REPLY:Dekhe writter kya dikhata hai....kaise justify karta hai characters ko...
Story hogi ya sirf biwi ki chudaai hi hogi....pati cuckold banega aur khatm.....
kai sawaal hai.....jo writter hi de sakta hai...
wait karte hai... .
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Kya aap ko sirf Manali ki "Chudai" padhne ko mila, koi story nehi the? Koi emotions ya plot nehi the? Missing the? Anyway, Criticisms and Appreciations, both are heartily welcome here.
At last, I can only say that, "Wahi hoga jo Manzoor e Author hoga....." He he..
REPLY :Plz ye Author jaisa word use na kare...writter hi bole....
Aurthor word ek brand hai....ye unhe hi milta hai jo kuch aisa likhe ki maza aa jaaye...
yaha hum sab writter hi theek....ok
ab aate hai qus par...to aap hi bataiye...abhi tak koi drama, thrill, suspence ..aisa kuch mila...
yaha sirf lust show ki gai...
ajit ne wife se bola....wo chudne ko ready....kya kamaal wife hai na....too good...
Rahul ne manali ko open kiya....har update ke sath sex ka ek naya tareeka bataya....jo ajit ne saayad nhi kiya tha....
manali ko lustfull dikhane ki kosis jari...rahul maze le hi raha hai....ajit sala chutiya....bas recording dekh kar garam ho raha.....
To ab aap hi bataye...imaandaari se....kya in incident ko aap story kah sakti thi.....
Haa..ek sex incident ka combination hai yaha.....aise concept dikhaay jin par yakeen karna muskil hai....
jaise ek wife apne hubby ke kahne se dusre ke neeche aane taiyaar....kya baat...
aur ek baat bataiye kya koi pati uski wife ko aise insaan ke neeche litane ka soch bhi sakta hai jo cancer jaisi lailaaj bimari se mar raha hai...bilkul nhi....
aur koi aourat bhi cancer wale mareej se chudwaygi nhi....bhale hi khud ka pati kyo na ho....
Mana ye story hai....but atleast kuch to reality lage ...har cheej aise fit ki gai ki bas sex dikhana hai...pati ko cuckold bana kar wife ki chudaai....
are ek cancer ka mareej is laayak hota hai ki theek se chudaai ka soche bhi....nhi...usko har pal ek hi soch rahti hai...ki kitne din baki hai....
well...saayad meri baat buri lagi ho...but soch kar dekhna....ki sach bola ya jhooth...
waise bhi ye story tumhari nhi ..to bura nhi lagna chahiye .. ...right..
baki story aage badaaye....lage raho....
REPLY :Update to do yrr
Ab apka update dene ka speed slow ho.gya hai
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Aap Author kahe ya Writer iss se koi phadak nehi padta. Naa hi iss mein koi legacy khatam hoti hain ya insult hota hain. Second, agar aap ko lagta hain drama, thrill missing hain, then I am sorry for not satisfying a reader like you through the writing.
Third, apne sayed 1st part se Story thik se nehi pada. Barbar main story ko describe ya clarify karke Spoon Feeding nehi karungi. But still, let me tell you something that Ajit ne kahan aur turant Manali Rahul ke sath 'karne' ke liye raazi ho gayi, aisa bilkul bhi nehi thi. Read it again then you will understand that Rahul ne first time literally Manali ke sath forcefully sex kiya tha. Upar se Ajit ne dono ko hi viagra tablet juice mein mila kar peela diya tha. Aur Manali and Ajit bohut dino se physically close nehi hue the, uska bhi thodi reaction hue Manali pad.
Isliye aap yeh nehi keh sakte ki Manali Ajit ke kehne par turant sabkuch karne pe raazi ho gayi. At first, she resisted very much. But uske badh Rahul played smartly with Manali. Usne wahi kiya jo ek Perfect Womanizer karta hain. Ajit apne thaarakpan se mazboor hoke usse roka bhi nehi. Halaki beech beech mein uske thode bohut mardangi jaag raha tha. But every time his lust had overthrown his Manhood.
Rahul ka last wish (to have sex with Manali) jaan kar Ajit jab uss cheez ke bade mein socha, then unknowingly he felt excited. He discovered his cuckolding side of his nature. Rahul aur Manali ke pith peeche Ajit pahele se hi cuckold banta aa raha tha, through watching everything on recording.
Next, Most importantly, Cancer koi Corona ya HIV jaisa transmitted disease nehi hain, jo virus ke through ek sharir se doosre sharir pe touch karne ya sambhog karne se fahelta hain. Aisa hota toh Ajit kya, koi bhi bhale insaan kisi cancer patient ko apne ghar mein panaah nehi deta, chahei wo kitna bhi karibi kyun na ho.
Cancer is neither endemic nor pandemic disease. It can't spread through touch, not even through inter-course. It neither genetic disease also, like Thalassemia. Matlab Rahul ko cancer hua toh zaroori nehi hain uske bacche ko bhi (agar baccha hua toh) cancer hoga. Ajit and Manali are well educated married couple. They know these things. But main haeran hu, aap ko iss minimum scientific norms ke bade mein nehi pata. Please, don't mind. I have no intention to insult you.
Lastly, Rahul bohuti mentally strong aadmi tha. He is like Rajesh Khanna's Character in Anand Movie (1971). Isliye Anand movie ke Anand ke tarah wo bhi yeh maanta tha ki "Zindegi bade hone chahiye, lambi nehi Babu-mosai.."
Isliye Cancer ke bimari uske chahato pad koi daraare nehi daal paya. Wo ekdam bindass raha, yeh jante hue bhi ki uska aankhri stage chal raha hain. Matlab uska bimari advance stage mein jaa chuka hain, jahan se cure hona lagbhag next to impossible hain.
Waise Anand Movie ke tarah Rahul bhi kya end mein marr jaata hain? ya thik ho jaata hain? (halaki cancer ke advance stage se thik ho pane ke possiblity bohut kam hain)
yaa phir aap ke kehna sahi hota hain ki Rahul cancer patient hain hi nehi? en sab ka jawab toh aane wale waqt hi baata payegi.
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Main soch reh hu back to back kuch updates eksath du. Isliye thodi time le reh hu. Nehi toh ho sakta hain ek update padh kar aap story ko turant judge karne lag jaoge. All types of your opinion are welcome. But darr yeh hain ki kahein Story ka context aap pahele se hi galat guess karke (misunderstood karke) apna ek wrong impression story ke upar banalo aur story ko beech mein hi padna chhor do.
Kb tk update aayega ye to bta dijiyeREPLY :
Main soch reh hu back to back kuch updates eksath du. Isliye thodi time le reh hu. Nehi toh ho sakta hain ek update padh kar aap story ko turant judge karne lag jaoge. All types of your opinion are welcome. But darr yeh hain ki kahein Story ka context aap pahele se hi galat guess karke (misunderstood karke) apna ek wrong impression story ke upar banalo aur story ko beech mein hi padna chhor do.
OK, I will going to post a new update tonight. Keep sharing your views on this story.Koi bhi wrong nhi sochta....jo read karya hai..wahi soch leta hai....abhi jo padha..us hisaab se soch liya...
aage agar koi twist aaya....to usi tarah humari soch bhi twist ho jaygi.....so dont worry abt dat....
keep going