UPDATE-18
Annika- haan didi.. maine Arushi didu ko bol diya hai ki bhaiya aye toh unhe mujhse milwane bej dena...
Tania- ohhh matlab Rajkumar khud ayenge apni Rajkumari se milne..?
Annika- or nahi toh kya.. agar vo nahi aye toh haam krodhit ho jayenge.. or aas-pass k sabhi ilaake jala k bhasm kar denge... hehe…
Tania- hahaha.. chal ab chale ghar…
Annika- haan chalo didi…
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Quasar- Shivan start kar jaldi..
(Shivan apne hath mein padke ik remote ko ON kar deta hai.. or chair mein lagi machine apna kaam karna start kar deti hai.. vo lohe ki chair dhire-dhire ab garam hone lagi thi.. karib or 2mint baad chair kafi garam ho chuki thi, ab gunde ke chootad garam hone lage the. Usse ehasas ho chuka tha ki uske sath kya hone wala hai..)
Gunda- (darta hua) bha.i.. yeah kursi bahut garam hoti ja rahi hai.. ahhhhahh bhai.. bhaii mein jal jayunga…
Quasar- na na itni jaldi nahi jalega tu.. abhi toh game shuru bhi na hua.. bas thori der or thahar…
(Chair mein lagi machine ne apna kamaal dikhate hue chair ko or garam karna shuru kar diya.. gunde ki puri body niche se dhire dhire jalne lagi.. or uske kapde iss waqt uski body se chipak chuke the or unn mein se dhua nikalne laga tha.. gunda ab bardasht karne ki had mein na tha or chilaye ja raha tha…)
Gunda- (rota hua) aaaahhhbbhaii aaahhh naahiii bhaii mujee chod dee bhaii maf krdee... janee de kuttee.. mar jayunga.. rakh ban jayunga meinnnnn…
(Gunda tadaf raha tha.. uthne ki nakaam koshish kar raha tha lakin hil tak nahi pa raha tha...)
Quasar- Shivan!.. rok do…
(Shivan Remote ka switch OFF kar deta hai.. ab chair dhire-dhire thandi honi chalu ho gayi thi.. lakin gunde ki toh pehle hi fat chuki thi.. uski pith, chootad, tango or baju ke chair se dabe hue hisse ke kapde jal k uski body se chipak chuke the…)
Gunda- (dard se tadafte hue) bhai.. bhai mujhe police k hawale karde.. chahe muje umer kaid ki saja dilwade. Par yeh atyaachaar mujh par maat kar bhai.. tum ik nihathe pe war kar rahe ho..
Quasar- or jo tu kar raha tha kya vo atyaachaar Nahi tha.. 10 admiyo ko lekar school mein ghus gaya meri maasoom behan ko school ke bicho bich chuma.. usse sabke samne jaleel kiya.. usse utha k le gaya apni power k dam par. kya vo sahi tha.. or tuje toh 60 admiyo mein se nikal k laya hu mein. Taaki tuje tadpa-tadpa k maar saku tabhi mere man ko sakoon milega…
Gunda- bhai assa julam na kar.. bagwan kasam agge se kuch bura kaa…
(Gunda agge kuch bolta Quasar ne ik lambi niddle uske honth pakad nichle honth se uperwale honth se nikal fassa di.. uske kale honth lal rang mein tabdeel hone lage.. niddle uske hontho mein hi ataki thi toh chilla pane ka sawal hi peda nahi hota…)
Quasar- (ik thapper usse marta hua) badnaam maat kar bagwan ko apni gandi juban se… Shivan!! ON kar sale ko tadapte dekhna hai muje…
(Shivan vapis Switch ON kar deta hai lakin iss baar remote ke 2 button ON karta hai.. dhire dhire chair wapis garam hone lagi.. karib 5mint baad chair itni garam ho chuki thi ki ab chair halke-halke lal rang mein dikhne lagi thi.. gunde ki halat batane layak nahi thi.. vo jor jor se naak se saas se raha tha.. lakin cheekh nahi pa raha tha.. ab chair ne apna asli kamaal dikhna shuru kiya.. chair k holes mein se lambi-lambi garam needles bahar ko anna shuru ho gayi.. vo holes se bahar ayi or gunde ke chootad, hatho, paav or kamar mein dhire se half inch ander ghus k wapis nikal gayi… gunda itni jor se tadap k cheekha ki uske hotho mein fassi needle bhi uske hotho ko fadti hui nikal k gir gayi...)
(2mint tak chair ne apne app ko shant rakha lakin thandi nahi hui waise hi gunde ko garam karti rahi.. or karib 2mint baad, garam hone k karan chair ab gehre lal rang mein chamak rahi thi.. issi bich na jane gunda kitna cheekhta chilata rota raha.. gunda ki back side jal k khakh ho gayi thi.. or jaise ab vo sunn ho gayi thi.. ki achanak holes mein se garam needles vapis nikali or gunde ki body mein 1 inch ander daans gayi.. asse hi niddles vapis holes mein chali gayi or fhir speed se akke gunde ko chubh gayi.. Yeah process repeat hota gaya..jale pe namak to suna tha lakin gunde ko jale pe garam-garam sui chubh rahi thi.. gunde ki halat dekhne layak nahi bachi thi.. kyuki ab vo shant ho chuka tha.. apni jindgi k kuch aakhri pal hi jee raha tha.. kapde dhire-dhire jal rahe the ki achanak unme bhayaanak agg lag gayi.. or sath mein gunde ki cheekhe bhi nikal gayi. Jaise abhi vo behoshi se jagha ho.. Gunda jo piche se jal raha tha ab agge se bhi jalne laga…
Quasar- bas bahut hua.. Shivan jaldi isse Yamraj se milwao…
Shivan- ok boss…
(Shivan remote ka ik last button daba deta hai.. button dabate hi ik lamba garam teekha chaku gunde ki gardan k piche se nikal agge ko a jata hai… gunda maar chuka tha. vo bahar se utna dikha nahi paya jitna vo ander se tadapa tha. Yeah toh bas wahi janta tha. Shyad ab shaitan bhi usse narak mein saja na de kyuki ik bhayaanak saja vo jite ji bhugat chuka tha.. Quasar or Agents kuch der usse yuhi dekhte rahe.. Shivan Chair ko OFF kar deta hai.. Savana Jake camera band kar deti hai…)
Safal- Boss…
Quasar- (mask nikalta hua) hmm..
Safal- ab kya karna hai..
Tushar- kuch nahi.. iski lash ko uthao or jungle mein jake dafhana do…
(Kuch der baad Tushar vapis Harshika k ghar ki or nikal jata hai.. ghar paunch kar Tushar doorbell bajata hai toh samne Harshika door kholti hai. Or vo Tushar ko dekh ik smile kar deti hai.. Tushar k jo gunde ko maar ke chehre k haav-bhaav badle hue the ab Harshika ki pyari smile dekh Tushar ka chehra khil gaya tha.. vo bhi Muskurata hua andar a jata hai.. or sofe par beth jata hai…)
Harshika- (uske samne wale sofe pe bethti hui) kaha gaye the ap subhe se..?
Tushar- bas asse hi thora kaam tha.. didi kaha hai…
Harshika- vo shyad apne room mein hai..(par jaise hi usse yaad atta hai ki Arushi usse naraj hai toh uska face sad ho jata hai.. lakin vo Tushar ko iss baat ka ehsaas nahi hone deti…)
Tushar- (uthta hua) thik hai mein jara mil k atta hu didi se.. muje kuch baat karni hai unse…
Harshika- Okay…
(Tushar jake Arushi ke room ke samne khada ho jata hai.. darwaja band tha lakin lock nahi tha.. Tushar darwaja ko dhaka deke ander chala jata hai.. samne Arushi bed pe leti fan ko ghur rahi thi…)
Tushar- hello didi..
Arushi- (utth k bethti hui) are Tushar tu a gaya.. kabhi aya..?
Tushar- (bed pe bethta hua) bas abhi abhi.. or ap kya yaha akeli bethi chhat ko dekh rahi ho...
Arushi- bas asse hi.. vaise gaya kaha tha tu subhe se..?
Tushar- Vo kuch nahi didi bas Agents k sath hi tha.. kuch plan samjane gaya tha…
Arushi- (ungli dikhati hui) pakka na..? Dekh agar tu khud kisi se bhidne gaya na toh bahut bura haal karungi tera samja…
Tushar- (uski ungli pakad niche karta hua) uffo didi.. mein nahi jayunga kisi se bhi bhidne-vhidne.. mein toh bas unhe agge kya karna hai. Sehar mein kaise gundo ka raj khatam karna hai vo batane gaya tha.. or Agents k sath unka ik boss bhi toh aya hai. Vo sab sambhal lega app meri fikar mat karo…
Arushi- hmm.. fhir thik hai…
Tushar- vo sab chhodo didi. Muje apse ik jaruri baat karni hai…
Arushi- haan bol kya baat karni hai…
Tushar- didi kal apne muje hospital mein kiss kiya tha…
Arushi- (muskura k) haan kiya tha. Toh..?
Tushar- didi ap samaj nahi rahi ho.. mera kehna ka matlab hai ki ap muje kiss kaise kar sakti ho. I mean…
Arushi- (bich mein. Serious hoke) dekh Tushar! Meri baat sun. Ja Pehle darwaja band karke aa..
(Tushar utth k darwaja band kar deta hai or vapis akar bed par beth jata hai…)
Arushi- (uski aakho mein dekhti hui) Tushar dekh! maine dekh wahi kiya hai jo mere dil mein tha.. toh maine tumhe kiss kar liya…
Tushar- (confuse hoke) didi apki koi baat muje samaj nahi ayi.. thora detail mein batao please…
Arushi- Tushar mein tujhse pyar karti hu. Or tu bhi mujhse karta hai. Haina..?
Tushar- haan didi. Karta hu.. bahut pyar karta hu…
Arushi- (uske dono kandho pe hath rakhti hui) meri baat sun.. mein tuje pyar karti hu. Tu muje pyar karta hai..
Tushar- maine abhi wahi bola didi…
Arushi- (lambi saas ander leti hui) haaashhh.. Dekh Tushar mein tuje pyar karti hu.. bahut pyar karti hu.. As a lover pyar karti hu.. or tu janta hai vo kiss jo maine tuje kiya tha vo koi behan apne bhai ko nahi kar sakti.. maine tuje hamesha apne lover ki tarah hi dekha hai.. mein tujhse beinteha mohabbat karti hu.. kab se karti hu muje nahi pata.. yeah feelings kab mere ander jaag gayi yeah muje bhi nahi pata. Lakin tere bina akela rehna soch k hi mere ander kuch kuch hone lagta hai tu samaj raha hai na… (aakhe gili karti hui) dekh Tushar muje pata hai tu bhi mujhse pyar karta hai. Nahi toh koi bhai ik behan se assa chedkhani nahi karta jo tu karta hai. Or tune toh khud hi manna tha kal ki tu muje pyar karta hai ik lover ki tarah.. or ab sab jante hue bhi tu muje kal kiye hue kiss ke bare mein puch raha hai…
(Arushi ki baat sun Tushar ko kuch jhatke lage the. Lakin ab uske bhi dil mein dabe hue armaan jaag gaye the…)
Tushar- didi.. yeah nahi ho sakta.. haan mein apse pyar karta hu.. ik premi wala pyar karta hu.. lakin..
Arushi- lakin kya.. majboori kya hai teri.. mein hu na tere sath…
Tushar- didi app shayad pyar mein itna bhul chuki ho ki apko hamara Rishta bhi yaad nahi raha.. ham ik bhai behan hai.. or bhai behan kabhi Premi Premika nahi ban sakte... didi mein apse pyar Ishita se bhi pehle ka karta tha.. lakin iss samaj ke bandhano ke aage mein nahi lad sakta. Iss liye maine apne jajbaato ko kab ka apne dil mein daba liya tha.. or Ishita ko apni life mein le aya. (Rote hue) lakin kudrat ka khel toh dekho vo bhi chali gayi muje chhod k…
(Tushar atna bola or Apne assu ponchte hue utha or darwaja khol bahar chala gaya.. roo toh Arushi bhi rahi thi Tushar k jane k baad vo or jor se bed pe let takiye mein apna sir de rone lagi...)
(Issi baat pe mein yani yeah Quasar kuch kehna chahta hai ki-
~Waqt ne Halato ne kuch Baaton ne Majboor kar rakha hai,
Muje Tujhse or Tuje Mujhse ik Rishte ne Door kar rakha hai..~
《1877 -words》
Hmmmm
Good update.....
Arushi wala part achcha tha....lekin ye to known se baat hai ki finally use maan na hee padega....pahle ya baad me wo baat alag hai.....
Brutality aapko pasand hai....achchi baat hai.....aap use bakhubi likh bhi rahe ho.....ye bhi thik hai.....
Lekin aapko aisa nahi lagta....ki hard tourcher.....primary antagonist ya phir jo crime head ho unke liye rakhni chahiye........
Are bhai inn chhote mote bachchon ke saath aisa karke kya hoga....OR ye same scene 3rd time aaya hai.....
Har bar koi na koi aata hai uski bahan ya family ko chhedta hai......or phir ye jaakar uske saath....ye sab karne lag jata hai....
Ak hee scene ke bar bar repeat hone se story boring hone lagti hai......isliye ise thoda change karo.....
Brutality.....ye sirf kisi ko tarah tarah se tourcher karne ko hee nahi kahte.....isme khud karne waale ka dil or dimaag bhi situation ke saath involve hota hai....
Jaise ki sara kaam machine ne kiya lekin aapne ak bar bhi ye nahi dikhaya ki uss samay hero ke mind me kya chal raha tha.....ya uski face expression kese the.....
Agar wo iss chij ko enjoy kar raha hai to isme bhi uska expression aana chahiye.....
Last.....
Quasar-Mujhe ye naam thik nahi laga.....OR iska reason....
Bas itna sa ki.....jab aap kisi character ko iss tarah ke kaam me involve dikha rahe ho.....uske character ko dark shed de rahe ho.......
To naam bhi thoda damdar hona chahiye......baaki aapke upar....
Thanks....
