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Agle din Samar subah 7 bje exercise krke ghar aata hai.
Sugandha subah 6 bje uthti thi or us vakt puja ghar se bahar aa rhi thi to Samar ko dekhkar bolti hai.
Sugandha - Are beta tum itni jaldi uth gye, mujhe to lga abhi tum so rhe hoge.
Samar - Haa badi maa me to jaldi hi uthta hu, exercise krne ke liye. Kal yahan dekha tha ki pass me hi park hai to vhi gya tha.
Sugandha - ye to bahut achi baat hai beta...Aur in ghodiyon ko dekho ab tak so rahi hai, ye komal to 9 bje se pehle uthti hi nhi.
Samar - koi baat nhi badi maa.
Sugandha - beta tumhe to phir kafi sari exercise aati hongi?
Samar - haa badi maa.
Sugandha - to beta kya tum mujhe bhi kuch exercise sikha doge... Morning yaa evening jab time mile.
Samar - ofcourse badi maa, aap jab kahengi me tab aapko sikha dunga.
Sugandha - Thankyou beta.
Samar - are isme thankyou ki kya baat hai badi maa.
Sugandha - acha chalo ab tum naha lo itne me breakfast ready krti hu. Phir in aalsiyo ko bhi to uthana hai.
Samar - Ji Maa.
Sugandha - Kya! Kya kaha tumne abhi..
Samar - Maa
Sugandha - phir se kaho
Samar - Maa
Sugandha ki aankho me ye shabd sunkar aansu aa gye.
Samar - kya hua badi maa. Aap ro kyu rahi hai.
Sugandha - Tere muh se ye shabd sunkar rona aa gya, tu nhi janta kitna sukoon Mila hai tere maa kehne par beta. Pls Aaj se tu mujhe maa hi kehna. Mene tujhe Janam to nhi Diya lekin tujhse maa sunkar lgta hai ki tu mera hi beta hai.
Samar - Ohh Maa ye koi rone ki baat hai ( sugandha ke aansu ponchhe hue) chaliye rona band kijiye. Me aapko rote hue nhi dekh skta. Aaj se me aapko maa hi kahunga kyonki aap bhi meri maa hai jaise Sweta maa hai.
Sugandha - ( Samar ke gale lgte hue) haa main bhi teri maa hu mere lal.
Samar - Ok Maa ab main apne kamre me jakar fresh ho jata hu. Aap breakfast ready Karo. Bahut bhookh lagi hai.
Sugandha - Haa beta abhi karti hu tu Jake taiyar hoja. Aaj college me admission ke liye bhi jana hai tumhe.
Iske baad Samar apne room mtlb sanjana ke room me chala jata hai.
Kuch der baad sabhi breakfast karke nikal padte hai apne apne kaam pe Suresh office ke liye nikal jata hai, Sugandha ko ek lecture dene jana the kisi institute me or Sanjana, Samar or Komal College le liye nikal jate hai.
College me admission lene ke baad ye tino sham tak ghar vapas aa jate hai. Inka ek mahina yu hi aaram se nikalta hai. Bechari Sanjana ko koi mauka nhi milta Samar ko pareshan krne ka Sugandha ki vajah se. Komal bhi jyadatar vakt Samar ke sath hi rehti thi.
Sanjana - Apne mann me koi baat nhi yahan to tum bach gye. Lekin college me kaise bachoge. Vahan to maa bhi tumhare pass nhi hogi or ye chutki bhi apni class me hogi.
(Sanjana ka college management or science college tha, Jahan Samar ne Bioengineering me admission liya tha vahi Komal ne Computer Programing me)
Raat ke vakt Komal ke room me
Komal - Yahooo.. Bhai kal to aapka college ka pehla din hai, mza ayega.
Samar - Sirf mera hi pehla din hai kya, tera bhi pehla din hai.. or mere liye tu itni khush kyu hai.
Komal - Nhi Bhai sirf aapka hi pehla din hai... Main to parso se jaungi. Or mujhe to khud se jyada aapke liye hi khushi hoti hai( Bhale hi Samar or Komal sirf ek mahine se sath the lekin unke bich ka emotional bond bahut strong ho chuka tha)
Samar - chal chuhiya, aur parso kya hai jo parso se jayegi.
Komal - Kuch nhi bhai bas ek din aur chain se sona chahti hu. College ke liye to jaldi hi uthna padega
Samar - Tu nhi sudharne vali
Komal - Jo sudhar jaye vo komal nhi
Inka to ek mahina aise hi nikla, likin isi bich kahi aur kuch aur bhi ghat rha tha.
College khulne se 1 hafte pehle
Mumbai shahar ka ek mashhoor beech jahan par din ke vakt logo ki betahasha bheed jama rehti thi. Lekin is vakt subah ke 5 bje aadha shehar soya hua tha. Aur beech par Police ki gai gadiya khadi thi. Local logo ki bhi kafi bheed jama thi. Police barricade karke sabko rok rhi thi. Media bhi vahan pahucha hua tha.
Reportar - ye dekhiye ek baar phir insaniyat sharmsar hui hai. Raat ke andhere me ek ladki ki berehmi se hatya kar di gyi aur police ko bhanak tak nhi lagi. Log janna chahte hai ki kya kar rhi hai police, kaise ek bheed bhad vale ilake me kisi ladki ko maar diya jata hai or kisi ko pta nhi chala. Jude rahiye hmare sath hum lotenge ek break ke baad.
Barricade ki dusri taraf ek ladki ki lash padi hui thi jise police ne charo taraf se gher rakha tha. Lash ki halat aisi thi ki police valo ki bhi halat tight thi. Itne me ek aur police ki gadi vahan par aati hai jisme se ek Khubsurat jawan ladki bahar aati hai.
ACP Suman - Age 26,Police ki ek senior officer, jitni khubsurat usse jyada khatarnaak. 20 encounter kar chuki hai. iska bas chale to sare criminals ko jala ke maar de.
Inspector - Good Morning Mam
Suman - Morning, kya report hai shinde.
Inspector shinde - Mam, body ka face poora bigda hua hai, baki parts ko dekhke pta chala hai ki lash kisi ladki ki hai. Kiski hai, ye to Forensic report aane ke baad hi pta lag payega.
Suman - Hmm
Iske baad jab Suman deadbody ke paas jati hai to body ki halat dekhkar uska sharir bhi thanda pad gya tha ( Suman ek mazboot or sahsi ladki thi, khud naa jane kitne criminals ko maut ke ghat utara tha usne...lekin uski aankho ke samne kuch Aisa tha Jo usne bhi kabhi nhi socha tha)
Ek ladki ki lash jiski dono aankhe bahar nikli hui thi, uske hath aur pairo ki chamdi bhi utari hui thi, chehre par cut ke itne nishan the ki chehra pehchanna namumkin tha, pure sharir me kanch ke tukde or kile gadhe hue the. Pair ki haddiyon ko modkar pairo ko ulta kar diya gya tha.
Suman lash ko dekhkar vahi jam gyi thi, jab shinde Suman ko hilata hai to uske sharir me mani current sa doud gya ho.
Uske baad Suman bolti hai.
Suman - (gusse ke bhav liye) jisne bhi ye kiya hai uski rooh ko tadapna pdega.
Suman - shinde koi saboot mila crime spot pe? Ladki ki koi ID
Inspector shinde - No Mam.
Suman - Thik hai, Lash ko jald se jald Forensic lab bhejo, 3 din me report mere table pe honi chahiye... Is area ke jitne bhi criminals hai specially Jo woman harrasment me charged hai sabko utna lo. Or aas paas ke area ka ek ek CCTV check karo. Ye jo bhi hai mere hatho se nhi bachega.
Shinde - Yes Mam.
Itne me ek sub inspector aakar btats hai Mam jab shinde sir aas pass ke logo se enquiry kar rhe the tabhi hme ye Mila tha or Suman ko ek Card dikhata hai.
Jispar likha tha
Clown- The Innocent Killer
Thankyou Bhai for review.Toh finaly samar mumbayi pahuch he gaya sughanda kaka nature muje pasand aya....
komal jisne wakayi samar ko bhai ko tarah treat Kiya ye dekh kar bahut acha laga ....uska nature ek real sister ki tarah tha....
But sanjana ke nature se thodi nirasa huvi aur utni he nirasa samar se bhi huvi I think uska apni he bahan ko uu ghurna thoda ajeeb awkward laga.....
But quiet intresting ab wo kya pareshaniya khadi karti h ....
yanha ek Kami lagi ki jab samar ki ane ki information thi toh uske liye rahne ka intezam kyo nahi kiya aur agar kaam chal raha tha toh sanjana ko pahle kyo nahi bataya
Sanjana ka nature bura nhi hai bas thodi apni chizo ko leke possessive hai or thodi gusse vali baki sanjana ki khubiyan aage jakar pta lgegi.
Samar sanjana ko ghoor nhi rha tha bechara itni khubsurat ladki dekhkar dhyan htana bhul gya
. Or bhai story ka prefix incest hai to kahi to shuruwat hogi hi. Jab samar aane vala tha to suresh ghar par nhi tha isliye sugandha ko lga ki vo samar ko apne room me hi rakh legi kuch din ke liye. But Suresh Kam se jaldi vapas aa gya that's why it happened. Or bhai first story hai to possibility hai ki kahi koi loophole story me reh jaye.
Yes Bhai, Suno sabki kro apni. To kahani ko me apne hisab se hi likhunga ha agar suggestions acha hoga to story ko behtar hi bnayega.
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