Fantasy System - Era of Bloodline

[Ghost Rider ❣️]

Update - 21Posted guys....

Hello everyone
welcome in my new story i know thoda late ho gya but koi nhi abhi aa gya hai na...
Toh chlo Mera sath ek new safer par..

"System - Era of Bloodline"
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[Ghost Rider ❣️]

Oorrrrr bidu kaise ho brother from onther mother

bhai bhai mera bhaiiii... bade dino baad dikha

 

[Sanki Rajput]

Hmm new story

 

[Yasasvi3]

4 din se ye bhi Khali

 

[katana]

Bhai tumne sam ki shadi to kradi suhagrat kab kraoge

 

[ckkhandu]

waiting for next update bro

 

[Faizan_okerlund]

brother ab kya hi kar sakta hai aisa toh nhi ho sakta ki ek hi do update main saara masala daal dun ab story lambi hai toh future ke arc bhi dekna pdega..... aur 21 update main hi itna desperate chalo koi nhi anyway...!!! Thanks for reading biro acha laga honestly review dekh kar ......

Me honestly hi revo deta hn bro. And I'm not being desperate. But Yug ko as a main character la kar aye ho jo mje psnd ni aya. 2ndly bhai ko bhen bna diya. Jo itself ek joke hai. Or jaha itni zillat mili hai from starting. Waha ab joke hore hein. Yug or Sam apni bhen ke bare me hi sex jokes kar rha hai. Senseless na kahu to kia kahu bhai. Hero ke to poore character ki ap ne maar ke rakh di hai FR.

 

[Ghost Rider ❣️]

Me honestly hi revo deta hn bro. And I'm not being desperate. But Yug ko as a main character la kar aye ho jo mje psnd ni aya. 2ndly bhai ko bhen bna diya. Jo itself ek joke hai. Or jaha itni zillat mili hai from starting. Waha ab joke hore hein. Yug or Sam apni bhen ke bare me hi sex jokes kar rha hai. Senseless na kahu to kia kahu bhai. Hero ke to poore character ki ap ne maar ke rakh di hai FR.

Yug hero nhi hai just a side character hai aur ek hero akela sab ni dek sakta... isiliye yug ko laana pada aur yug ko side character maano baaki dost aaynga abhi toh system kaise aaya ye hi nhi pta aur hero ke sath ek problem hai wo bhi saamne aani hai.... Aur fir bhi shuru main dikkat hoti hai main set kr deta hun sab.... main story hero ke around hi chalegi

 

[Faizan_okerlund]

Yug hero nhi hai just a side character hai aur ek hero akela sab ni dek sakta... isiliye yug ko laana pada aur yug ko side character maano baaki dost aaynga abhi toh system kaise aaya ye hi nhi pta aur hero ke sath ek problem hai wo bhi saamne aani hai.... Aur fir bhi shuru main dikkat hoti hai main set kr deta hun sab.... main story hero ke around hi chalegi

Wish u luck

 

[Ghost Rider ❣️]

Wish u luck

Waise itna mat utawala ho brother ... kya pta yug hi kahani ka main villan ho ... today friend tomorrow enemy.... ye kahani masterpiece hogi ... bas mja lo.... Spoiler de diya thoda ... Keep smiling....

 

[Faizan_okerlund]

Waise itna mat utawala ho brother ... kya pta yug hi kahani ka main villan ho ... today friend tomorrow enemy.... ye kahani masterpiece hogi ... bas mja lo.... Spoiler de diya thoda ... Keep smiling....

Bro tension na lo me utavla ni hota. And spoiler s frk ni parta hai. Me chahta hn jsa plot tagra hai wse hi story bhi tagri ho. Coz me anime and manga ka kafi bara fan hn. And or xforum pe system wali stories ka. Like werewolf and salty bhai ki.
Baki chahe yug ko dost rkho dhushman rkho chahe bhot zyada powerful rakho I don't care.
But story me jo emotions heina wo realistic rkho. For example hero ko apni maa or bhen ya bhai jo bhi hai. Usse nafrat hai coz wo bachpan s usse torture krte aye hein. Or is kadar torture kiya ke wo suicide krne lga tha. To wo emotions sam ke behavior me nzr ane chahiye. Nake apni sister ke bare me sex jokes kre ya kuch. Aise dikhao ke usse care hi ni hai. That's what I'm trying to say. Baki best of luck. And ap ne mra negative comment bhot hi behtr trike se liya. Uske liye I appreciate you.