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Fantasy New Life : New journey : New World

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Nice update brother....ye scene near future me hoga ye toh pata tha par itni jaldi hoga,ye nahi socha tha..

But all in all ye ek future constructing update tha jo kaafi sahi tha...

Brother..ek baat bataiye...indian cinema ki sabse badi hit ab tak kaun si movie hai????

BAHUBALI....ab imagine kariye ki bahubali koi movie na hokar aapki is kahani ki hi tarah koi story hoti jisse update dar update post kiya jaata...

Toh kya us kahani ka saara angle sabko pasand aata...khaas kar wo angle jisme hero ki maa hi usse marwane ke liye kehti hai....

Zyada tar logon ko ye samajh me hi nahi aata...kehne ka matlab hai ki aap har kisi ko khush nahi rakh sakte..

Par ek bande ko rakh sakte ho..aur wo hai khudko....aap jo bhi imagine karte ho,post karne se pehle usse recheck toh karte hi hoge...

Aur agar us waqt aap apni lekhni,apne writing se khush ho toh fir aapko aur kuch sochne ki zaroorat nahi hai...

Bindaas post karo aur jo bhi post kiya hai usse back karo..reediting jaise thoughts apne dimag me aane hi mat do...

Isse aap ka hi confidence kam hoga....self satisfaction is much more important than good or bad.....back each and every sentence of ur story.....

Short term success ke liye opinion driven thik hai..but long term success ke liye self driven zaroori hai....

And once again nice update...




Bhai aap kab start Kar rahe ho new part
 

Taher

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Thanks Bhai for telling this but the Truth is ye Mera original plan ni tha .. original to main bhul hi Gaya tha par aaj jab post krdia to uske baad mujhe laga shayad ye kaam Ni karne Wala aur jaisa apne kaha self -satisfaction is must to main isliye hi update remove kardia bcoz ab Maine starting m Jo socha tha wahi karunga ..

Aur editing bi main aaj tk jab bi Kari h to bs mistakes thek karne k liye Kari h bs warna jaisa Maine abtk likha h sabki backing rakhi h.. har cheez k answers h but kabi kabi log puchte hi ni ... Kher ..

It's always good to go back from where we started and m doing that now.. atleast for this scene ...

Thank u very much for cheering me up...
Aap apni taref see likho aap Jo bhi likhoge accha hi likhoge
 

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Update 30




Hum sab Ghar wapas laut rahe the par mujhe aaspaas Hui tabahi dekh kar dukh ho Raha tha. Bachpan s main yahi raha hu , ye jungle bi mere Ghar jaisa hi h aur Ghar s to sabko pyar hota h , mujhe bi h aur aaj meri wajah s itna kuch hogaya ..



Main aise hi sochte hue chal Raha tha ki Chotu n mujhse puch hi lia-



Chotu - Kya hua Prem, tum Kis soch m gum ho


Me( apni soch s Bahar aate hue ) - chotu ye sab tabahi dekh rahe ho , is sab ka jimmedar main hu isliiye mujhe dukh ho Raha h


Chotu- mitr isme dukhi hone jaisi koi baat Ni h aur phir tumne ye sab janbuz k thode Kia hoga..


Me- hmmm par phir bi… itna kuch hogaya upar s mera parivaar aur mitr bi kitne chintit the


Chotu- Prem , Jo hogaya usse badla to ni ja sakta na , usse thek karne ka prayas jarur Kia ja sakta h …


Me- main bi yahi soch Raha hu… Kash main ye sab thek Kar pata phir kuch soch Kar maine chotu ko roka aur niche utar aaya.. Baki log thoda aage nikal chuke the to Maine Sofia di aur bhai Jo mere s baad m mile the , is waqt wahi piche rah gae the. Maine unhe awaaz di aur unke paas Jane laga


Dii- ha Prem , Kya hua


Me- Dii Bhai aap log Ghar jaiye main thodi der m aata hu..


Bhai- Ni Prem , hum tumhe akele kaise chod sakte h . Tumhari tabiyat theek nahin hai


Me- nahi bhai main bilkul theek hoon ab aur mere saath Chotu hai hi to aap chinta na Kare. aap log bas MAA baba ko Bata dijiye Ki Main chotu ke saath Hoon isliye thodi der mein aaunga..


Dii- pakka na Prem


Me- ha dii , main bilkul thek hu..


Dii- thek h .. lekin tum bi jyada der mat krna thek .. ( phir chotu ko dekhte hue) chotu apne dost ka khayal rakhna


Chotu n bi sir niche karke jaise haa kaha ho aisa ishara Kia .


Uske baad di aur Bhai bi aage nikal gae aur hum wahi ruk gae..



Chotu- ab Kya karne wale ho Prem..


Me- chotu , jo jaisa tha waisa wapas to ni Kar sakta main par ha ek nayi shururat jarur Kar sakta hu. . main apne magic ka istemal s is jungle ko jitna ho sakega utna Hara bhara banane ki koshish karunga


Chotu- mitr Kya tum akele ye sab Kar paoge


Me- shayad Nahi.. par main is tarah ye sab dekh bi Ni sakta..


Uske baad Maine apni aankhein band kari aur apni FOREST POWER ABILITY ko yaad Kia aur apne hath jameen p rakh diye aur imagine karne laga Jo main chahta tha ...




Maine abhi aisa socha hi tha ki mujhe wapas ek awaaz sunai di..



COMMAND RECEIVED


FOREST POWER ABILITY ACTIVATE


WORK IN PROGRESS…….



Main turant pehchan Gaya ki ye ORACLE hi h par ye apne aap phir s..


Maine orcale k bare m socha to mujhe uski awaaz dobara sunai di..


Oracle- Yes master


Me- Oracle , ye sab Kya tha Jo abhi mujhe sunai dia...


Oracle- Master , main Apke command ko implement (लागू) Kar rahi hu jaisa apne socha h


Me- ohhh , Par Maine tumko to aisa karne ko Ni bola


Oracle- Master , main apke dimag ka hi hissa hu isliye aap jo sochte h wo mujhe APneaap pata chal jata h aur usse implement karna Mera kaam h..


Me- wo to thek h par mujhse Pucha Bina hi


Oracle- Master , ye Mere ( MASTER MODE ) kaam karne ka tarika h . Jaisa aap chahte h usse waisa karna


Me- iska Kya mtlb ki tumhare kaam karne ka tarika .. tum to mera hissa ho to tumhe mere hisab s Kam karnaa chahiye na


Oracle- yes master , par insan apne decisions Dimag k sath sath Dil s yani emotions m aake leta h..


Me- ha to isme galat Kya h.. ye to achi baat h


Oracle- Master , emotions m liye gae decisions effective (प्रभावी) Ni hote hamesa ..


Me- iska mtlb tumhare liye emotions ki koi value Ni h ?


Oracle- no master, main apke dimag ka hissa hu . isliye main apne process m emotions ko शामिल (include ) Ni karti , sirf logic aur analytic k bases p kaam karti hu command ko effective way m complete krne k liye...


Me- what .. ye to galat h .. tum aisa kaise Kar sakti ho wo bi tab jab tum Mera hi hissa ho aur main to bilkul aisa Ni sochta ...


Oracle- Master yahi Mera tarika h aur yahi mere rule bi...


Me- wah, tumhare rules bi h.. mujhe bataogi Jara apne rules..


Oracle- yes master.. Mere 2 ulitmate rules h Jo permanent h jinhe ignore Ni kr sakti..

Rule 1. Fulfilling Master command
Rule 2. Protection of master ..



Me- bs bs bs . Main samajh Gaya .. par main ni chahta ki tum apni marzi s kuch bi Karo. Agar Maine galti s ya gusee n aake kuch soch Lia to tum to usse command samajh Kar pura karne lagoge ..


Oracle- yes master


Me( jhallate hue ) Kya yes master… hey bhagwan ye Kya Bala h.. isse acha tum activate hi na hote


Oracle- Master ek baar activate hone k baad main kabi deactivate Ni ho sakti . Atleast jabtk apka dimag jinda h..



Me- ye majak tha Kya ???


Oracle- no master


Me- Sach batana . Tum mera hi hissa ho na ??


Oracle- Yes master


Me ( apne baal nochte hue ) - Kya yes master , yes master …... main tumahri tarif ni Kar Raha hu samjhe


Oracle- I know master


Me- aahhhhhhhhhh itna straight forward Maine insan Ni dekha ar tum Mera hissa hokar aise hoo …..main Kya karu tumahra ab


Oracle- Master aap chahe to mujhe reset karke apne tarah s Set Kar sakte h..


Me ( khush hote hue ) - Sach m .. aisa ho sakta h


Oracle-yes master


Me- wah , ye Hui na baat . Batao kaise karna h reset


Oracle- Master apko command dena h bs


Me- thek h…. Oracle RESET


Oracle- COMMAND RECEIVED


RESET IN PROGRESS……


MASTER MODE RESET PROGRAM COMPLETED


ME- hogaya reset


Mujhe koi awaaz Ni ayi.. main phir s bola tab bi Ni aayi


Me- Oracle Kya hua , Kahan gayab hogae


Phir s koi awaaz Ni ..


Mann m - ab isse Kya hua



Tabi mujhe yaad aaya ki reset Kia h to shayad khudse s activate karna padega…


Me- MASTER MODE ACTIVATE


Oracle - Master mode ACTIVATED


Me- Kya hua tha tumhe , tum bole kyu Ni


Oracle - Master, reset hone k baad Main khud s kuch Ni Kar sakti jabtk aap kuch command Ni denge siwaye Rule 1 and Rule 2 k...


Me- Kya yaar… ye bi musibat h..

Acha ek kaam karo tum apni sari settings activate karke rakho bs Kuch bi karne s pehle Meri permission jaruri hogi thek h..


Oracle- Yes Master, All setting On
AUTO MODE OFF


Me - good ..




Itne der s main apne m hi laga hua tha to Maine dhyan ni dia ki aaspaas Kya ho rha h. Par ab jaise hi Maine idhar udhar dhyan dia to main chauk gaya..


(( Mere aur Oracle ki conversation sirf mind m hoti h aur conversation k dauran jaise time slow ho jata h isliye agar kafi lambi conversation bi hoti h to reality m kuch seconds hi guzre hote h ))


Chaukne ki wajah thi ki Mere aaspaas ab ghaas wagrah ugh chuke the, chote chothe paed paude bi ughne lage the .. Jo paed tabahi ki wajah s gir chuka tha ab usi ki jagah naya pauda ugh Raha tha usi tarah ka… par wo bs mere aaspaas k hisso m hi hua tha jyada Durr tk Ni...

Me(Mann m )- kaam to waisa hi hua h jaisa socha tha ..


Wahi chotu bi abtk mujhe yu shant dekh Kar idhar udhar dekh Raha tha , chotu ko laga ki main apne magic ka use Kar Raha hu isliye shant hu par usse Ni pata tha ki main apne dimag s hi behas m laga hua tha Jo Sach m dimag s sochta h Dil s Ni..


Jab main aankh kholkar aaspaas dekhne laga tb chotu n mujjse Pucha


Chotu - mitr tumhara magic to kaam Kar Raha h par is tarah s too pure jungle ko wapas thek Karne m kafi samay lag jaega


Me- ha chotu , main bi wahi soch Raha hu.. sirf nayi shuruat karne m itna time laga phir inhe bada hone m bi time lagega..


Me- (Mann m ) Oracle , Kya main apne magic k extent ko badha Ni sakta mtlb jyada s jyada area tk Mera Magic pahuche


Oracle- yes master , ye possible h par abhi apke magicules level ( magic power ) down h . Apke pichle magic ki waajh s kafi jyada magicules kharch hua tha Jiski wajah s aap behosh bi hue the aur abhi bi aap k magicules Puri tarah recharge Ni hue h


Me- Kya main itna kamzor hu ki ek magic s hi behosh Gaya ( ye soch k mjhe thoda bura laga )


Oracle- no master , apke andar unlimited Magical powers store h par abhi aap unka use ni Kar sakte . Apko unhe apne capability s unlock karna hoga


Me- unlimited power hote hue bi…

Kher Jo bi h . Iska mtlb to filahal yahi h na ki main kuch Ni Kar sakta abhi


Oracle- Master aap kisi aur k magicules ka use karke apne magic k extent ko badha sakte h


Me- iska Kya mtlb aur kiske magicules s aur kaise .???


Oracle- Master , agar koi host apni marzi s apko apni magicules use krne de to aap aisa Kar sakte h par uski permission s hi.….


Me- host par abhi mujhe aisa Host Kahan milega Jo apni powers ka use mujhe karne de


Oracle- master, apka dost chotu ek acha host h aur chotu k power magicules bi is samay High h .. aap chahe to unki powers ka use Kar sakte h. Agar Auto mode off na hota to main khud ye kaam Kar leti abtk...


Me ( gusse m ) tumhara dimag to thek h na.

APneaap s - main bi kisse kah Raha hu , ye khud bi to Mera hi dimag h..


Me- Oracle mujhe doubt horaha h ki tum Sach m Mera hi hissa ho na ??


Oracle- yes master 100% ..


Me ( shant hote hue ) - Oracle tum mujhse Bina puche kuch bi Ni karogi samjhe ..


Oracle- yes master..


Me- hmmm…



Phir main wapas chotu k paas aagya..


Chotu- Kya hua mitr , tum itne chintit kyu ho


Me- kuch Ni Chotu bs lag Raha h ki Mera dimag kharab ho hoagya h

( Mann m - Sach m kafi jyada kharab hogaya h)


Oracle- No master, aap bilkul thek h aur apka dimag bi perfectly kaam Kar Raha h



Me- ahhhhhhh.. kaha fasss Gaya . Ab to Mann m bi kuch Ni bol sakta


Phir chotu s ..


Me- Chalo chotu , hum ek kaam karte h aaj hum jungle k kuch hisso ko hi thek karenge , Baki sab baad m kar lenge aake


Chotu- thek h Prem..


Uske baad main chotu k upar dobara Chad Gaya aur us jagha s dusri jagah chala Gaya aur wahan b Maine same process Kia aur uske baad aise hi 2-3 jagah aur Kia par uske baad mujhe kafi thakan mehshush hone lagi kyuki main kafi jyada magicules use Kar Raha tha insab m..




Main Jahan Jahan Gaya tha , ab us jagah p hariyali dikhne lagi thi...jameen p ghaas, tute hue Jo paed pade the ab unhe chote chote jungli paudo n gher Lia tha aur Meri magical roots n bi jisse wo ab ache dikh rahe the , sath m naye par chothe paude bi jameen s bahar aane lage the . Mere magics s to bs yahi ho sakta tha ki Main ek naye paude ko ughne m madad Kar saku , par ab Baki ka kaam mtlb unke bade hone m naturally jitna time lagna chahiye utna hi lagne Wala tha...




Shayad ek din ye jugle pehle s bi Sundar hoaje.. yahi sochte hue main wapas chotu k upar Chad Gaya aur hum turant Ghar ki aur rawana hogae kyuki ab kafi der ho chuki thi insab m….




Ghar pahuch kar MAA n mere late aane k bare m Pucha to Maine bs ye bola ki chotu ki sawari k maze le rha tha ar Maine sabko uske bare m batane laga. Sab mujhe khush dekh Kar jyada kuch Ni puche phir ..



Uske baad sabne khana wagrah khaya aur phir Uncle August , Bhai , Di aur sath m master bi chale gae baad m aane ko bol Kar.


Master ko kuch kaam bi tha aur unka Ghar to already tut hi chuka tha toofan m isliye wo sabke sath chale gae the..


Sabke Jane k kuch time baad Ranga ji bi chale gae chotu ko mere sath Chod Kar ..


Ab Bache MAA , baba , chotu aur main..

Ab chotu pehle jaise chota bacha to tha Ni , mere room hi uska aana impossible tha to aaj Maine asmaan k niche sone ka plan banaya..



MAA n mujhe roka bi par Maine MAA ko Mana Lia aur main bahr aake Sara sone ka intzam Kia , mere paas Chotu bi tha..



Kuch der hum aise hi lete rahe phir Maine chotu s itne time m usne Kya Kya Kia to wo mujhe apne bare m batata Raha ..


Chotu n yahan s Jane k baad k bare m bataya ki kuch din to wo dukhi Raha par ye soch k khush bi tha ki hum milenge.


Chotu- yahan s Jane k kuch din baad s main phir sabse ghul mil gaya aur apni jindgi Jine laga apne logo k sath.. thoda bade hone pr Maine shikhar karna seekha tha baba s jisme main jaldi hi mahir hogaya… mere andar to badalao bachpan s hi hona shuru hogae the aur dheere dheere ye badhne lage. Mere Sharirk Roop k sath sath Meri andar ki shaktiya bi badh rahi thi jiski wajah s Baki k logo s m alag dikhne laga tha . Kuch wolfs mujhse darte bi the par Maine kisi ko nuksan Ni pahuchaya…


Me- hmm acha chotu ye batao tumko mere bare m kaise pata Chala tha ki mujhe kuch hua h kyuki tum hi sabse pehle aaye the mere paas...




Chotu - pata Ni par main to shikar p nikla tha apne wolf dosto k sth ki achanak s mujhe kafi jyada bechaini hone lagi. Uske baad mujhe tumhara khayal aane laga sath m tumhari shakti ka ehshash bi hone laga Jo pehle kabi ni hua tha.. iske baad mujhse ruka Ni gya aur main tumhare paas tumhari shaktio ka picha karte hue aagya..

Baba aur Baki sabne mujhe is tarah dekha to unhe laga ki mujhe kuch hogaya h ya koi musibat aagai h isliye wo sab bi mere piche aane lage par Meri speed itni jyada thi ki main kafi meelo ka Safar chutki m taye Kar Gaya aur jab main Nadi k paas aaya to Maine tumhe Hawa s girte hue dekha par Jabtk main tumhare paas aata tum jameen p the..


Me- hmmm koi ni..Chalo acha h ki tum aagae. Mujhe bi tmse Milne ki baht icha ho rahi thi ...itne saalo s tumhe APneaap s Durr rakha uske liye mujhe maaf krna mere dost


Chotu- Ni mitr .. maafi mangne ki jarurat ni h. Bhale hi hum Durr rahe par tum hamesa mere sath hi the..


Me- tum bi….



Uske baad hum dono aise hi baat karte rahe , hum dono ek dusre ko apni apni bachpan ki kisse kahani batate rahe aur end m sogae aur finally itna bada din khathm hua…





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