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Fantasy Saurya - ek youdha (Completed)

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Hi friend maine xforum pr kafi stories padi hai aur ab mai bhi apni ek story post karne ja raha hu ab jyada wakt na lete huye
story p chalte h jaise jaise log milte rahenge unke bare m batata jaunga .
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UPDATE-10

AB TAK
Main apne room m neend k injection ki wajah s sooya hua tha .

AAGE


Ye baat jab Dad ,Bobby uncle aur Fufa ji ko pata chali to aapne saare kaam chod kr wo sabhi ghar aa gaye.Shilpa Didi bhi bade gusse m ghar aa rhi thi pr achanak wo kahi gayab ho gayi . Tiya , Tanya aur Saifali(isko ab m gudiya likhunga taki kisi ko confusion na ho )
ko kuch bhi bataya nahi gaya mere iss halat ka.Sabhi ghar pahuche to unhe mere aise roone k baare m bataya.

Bobby uncle - hame jaldi s pata karna hoga ki ye us formula k wajah s hai ya kuch aur .
Dad -ha tumhari baat bilkul sahi hai hame jaldi s us device ka use karna hoga.
Mausa - kaun sa device
Fufa- Vikram ye Deep aur Saifali n us formula ko aur uske effects ko cheak karne k liye ek device banaya tha ye dono ussi ki baat kar rahe hai.
Mausa- ok toh us device ko use karo
Bobvy uncle apne room ki taraf nikal gaye device lane ke liye.
Karib 20 minute baad wo wapas aaye par unke haath m kuch bhi nahi tha bas hootho p ek muskan liye wo Saurya k paas gaye aur Saurya k baal pyar s sahlane lage.
Kisi ko yeh dekh kuch samaj nahi aaya .
Mausa - arre Bobby kya hua cheak kr na isse kahi wo formula koi nuksan na pahucha de.
Bobby - Isse kuch nahi hua h aap log (ladies ko ) kuch jyada hi soch rahe the pr fir bhi Shudda tumne thik kiya jo isse neend k dawa de di warna pata nhi ye kitni der roota rahta.

Sab- Matlab ?

Bobby- Abhi mujhe iske dost ka phone aaya tha wo bata raha tha ki jab ye dono car drive krna sikh rahe the to galti s inki kisi dusre car k sath takkar ho gayi . Wo car koi ladki chala rahi thi usne in dono ko khub khari khoti sunnai aur police complain ki dhamki bhi di bas fir kya dono dar gaye aur pata nhi kya - kya soch liya sayad issi karan ye ghar aate hi roone laga. Mujhe nhi pata tha ki ye police ki bast sun itna dar jata hai.

Yeh baat sun sabhi ko hairan ho gaye q ki aisa kabhi hua hi nhi k Saurya itna dar gaya fir bhi sabhi ne iss baat ko maan liya par sabhi ko ab gussa aa raha tha ki ek ladki ki wajah s Saurya itna rooya.
Mom- pata nahi kon hogi wo kamini jiski wajah s mera beta itna roya m to ghabra hi gayi thi.
Maasi - mera bhi yahi haal tha didi agar kabhi wo chudail mujhe mil jaye to uski taange tod dungi.

Abhi ye log baate kar hi rahe the k room m Saifali didi aati hai wo badi hi khush nazar aa rahi thi aate hi.
Didi- arre ab kya aap log yahi rahoge dinner ki tayari bhi karo main iske paas rukti hu jab ye jaage ga to main isse sab samjha dungi.
Fufa - kya samjha dogi Saifali isse.
Didi- arre wahi ki ab isse driving m sikhaungi aur kisi s bhi itna nhi darna chahiye.
Bua- tujhe kaise pata in sab k baare m
Didi- wo.. wo... ha mom aap jab aap log baat kr rahe the to main bahar hi thi maine sab sun liya ab aap sab jao main iska khayal rakhti hu.
Bua- pahle aapna to khayal rakhna shikh itti badi ho gayi hai abhi tak chai bannani bhi nahi aati.
Didi-Moooommm ! main shikh lungi aap log jaao .
Didi ne sabhi ko jabardasti room s bahar kar diya aur fir gate laga k mere bed p aa gayi.
Didi- ab aaye hain aap haath main aur aaj to main aapko chodungi nahi.
Itna bol wo mere upar chad gayi aur dhere dhere apna chahra mere chahre k karib lane lagi aur mere hoothon ko kiss kiya.
Didi - aese to mazza nhi aaya ek baar bas inhe meri yaad aa jaye fir to aapse pura hisab vasulungi.
Fir wo mere bed p baith k mere baalon ko sahlane lagi.


Chaliye hum bhi dekhte hai jo itne gusse m thi wo ab itna khush kaise ho gai h.

Flash back
(Shilpa didi k respect main)

Jab mujhe Saurya k iss halat ka pata chala main car drive kr rahi thi.Mujhe bahut gussa aaya khud p unke iss halat k baare m sun kar. Maine turant hi gaadi ko side m kiya aur ghar aane k liye apne jaadu ka istemal kiya pr main ghar m na aakar jungle m pahuch gayi janha Baba baithe the.
Baba - Rani shahiba apne gusse p kaabu rakhiye isme aapka koi dosh nahi ye to bus ek choti si sachhayi k karan Samrath ki essi halat ho gayi.
Main- kaun sa sach Baba.
Baba ne apna hath mere sir p rakh diya. Unke hath rakhte hi mujhe bhi Sanjay aur Lucky dwara jo baat Saurya ko pata chali thi wo pata lag gaya. Mere bhi aashu girne lage.
Baba - Agar aap bhi kamjor pad jaaogi to Samrath ko kaun sambhalega abhi aapke alawa koi nahi jo usko sambhal sake.
Main(apne aashu pochte hue)- Baba aap bataiye m kya karu .
Baba- Pahle to apne ghar walo ko iss baat ka yakin dilwao ki ye sab jo bhi hua hai ye us rashayan(formula) k karan nahi hua hai.Agar unlogo n us yantra(device) ka upyog Samrath p karenge to un logo ko Samrath k shaktiyon ka oata chal jayega. Aap shigra hi kuch kare taki wo essa kuch bhi na ho.
Main-Thik hai Baba pr main inko(Saurya) kaise sambhalungi.
Baba - Sayad unko ab thoda sa sach batane ka samay aa gaya hai.
Main- main samjhi nahi Baba.
Baba- aapko unhe aapne shaktiyo k baare m batana hoga.
Ye sun main to jaise khusi s pagal hi ho gai.
Baba- Aap shigra jaaye warna der na ho jaye.
Main unki baat sun jaldi s gayab ho ghar m pahuch gayi jab m aayi to dekha Bobby uncle kahi apne room m jaa rahe the. Maine apne power s unke mind control kar liya aur fir unke dimag m wo dost wali kahani set kardi.

Fir kya hua ye to aapko pata hi hai.

Back to Present
(Hero k respect m)

Meri neend karib 8 baje k aas paas khuli. Didi abhi bhi mere baal sahla rhi thi.M
ain uth k baithne laga to Didi n mujhe rok diya aur boli
Didi - Maine king ko itna kamjor to nahi samjha tha pr aap to bade hi kamjor nikle.

Ye baate to mere liye jaise koi bomb tha.
Main-kk..kk...king kon king main koi king wing nahi hu main to aapka bhai hu.
Didi- Ha bhai to hai hi aap mere par aap king bhi ho
Main - Aap ye kaise kah sakte ho ki main king hu .
Didi- hmmm Acha agar main ye batau ki aap aaj Nirupa Roy ban k roo kyun rahe the to manoge.
Main(maan m) - yaar inko kaise malum ki main king hu aur ab ye mere ko mere roone ki wajah bhi baatane wali hai pr inhe ye pata kaise chala ki
Didi-(mere maan m ) aap na sochte bahut ho ab jo bhi main bolu usko dhyan s sunna.
Main to sann rah gaya Didi n na sirf meri maan ki bate sunni balki unhone mere maan m mujhse baat bhi ki yaani telepathy.
Main- aa...aap ye kaise kar rahe ho.
Didi- arre powers sirf aapke paas hi nahi hai samjhe mere paas bhi powers h aur hum dono ka mind ab s hamesha connected rahega ab hum jab chahe tab ek dusre s baat kr sakte hai.
Main - aapko powers kaha s mille aur kaun kaun s powers hai aapke paas au....
Didi - Bas bhi karo ab main ye sab aapko baad m bataungi pahle jo main batane jaa rahi hu wo suno.
Fir Didi n mujhe wo nakli story(car wali) batayi aur fir kaha ki hume hi ab pure pariwar ko saath m laana hoga aur apne emotions p bhi control karna hoga.Last m unhone bataya ki agar ghar m koi uss car wali ladki k baare m puchhe to kuch bhi galat salat info de dena.
Kuch der aur aise hi baate karne k baad mom ne hame niche bula liaya sabhi n mil ke dinner kiya us waqt sabhi n fir mujhe samjaya kisi s darna nahi chahiya... bla...bla...bla...

Fir sab apne apne room m soone chale gaye.
Soote hi main jungle pahuch gaya aur apni 5 th chakra ko jagane k liye dhyan m baith gaya.
Mast update h Bhai
Maza aa gya
 

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AB TAK
SAB APNE ROOMS M SOONE CHALE GAYE.MAIN BHI SOOTE HI JUNGLE PAHUCH GAYA.MAIN APNA 5TH CHAKRA JAGANE

AAGE

Abhi sabko apne apne room m gaye kuch hi der hua tha k koi mere room mai aaya aur dekhne laga k main soya hu k nahi. Mujhe soota hua pa kar wo mere room s bahar chala gaya aur kisi k room ka gate knock kiya. Thode der mai gate kula aur gate kholne wala bola "arre poonam tum iss waqt kya hua."
Maasi - Didi neend nahi aa rahi socha aapse kuch dair baat kar lu.
Mom- aisa kya, bol kaha baate karni hai yaha p to tere jiju so rahe hai aur tere room main Vikram hoga.
Massi- chalo di hum chat p chalte hai waha na to koi disturb hoga aur na hame karega.
Mom- chal thik hai chalte hai.
Fir dono bahne chat p aa jate hai
Mom- Choti ab jadli s bata kya puchna hai.Main acche s janti hu k tu mujhe yaha aese hi nhi laayi hai.
Maasi- Didi baat hi kuch aisi hai.Aapko pata nhi hoga jab aapka car blast wala kaand jo aap logo n kiya tha uske baad kya kya hua.
Mom - kya hua hoga Ghar p saare log khush hue honge Mummy hamesa ki tarah hi chup rahi hogi papa ka dil khusi s dance karne ka hoga aur mere bhai hunh unhe to sayad fark hi nahi pada hoga wo to apni business m hi busy rahe honge aur bhi agar kuch hua hoga to mujhe ab usme koi interest nahi hai.
Maasi - Didi main bhi unki baat nhi kr rhi hu main kisi aur ki baat kr rahi hu.
Mom- kisi aur ki kiski baat kr rhi hai tu janha tk mujhe pata chala tha bus mere aur tere jiju k dost aur unke kuch ristedar bas wahi log kuch din k liye dukhi hue the fir sab apni apni life main busy ho gaye.
Maasi - accha didi ek baat batao aapne kabhi mere baare m soocha tha.
Mom - Dekh choti tujse jhoot nhi bolungi pr uss waqt jo kuch bhi hamare sath hua tha na hum tum sabhi s gussa the kisi k bhi baare m nhi jaanna chahte the pr fir jab Reshma aur Digvijay aaye to unse pata chala tum logo k baare m Mummy-Papa k baare m jo socha tha wahi sach nikla aur bhaiyon k baare m bas ye bataya ki wo dono bus office m hi lage rahte hain aur tere baare m bas itna pata chala ki tu apni life main khush hai pr mummy papa aur baaki sab s saare riste tod diye the tune bus aur kuch nahi
Maasi-haa un logo n sahi bataya tha. Main bhi sayad us waqt tak sambhal chuki thi issi liye khush hogi.Ye chodo aapne sabke baare m sunna pr kya aapne Annuradha didi k baare m nhi pucha unse.
Mom- puchha tha na pr unhone bataya mere jaane k baad unhone bhi ghar s saare naate tod diye aur phir Jiju aur bachhiyo k jiju k gaon(shivpur) m chale gaye. Jiju(Pawan kashyap) n bhi aapne gaon s hi saare business handle krne lage.
Maasi- ye sab jaanne k baad aapka jee nahi kiya humse milne ka.
Mom- ha maan to karta tha pr phir Saurya aur Tiya & Tanya k baare m soch apne maan ko sant kr leti thi. Ek dar sa baith gaya tha maan m k agar tujhse aur didi s milne k chakar m mummy papa ko khabar lag gayi to phir s kahi mujhe mere bacche n khone pade.
Maasi-main samjh skti hu didi.
Mom-tu ye sab q puch rahi h wo bhi iss waqt. sach sach bata tu didi s milli hai na kya tune unse baat ki.

Maasi- Nahi didi maine to bus unko car s jaate hue dekha tha jiju bhi sath m the.Sayad wo log wapas yahi settle ho rahe honge unki betiyan bhi yahi XYZ collage m padti hai na toh sayad issi wajah s.
Mom-kya ab hame kya krna chahiye ?
Maasi - Didi agar wo wapas iss sahar m aayen hai to kabhi n kabhi to hamari mulakat ho hi jayegi.Mujhe lagta hai hame khud hi unse milkar unko saari sachayi bata deni chahiye.
Mom-choti mujhe iske baare m sochne k liye waqt chahiye aur sath hi tere jiju ki salah bhi agar wo kahenge tabhi m y karungi.
Maasi-thik h didi pr jo bhi karna jaldi karna.
Mom - thik hai choti. chal ab bahut raat ho gayi h soone chalte hai baaki baatein kal kr lenge.
Aur fir dono soone chali jaati hai.
Sabhi log ghar m aaram s soo rahe the pr unhe ye kanha pata tha k waha ek tufan aane wala hai jo sabko hilla k rakh dega.
 

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Hmm lagta ha hero ki family boht bare bare jhagre hoye pare han
 

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Hmm lagta ha hero ki family boht bare bare jhagre hoye pare han
ha bhai story ka 1st part m pahle inhi jhagdo ko to kahtam karna h
 
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UPDATE - 11

AB TAK
SAB APNE ROOMS M SOONE CHALE GAYE.MAIN BHI SOOTE HI JUNGLE PAHUCH GAYA.MAIN APNA 5TH CHAKRA JAGANE

AAGE

Abhi sabko apne apne room m gaye kuch hi der hua tha k koi mere room mai aaya aur dekhne laga k main soya hu k nahi. Mujhe soota hua pa kar wo mere room s bahar chala gaya aur kisi k room ka gate knock kiya. Thode der mai gate kula aur gate kholne wala bola "arre poonam tum iss waqt kya hua."
Maasi - Didi neend nahi aa rahi socha aapse kuch dair baat kar lu.
Mom- aisa kya, bol kaha baate karni hai yaha p to tere jiju so rahe hai aur tere room main Vikram hoga.
Massi- chalo di hum chat p chalte hai waha na to koi disturb hoga aur na hame karega.
Mom- chal thik hai chalte hai.
Fir dono bahne chat p aa jate hai
Mom- Choti ab jadli s bata kya puchna hai.Main acche s janti hu k tu mujhe yaha aese hi nhi laayi hai.
Maasi- Didi baat hi kuch aisi hai.Aapko pata nhi hoga jab aapka car blast wala kaand jo aap logo n kiya tha uske baad kya kya hua.
Mom - kya hua hoga Ghar p saare log khush hue honge Mummy hamesa ki tarah hi chup rahi hogi papa ka dil khusi s dance karne ka hoga aur mere bhai hunh unhe to sayad fark hi nahi pada hoga wo to apni business m hi busy rahe honge aur bhi agar kuch hua hoga to mujhe ab usme koi interest nahi hai.
Maasi - Didi main bhi unki baat nhi kr rhi hu main kisi aur ki baat kr rahi hu.
Mom- kisi aur ki kiski baat kr rhi hai tu janha tk mujhe pata chala tha bus mere aur tere jiju k dost aur unke kuch ristedar bas wahi log kuch din k liye dukhi hue the fir sab apni apni life main busy ho gaye.
Maasi - accha didi ek baat batao aapne kabhi mere baare m soocha tha.
Mom - Dekh choti tujse jhoot nhi bolungi pr uss waqt jo kuch bhi hamare sath hua tha na hum tum sabhi s gussa the kisi k bhi baare m nhi jaanna chahte the pr fir jab Reshma aur Digvijay aaye to unse pata chala tum logo k baare m Mummy-Papa k baare m jo socha tha wahi sach nikla aur bhaiyon k baare m bas ye bataya ki wo dono bus office m hi lage rahte hain aur tere baare m bas itna pata chala ki tu apni life main khush hai pr mummy papa aur baaki sab s saare riste tod diye the tune bus aur kuch nahi
Maasi-haa un logo n sahi bataya tha. Main bhi sayad us waqt tak sambhal chuki thi issi liye khush hogi.Ye chodo aapne sabke baare m sunna pr kya aapne Annuradha didi k baare m nhi pucha unse.
Mom- puchha tha na pr unhone bataya mere jaane k baad unhone bhi ghar s saare naate tod diye aur phir Jiju aur bachhiyo k jiju k gaon(shivpur) m chale gaye. Jiju(Pawan kashyap) n bhi aapne gaon s hi saare business handle krne lage.
Maasi- ye sab jaanne k baad aapka jee nahi kiya humse milne ka.
Mom- ha maan to karta tha pr phir Saurya aur Tiya & Tanya k baare m soch apne maan ko sant kr leti thi. Ek dar sa baith gaya tha maan m k agar tujhse aur didi s milne k chakar m mummy papa ko khabar lag gayi to phir s kahi mujhe mere bacche n khone pade.
Maasi-main samjh skti hu didi.
Mom-tu ye sab q puch rahi h wo bhi iss waqt. sach sach bata tu didi s milli hai na kya tune unse baat ki.

Maasi- Nahi didi maine to bus unko car s jaate hue dekha tha jiju bhi sath m the.Sayad wo log wapas yahi settle ho rahe honge unki betiyan bhi yahi XYZ collage m padti hai na toh sayad issi wajah s.
Mom-kya ab hame kya krna chahiye ?
Maasi - Didi agar wo wapas iss sahar m aayen hai to kabhi n kabhi to hamari mulakat ho hi jayegi.Mujhe lagta hai hame khud hi unse milkar unko saari sachayi bata deni chahiye.
Mom-choti mujhe iske baare m sochne k liye waqt chahiye aur sath hi tere jiju ki salah bhi agar wo kahenge tabhi m y karungi.
Maasi-thik h didi pr jo bhi karna jaldi karna.
Mom - thik hai choti. chal ab bahut raat ho gayi h soone chalte hai baaki baatein kal kr lenge.
Aur fir dono soone chali jaati hai.
Sabhi log ghar m aaram s soo rahe the pr unhe ye kanha pata tha k waha ek tufan aane wala hai jo sabko hilla k rakh dega.
Nice update Bhai
 

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Superb Update Bro...
Waiting For Next
 
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