Erotica जोरू का गुलाम उर्फ़ जे के जी

[motaalund]

Your English version of story is more erotic. Sorry for late reply.

पता नहीं क्यों मुझे हिंदी वाली पढ़ते हुए जो फील होता है... वो फीलिंग इंगलिश वाली में उस स्तर तक नहीं जा पाता है...

 

[motaalund]

सपने पूरे होने शुरू हो गए, बधाई

बचपन का अरमान ... जो अब सच होने को है...

 

[motaalund]

are ye aapke chanhne vaale Forum pe nahi milana chaahte khaas mulakaat ke chaakar men hai haan baar aapne ekdm saaf kar di X forum e milne ki to koyi fees nahi baaki sudhi pathak khud samjh len aur khoobsurat lagti kya matalab aap KHOOBSOORT hain,... tan aur man dono se jo aapke lafzon ki khoobsurati se bayan hota hai

 

[motaalund]

Yes but English version was not reachable to most of readers, it was like essence my first and only foray in explicit feminist approach, firstly i tried to translate it but it requires a differnet sort of skill which i dont have , so it became almost an independent story, femdom got watered down along with sissification and long story became a novel, which resulted in more actions, creating a vampish Jethani and addition of many new characters as one requires props and strings. And then it can not have only one mood dominating. Secondly i am feeling with more focus on long stories in the new format of forums i am loosing the art of short story writing where dialogues are crisp and much is left to the reader's imagination. Lastly i feel things change . In my yahoo grouo, HILMS, ( closed for long time i think) there were a lot aficionados of English stories too. my English stories like Autumn Sonata and Yellow roses, which i will count among my best attarcted some good praise. and the admin of that group, Sheen Devin ( name in the group) was so involved that when i posted NKT in Hindi he converted it into English ( or Hinglish probably ) and made it one the most remembered stories. But then there was server's cost to pay, yahoo was the backbone. Time change but thanks for remembering English JKG

Though English version uses more vocabulary and expressions are explicit, but I this(hindi) more than that.

 

[motaalund]

Didi tum ne keh diya mujhe tan man se khubsurat to mera jivan to dhann ho gaya.
Lekin sab log yahi kahte honge donon behne ek duji ki praise karti rehti hai.ha ha.

कोई झूठ थोड़े है...
दोनों एक से बढ़कर एक...

 

[motaalund]

Kahan Sisaap bhi naa iodine yukt namak chhidak rahi ho,... is kahani men har post ke baad mushkil se 4 hajzaar views hote hain to kam se km 20 posts aur,...agar har hafte main 2 posts regular karun to 10 Weeks yaani karib dhaai mahine,... Holi aa jaaegi 13 lakh pahunchte, pahunchte,..agar pahunchi to

lekin mere liye to aap ka ek ek comment 1000 -1000 views ke barabar hai to bas apna pyar dulaar isi tarh baanye rakhiye aur mere liye to apne kah diya to mere 1 kya 15 lakh poore ho gaye

aur vaise bhi jis genre men ye story post ho rahi hai usme kisi story ke bhi 13 lakh nahi hai to agar is poorani dhuranai kahani ke 13 lakh ho gaye to ye sb aapke pyaar ka natija hi hoga , isliye aapka pyaar aur support hi is kahani ka sabse bada inaam hai

ये स्नेह तो सदा आपकी हर कहानियों के साथ है...

 

[motaalund]

ekdam sahi kaha aapne aur un rsgullon ko patana bhi asan nahi hai

सख्त पहरा है...
लेकिन भंवरा भी हर पहरे को तोड़ कर कलियों का रस...

 

[motaalund]

Thanks so much

apaka yahan ya meri kisi bhi kahanai pe bas kabhi kabhi aa jaana hi Bureau of Indian Standard ki mohar laga deta hai, jaise woolmark dekh ke jaade me log uni kapde kahridte hain

main desi hi hun to desi jadi bootiyan aur agar aap ne naam nahi suna to iska sabase bada kaaran ye hai ki aapko kabhi in sbaki jaroort hi nahi padi hogi na padne vaali hai

aap se prernana paa ke maine apni doosari story men Incest ka ek mod liya hai, ... kabhi vahan bhi jivan ki apadhaapi men vakt nikaal ke


ek baar phir se ,... kya khun agar Sudama ke ghar Krishn padhare hon ye haalt ho rhi hai meri

देसी जड़ी-बूटियां हीं ताकतवर और बिना किसी साइड इफेक्ट की होती हैं...
लेकिन धीरे-धीरे विलुप्त होती जा रही हैं...

 

[motaalund]

Aur kisi ka pata nahi lekin tumhari story par 1.5 million views jald complete honge .
Ye tumari Raji ka percent complete yakin hai.
Agar tumko Raji par percent yakin hai to didi ye bhi yakinan hoga tumari story par sooner (Raji ki wish)or later 1.5 million ka ankda achieve hoga.
Daily 4000 views ke kab 40000 ho jayenge,kaun janta hai,let's believe in God & write more erotically.

मेरा तो + = 200% यकीन है...

 

[motaalund]

Didi khaas mulakaat to me sirf apne hubby matlab tumare jiju se hi karti hu.Fir to inko nirash hona padega.ha ha