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Dev the lover

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Mai - chhodo na maa mai nahi jane wala kahi

Maa - are thoda logo mai jaya kar naa beta aise ghar mai beth ke kaya hi milega

Mai - aree toh aap log ho naa ghar mai aur kaya caahiye

Maa - are hum log kabhi naa kabhi toh chale jayenge duniya sai

Sunny - toh mai rahunga naa maa bhai ke saath

Pita Ji - kaya tum bhi kaya baate leakar beth jaati ho

Maa - toh yeh duniya naa dekhe hum dono ke liye ghar me betha rahe

Pita Ji - haa baat sahi hai tumhari bhi tabhi keh raha thaa essko apni behan ke pass bhej do waha akash ke saath padh lega thoda aage kaa enn pahado mai kuch nahi rakha hai

Mai - yaha sukoon toh hai naa pitaji aap logo ke saath

Pita Ji thoda ghusse mai - aur tera bhai

Sunny pitaji kaa haath pakad leta hai

Sunny - bhai mai paani bhar deta aap naha lo

Mai - haa sahi keh raha hai tuh
Sunny nai bahar paani bahara aur maine jaldi naha liya aur kapade phen ke beth gaya kuch kaam bacha tha ghar kaa woh sab karne mai lag gaya mai

""Aise hi dheere dheere din gujara aur shaam hui ""
""Par mausam aisa nahi tha jaise baarish badnaam hui ""

Mai bhi kaam karke hata ki bahar sai kuch aawaze aa rahi thi maine jakar dekha sunny kisi sai baat kar raha thaa aur jab maine dekha who kon hai toh mai picche hat gaya aur andar chala gaya room ke andar

Maa - aree kaya hua beta kaha bhaga jaa raha hai tuh aise dara huaa

Mai - maa bahar koi aaya hua hai uss sai bol do mai nahi hu

Maa - kon hai dekhu jisnai mere bete ko dara diya hai

Maa bahar gayi aur waha sai awwaz aayi

Beta bahar aa koi milane aaya hai tujh sai

Mai bahar aaya toh dekha pari wahi bethi thi aur uske saath akash bhi tha

Mai - are akash tuh yaha

Akash - haa par abhi ess sai baat kar le mai toh yehi hu

Woh aur sab waha sai chale gaye sab ke sab pagala gaye hai akela chhod gaye mujhe

Mai - are aap yaha kaise koi baat hui kaya

Pari - woh mai subah ke liye sorry kehana caah rahi hu

Mai has ke - aree koi dikkat nahi mujhe bhi aise aapka naam nahi lena caahiye tha

Pari - aree naam hi tha mere mujh sai nikala aur likha bhi tha maine apna naam aur ghusa ho gayi aap pe

Mai - aree bus bus chhodo jaane do aur aap ess bat ke liye yaha dudhati aa gayi mujhe

Pari - woh akash bhi mere college kaa hai toh maine ussi sai puch liya bus etna kuch pareshan nahi hui mai

Mai andar ki taraf dekhata hua - acha woh lekar aaya hai aapko

Akash mujhe dekh raha tha jhaat sai andar
chala gaya

Pari - woh baat yeh thi mujhe aacha nahi lagata ki mai kisi ko bina bat ke galat bolu par nikal jata toh sorry bolana pad jata hai

Mai has ke - are nahi pari ji etna toh chalata hai yaha aap nai toh kuch nahi kaha mujhe log yaha pahad jungali bahut kuch keh dete hai

Pari muh pe haath rakh ke - awww aisa kyu woh

Mai - are mai jada padha likha nahi jitana padha woh bhi hindi medium toh unn logo ko gawar lagata aur mai apne logo ke thoda lad jaata hu ess liye aur

Pari - waise hum log bhi english medium mai padh ke etna kuch khass nahi hue ki kisi ki aise bezzati kare aapki koi problem hogi naa joh aage nhi padhe honge

Mai - haa jitna maine padha uss sai etna bus sikha ki maa pitaji pehele aate hai sab woh yaha kaam kare aur mai aisa shareer lekar bus padhata rahu woh mujhe hazam nahi hua padh ke kuch kar sakata thaa mai bhi par woh kehate hai naa

"Woh humare liye har chize kar jate hai "
"Bina kuch maange humsai mar bhi jate hai"

Pari ji mujhe dekh ke naa jane kaya sochane lagi

Sunny nai chai rakhi toh uska dhyaan tuta

Pari - are chhotu eski kaya jarurat hai

Sunny - maine kiya hota tab kuch hota naa yeh sab toh maa nai kiya waise bhai ke haath ki chai aur bhi mast hoti

Mai chai lekar - acha chal jaa bada aaya bhaiya ki chai bhaut mast hai le aap chai le

Humnai chai pi

Pari - waise aaj raat humare yaha aa rahe naa aap akash ke saath

Mai - matalb aap ke yaha kyu

Pari - are mere bhai ki shaadi hai naa aap jarur aaye

Mai - acha maa aapke yaha ki baat kar rahi abb aap bula rahi toh aa jaaunga

Andar bhaut tezz hasi ki awaaz aayi

Pari uth ke hasti hui - toh yeh taye raha milate hai phir

Mai bhi uth ke - ha ha thik hai

Woh chali gayi aur usske jate dekhnae ke baad mai jaise muda

Mai piche ho gaya - abbe mere muh mai kaha ghusa jaa raha yaar

Akash - tuh kab sai shaadiyo mai jane laga be

Mai - abe bulane aaya koi toh chale jaate hai

Akash - koi yaa pari ji bulaye toh

Andar sai phir maa hasi enko bhi aaj bahut hasi majak shuj raha hai

Mai - toh nahi jaau bol

Akash - meri maan toh puri zindagi mai har jagah jaa usske saath shaadi mai kyu

Mai usske kaan ghuma ke - kaya bola be etnai jaldi picha naa chhodnai wala mai tera samajhaa naa ullu ki dum tum aur kaya uska mera jod raha kuch nahi aisa

Akash - acha chhod yeh le kapde aur change karke tayar ho jaa hume jana hai naa shaadi mai

Mai - abe yaar mai toh bhul hi gaya par yeh dress kahe laya hai be tuh

Akash - sir aapko mai bata du joh old fashion aap pehante ho naa usko bhi dekh ke waha ki londiya behosh ho jayegi toh ess liye mahasaye ji

Mai - ohh etnai saaf suthari hindi kab sai shikh gaya hai tuh bee

Akash - tere saath reh ke gandi adaate chhuti hai toh aacchi adaate bhi lagegai naa

Mai - haa chal chal abb jada senti naa ho samjaha laa de kapde mujhe

Usske baad mai ready hokar usske saath nikal pada toh apni thoda late jane waale the toh socha ek round akash ke ghar ke laga ke aa jaau

Waise akash ke maa toh hai naa ess duniya mai usske dad hai joh ek bhaut bade jamidar hai naam hai unka bhaut yaha bhi aur sehar mai bhi bhaut chalti hai unki

Mai unnke gahr pahucha aur uncle ke pair chuye aashirwaad liya aur beth gaya

Akash dad - Jagraaj thakur

Jagraaj - lo tum bhi aa gaye tumhare pita ji sai baate kar raha tha mai

Mai - arre pitaji aap yaha kaya kar rahe ho

Yaha pe sab naam sai chal raha toh yaha naam hi likhana sahi hoga apne alwaa

Suraj - kuch nahi beta bus kaam thaa ennsai thoda bhaut

Jagraaj - aree essko batate kyu nahi baad mai bata ke kaya fayada hai

Mai - kaya hua koi pareshani hai kaua batataiye toh na

Suraj - kuch nahi tujhe sehar padhane ko bhejane wahi bate kar raha hu

Mai - aap phir wahi baat lekar beth gaye pitaji bola toh tha mai yehi sahi hu naa

Suraj - nahi tuh yaha sahi nahi hai smajha kar na

Jagraaj - beta sun yeh sahi bhi toh keh rahe mai hu naa yaha koi pasreshani nahi hogi jab tune gahr ke liye school chhoda tha abb uss sai bhaut acche halat hai kab tak tuh yaha pahado mai rehega niche jaa duniya dekh

Mai - nahi waha ki duniya mai kuch aisa khaas nahi hai abb

Akash ghusse mai - chal be abb baccha banana band kar samjaha waha sunny ke humare sath tere naa rehate joh hota hai hum log jantae hai

Mai - kaya matalb sahi sai bata kaya huaa sunny ko kahi woh joh jale kaa nishan dekha tha maine kuch time pehale uska kuch toh nahi

Akash dusari taraf dekhata jaise usske muh sai kuch nikal gaya ho

Suraj baat ko badalate hue - aree tuh party mai jaa raha thaa naa toh yaha kyu ruka hua hai

Jagraaj - haa tum dono jaao abb time ho gaya hai

Uske baad mai aur akash waha sai nikal sai sidha pahuchate hai waha jaha party ho rahi thi
 

parkas

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Mai - chhodo na maa mai nahi jane wala kahi

Maa - are thoda logo mai jaya kar naa beta aise ghar mai beth ke kaya hi milega

Mai - aree toh aap log ho naa ghar mai aur kaya caahiye

Maa - are hum log kabhi naa kabhi toh chale jayenge duniya sai

Sunny - toh mai rahunga naa maa bhai ke saath

Pita Ji - kaya tum bhi kaya baate leakar beth jaati ho

Maa - toh yeh duniya naa dekhe hum dono ke liye ghar me betha rahe

Pita Ji - haa baat sahi hai tumhari bhi tabhi keh raha thaa essko apni behan ke pass bhej do waha akash ke saath padh lega thoda aage kaa enn pahado mai kuch nahi rakha hai

Mai - yaha sukoon toh hai naa pitaji aap logo ke saath

Pita Ji thoda ghusse mai - aur tera bhai

Sunny pitaji kaa haath pakad leta hai

Sunny - bhai mai paani bhar deta aap naha lo

Mai - haa sahi keh raha hai tuh
Sunny nai bahar paani bahara aur maine jaldi naha liya aur kapade phen ke beth gaya kuch kaam bacha tha ghar kaa woh sab karne mai lag gaya mai


""Aise hi dheere dheere din gujara aur shaam hui ""
""Par mausam aisa nahi tha jaise baarish badnaam hui ""

Mai bhi kaam karke hata ki bahar sai kuch aawaze aa rahi thi maine jakar dekha sunny kisi sai baat kar raha thaa aur jab maine dekha who kon hai toh mai picche hat gaya aur andar chala gaya room ke andar

Maa - aree kaya hua beta kaha bhaga jaa raha hai tuh aise dara huaa

Mai - maa bahar koi aaya hua hai uss sai bol do mai nahi hu

Maa - kon hai dekhu jisnai mere bete ko dara diya hai

Maa bahar gayi aur waha sai awwaz aayi

Beta bahar aa koi milane aaya hai tujh sai

Mai bahar aaya toh dekha pari wahi bethi thi aur uske saath akash bhi tha

Mai - are akash tuh yaha

Akash - haa par abhi ess sai baat kar le mai toh yehi hu

Woh aur sab waha sai chale gaye sab ke sab pagala gaye hai akela chhod gaye mujhe

Mai - are aap yaha kaise koi baat hui kaya

Pari - woh mai subah ke liye sorry kehana caah rahi hu

Mai has ke - aree koi dikkat nahi mujhe bhi aise aapka naam nahi lena caahiye tha

Pari - aree naam hi tha mere mujh sai nikala aur likha bhi tha maine apna naam aur ghusa ho gayi aap pe

Mai - aree bus bus chhodo jaane do aur aap ess bat ke liye yaha dudhati aa gayi mujhe

Pari - woh akash bhi mere college kaa hai toh maine ussi sai puch liya bus etna kuch pareshan nahi hui mai

Mai andar ki taraf dekhata hua - acha woh lekar aaya hai aapko

Akash mujhe dekh raha tha jhaat sai andar
chala gaya

Pari - woh baat yeh thi mujhe aacha nahi lagata ki mai kisi ko bina bat ke galat bolu par nikal jata toh sorry bolana pad jata hai

Mai has ke - are nahi pari ji etna toh chalata hai yaha aap nai toh kuch nahi kaha mujhe log yaha pahad jungali bahut kuch keh dete hai

Pari muh pe haath rakh ke - awww aisa kyu woh

Mai - are mai jada padha likha nahi jitana padha woh bhi hindi medium toh unn logo ko gawar lagata aur mai apne logo ke thoda lad jaata hu ess liye aur

Pari - waise hum log bhi english medium mai padh ke etna kuch khass nahi hue ki kisi ki aise bezzati kare aapki koi problem hogi naa joh aage nhi padhe honge

Mai - haa jitna maine padha uss sai etna bus sikha ki maa pitaji pehele aate hai sab woh yaha kaam kare aur mai aisa shareer lekar bus padhata rahu woh mujhe hazam nahi hua padh ke kuch kar sakata thaa mai bhi par woh kehate hai naa

"Woh humare liye har chize kar jate hai "
"Bina kuch maange humsai mar bhi jate hai"

Pari ji mujhe dekh ke naa jane kaya sochane lagi

Sunny nai chai rakhi toh uska dhyaan tuta

Pari - are chhotu eski kaya jarurat hai

Sunny - maine kiya hota tab kuch hota naa yeh sab toh maa nai kiya waise bhai ke haath ki chai aur bhi mast hoti

Mai chai lekar - acha chal jaa bada aaya bhaiya ki chai bhaut mast hai le aap chai le

Humnai chai pi

Pari - waise aaj raat humare yaha aa rahe naa aap akash ke saath

Mai - matalb aap ke yaha kyu

Pari - are mere bhai ki shaadi hai naa aap jarur aaye

Mai - acha maa aapke yaha ki baat kar rahi abb aap bula rahi toh aa jaaunga

Andar bhaut tezz hasi ki awaaz aayi

Pari uth ke hasti hui - toh yeh taye raha milate hai phir

Mai bhi uth ke - ha ha thik hai

Woh chali gayi aur usske jate dekhnae ke baad mai jaise muda

Mai piche ho gaya - abbe mere muh mai kaha ghusa jaa raha yaar

Akash - tuh kab sai shaadiyo mai jane laga be

Mai - abe bulane aaya koi toh chale jaate hai

Akash - koi yaa pari ji bulaye toh

Andar sai phir maa hasi enko bhi aaj bahut hasi majak shuj raha hai

Mai - toh nahi jaau bol

Akash - meri maan toh puri zindagi mai har jagah jaa usske saath shaadi mai kyu

Mai usske kaan ghuma ke - kaya bola be etnai jaldi picha naa chhodnai wala mai tera samajhaa naa ullu ki dum tum aur kaya uska mera jod raha kuch nahi aisa

Akash - acha chhod yeh le kapde aur change karke tayar ho jaa hume jana hai naa shaadi mai

Mai - abe yaar mai toh bhul hi gaya par yeh dress kahe laya hai be tuh

Akash - sir aapko mai bata du joh old fashion aap pehante ho naa usko bhi dekh ke waha ki londiya behosh ho jayegi toh ess liye mahasaye ji

Mai - ohh etnai saaf suthari hindi kab sai shikh gaya hai tuh bee

Akash - tere saath reh ke gandi adaate chhuti hai toh aacchi adaate bhi lagegai naa

Mai - haa chal chal abb jada senti naa ho samjaha laa de kapde mujhe

Usske baad mai ready hokar usske saath nikal pada toh apni thoda late jane waale the toh socha ek round akash ke ghar ke laga ke aa jaau

Waise akash ke maa toh hai naa ess duniya mai usske dad hai joh ek bhaut bade jamidar hai naam hai unka bhaut yaha bhi aur sehar mai bhi bhaut chalti hai unki

Mai unnke gahr pahucha aur uncle ke pair chuye aashirwaad liya aur beth gaya

Akash dad - Jagraaj thakur

Jagraaj - lo tum bhi aa gaye tumhare pita ji sai baate kar raha tha mai

Mai - arre pitaji aap yaha kaya kar rahe ho

Yaha pe sab naam sai chal raha toh yaha naam hi likhana sahi hoga apne alwaa

Suraj - kuch nahi beta bus kaam thaa ennsai thoda bhaut

Jagraaj - aree essko batate kyu nahi baad mai bata ke kaya fayada hai

Mai - kaya hua koi pareshani hai kaua batataiye toh na

Suraj - kuch nahi tujhe sehar padhane ko bhejane wahi bate kar raha hu

Mai - aap phir wahi baat lekar beth gaye pitaji bola toh tha mai yehi sahi hu naa

Suraj - nahi tuh yaha sahi nahi hai smajha kar na

Jagraaj - beta sun yeh sahi bhi toh keh rahe mai hu naa yaha koi pasreshani nahi hogi jab tune gahr ke liye school chhoda tha abb uss sai bhaut acche halat hai kab tak tuh yaha pahado mai rehega niche jaa duniya dekh

Mai - nahi waha ki duniya mai kuch aisa khaas nahi hai abb

Akash ghusse mai - chal be abb baccha banana band kar samjaha waha sunny ke humare sath tere naa rehate joh hota hai hum log jantae hai

Mai - kaya matalb sahi sai bata kaya huaa sunny ko kahi woh joh jale kaa nishan dekha tha maine kuch time pehale uska kuch toh nahi

Akash dusari taraf dekhata jaise usske muh sai kuch nikal gaya ho

Suraj baat ko badalate hue - aree tuh party mai jaa raha thaa naa toh yaha kyu ruka hua hai

Jagraaj - haa tum dono jaao abb time ho gaya hai

Uske baad mai aur akash waha sai nikal sai sidha pahuchate hai waha jaha party ho rahi thi
Bahut hi badhiya update diya hai Dev the lover bhai.....
Nice and awesome update....
 

sorbobhuk

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Introduction

Sabhi paatra story mai kalpanik hai mere soche hue toh kisi tarah kaa milan kisi sai ek concidance ho skata hai

Dev rajput - appka hero yaaa joh bhi aap kahe woh bura manane wala nahi hai

Sunny rajput - mera chhota bhai

Mitra rajput - maa

Jivan rajput - pitaji


Ek gaow pahidiyo par tha jaha ek kisan kaa pariwar tha joh bhaut ache pariwao mai ek tha pasie yaa kisi ameeri yaa jamin ke hisab sai nahi apne rehan sehan aur nature ke hisab sai


Jismai the chaar log ek ladaka joh mai tha dusra tha mera chhota bhai aur humare mata pita

Hum aachi khasi zindagi jite the mai waha sab sai alag tha pahadi log sabhi gore hote hai par mai pata nahi kaisi thoda saa dark tha ya kahu gehua rang ka

Dosto ki kami nahi thi meri zindagi mai par haa mai kabhi ladkiyo sai bol nahi pata tha
jahir hai aap kahenge yeh kisi film jaisa hai ki ek fattu saa ladka hoga jise ladkiyo sai dar lagata hoga aur usse ek ladaki milegi
naa naa aisa kuch naa par todha saa hai aisa bus

Humare ghar sai todhi dhur par ek ghar tha usske pass mai ek jahrna jiske samnai talab tha aaj mai ghumata hua hi udhar pahucha toh dekha

Ek ladki jharnai ke pass kadhi hai mai usse waise hi dekhata raha phir woh ladki aage jakar apne pairo ko paani mai daal kar kuch gungunai lagi thi����


Paani hai kitana sundar
Sundar meri kahani
Sachali jal ki raani
Mai hui pari
Pariyo si jindgani

Mere muh sai accha nikala - pari

Uss nai picche dekha

Mai ladkhda kar gir pada

Ladaki - kyaa kaam hi

Mai haklata hua - w.......wwww...ooohh maa....aaaa

Ladaki- bakri cahrate ho kyaa ma.a.a.a.a rhe hoo

Mai - nhi toh

Ladaki - mera gaana pura naa likh paayi tumnai toka abb esse pura karo warana

Mai- ji ji abhi karata huuh

Ladki nai mera haath pakada aur khich kar panni mai betha liya

Mera pair ekdum mast chamak raha tha roshani mai

Ladaki - daant kaya dikha rahe ho likho

Uss nai paper pen diya

Mai -�paani hai kitana sundar
Sundar meri kahani
Machali jal ki raani
Mai hui pari pariyoo si jindgani

Ladaki - mera muh mat dekho aage likho

Azeeb ladaki hai asse pass betha liya aur likhanai ko keh rahi hai

Ladaki - likho

Maine toda der likha

Ladaki - dhikhao edhar

Woh padhani laagi

Paani hai kitana sundar
Sundar meri kahani
Machali jal ki raani
Mai hui pari pariyoo si jindgani
Kitani huuh mai khooburat
Yeh baat duniya mai kisi nai jaani
Julfe meri andhero sai kaali
Aakho mai chamak assi madhosh kar dene waali
Meri kaya tarif karu pani ko chu kar amrit kar dene waali

Etna pad kar woh hasani lagi

Ladaki - yeh kaya likha hai tumnai ohhh maa... mai hasate haste mar jaaungi

Mai azzeb saa sad muh bana kar - aisa kaya likha maine

Ladaki - essmai kisko khoosurati kaa bagwan bana diya hai

Mai - pari kooo

Wohhh hasati hui edkum sai ruk gayi

Ladaki - tumhe mera naam kisnai bataya

Mai- aapka naam pari hai

Ladaki - bahar bahar nikalo abhi essmai sai

Mai nikal gaya woh bhi

Ladaki - mera naam pari nahi hai

Mai- pari apne aap ko pari nhi bulawati saayd aacha naa lagata hoga

Anadar sai awaaj aayi ghar ke

Aurat - pari beta kis par ghusaa ho rahi hai

Pari - kuch nahi maa koi pagal hai

Aurat - andar aa jaldi khanna kaah lee

Woh bhagti hui anadar gayi par mujhe dekhte hue gate ko jor sai band kiya

Mai samajh nahi paaya maine kiya kaya tha usski tarif hi toh ki aur kaya tabhi ek pathar meri kamar par laga

Mere dost nai esshara kiya waha sai aane ko

mai usske pass gaya

Mai- kaya hua

Akash ( ji haa kuch log aapka saath kabhi nahi chhodate hai ) - aabe waha kaya kar raha tha uss ladki kr saath

Mai- kuch naa yaar bus aase dheknai kaa man hua toh chala gaya aur tuh yaha kaya kar rha hai

Akash - abe pata hai tere pitaji nai tujhe bulaya hai

Mai- kaya jaldi chal

Mai jaldi sai ghar pahucha par koi khaas baat nahi thi dudh lekar aana tha toh mai lee aaya
aur akar beth gaya

Sunny - bhaiya aaj kaha chale gaye the pata hai kuch maza nahi aaya khelenai mai

Mai- aare mera sher hai naa sabko hara kr hi aaya hoga

Sunny - nahi unhoni beimani ki aur hum haar gaye

Mai- aare kaya pata tum aaj bura khele ho har din tum hi jito yeh agar soch rahe ho toh tum galat raah par ho mere bhai hamesha jaise roj khana ek jaisa nahi hota hawa ek hi taraf nahi chalati payar kamayab nahi hota waise hi hamesha hum jite yeh jaruri nahi

Sunny - phir mai aur mehant karunga aur unhe haara dunga

Mai- yeh hui naa baat jaa jara panni bhar nahana hai mujhe

Maa - jara edhar toh aa gaayni baba

Mai- kaya hua maa

Maa - aaj pheli baar tunne payaar ki baat ki kaya koi ladaki pasand aa gayi

Mai- kaya maa aap bhi naa pheli baar mai koi pasand ata hai kaya

Maa- pakadi gayi chhori kon hai woh

Mai - kaisi chhori woh talab ke pass joh rahte hi naa unki ladaki hi

Maa- kaisi hi woh

Mai - app jada usske picche naa pado jaao khana bana loo haa aur khir bana do

Maa - mat bata mai ussi sai jakar phuch lungi

Mai chilla pada par halki awaaz mei - nahi nahi maa nahi mai toh usse janata bhi nahi bus galati sai baat ho gayi aur woh ghussa ho gayi bus maa bus

Maa hasate hue mere gaal ko chum kar - tuh bacha kaa bacha rahega bada ho jaa abb ladakiyo sai darana band kar

Mai - aapka beta nahi darata kisi sai (tezz sai ) par ladakiya (dhere sai )aur chup hoo gaya

Maa - chal chal jada naa soch sunny beta jara woh card jakar dee shaadi wala jaana hai esse
Congratulation for new story.. But mere hishab se pehle dev the hidden power ko closed korna chahiye tha....uske baad kismat ek khel ko....fir is story ko shuru karna chahiye tha.. ..
 
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Congratulation for new story.. But mere hishab se pehle dev the hidden power ko closed korna chahiye tha....uske baad kismat ek khel ko....fir is story ko shuru karna chahiye tha.. ..
Yeh thida slow hi chalegi 10-20 update tak dev waali par ek din baad 2-3 update ki sochi hai aur kismat waali kaa abhi thoda mood waisa hai nahi ki serious type thoda likh paau toh woh toh side mai rahegi filhal
 
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