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Fantasy Saurya - ek youdha (Completed)

Kya mujhe mere likhne ka tarika change karna chahiye

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Ristrcted

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Hi friend maine xforum pr kafi stories padi hai aur ab mai bhi apni ek story post karne ja raha hu ab jyada wakt na lete huye
story p chalte h jaise jaise log milte rahenge unke bare m batata jaunga .
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super, fantastic update...............?
keep posting..................?
waiting for next...................?
 

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Nice update bhai
 

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UPDATE- 57 (Continues)

Main uss ladki k pass gaya uski aakhen band thi aur wo kuch badbada raha tha.

Main uska dhyaan bhang karne jaa hi raha tha ke.
B.S- Abbe uss Budhe ko rok wo khud bhi jayega aur iss chutiye ko bhi le jayega.

Main- B.S Bhai main kya karu tu bata kaise bachaun Henry ko.

B.S- Bola naa uss budhe ko rok pahle.

Main(H.master s)- Rukiye abhi kuch mat kariye.

H.master- Pr Henry ko bachana hai...

B.S- Usko chup hone bol aur meri baat sun ye Rakht Chakra hai. Ye aise mitaya nahi jata iske liye ek alag tarika hai jisse iss chakra ke ander kaid hue insan ko kuch na ho.

Main- Haa to bata wo tarika. Main kuch bhi karunga isko bachane ke liye.

B.S- Tu kuch nahi kar sakta jo karegi Rita karegi bulla usko.

Main- Rita par wo kya karegi.

B.S- Jitna bolu utna kar samjha. Ab portal khol battle ground se yaha aane ko.

Main- Portal par kaise...

B.S- Oo main bhul gaya tha tu chutiya hai. Aakhen band kar apni aur Battle ground ke kisi ek jagah ko yaad kar pura dhyaan laga kar.

Maine waisa hi kiya aur ek portal khul gaya.
Portal ka dusra chhor Niharika ke paas tha jaha iss waqt Rita aur N.mom baate kar rahe the.
Main- Rita Rita Idher haa idher ander aajao.
Rita- Portal tummm....Henry isko kya hua ye aise kyun pada hua hai.
Rita daud kar Henry ke pass jaane lagi wo to acha hua ke ghere ke ander janne ke pahle maine uska haath pakad liya.

Rita- Chodo mujhe ye kya hua Henry ko..Henry dekho main aa gayi hu dekho idher.

Main- Rita ye Raktachakra mein hai aur tumhe hi isse bachana hai.

Rita- Raktachakra ! Mujhe kya karna hoga isko bachane ko.

B.S- Isko bol apne dil se khoon nikal kar iss ghere par pade khoon pe daale.

Main- Kya bol raha hai tu tera dimmag to sahi hai na. Isse Rita khud mar jaayegi.

B.S- Aur koi raasta nahi hai Henry ko bachane ka aur Rita ko kuch bhi nahi hoga jab tak hamare pass black sword hai.

Main- Kya yahi ek raasta hai koi aur upaayi.

B.S- Bhai Rakhta Chakra se kewal koi sacha pyar karne wala hi kisi ko nikal sakta hai aur yaha par bas ek Rita hi hai jo Henry se saccha pyaar karti hai. Tune agar usko bataya na ki uske dil ke khoon se hi Henry bahar nikal sakta hai to wo binna kuch sooche taiyar ho jayegi.

Main- Par Rita ko sach mein kuch nahi hoga naa.

B.S- Nahi hoga viswash kar.

Main(Rita s)- Rita tumhe apne dil se khool nikal kar iss ghere ke upar dena hoga tabhi Henry bachega.

Meri baat puri hui hi thi ke Rita ne apna haath aaage kiya aur uske haath mein ek khanjar aa gaya aur usne ek baar Henry ki oor dekha fir apne dil mein wo khanjar utar diya jiske baad uske dil se khoon ke fuware nikle aur wo sheeda ussi Rakhtachakra pe pade aur jis khoon se wo ghera banna hua tha wo aag mein badal gaya aur fir ghera khatam ho gaya aur issi ke saath Rita aur wo ladki jo mantra padh rahi thi dono jammin par gir gaye.

Wahi iske turant baad Henry ko hosh aa gaya.
Hosh aate hi uski nazar pahle Rita par padi aur saath hi uss khanjar par bhi jo uske dil mein utra tha.
Henry khada hua aur Rita ke pass pahuch gaya uska sar apne goad mein rakh.
Henry- Ye kya kiya tumne Kyun mere liye khud ko... kyun...

Rita jiski aakhri saasen chal rahi thi wo.
Rita- Jaan mujhe maaf kar dena main tumhe akela chod jaa rahi hu par mere pass aur koi rasta nahi tha tumhe bachane kaa mujhe maaf kar dena aur ab roona maat.

Issi ke saath uski saansen atakne lagi.

B.S- Chutiye uske marne ka intezar kar raha hai kya talwar nikal aur uske haath mein de.

Main- Haa.

Maine black sword li aur Rita ke haath mein de di.

Uske haath mein jaate hi black sword se kaale rays nikalne lage jisne Rita ko gher liya aur fir Rita hawa mein udhne lagi aur dekhte hi dekhte Rita ka sharir bahut jhor jhor se hilne laga aur Rita fir se nicche Henry ke goad mein chali aayi par uski aakhen band hi thi

Henry - Ye kya kiya tunne Rita utho Rita...

B.S- Chup kara isko wo behosh hai bas.

Main- Henry wo ab thik hai usko kuch nahi hua hai dekho uska ghaw bhi nahi hai waha. Thodi der mein wo uth jaayegi.

Henry - Kya sach mein meri Rita thik hai tum sach bol rahe ho naa

H.master jo iss waqt uss dusri ladki ke pass the wo bole.

H.master- Ye maar chuki hai.

Main- Kya par ab hame iska pata kaise chalega ki ye kaun hai aur ye sab kyun kar rahi thi.

B.S- Wo bhi pata chal jaayega par ab meri baat sunn wo photoframe haa wahi Kappa ki talwar se uspe kiya black magic hatta.
Maine uske kahe anushar kiya. Mere waisa karte hi wo photoframe hawamein udne laga aur ghumne laga aur dekhte hi dekhte wo ek pilli kitab mein badal gaya jo thik mere sinne ke saamne aa ruki.
Kitab- Maalik ander aane ki annumati dijiye.
Main- Anumati hai.

Mera itna bolna tha ke wo kitab mere seene ke ander chala gaya.

B.S- Chalo ek aur bahan aa gayi.

Main- Ye Yellow book thi naa.

B.S- Haa aur ab soo rahi hai tere ander. Chal teri ek aur samasya shuljha deta hu jaate jaate.

Main- Kaun si samasya.

B.S- Wo gudiya waali. Ab sun iss ladki ke body ko jalla de aur fir uss gudiya ko pakad kar uspe iss ladki ki rakh laga dena wo kuch pal ke liye shaant ho jaayegi.

Main- Kya bol raha hai.

B.S- Sahi bol raha hu ab wo kar isse tum logo ko jyada time millega uss Pavitra agni ko dhundhne mein. Ek aur baat tumhe iss ladki ke baare mein wo gudiya hi batayegi sab kuch jab wo jal jaayegi tab.

Main- Jal jaayegi tab?? par kaise.

Meri iss sawal ka jawab nahi milla.
Maine iske baare mein sab H.master se bola wo thoda naa nukur ke baad maan gaye.

Headmaster wahi rah gaye aur Hum tinno shidha ussi portal se pahuch gaye Battle ground jaha N.mom aur Margret pareshan hui baithi thi.

Hame dekh dono hamare pass aa gayi aur Rita ke baare mein puchne lagi Henry ne unhe sab bataya aur fir Rita ko uske kamre mein aaram karne ke liye chod diya.

Waha se aate hi wo mere saamne jhuk gaya.

Henry- Saurya aaj se abhi se main tumhara gulam hu tumne aaj jo mere liye kiya sayad hi koi aur karta..

Maine usko uthaya.
Main- Kya baat karte ho tum bhi ye to mera farz tha. Waise main soch raha tha jab dono ek dusre se itna pyaar karte ho to ab shadi kyun nahi kar lete.

Henry- Ab shadi nahi hogi. Pahle to main uss bewakuf ki akal thikane launga uske baad hi kuch hoga. Kya jarurat thi usko mere liye aisa karne ki.

Main- wo tumhare binna nahi rah paati naa to tumko bachane ke liye kiya ye.

Henry- Oo aur agar usko kuch ho jaata to main to jaise jee leta uske binna. Nahi usko ab sabak shikha kar hi rahunga.

Hum aise hi baaten karte rahe ki thodi der main waha Headmaster bhi aa gaye aur unke hath mein ek taila jaisa kuch tha.

Wo mere paas aaye.
H.master- Lo wo raakh jo tumne bola tha.

Mains unse wo thaili li aur usko apne pass rakh liya.

B.S- Chalo aaj raat ko hi uss gudiya ko bhi dhar lete hain.

Main- Haa sahi bola.


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