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Modd bhi aa chuka hai bhai. Woh bhi kai raste leke jaha kiski kahani ghumti hai ye 10 update bata denge. Kahani ka abhi aisa thehraav jaruri tha jis se woh adrishya jaal ban sake jo kuch kirdaaro par gehra asar karega.
Sambhog, milan aur uttejana ka samavesh is jagah uljhate rakhne ke liye jaruri hai. Aur 3-4 update me abhi aur rahega. Lekin sath he kirdaar bhi sashakt honge.
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" मैं उसका हो.. नहीं सकता...
वो मेरा हो.. नहीं सकता ;
वो आये लाख़.. ख़्वाबों में...
सपन सच हो.. नहीं सकता !
मेरे नज़दीक होकर भी...
नहीं वो साथ.. है मेरे ;
उसे नींदें.. नहीं आतीं...
यहाँ मैं सो.. नहीं सकता !
मुहब्बत का जो.. बंधन है...
न जाने कैसा.. बंधन है ;
हमारा हो .. के भी कोई...
हमारा हो.. नहीं सकता..."
वो मेरा हो.. नहीं सकता ;
वो आये लाख़.. ख़्वाबों में...
सपन सच हो.. नहीं सकता !
मेरे नज़दीक होकर भी...
नहीं वो साथ.. है मेरे ;
उसे नींदें.. नहीं आतीं...
यहाँ मैं सो.. नहीं सकता !
मुहब्बत का जो.. बंधन है...
न जाने कैसा.. बंधन है ;
हमारा हो .. के भी कोई...
हमारा हो.. नहीं सकता..."
Achha update tha Story flow achha hai. Simultaneous events achhe likhe hai. Lakin Doctor Ka Arjun Ko aak 30 saal ki larki ka boy friend samjhana ajeeb laga. Age difference 12 years 30 and 18.
Enigma bhai update itna saf aur behatrin he me rat se karb das bar padh chuka hu lakin koi bhi sabal mujhe nahi mila jo me kar saku
Bhai komal ke samjha ne ke bad arjun ange koi galti sayad na kare aur annu se bhi sirf pyar kare aur kuch nahi
Sir ji sirf aap se itna chahta hu agar aap ki story pe koi asar na pade to
1 romela ji se rista maryada ke dayere me ho besak bo westan culchar ki he lakin india me dayra maryada ka hi ho
2 rupali ke sath rista bhai bahan bala ho kyo ki rupali bahut saf aur bholi he
3 purvi ne bhi sirf arjun se bhai ka rista hi manga he to use bhai bala hi pyar mile
4 piryenka aur arti se bhi arjun ko apna bada pura karna chahiye kyo ki jaldi hi ye bapas panjab jane bali he plz sir agar story par koi galat asar na pade to plz iske bare me jarur sochna nanihal ke bare me to aap ne pahle hi bata diya he isliye kuch nahj kahunga kyoki me bhi esa hi chahta tha
Thankas bhai update ka to aapne kal ka bataya he agar bichar badle to plz batadena
Kyoki sirf aap ke hi update ka intjar rahta he bhai kuch galat laga ho to dil se sorry bhai
Bhai komal ke samjha ne ke bad arjun ange koi galti sayad na kare aur annu se bhi sirf pyar kare aur kuch nahi
Sir ji sirf aap se itna chahta hu agar aap ki story pe koi asar na pade to
1 romela ji se rista maryada ke dayere me ho besak bo westan culchar ki he lakin india me dayra maryada ka hi ho
2 rupali ke sath rista bhai bahan bala ho kyo ki rupali bahut saf aur bholi he
3 purvi ne bhi sirf arjun se bhai ka rista hi manga he to use bhai bala hi pyar mile
4 piryenka aur arti se bhi arjun ko apna bada pura karna chahiye kyo ki jaldi hi ye bapas panjab jane bali he plz sir agar story par koi galat asar na pade to plz iske bare me jarur sochna nanihal ke bare me to aap ne pahle hi bata diya he isliye kuch nahj kahunga kyoki me bhi esa hi chahta tha
Thankas bhai update ka to aapne kal ka bataya he agar bichar badle to plz batadena
Kyoki sirf aap ke hi update ka intjar rahta he bhai kuch galat laga ho to dil se sorry bhai
INTEZAR RAHEGA SIR JEE, JAISE KI KUCH DHAMAKEDAR, JO HUM READERS KE RONGTE KHADE KAR DE
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Bhai jaha Menaka abhi tak paripakwa nahi lagti Arjun danav sa hai. Upar se doctor ko agar kuch shakk ho bhi toh woh seedha jahir nahi kar sakti. Youn rog walo par kaise kaise mareej aate hai ye aap samajh sakte ho
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Bhai jyadatar samay main khud ko bahot bada wala ch#### maanta hu. Matlab external life me mere decisions ki wajah se. Fir yaha ye kahani ke liye aap logo ka pyaar dekta hu toh dil khush ho jata. Kaise aap ek naye lekhak ki kahani se judd gaye ho aur harek charitra-kirdaar ko samajhte ho, uske baare me sochte ho aur vichaar bhi prakat karte ho.
Kabhi kisi kirdar ka koi drishya sabko thoda vyathit kar jata hai tobhi khush. Main aise me pratikriya/jawaab padhta hu toh khud bhi sochne par majboor ho jata hu. As a reader mujhe bhi lagta hai bhai ye galat hua ya ye nahi hona chahiye. Ya kisi samay aisa lagta hai ke yaha toh aise nahi hona chahiye tha.
Kisi vartalap ko likhne ke baad yaha padhta hu toh Vishwas nahi hota ke sala main baatein likh raha hu aapas ki, ladka Ho kar ladkiyon, mahilaon, bujurgo ki. Padhne me dilchasp bhi lagti hai. Lekin jab laptop goad me rakhta hu toh sab dimag se gayab. Wapis wahi lekhak ke vichar, kahaani likhta hu pehla update lekin dimag me agle 20 ghoom rahe hote hai. Anjaam pata hai lekin doctor ki tarah koi reham nahi.
Is kahani me ek cheej aap logo ko khalegi. Jaha pehla bhaag kirdaar, pyaar, sambandh-milan aur azaad sa hai, dusre me kuch fainsle, chartira me badlaav, haar-jeet rahegi, apraadh, shadyantra. Lekin bhaag 3 sabse kathin hai. udahran ke liye ek title bata deta hu. 'मुखाग्नि - बेटी के हाथ'
Yaha shayad aap logo se matbhed bhi ho jaye ke aisa nahi hona chaiye, ya iske sath kyo kia gaya. Lekin ye abhi bahut dur hai.
Filhal aapke sabhi sujhav sahi hai aur kya pata ke aisa he likha hua ho.
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