Fantasy Saurya - ek youdha (Completed)

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Hi friend maine xforum pr kafi stories padi hai aur ab mai bhi apni ek story post karne ja raha hu ab jyada wakt na lete huye
story p chalte h jaise jaise log milte rahenge unke bare m batata jaunga .
so lets go

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[The_Punisher]

Noob writer

 

[The_Punisher]

Hello everyone.

We are Happy to present to you The annual story contest of XForum

"The Ultimate Story Contest" (USC).

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As you all know, in previous week we announced USC and also opened Rules and Queries thread after some time. Before all this, chit-chat thread already opened in Hindi section.

Well, Just want to inform that it is a Short story contest, in this you can post post story under any prefix. with minimum 700 words and maximum 7000 words . That is why, i want to invite you so that you can portray your thoughts using your words into a story which whole xforum would watch. This is a great step for you and for your stories cause USC's stories are read by every reader of Xforum. You are one of the best writers of Xforum, and your story is also going very well. That is why We whole heatedly request you to write a short story For USC. We know that you do not have time to spare but even after that we also know that you are capable of doing everything and bound to no limits.

And the readers who does not want to write they can also participate for the "Best Readers Award" .. You just have to give your reviews on the Posted stories in USC

"Winning Writer's will be awarded with Cash prizes and another awards "and along with that they get a chance to sticky their thread in their section so their thread remains on the top. That is why This is a fantastic chance for you all to make a great image on the mind of all reader and stretch your reach to the mark. This is a golden chance for all of you to portrait your thoughts into words to show us here in USC. So, bring it on and show us all your ideas, show it to the world.

Entry thread will be opened on 7th February, meaning you can start submission of your stories from 7th of feb and that will be opened till 25th of feb. During this you can post your story, so it is better for you to start writing your story in the given time.

And one more thing! Story is to be posted in one post only, cause this is a short story contest that means we can only hope for short stories. So you are not permitted to post your story in many post/parts. If you have any query regarding this, you can contact any staff member.


To chat or ask any doubt on a story, Use this thread — Chit Chat Thread

To Give review on USC's stories, Use this thread — Review Thread

To Chit Chat regarding the contest, Use this thread— Rules & Queries Thread

To post your story, use this thread — Entry Thread

Prizes

Position	Benifits
Winner	1500 Rupees + Award + 30 days sticky Thread (Stories)
1st Runner-Up	500 Rupees + Award + 2500 Likes + 15 day Sticky thread (Stories)
2nd Runner-UP	5000 Likes + 7 Days Sticky Thread (Stories) + 2 Months Prime Membership
Best Supporting Reader	Award + 1000 Likes+ 2 Months Prime Membership
Members reporting CnP Stories with Valid Proof	200 Likes for each report

Regards :- XForum Staff

 

[Surya1]

To be honest story interesting nahi hai i think story kaa naam chutiya ek yodha hota toh Better hota or jab hero ke paas itni power phir bhi usko kuch pta hi nahi hai yaar wo jinno ka samraat hai or use kuch knowledge hi nahi hai at least kuch toh socha hota aapne or heroine bhi apni galti nahi manti yaar unhe realise hi nhi hai ki unke paas power hai toh responsibility bhi hai by the way i don't want offend you and one more thing aapne story ka plot sahi socha but story narration me thoda issue lag rha hai i think aap story ko better way me narrate kar skte the it's my personal opinion so please don't feel offensive

 

[Surya1]

Bhai sorry par puri story me ptanahi kya 2 rayta fela rakha hai hero ki chutiyon ka raja jo use kuch pta hi nahi rahta or heroine bhi ek number ki chutiya hai jab dekho hero ki gaand marne pe lagi rahti hai jese inhe kisi cheej se matlb hi Naa ho

 

[Zoro x]

UPDATE - 9


AB TAK


Maine Shilpa Didi ko apne Nanaji k Accountant ko pyar m fasake kuch info nikalne bola.


AB AAGE-


Didi k nikalne k baad maine Ritvik aur Sameer ko Didi ka khyal rakhne ko kaha ki agar wo kahi fase to wo dono unhe nikal le fir main chal dia interrogation room jnha abhi Fufaji aur Sameera mil k Lucky aur Sanjay ko pitte ja rahe the un dono k face p ek black cover laga hua tha jisse unhe ye nahi dikh raha tha k unko kaun maar raha hai wo bas chillaye ja rahe the aur unse kuch duri p chair p bandha hua tha Guddu.


Mere ander jate hi maine dono ko rukne ko bola.Dono ruk gaye fir ishare s 3no k face cover hatane bole.Sameera n 3no k face cover hataye.Lucky aur Sanjay ka chahre aasuoo s bhara hua tha wahi Guddu ji ki fatti padi thi mujhe dekh.


Wahi jab Sanjay aur Lucky ki nazar Fufaji p padi to unki bhi faat gai.


Main-tum logo s jo bhi pucha jaye uska sahi sahi jawab dena nhi to.


chalo aapna aapna naam aur kaam batao


Tinno n apna naam bataya fir Guddu ko chod baki k dono chup ho gaye Guddu bechare tote ki tarah bole ja raha tha apne dhandhe k baare m a to z sab bol diya usne.fir bola


Guddu-(Sanjay ko dekh)- saale tere wajah s fasa aapun bola tha tere ko ki abhi time sahi nahi hai deal nhi krte pr tu bsdk tere ko to meri sunni hi nhi thi(meri tarf dekh) bhai sabki last wish puri ki jaati hai na apun ki bhi kr do is madar***d Sanjay ko mere s phle maarna.


Sanjay jo ab tak smbhal gaya tha bola.


Sanjay -(Guddu ko dekh)


Aare bhadwe ye log mera kuch nhi bigad sakte jab mere bhai ko pata chalega na ki inlogo n mujhe pakda h to purre underworld m tahalka mach jayega mera bhai Don hai Don (fir fufaji ko dekh) aur tu be Digvijay sala tu bhi jinda ho gaya Deep bhi jinda h.Tab to paaka wo Reshma aur Saifali bhi jinda hogi.Ek baar yaha s niklbe de fir dekh mai,lucky aur Pankaj mill gangbang karenge unke sath.Bada maza aayega dono ki ek saath lene m


Abhi fufa ji kuch karte usse phle hi maine apni chaku nikali aur Sanjay k hath m de mara chku usske hatheli k aar paar hoga aur wo dard s chillane laga.Maine Fufaji s bola


Main-(Gusse m)AgentD bahar s mera blue box le aayiyega waha desk k piche pada hua h.


Mere itna gusse m bolne s Fufaji turant bahar chale gaye aur Sameera mere liye pani lene chali gai.Dono ek sath hi room m aaye.Sameera k haatho m 2 balti thi paani s bhari hui aur uske piche ek aur agent ha jiske hath m ek plate tha aur bottled water.Ussne wo bottle mujhe diya aur wo plate room m pade desk p rakh diya.Fufa ji sameera k hatho m baalti dekh usse sawaliya nazaro s dekh rahe the to sameera boli


Agent02-AgentD abhi kuch der ruko pata chal jayega ki ye main kyun lai.


Fir maine apna blue box khola ye ek tool box tha jisme ladbhag har tarah k tools the.Maine usme s ek chota sa drill machine nikala aur usse fufaji kitaraf badha unhe usse pakadne ko bola fir kuch nails aur ek hammer jisse maine sameera ko de diya aur khud ek plish liye badh chala Sanjay aur lucky ki oor or mere piche piche wo dono bhi aa gaye.


Main-(Sanjay s) Bahut bol liya beta tune ab dekh agar jo puchha jaye wo na bataya to tera kya haal hoga.AgentD sawal.


Fufaji- tune bola Deep jinda h Tune usse kab aur kaha dekha


Sanjay jiske ek hath m abhi bhi chaku dusha hua tha wo bola


Sanjay - Kishanpur k bus stop p dekha tha usse saale ko maarne k liye log bhi bheje the par wo sala bacha gaya pr ab aur nahi tum sab maroge aurr...aaaahhhhhhh


abhi wo kuch bolta maine uske nakhun nikal diye apne pliash s aur bola


Main- jitna pucha jaye utna hi batta agar kuch jyada hua to tera kuch kam ho jayega samjha.





Fufaji uska jawab sun thoda paresan ho gaye unhe samajh aa gaya tha ki ye log mujhe Deep Mausa samajh rahe hai aur mere upar hmla kr rhe hai.


Fufaji - kis kis ko pata hai k Deep jinda hai.


Sanjay- Mujhe aur pankaj ko.


Fufaji-Pankaj kaha hai


Sanjay- Tu mere sath kuch bhi kr le m tere ko pankaj ka pata nhi bataunga usse jaise hi pata chalega ki main gayab ho gaya hu to wo mujhe dhundte hue jarror aaye ga.


Maine socha q itna time waste kr raha hu apne power ka use kr sb patakr leta hu fir dono ko tadpa tadpa k marunga aur maine bari-bari sanjay aur lucky k hath pakde fir kya tha mujhe unke baare m sab pata chal gaya pr unke kiye gaye kaamo k baare m jaan mujhe had s jyada gussa aane laga maine jaldi s Fufaji s apna drill machine liya aur dono k Sanjay k ghutno p chalane laga wo chilla raha tha pr mujhe bada mazza aa raha tha main to jaise maano usse tadapta dekh jannat m aa gaya ho aur fir wo dard k maare behosh ho gaya wahi uske paas baite Guddu aur Lucky ki to patlun hi gilli ho gai. Dono saale dar k maare hi behosh ho gaye.Wahi mera aisa rup dekh Fufaji bhi dar gaye pr Sameera khud ko normal kiye hui thi jab usne deka tino behosh ho gaye hai to baalti s pani le unpe daal kr unko hosh m le aaye.Unke hosh m aate hi maine fir s aapna wahsi pan shuru kr diya pr iss baar Lucky k sath aur baari baari sanjay aur lucky k sath aisa karta raha.Guddu ka ye dekh aisi halat ho gayi thi k wo Sameera aur Fufaji ko usko goli marne k liye bol raha tha.


Ab Fufaji s raha nhi gaya aur wo bol uthe


Fufaji - King inhe aur maat tadpao inhe bas maar do


Main-AgentD ye tum kah rahe ho jiski biwi k bare m ye log bol na jane kya kya bol rahe the


Fufaji-Main unke liye nhi tumhare liye bol raha hu aapna ye wahsi pan band karo nahi to ye tumhari aadat ban jayegi jo bahut galt hoga.


Sameera -King ye sahi bol rahe hai inko inke kiye ki saza mil chuki hai ab inhe mukt karo.


Main-Tumlogo ko pata nhi inke karan kitno n kya kya khoya h inhe abhi aur tadapna hoga


Sameera mere paas aake :nahi king tumhe hamari dosti ki kasam inhe maar do aur is dard s mukt karo


Uska bas itna khna tha maine un tino ko goli maar di aur nikal pada waha s aapni aakhon m aashu liye main waha s shidha ghar chala gaya.


Time-3:40


Main jaise hi ghar k ander aaya mujhe Mom mill gayi.Main lagbhag daudta hua unke galle lag gaya aur roone laga mere aisa krte hi Mom pareshan ho gayi aur Mujhse puchne lagi k kya hua aise roo q raha hai aurunke bhi aasu nikal aaye.Mom k jor jor s mujhse sawal puch rahi thi jinki awaj sun Maasi bhi jo ki kichen m thi wo bhi bahar aa gai aur mujhe aise roota dekh mujhe galle laga liya maine bhi unko jor s galle laga liya aur roote hue unse bola


main-maasi aap Bua ko yaha jaldi bulaw .


unhone phle to kuch der mujhe dekha phir Reshma bua ko phone kr ye sab bataya to wo bhi jaldi s Suddha aunty k sath hamare yaha aa gai.


Meri aisi halat dekh Sudhha aunty n Mom ki taraf ishare s kuch pucha aur mom ne bhi ha m reply diya fir Suddha aunty kuch der k liye bahar chali gayi karib 10 min baad wo ander aayi main iss waqt bua ko gale laga roye jaa raha tha ki tabhi mujhe mere hath m kuch chubhne ka ahsas hua aur fir aagle hi pal mere akhen bhari hone lagi aur m behosh ho gaya. mere behosh hone k baad


Mom-Shuddha lagta hai ye ussi formula ka koi effect hoga


Sudhha -Ha Didi mujhe bhi yahi lagta h


Poonam-Didi aapne to bola tha k aap log saurya k body s uss furmula k asar ko khatm krne k liye aap log isse koi medicine dete hai .


Reshma-ha hum dete hai pr hame ye bhi pata hai k ek na ek din wo fomula Sameer k ander kuch changes jaroor layega.


Shudhh - ha sahi kaha tumne aur lagta hai wo waqt aab karib aa raha ha. hme jald hi kuch krna hoga.


Mom - kb tk hosh aa jayega isse


Shudha -Raat k khane tk ye hosh m


mom - thik hai pr jab isse hosh aaye to koi bhi abhi jo kuch bhi hua uske baare m nhi baat krega.


Massi -thik hai didi pr isse phle hum iske room m le chalte hai aur charon n mujhe kisi tarah mere room m pahucha dia aur chaaro wahi mere room baith gaye

बहुत ही शानदार लाजवाब अपडेट भाई


लेकिन एक बात समझ नहीं आई कि ऐसा कोनसा फोर्मुला हैं जों सुर्या के अंदर डाला गया है उसे रोकने के लिए मेडिसिन भी दें रहें हैं सुर्या को


लेकिन वो समीर के अंदर चेंजेज लायेगा
ये क्या बात हूई भाई

जहर खायें कोई ओर मरें कोई ओर

 

[The Immortal]

Hello everyone.

We are Happy to present to you The annual story contest of XForum

"The Ultimate Story Contest" (USC).

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Jaisa ki aap sabko maloom hai abhi pichhle hafte hi humne USC ki announcement ki hai or abhi kuch time pehle Rules and Queries thread bhi open kiya hai or Chit Chat thread toh pehle se hi Hindi section mein khula hai.

Well iske baare mein thoda aapko bata dun ye ek short story contest hai jisme aap kisi bhi prefix ki short story post kar sakte ho, jo minimum 700 words and maximum 7000 words tak ho sakti hai. Isliye main aapko invitation deta hun ki aap is contest mein apne khayaalon ko shabdon kaa roop dekar isme apni stories daalein jisko poora XForum dekhega, Ye ek bahot accha kadam hoga aapke or aapki stories ke liye kyunki USC ki stories ko poore XForum ke readers read karte hain.. . Isliye hum aapse USC ke liye ek chhoti kahani likhne ka anurodh karte hain.

Aur jo readers likhna nahi chahte woh bhi is contest mein participate kar sakte hain "Best Readers Award" ke liye. Aapko bas karna ye hoga ki contest mein posted stories ko read karke unke upar apne views dene honge.

Winning Writers ko Awards k alawa Cash prizes bhi milenge jinki jaankaari rules thread mein dedi gayi hai, Total 7000 Rupees k prizes iss baar USC k liye diye jaa rahe hain, sahi Suna aapne total 7000 Rupees k cash prizes aap jeet shaktey hain issliye derr matt kijiye or apni kahani likhna suru kijiye.

Entry thread 7th February ko open hoga matlab aap 7 February se story daalna shuru kar sakte hain or woh thread 28th February tak open rahega is dauraan aap apni story post kar shakte hain. Isliye aap abhi se apni Kahaani likhna shuru kardein toh aapke liye better rahega.

Aur haan! Kahani ko sirf ek hi post mein post kiya jaana chahiye. Kyunki ye ek short story contest hai jiska matlab hai ki hum kewal chhoti kahaniyon ki ummeed kar rahe hain. Isliye apni kahani ko kayi post / bhaagon mein post karne ki anumati nahi hai. Agar koi bhi issue ho toh aap kisi bhi staff member ko Message kar sakte hain.


Rules Check karne ke liye is thread ka use karein — Rules & Queries Thread

Contest ke regarding Chit Chat karne ke liye is thread ka use karein — Chit Chat Thread

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Prizes

Position	Benifits
Winner	3000 Rupees + Award + 5000 Likes + 30 days sticky Thread (Stories)
1st Runner-Up	1500 Rupees + Award + 3000 Likes + 15 day Sticky thread (Stories)
2nd Runner-UP	1000 Rupees + 2000 Likes + 7 Days Sticky Thread (Stories)
3rd Runner-UP	750 Rupees + 1000 Likes
Best Supporting Reader	750 Rupees Award + 1000 Likes
Members reporting CnP Stories with Valid Proof	200 Likes for each report

Regards :- XForum Staff