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[Naina]

Arjun bhi dharti lok aane wala hain ?
Aage kya hua samuttar ka.......
itni interesting mod pe aake stop ho gayi... ab ye hansh koun rahan /rahi hain....?

Brilliant update Anand ji.... Great going

 

[spritemathews]

Ekdom lajawab aur faadu update, excellent writing, jabardast kahaani

 

[Rohan008]

NAAG MANI
UPDATE- 24​

Maharaj samuttar ne jaldi hi apni naak ka upyog kiya aur shiv ling se aane wali sugandh ko soonghne ka prayas kiya. Unhe jaldi hi shiv ling se aane wali sugandh ki anubhuti huyi aur phir vo ussi disha me bahut tez gati se chalne lage..

Kayi choti, oonchi, nichi patharili gufao se hote huye vah uss gufa tak pahuch hi gaye…gufa dikhte hi unhone chain ki saans li…vah uss gufa me ghusne hi wale the ki tabhi….

Ab Aage…….

Maharaj samuttar ka putra arjun, jo itna sundar tha ki uske chehre se nazar hi nahi hat-ti thi…sabhi uski ek jhalak pane aur uske har ek adesh ki pratiksha karte rahte the…

Arjun itna chanchal aur hasmukh tha ki sabhi usse baat karne ki ichcha rakhte the…maharani prabhavati bhi aise sundar putra ko prapt kar behad khush thi..maharaj ne unhe aisa putra diya, iske liye vo hamesha maharaj ka shukragujar rahti…kitne sangharsh ke baad unke pati ne gurudev ke bataye raste se aisa putra paya..uske liye vo har roj uss baat ko yaad karti jis baat ko nag lok ka bachcha bacha nag janta tha.

Arjun apne 18 ve varsh me pravesh kar raha tha aur uske yuva hote hi yuva hasarate bhi jaagne lagi thi…rajkumar ke vaksh sthal ko dekh kar vaha ki har youvanavastha ko prapt nag kanya rajkumar ke prem me vashibhut ho gayi. Lambe choude kad kathi ke rajkumar arjun ke ghunghrale baal the, uski badi badi neeli ankhe bahut sundar dikhti thi.

Rajkumar arjun ke hotho ko dekh kar har nag kanya usse chipak jane ko aatur ho jati parantu arjun ke dil me agar koi thi, to vo thi…uske pita samuttar ke dwara batayi gayi prithvi lok ki kanya, jiski sundarta ka jikra uske pita ne maharani prabhavati se kiya tha aur prabhavati ne apne putra arjun se.

Bas tabhi se rajkumar ne apne dil me uski tasveer bana li aur prithvi lok par ja kar aisi hi kisi kanya ko dekhne ke liye sahi samay ka intazar karne me lage huye the.

Rajkumar arjun mahal me apne shayan kaksh me lete bahut prasann tha..uske jawan dil me ek baar phir se vahi ghatna sunne ko jee chaha, ki kis prakar uske pita ji prithvi lok par gaye aur unhone shiv ling ke abhishek kiye huye jal ko prapt karne me safalta prapt ki…? Mann me ye vichar aate hi vo apni maa ke paas pahuch gaya.

Arjun—maa, kya aap hame prem karti hain…?

Prabhavati—ye kaisa sawal hai putra…? Tum to meri jaan ho…iss nag lok ke hone wale raja ho tum..

Arjun—maa, ye mere sawal ka jawab nahi hai..

Prabhavati (mushkura kar)—haan..haan…main tumse bahut pyar karti hu..ab ye batao, tumhe kya chahiye…?

Arjun—maa, mujhe vo ghatna phir se sunao na…ki kis prakar pita ji prithvi lok par gaye aur unhone shiv ling ke abhishek kiye huye jal ko prapt karne me safalta prapt ki aur vaha ki sundar stri ko dekha tha…?

Samuttar (kaksh me pravesh karte huye)—arey rajkumar, unse kya sunte ho…hum tumhe poori ghatna batate hain ki hamare sath kya kya hua…?

Samuttar—jab main uss gufa me pravesh kar gaya tha to mujhe usme ghuste hi do dwar mile…jisme se mujhe kisi ek dwar me jane ka rasta chunna tha…maine unn dono dwar me se dahine dwar ko chuna aur kuch doori par chalte hi mujhe nar kankal aapas me ladte huye dikhayi diye…vo aapas me iss prakar lad rahe the ki bas jaise ek dusre ke bahut purane dushman ho….vaha par kul chaar kankal the aur charo hi ek dusre par aghaat kar rahe the.

Samuttar—jaise hi maine unhe dekha to vah mujh par hi toot pade...unhone aapas me ladna band kar diya aur mujh par apne pairo aur hatho ki haddiyo se vaar karne lage….main kuch samajh pata ki isse pahle hi charo ne mere upar akraman kar diya…

Samuttar—ek meri pooch ko daanto se kaat raha tha to ek meri pooch ke dusre hisse ko apne kankal ke pair se kuchalne ke prayas me laga hua tha…unhone apne nukile daanto ko meri pooch aur seene me ghusa diya…vo sab bahut hi bhayanak hasi ke sath has rahe the…aur bina jeebh ke hi mere rakt ka swad le rahe the.

Samuttar—mujhe apne bachav me bahut tez gati se bhagna pada...maine apne sharir ko jamin me lot pot hone diya..vo meri pooch se dab gaye…aur phir unhone apne kankal ke hatho se mujh par mukko se prahar kiya..unn kankalo ka bahut der tak mere sath yuddh hota raha.

Main aur nar kankal aapas me yuddh karte karte thak gaye…maine unn sabhi ke samne hath jode aur mujhe maarne ka unn kankalo se karan pucha.

Unki taraf se koi jawab mujhe prapt nahi hua to maine socha ki ye aapas me lad kyo rahe the.. ? isse pahle ki main kuch soch pata vah sabhi phir se mere upar toot pade.

Mere kroadh ne mujhe aur bal diya aur meri pooch ke ek tez prahar se vo sabhi door ja kar gire...unn sabhi ki gardan par meri pooch ka vaar hua tha jisse unke gardan ki haddiyo ka dhancha unke kandhe se alag ho gaya.

Sabhi apni apni gardan ko dhoondne lage…aur kuch hi der me unn sabhi ko apni apni gardan mil gayi jisko unhone apne apne sir par rakh li.

Unn charo me se do to shant ho gaye aur hasne lage kintu do aapas me phir se ladne lage….aur mere upar nazar padte hi mujh par hamla karne ke liye taiyar ho gaye.

Maine ussi kshan dono ke gardan ke kankal ko aapas me badal diya aur gardan badalte hi vo sabhi shant ho gaye… aur mere samne hath jod kar khade ho gaye…unke kankalo kesir aapas me badal gaye the, shayad vah aapas me isliye lad rahe the…kintu vo yaha kyo the…? Unke sir aapas me kaise badal gaye…? Mujhe inn sawalo ke jawab nahi mil paye.

Vo sabhi agle hi pal nar kankalo se sundar sharir wale ho gaye…aur mujhe shukriya kah kar bina kuch bole hi vaha se lupt ho gaye…main unse kuch puch pata isse pahle hi vo sabhi achanak gayab ho gaye…main phir se nirash ho kar aage badha kintu vaha par aage jane ka rasta band tha jisse mujhe phir se piche hi loutna pada..ab mujhe dusre raste ki taraf jana tha.

Main uss gufa ke ek dwar se vapis aaya aur dusre dwar me pravesh karne laga ..iss bar mujhe poora vishwash tha ki mujhe issi dwar me shiv ling prapt ho jayega jaisa ki gurudev ne mujhe bataya tha.

Main uss kandra me pravesh kar gaya..uska mukh jyada bada nahi tha lekin usme andhera bahut tha…aage ke rasta me main kis taraf chalu, mujhe kuch bhi dikhayi nahi de raha tha.

Uss raste ko dekhne ke liye maine apni mani ka istemal kiya jo ki meri sir ke mukut me sthit khaal sedhaki huyi thi.. maine apni mani ko bahar nikala aur uss gufa me mani ka prakash phail gaya…uss mani ki roshni me main aage ka rasta tay karne laga.

Main abhi kuch door hi gaya tha ki mera dahina hath kat chuka hai…vo mere sharir par nahi tha..aur kate huye bhag se khoon bah raha tha..main apne kate huye hath ko dekh kar ghabra gaya aur bahut tez rone laga…meri cheekhe uss gufa me goonjne lagi.

Main buri tarah se dard me cheekh raha tha…aur meri ankho se anshuo ki dhaar bah rahi thi…main ro raha tha ki achanak tabhi mujhe kisi ki thitholi wali hasi sunayi di.

mast ye baat wali gufa ka tilism bhi bht acha h
kankaal waala incident bhi mast h
bhai agar vo sundar kanya sammutra ke waqt dikhi thi prithvi wali to jab tak arjun bada hua vo bhudi nhi hui hogi
to ab kispe dil haar ke baitha h arjun ?
yhan confusion h , please clear karna

brilliant update
keep rocking bhai

 

[kishan naik]

Bahut badhiya
Anand bhai
Ur great
Aap jaise writer ki kahani padhane ka bahut man karta hai aisa lagta hai ki padta rahu
Is kahani ko mai shuru se 1 se 22 tak lagatar padhta raha...
Jab bhi mobile kholta hun to apka update ko pahle dekhta hun
Fir uske bad facbook whatsap
Dusre kam karta hun
Aapse gujaris hai ki aapki jo bhi jitne kahani hai aapke post ke niche
Mark kar dena
Jaisa dusre writer karte hai

 

[Hanny]

Superb update waiting for next bhai

 

[anandsngh12]

NAAG MANI
UPDATE- 25​

Main abhi kuch door hi gaya tha ki mera dahina hath kat chuka hai…vo mere sharir par nahi tha..aur kate huye bhag se khoon bah raha tha..main apne kate huye hath ko dekh kar ghabra gaya aur bahut tez rone laga…meri cheekhe uss gufa me goonjne lagi.

Main buri tarah se dard me cheekh raha tha…aur meri ankho se anshuo ki dhaar bah rahi thi…main ro raha tha ki achanak tabhi mujhe kisi ki thitholi wali hasi sunayi di.

Ab Aage…….

Kisi ladki ki dhire dhire hasne ki awaze aa rahi thi…aisa laga jaise ki koi mera mazak uda raha ho…main vahi par kundali maar kar baith gaya…baithte hi mujhe kuch aisa ehsaas hua ki main ghabra kar apne piche palat kar dekhne laga aur dekhte hi chounk gaya.

Samuttar (chounk kar)—arey ye kyaa….? Meri pooch kaha gayi…? Pahle hath aur ab poonch.. ! ye kya ho raha hai yaha mere sath…?

Mere kamar ke niche ke hisse se khoon ki dhara bah rahi thi….main bahut dukhi ho gaya…aur mann me vichar karte huye pachhtane laga.

Samuttar (mann me)—Ek putra ki khwahish ne mere paan le liye….kaash ! meri patni ko putra ki itni ichcha na hoti…ab kya karegi prabhavati..uske paas to putra bhi nahi aur ab pati bhi nahi hai…mere nag lok ke rajya ka kya hoga…? Kyo main putra prapti ki ichcha me itna aatur ho gaya…? Ab main kaise apne rajya ko loutu…? Kya main bina hath aur bina poonch ke ja paunga….?

Iss dauran mujhe vo hasi sunayi de rahi thi….aur uska swar badhta hi ja raha tha…vah hasi dhire dhire attahas me badal gayi..main apna sir apne hatho me patak raha tha…tabhi achanak mujhe ehsaas hua ki mere dono hath mere mastak ko chhu rahe hain.

Maine jaldi se apne hatho se apni pooch ko sparsh kiya..hath rakhte hi main phir chounk gaya...ye kya... ? meri pooch bhi mere sath thi ab.

Samuttar (hairan)—meri pooch to mere sath hi hai…to kya..ye sab kewal bhram jaal tha…? Haan, ye kewal bhram jaal hi tha..jise dekh kar aur uss gufa me pravesh karne wala itna jyada khaufjada ho jaye ki vo uss gufa me pravesh karne ke baare me soche hi na…jaise ki maine samajh liya ki ye sirf bhram jaal tha.

Aur phir achanak hi vo hasi bhi band ho gayi…putra prapti ki ichcha aur apni patni se kiye gaye vaade ko dhyan me rakhte huye main uss gufa me pravesh kar gaya…meri naag mani apni roshni se mujhe rasta dikha rahi thi.

Kuch aage uss gufa me pahuchte hi mujhe ghungharoo ki awaz sunayi di…vo ghungharoo ki awaz aage se hi aa rahi thi…ghungharuo ki awaz ke sath hi maine kuch nav-yuvatiyo ki awaz bhi suni jo maano aapas me hasi thitholi kar rahi thi.

Vo sabhi awaz se ek dusre ki saheliya lag rahi thi…ek hi rasta hone ke karan main ussi disha meaage badhta gaya… achanak hi vo chota sa rasta jis jagah nikla, vo ek vishal aur bhavya sthan tha.

Uske paas me hi ek pani ka kund tha..jisme vo nav yuvatiya snaan kar rahi thi…vo sab hatheli me jal bhar kar ek dusre par pani phenk rahi thi….ardh nagn unn yuvatiyo ko dekh kar main apne yaha ka karan hi bhool gaya…aur uss kund ke baad dusra aur koi rasta mujhe dikhayi nahi de raha tha.

Kuch nav yuvtiya jo kund me athkheliya kar rahi thi, unme se kuch kund se bahar aa kar ghungharoo pahne huye nritya karne lagi…sabhi anand vibhor ho rahi thi.

Main latao ki aad se unhe dekh raha tha..tabhi unme se ek yuvti ki nazar meri nag mani par pad gayi…nag mani ke prakash ko dekh kar vo meri taraf aane lagi.

Samuttar (sochte huye)—ye to meri taraf hi aa rahi hai..ab kya karu…? Yaha se vapis lout jau ya phir yahi ruk kar uska samna karu…?

Tab tak vo yuvti mere bahut karib aa chuki thi...aate hi uski nazar meri vishal pooch par pad gayi jisse vo jor jor se cheekhne lagi....uski cheekh sun kar sabhi apne ghungharoo utar kar hatho me le liye...

Vo ghungharoo unke hatho me aate hi nukile hathiyar me badal gaye….sabhi meri taraf unn nukile hathiyaro ke sath tezi se daud padi aur phir unhone unn nukile hathiyaro se mere sharir par prahar karne shuru kar diya.

Unn hathiyaro ke praharo se main tilmila gaya....apne bachav aur kroadh me aa kar maine unhe apna sabse bhayanak aur kroadh se bhara hua sharir unhe dikhaya....sath me apni pooch se unke hathiyar girane ka prayas karne laga.

Main apna bachav kar raha tha kintu unhone mujhe apna dushman samajh liya aur unn nav yuvtiyo aur mere beech yuddh shuru ho gaya.

Mujhe unse ladne me bahut jhijhak ho rahi thi...aur main soch raha tha ki kaha ye komal nav yuvtiya jo yuddh kar rahi hain...inke hatho me hathiyar shobha nahi de rahe lekin iske vipreet vo mere upar badi hi berahmi se vaar kiye ja rahi thi...main apna bachav karta raha jabki vo sab meri jaan lene par aatur thi.

Maine akhir kroadh me aa kar sabko apni pooch ke paash me baandh liya..apne vish ki halki fufkar se maine unhe behosh kar diya...aur isme mujhe kinchit maatra bhi afsos nahi hua kyon ki mujhe bhi putra prapt ki vishes lalsa thi.

Vo sabhi behosh ho chuki thi aur mujhe aage ka rasta malum nahi ho raha tha..isliye maine unn ladkiyo ko hosh me aane tak apni pooch me baandhe rakha...thodi hi der me vo sabhi hosh me aa gayi.

Sabhi kisi najuk si bel ki tarah murjha gayi thi...hosh me aate hi sabhi ne hath jod kar apne aap ko azad karne ki prarthana karne lagi...mujhe unn sabhi par taras aa gaya...maine azad karne se poorv unse aage ke raste ke baare me pucha....unme se ek jo sabse hoshiyar aur sabse adhik sundar lag rahi thi usne jawab diya.

Navyuvti—hame aage ke raste ke baare me kuch pata nahi hai..bas itna hi pata hai ki yeh kund jisme ki hum snaan kar rahi thi, ye raat me sukh jata hai..uske baad hum sabhi yaha se chale jate hain..yaha koi nahi rahta...aap ko iss kund ke sukh jane tak intazar karna hoga.

Mere paas aur koi chara nahi tha...to maine unn sabhi ko azad kar diya aur vahi ruk kar uss kund ke sukh jane ka intazar karne laga.

Main uss kund ke bahar hi baitha tha...yuddh aur aakraman se thaka hone ke karan thoda araam karne laga aur achanak hi meri ankh lag gayi.

Main gahri neend me so gaya..lagbhag ek prahar ke baad meri neend khuli to maine dekha ki vo kund ab sukh chuka tha...usme pani ki ek boond bhi nahi thi.....aur uss kund ke andar se kisi ki awaz aa rahi thi.

Maine jamin me kaan laga kar suna to mujhe koi vastu ki upar aati huyi awaz prateet huyi..aisa laga jaise ki koi vastu ya murti bahar aa rahi ho.

Maine jaldi hi uss kund ke paas se uth kar pedo ki choti choti daliya uss kund me dalna shuru kar diya…aur phir uss kund ke ek kone ko pakad kar main unn daliyo ke beech me se chhup kar uss awaz ke hone aur uss vastu ke bahar nikalne ka intazar karne laga.

Thodi hi der me uss kund ke andar se hi ek gupt darwaja khula aur phir…..

 

[anandsngh12]

Arjun bhi dharti lok aane wala hain ?
Aage kya hua samuttar ka.......
itni interesting mod pe aake stop ho gayi... ab ye hansh koun rahan /rahi hain....?

Brilliant update Anand ji.... Great going

Shukriya naina ji for liking the update.
Arjun bhi ayega hi ..aana to padega hi usko.

 

[anandsngh12]

Ekdom lajawab aur faadu update, excellent writing, jabardast kahaani

Bahut bahut dhanyawad Spritemathews bhai for liking the update.

 

[anandsngh12]

mast ye baat wali gufa ka tilism bhi bht acha h
kankaal waala incident bhi mast h
bhai agar vo sundar kanya sammutra ke waqt dikhi thi prithvi wali to jab tak arjun bada hua vo bhudi nhi hui hogi
to ab kispe dil haar ke baitha h arjun ?
yhan confusion h , please clear karna

brilliant update
keep rocking bhai

Shukriya Rohan bhai for this encouraging review.
Aapke sawal ka jawab kahani me hi aage milega bhai.
Arjun kis par dil haar baitha hai, abhi to vah khud bhi nahi janta..bas suna hai dekha nahi hai

 

[anandsngh12]

Bahut badhiya
Anand bhai
Ur great
Aap jaise writer ki kahani padhane ka bahut man karta hai aisa lagta hai ki padta rahu
Is kahani ko mai shuru se 1 se 22 tak lagatar padhta raha...
Jab bhi mobile kholta hun to apka update ko pahle dekhta hun
Fir uske bad facbook whatsap
Dusre kam karta hun
Aapse gujaris hai ki aapki jo bhi jitne kahani hai aapke post ke niche
Mark kar dena
Jaisa dusre writer karte hai

Bahut bahut dhanyawad Kishan bhai iss khubsurat encouraging prati kriya ke liye.