Incest The reclusive intellectual
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COLLEGE CANTEEN::saamne ka nazara hee kuch aisa tha.....saamne Vini niche giri hui thi.....uske hotho se khun bah raha tha.....uski aankho me darr or aansu the......or uske pass uski dono friends khadi thi unki bhi aankho me aansu the......
Hua darasal ye ki jab college ka break hua to sabhi canteen ki taraf gaye.....Vini or uski saheliya bhi....tino table par baith gaye.....
Sonal-yar aaj ka lecture to bahut boring tha.....me to pak gayi.....
Vini-ha mai bhi....kuch samajh me hee nahi aaya.....
Riya-chhodo yar .....bahut bhukh lagi he.....kuch order karo na
Vini- tujh to Hamesha hee bhukh lagti rahti he bhukkad......
Iss baat par Vini or sonal has ne lagi...
Unki iss baat se naaraz ho kar.....thode gusse me...
Riya- how rude .....ab mujhe bhukh lagti he to isme meri kya galati.....kya tumhe bhukh nahi lagi.......bolo
Dono sath ha yar lagi to hai.....chalo kuch order karte he.....
Vini-ruko aaj sab ke liye meri taraf se treat......jise jo lena he le lo.....
Sonal aashchrya se.....kya aaaaj aaaappp bill dengi.......maine Sach me ye suna ya mere kaan kharaab ho gaye he.....
Riya- haaannye treat or wo bhi tu.......me nahi maanti......
Vini- sachchi....jise jo bhi na ho le lo........
Dono khush hoti hui....... par ye to bata treat kis khushi me......
(Baat darasal ye he ki Vini bahut hee kam kharch karti he.....aisa nahi he ki wo kanjus he par jyada West nahi karti .....na dikhawa karti he.....or use ye kisne sikhaya ye to aage hee pata chalega)
Vini- wo kya he na ........aaj bhaiya ne mujhse baat ki subah or itna kah kar wo sharmaate hue niche dekhne lagi......
Dono aankhe faadte hue.......kkyyyaaaaaaa???? Immpossssibleee
Vini -nahi re sachchi.....unhone mujhse aaj subah baat ki......phir wo subah ka Sara kissa apne dono changu mangu ko sunati he jise sun kar dono khush hoti jaati he....dono sath me.....wwwwooooooowwww
[Wese ye koi badi baat nahi thi par agar koi kisi se 1 mahine tak baat na kare jab ki wo dono log sath me rahte ho to bahut bura lagta he....or Vini ko ye khushi isi baat ki thi]
Phir to boss aaj double treat banti he....
Vini -no only single or wo bhi aaj.....
Riya -muh banaate hue :: aa gayi na wapas kanjusi par .....mujhe sirf 50000 mahina pocket money dete he papa phir bhi me khul kar kharch karti hu....or tujh 500000 milte he phir bhi ye kanjusi.....
Sonal- chhod na yar chalo chal kar apna order lekar aate he......
Ye kaha kar teeno canteen wale ke pas gaye.......jab wapas aa rahe the to achanak kisi ka per Vini ke per se takra gaya.....or Vini ke haath me jo coffee thi wo saamne ki table par baithi shanaya par gir gayi.........bas phir kya tha ho gaya kaand
Or phir uthi shanaya gusse se tilmilaati hui......
Shanaya-chillate hue......andhi ho kya dikhaai nahi deta......or apni dress sambhal ti he
Vini- ooo shanaya I am so sorry ......wo actually mera per kisi chij me ulajh gaya tha......I am really sorry shanaya.....
Shanaya- kya sorry ha kya sorry....tere sorry Bolney se meri dress sahi ho jaayegi???????
Aise hee un dono ke bich ladaai hoti rahi or dhire dhire jab wo badhe lagi to us me riya sonal or rimi bhi kud gaye ......or canteen ke baaki log bhi us me shaamil ho gaye..........or un sab ke charo aur ghera bana liya .......abhi bhi kaushal shan't baitha tha.....
Phir ak waqt aaya jab is ladaai ko next step par le jana tha.......or ye kaam kiya rimi ne......
Rimi- chhodo na shanaya Kyo Inn bhikhaariyo ke muh lagti ho.......inki aukaat hamse baat karne ki bhi nahi he......bloody batches......
Or yahi rimi se galati ho gayi.....
or uske makhMali gaal par ak karara thappad pada......thappad itna tez tha ki pure canteen me uski aawaz goonj gayi.....or iss thappad ka impact ye hua ki rimi thappad padte hee ghum kar piche rakhi chair se takra gayi or us chair shit niche giri gayi......uske hoth fat gaye the....or unse khoon aa gaya tha......sirf ak thappad ka ak impact dekh kar pura canteen or sath me Kaushal bhi shock ho gaya tha.....or shanaya riya sonal ka muh khula ka khula rah gaya tha ..........
Lekin aisa kya tha us thappad me......to zra 2 pal rewind karte he....hua kuch aisa ki jab rimi ne jaise hee Vini and party ko gaali di.....
VINI KE ANDAR KA RAAJPUTI KHUN JAAG GAYA
...or usne puri taakat se ak rimi ko dhar diya......nateeza us ak me hee rimi ko din me taare nazar aa gaye......
Apni bahan ka ye haal dekh kar kaushal ko bahut gussa aaya or wo badi tezi se Vini ki taraf badha.....or shanaya riya or sonal ki taraf.......lekin Vini puri tarah se satark thi....usne kaushal koi koi mauka na de kar puri taakat se ak kick kaushal ke pet me de di......jiska kaushal par koi khas farak nahi pada....par wo ghisat kar thoda piche chala gaya....is par uska gussa had se paar ho gaya or usne ak punch Vini ko gaal par de diya.....jise se Vini ko kaafi chot lagi.....or uske muh se bhi halka khun aa gaya.......
Wanha shanaya ne sonal or riya ke kaan laal kar diya the.....kyoki wo kick boxing jaanti thi......
Thik usi waqt UD wanha aa gaya........
Vini par nazar padte hee UD Chilaya.....
Kaausshallll...or daud kar us se bhid gaya.....dono hee ak dusre par punches or kicks se hamla kar rahe the....na koi kam tha na koi jyada....or ladte-2 dono kaafi jakhmi ho gaye the....iss dauraan wanha Par college administration bhi aap gaya tha or principal ne police ko call kar bula liya tha.....inhi sab ke bich canteen ka kaafi nuksaan ho gaya tha....bahut saari chairs tables toot gayi thi....ab tak Vini apne aap Ko sambhal chuki thi....or college admin bhi in dono ko chhudaane ka pryaas kar rahe the lekin safal nahi ho paa rahe the......
Ladte -2 dono ne ak dusre ko dhekla jis se dono ak dusre se chhut kar alag ho gaye......lekin Usi waqt UD ke haath me ak iron rod aa gayi.....jo ki kisi table ki thi......use lekar UD kaushal par kud gaya or use maarne hee wala tha ki..........kisi ne ak laat UD ko maari .....jo UD ko pasliyo me lagi......ye itni powerful thi ki dono ak dusre se chhut gaye or UD udta hua 10 feet dur jaakar gira.......or krahata hua tadpne laga.......use laga jaise kisi ne use hathoda maar diya ho........uski aisi haalat dekh kar Vini zor zor se Rone lagi or us se jaakar lipat gayi
Jab VINI ki nazar maarne waale par gayi to wo kaafi shock ho gayi......kyoki uske saamne khada tha .......HARRY...........
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Bhai plot ko samjhaane or samjhte me jra time lagega
Or spellings ka me koshish kar raha hu ki kam se kam error ho
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INSIDE COLLEGE CANTEEN ::Vini ke face par gusse or shock ke mile Jule bhaav the.....gussa isliye ki uske bhaai ko Harry ne maara.......or shock is liye ki jo banda Hamesha use protect karta aaya tha.....aaj usne uske bhai ko maara wo bhi bina baat jaane.....wahi UD ki haalat buri thi......ab tak kaushal sambhal chuka tha......
Wo abhi kuch karta us se pahle hee Harry tez kadmo se UD ke pass gaya jo ki abhi Vini ke pass pada karaah raha tha.....HARRY ne apne ak haath se uski girebaan pakadi or UD ko utha kar deewaar se laga diya.....or usko maarne hee wala tha ki Vini roti hui bhaag kar aayi or usne Harry ka haath pakad liya....jab Harry ne haath pakad ne waale ko dekha.....to uska Sara gussa gaayab ho gaya or usne UD ko chhod diya......
Uska haath pakad ne wala koi or nahi Vini hee thi.....or rone ki waah se aankhe or chehra laal ho gaya tha.....uske aansu uske gore gaalo se hote hue niche gir rahe the....Vini ko rota dekh kar uska dil me bahut dard hua......use aise laga jaise kisi ne uske dil me chhura maar diya ho......or usne UD ko chhod diya.....or palat gaya.....
HARRY ka apne dushman ko iss tarah chhodna kaushal ko raas na aaya or wo aage badha or jaise hee kaushal unke kareeb jaane ko hua....HARRY ne use Rok liye or...apni finger point karte hue kaha....
HARRY- nahi....ab kuch nahi.....
Kaushal - bhaai chhod mujhe ....tu jaanta nahi is ladki ne rimi par .......or wo koshish karta he khud ko Harry se alag karne ki......per naakam rahta he.....
Harry- maine kaha na nahi......ab koi kuch nahi karega ab (ye baat usne aankhe dikhaate hue sard lathe me kahi thi) ji se kaushal or aas paas khade sab thoda darr gaye the......TAB HI kisi ne Harry ke kandho par Jor se haath rakha or uski jacket ko khichta hue....use apni aur modne ki koshish ki.....halanki ye possible nahi tha pr Harry bhi haath rakhne waale ko dekhna chahta tha.....isliye wo jhat se piche ghum gaya....saamne ak police wala khada tha.....kaafi mota sa.....tha...or uske kandho par lage star bata rahe the ki ye inspector he......or uske sath kareeb 7 8 sipaahi bhi the....
Actually Harry ke college me aane ke 5 minit baad hee police aa gayi thi....or us inspector ne jab Harry ko UD ko maarte dekha to wo samajha ki yahi gunda he....idhar rimi ne bhi apne dad ko phone kar sab bata diya tha....or uske dad bhi kisi bhi waqt aa sakte the......
Inspectors Kyo chhore college me gunda gardi karne aata he.....chaal thaane aaj thaari saari dadagiri nikaalu hu.....
HARRY- collar se haath hata......uski aankho me dekhete hue...
Ins-kya bola police pe rob jhaadta he...aankhe dikhata he.....mad*****d tujheeee....
Iss se aage wo inspector kuch bhi bol nahi paya....kyoki gaali sunkar Harry ka dimaag puri tarah satak gaya.....or usne apne right hand se ak punch puri taakat se us inspector ke dil par maara......uske baad karne ko kuch nahi bacha......wo inspector apna heart pakad kar niche baith gaya.....uski aankhe pathraa gayi......na to use saans aa raha tha.....na hee uske muh se koi aawaz nikal rahi thi......wo bas apne dil ko pakad kar niche ho raha tha...jaise ki use heart attack aaya ho.......waha maujood kisi ko bhi ye andaz a nahi tha ki aisa kuch ho jaayega....or sab ke sab is sudden reaction se dar kar piche hat gaye the......wo hawaldar bhi.....or kaushal to Harry ke power dekh kar surprised ho gaya tha....use pata tha ki harry kaafi strong he par itna strong usne socha na tha.....AK hee punch ka itna impact......
Darasal baat aisi he friends ki bahut jyada mote ya bahut jyada patle aadmi ka heart ak normal aadmi ki tulna ne kuch kamzor hote he.....or agar aise me unke heart par puri taakat se mara jaaye to unhe kuch pal ke liye( almost 5 ya 10 second ) unhe heart attack jitna dard feel hoga.....or itne hee samay ke liye wo MARANAASANN ho jaayenge.....
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