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Fantasy RISHI the SAVIOR(BEING EVIL)

What you guys think about my this story..


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Update milne ki umeed hai ya nhi:biggboss:
 
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Update milne ki umeed hai ya nhi:biggboss:
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UPDATE 11

Toa guys aaj ka update kal ki tarha adhura ni chodungi..
Kal thora emotional hogai thi mea b bcz i leave away from my house n saal mea ek ya 2 baar he jaa sakti hu unse milne wo b 4-5 din ke liye..

Choro ye toa hui personal bate ab aate hea story par..
Jisme kal aap sab ne dekha kaise aarti apne maa se milti hea or kese aarti ke dad dur se he sahi par apni beti ko pyaar jarur dete hea..

Toa ab badte hea aage..

Jaha aarti ko uski maa ghar mea lea aati hea or unke piche ramu b aaraha tha aarti ka saman lete huye..

Ghar mea enter hote hea aarti ki aankhe uske pita ko dhund rahi thi par we usse kahi naa dikhe..
Sayad ye baat uski maa b samaj gayi thi isliye unhone usse upar ki or ek kamre ke taraf ishara kiya..

Aarti b apni maa ka ishara pate he uss kamre ki taraf bacho jaise daudte huye gayi..
Or us kamre ke bahar khadi ho jab usne darwaje ko dhakka diya toa wo samne ka najara dekh chounk gayi thi..

Ye kamra pehlea aarti or aruna sath share karte the..
Aisa ni tha ghar mea rooms ki koi kami thi..
Par undono ko har dam sath rehna he pasand tha..

Or aaj itne samay baad apne he kamre ko dekh aarti counk gayi thi qki aaj b wo kamra waise ka waisa he hea jaisa 3.5 saal pehlea tha..

Aarti apne kamre ko dekhte huye andar aarahi thi tabi uski najar khidki ke pass khade apne baba par gayi..

Jo khidki se bahar dekh rahe the..
Aarti ko apne baba ko kahi khoya dekh sararat suji or wo dire se chalte huye unke piche gayi or unko pichese hug karliya..

Or pyaarse apni mithi awaj mea baba boli jisse sun arunlal ka sara gussa ek he bar mea kahi phur hogaya..

Or unhone palatkar turant aarti ko gale laga liya..
Or fir thora rutne manane ka session chala..
Agar fir mea ye sab describe karne baithi toa emotional fool na ban jau..

Isliye ham indono baap beti ko yahi chor chalte hea rohit ke taraf..
Rohit raichand..
Inke naam jitna rob hea usse jada inki personality mea hea..

Har galat ho ya sahi chij ye badi safai sea karte hea..
Or ek jamane mea ye or raaj (chalo choro ye baat abi pending rakhte hea..)

Ha toa rohit apne office building ke top floor par khare ho..
Shubhe jo wakya hua uske bareme soch raha tha..

Aaj b bilkul ni badli wo..
Gussa abi b uske naak par he betha rehta hea..
Ye baat agar mene aruna ko batayi ki wo aagayi hea..
Toa wo toa gun lekar he uske piche na lag jaye..
Muje filal aruna se ye baat chupaye rakhni hogi warna iska asar kahi hamre bache par na gire..

Or iske liye muje indono ko dur rakhna hoga..
Par kaisea.....
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Ek min wo kamina kab kaam aayega
Itna soch rohit kisi ko call lagata hea or kuch der baat karne ke baad samne wale ki baate sun rohit b chounk jata hea or kehta hea..

Par mere dost jo tum karne ka soch rahe ho kya wo sahi hoga..
Isme ek galti or tumhari jaan b jaa sakti hea or fir jiske liye tum ye sab kar rahe ho unka kya hoga..

Meri mano toa mea abi apne kuch bande bejta hu..
Tum unke sath waha se nikal jau or fir tum apne pariwar ke sath hamare secret island par chale jana..

Waha toa is janam mea choro agle 7 janam tak b koi ni aa payega..

Samne se - .....

Rohit - Tk hea bhai ab tumne man bana he liya hea toa tk hea..
Par mea ab b bolunga ek baar or sochlo..

Samne se - ...

Rohit - Tk he bhai..
Tum chinta mat karo abse meri b najar unpar bani rahegi har pal..
Unhe mea kuch ni hone dunga..
Par tum apna khyal rakhna or uss yashpal ke sath jo kuch b plan kiya ho tumne dyan rakhna ki raw wale kabi kisike sage ni hote..
Unke liye unka farz se bara kuch ni hota..
Toa kahi wo tumhe he tekka na dea dea..

Itna bol wo call rakh deta hea or chal padta hea apne mansion ke taraf..

(Hmm lag raha he ki kuch bul rahi hu..
Haa yaad aaya veer bahadur ko toa ham bhul he gaye..
Chalo unka b haal dekh lete hea..
Akhir hero ke dadajaan hea vo..)

Veer bahadur yaaha ramu ke janeke baad secret agency yani raw ke head apni cousin bhai yashpal ko call lagate heeah.

Or usse b apne bete or bahu ki khabar ke bareme puchte hea..
Or ye b kehte hea ki tu raw ka itna bara head hea or mere bete tak ko dhund ni pa raha..
Or na jane kya kya apne gum mea unko boldete hea..

Or bichare yashpal b sab kuch jante huye b veer ko kuch ni batasakte khair..

Aishe waqt bitata gaya..
Or 3 mahine or beet gaye..
Ab aarti 6 mahine ke pet se thi..
Or guess what aruna b ..

Is bich..
Aarti b apne badi behen archana se mili thi or dono beheno nea apne gile sikhwe b dur kiye..

Par na he aarti ne aruna ke bareme pucha or na archana ne uski baat nikali qki ye har garbhwati ke jewan ka wo samay hota he jaha choti se choti baat b dil mea ghar kar jati hea..

Yaha aruna b 6 mahine ke pet se hone ke karan thora jada aaram karti thi or waise b usse kuch kaam karne ki jarurat toa thi hea nai aakhir itne naukar jo the ghar mea..
Par is bich usse uske mom dad 1-2 baar milne gaye the..
Par unhone usse ye ni bataya ki aarti b mumbai aachuki hea..

In teen mahino mea raaj 15-20 din mea ek baar aarti se baat karta or har baar ye b kehta ki bas kaam khatam hone ko hea mea tumhare delivery date se pehlea aajaunga..
Or iss baat par unki behes b hojaya karti thi..

Insabi baato ki bich samay aaya indono ke god bhari ka...
Jisske liye sabse bari pareshani ye hui ki dono ki god bharai ki date ek hea aai or mahurat b..

Ab unke mata pita yaa toa aarti ke pass ja sakte yaa aruna ke..

Qki dono jagha ek sath hona sambhav nai tha na he dono ki god bharai ek sath karna..
Isliye kafi vichar vimash ke baad yashpal ne ye nirnay liya ki wo or archana aruna ki god bharai mea jayengea or aarti ki goad bharai mea uski maa or kuch rishtedar honge jo unke karibi the jinka intro as per requirement hota jayega..

Fir shuru hui do jagha dono beheno ki god bharai..
Jo dono he jagha kafi jor shor se chalrahi thi..
Panditji b aagaye the..
Par yaha fir ek problem hui..
(Hamare yaha god bharai ke samay pandtji pregnant women ka hath dekh uske hone wale bache kea bareme batate the....
Myths..)

Ab dono jagha ek he samay tha goad bharai ka par gurudev dono jagga ek sath toa ni ja pate..
Isliye unhone pehlea aarti ke yaha janeka socha..
Taki pehlea waha ki rashme khatam kar wo aruna ke yaha ja sake..

Gurudev ne aarti se pehle kuch puja or rashme karwai or fir uska hath tham uske honewale bache ka bhavishya dekhne lagge..
Jisse dekh unke sar se pasine ki bunde tapakne lagi.
Or wo kafi gabragaye the..

Ab unhone aisa kya dekha ye mea 2nd update mea bataungi..
Till is update ke bareme apni raai jarur dena or agar aap b is story mea apna kuch sayog dena chahte ho or aapke pass koi idea ho ki aage aisa karna chahiye ya hona chahiye toa muje pm jarur karna..
Aarti and aruna ke husband dost hain itna to andaza laga hain magar yah raj kis kaam me phasa hua hain aur kia wo apbe betay ko dekh payega coz story Se to nahi lag raha
 
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