Incest SHOBHA "A JOURNEY OF SWEET MOM TO SLUT"
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KingKong
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vah! vah! lajawab update,bahut bahut majedar update, bahut accha tharika se likha aapne, bahut khoob
Kahani mast hai, concept naya hai. Abhi tak ki kahani padh kar accha laga maza aaya, concept ki baat kare toh yahan behen kaafi open hai starting se aur vo apne bhai aur mom ko ek karna chahti hai isme uska bhi faida hai khair concept isliye naya laga kyunki yahan bro-sis incest wala zyada chutiyapa nahi hai , yahan deal hui hai rahul aur priya me, dekhte hain ki aage kya hota hai,
Ek baat aur vo ye ki jitni acchi story hai utna he ghatiya hai iska title , mujhe pata nahi aage kya hone wala hai story me but jaisi story abhi tak rahi hai us hisaab se yeh story ka title rehna chahiye "shobha - transformation of a sweet mom" ye hona chahiye par writer ne future me shobha ko slut banana ho isliye shayad aisa title rakha hoga aur agar slut he banana hai toh ye story bas hilane walo ke liye hai baaki writer sahab zyada samajhdar hai agar story humare jaise story padhne wale readers ke liye hogi toh hum jaise readers dil kholkar apne reviews denge nahi toh nice lajawab fantastic likhne walo ki kami thodi na hai iss forum par, bas ek he suggestion hai writer ke liye vo yeh hai ki phoohadta aur asleelta ko importance mat dena warna is kahani ke L lag jayenge aur dusri baat ki romance me bhi itna mat doob jaana ki kahani boring lage. Jo mere maan me tha bol diya agar koi baat galat lagi ho toh dil par mat lena , ye bas mera suggestion hai aap jaise likhna chahte hain waise likhiye
thanks for your appriciation and suggestion......mai aapke diye suggestions par dhyan jaroor dunga
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