Apne aap ka kya pruf kiya jae. Isi vajah se kal ka update muje chhodna pada

Koi blam nhi kar raha tumhe....sab story ko blaim karte hai...

jo v personally blaim kare...usko waisa jawaab bhi de dena...ok

Aur haa...agar tumhara likh character (tapan ) achanak change ho jaaye to iske liye kise blaim karna chahiye...socho jara....

Aur aise comment se distract hona accha nhi .. .likho wahi jo tum chaho...bas comments ko accept karna seekho...only abt story....

aur agar kisi user ke comment bure lagte hai....to saaf bol do.....agar wo chutiya nhi hoga to story ki taraf dekhega bhi nhi....bas bol kar dekho...ok


Meri story koi puri tarah se pahele se sochi samzi ya likhi nahi he. Jo kalpana ki vo likh diya.

Main manta hu ki story kalpna se hi paida hoti hai....kyoki main bhi 3-4 saap se likh raha hu....

but story ke characters ko justify karna writter ka kaam hai....wo ye kaam theek se nhi karega to log bolege hi....


Haa kuch chutiye hai...jo sex scene dekh kar khush ho jate hai bas.....unhe logic se koi lena dena nhi...unke liye to sex scene kafi hai....

ab ye tum par hai ki tumhe kaise reader chahiye....jo sirf wah-wah kare...ya story ki galti bataaye...mye baat tumhe hi decide kar ke bolni hai....

Bas bolo....for comment nhi aayga.....ok
 

Yash420

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Us wakt tapan ko normal inshsn dikhaya he. Napushak nahi. Uska purja normal inshsno ki tarah he. Vo 1 st page likhne vale ki galti he. Is lie muje maf kare or aage ki kahani ka lift utthaiye
मैडम जी अपडेट कब मिलेगा
 
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