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Adultery बीवी के कारनामे (Completed)

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firefox420

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haayyyeee...... ye kambakhat, ye jaanleva, ye nigodi, ye alhad si Kaajal...... pata nahi Dr. sahab aap aisi kahani hamare manoranjan ke liye likhte hai ki hamari jaan lene ke liye..... wakai mein aap bahot bade wale kameene lekhak ho.:o

Par kuch bhi kaho aapki ye kaajal jaha bhi jaati hai..... kahani mein aag laga deti hai.
Aur ye sala doctor to ek no. ka khoon fookne wala maha chutiya hai...:angry:

ye aapki 'biwi ke kaarname' dekh kar to muzhe iss doctor ki dhulai karne ka mann kar raha hai.... kambakhat ne puri kahani ke dauran Vikas ke saath - saath mere bhi KLPD kar diya.:roflol:
 
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Nice story.
My feedback is that:
1. Since the beginning, the core plot of the story was quite serious. There were a lot of sex scenes depicted between Kajal and many (other than her husband Vikas), but since story was narrated from Vikas's point of view, so the sex scenes were felt sad rather then exciting one.
2. I felt the story is quite complicated that I couldn't understood many logics. For example, when Kajal once said to Neha that she has planted Malena for her husband Vikas. The meeting of Vikas and Malena was quite natural, so how Kajal did that.
3. Overall it is a fantastic story. My salute to you that you are able to think such a complicated plot.
4. In the last, many congratulations on completing the story.
 
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Hello, Ladies :kiss: & Gentleman, :hi:
We are so glad to Introduce Ultimate Story Contest of this year.

Jaise ki aap sabhi Jante Hain is baar Hum USC contest chala rahe hain aur Kuch Din pahle hi Humne Rules & Queries Thread ka announce kar diya tha aur ab Ultimate Story Contest ka Entry Thread air kar diya hai jo 17th, Nov 2019, 11:59 PM ko close hoga.

Khair ab main point Par Aate Hain Jaisa ki entry thread aired ho chuka hai isliye aap Sabhi readers aur writers se Meri personally request hai ki is contest mein aap Jarur participate kare aur Apni kalpnao ko shabdon ka rasta dikha ke yaha pesh kare ho sakta hai log use pasand kare.
Aur Jo readers nahi likhna chahte wo bakiyo ki story padhke review de sakte hai mujhe bahut Khushi Hogi agar aap is contest mein participate lekar apni story likhenge to.

Ye aap Sabhi Ke liye ek bahut hi sunhara avsar hai isliye Aage Bade aur apni Kalpanao ko shabdon Mein likhkar Duniya Ko dikha De.

Ye ek short story contest hai jisme Minimum 800 words se maximum 6000 words tak allowed hai itne hi words mein apni story complete Karni Hogi, Aur ek hi post mein complete karna hai aur Entry Thread mein post karna hai.
I hope aap mujhe niraash nahi Karenge aur is contest Mein Jarur participate Lenge.


:thanks:
On Behalf of Admin Team
Regards :- Siraj Patel


 
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Desitejas said:
Super Duper Like, bohut mast likhte ho bhai, maja a gaya. Keep it up.:10::10::10::10::winner::winner::winner::winner::yourock::yourock::yourock::yourock::yourock:
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dhanywad desijas dost.........:)
 
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firefox2017 said:
haayyyeee...... ye kambakhat, ye jaanleva, ye nigodi, ye alhad si Kaajal...... pata nahi Dr. sahab aap aisi kahani hamare manoranjan ke liye likhte hai ki hamari jaan lene ke liye..... wakai mein aap bahot bade wale kameene lekhak ho.:o

Par kuch bhi kaho aapki ye kaajal jaha bhi jaati hai..... kahani mein aag laga deti hai.
Aur ye sala doctor to ek no. ka khoon fookne wala maha chutiya hai...:angry:

ye aapki 'biwi ke kaarname' dekh kar to muzhe iss doctor ki dhulai karne ka mann kar raha hai.... kambakhat ne puri kahani ke dauran Vikas ke saath - saath mere bhi KLPD kar diya.:roflol:
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:lotpot: firefox bhai ab to samjh aaya hoga ki purane readers kyo bauraye rahte hai kaajl ka naam sunkar ...:lotpot:
ye kajal ki pahli story thi dusari thi randiyo ka ghar wo bhi kuch dino me post karne wala hu ynha par abhi abhi uska pdf mila hai mujhe :DD:
aur dhanywad story ko pasand karne ke liye :):)
 
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Preeti said:
Nice story.
My feedback is that:
1. Since the beginning, the core plot of the story was quite serious. There were a lot of sex scenes depicted between Kajal and many (other than her husband Vikas), but since story was narrated from Vikas's point of view, so the sex scenes were felt sad rather then exciting one.
2. I felt the story is quite complicated that I couldn't understood many logics. For example, when Kajal once said to Neha that she has planted Malena for her husband Vikas. The meeting of Vikas and Malena was quite natural, so how Kajal did that.
3. Overall it is a fantastic story. My salute to you that you are able to think such a complicated plot.
4. In the last, many congratulations on completing the story.
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dahnywad preeti itana sundar feedback dene ke liye:):)
aapka question jo malina ke upar tha uska jawab main nhi de paunga kyoki is story ko likhe bahut din ho chuke hai aur main lagbhag bhool hi gaya hu,kyoki bahut hi turn tha story me to maine koun si chije kyo likhi thi wo sab abhi achche se yad bhi nahi hai lekin jnha tak mujhe yad hai ki malina ka aana kaajl ko pta tha kyoki us samy tak wo mishara ke sampark me aa chuki thi aur shayd usi ne phon karke malina ko uske pita ka adrees diya tha ya aisa hi kuch tha ,iska jawab dene ke liye mujhe fir se puri story read karni hogi tabhi samjh aayega ...ya fir shayd ye ho sakta hai ki vikas ko busy rakhne ke liye usne malina ko plant kiya tha ,matlab ye nhi uski meeting karwai matlab ye ki uske sath ghumne firane diya aur attract hone diya .........
 
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Chutiyadr said:
:lotpot: firefox bhai ab to samjh aaya hoga ki purane readers kyo bauraye rahte hai kaajl ka naam sunkar ...:lotpot:
ye kajal ki pahli story thi dusari thi randiyo ka ghar wo bhi kuch dino me post karne wala hu ynha par abhi abhi uska pdf mila hai mujhe :DD:
aur dhanywad story ko pasand karne ke liye :):)
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Dr. saab main aapki saari stories padhi hai bas pyaar aur dhoka chodd kar... muzhe aapki saari kahaniyo mein sabse jyaada 'biwi ke karname' hi pasand aayi hai.... aur main naya reader nahi hu... maine aapki stories xossip par bhi padhi thi..... 'didi aur dost' to sabse pehle padhi thi... uske baad 'khoobsoorat dakait' story forum par chal rahi thi jab xossip band ho gayi thi.... waise main bhi aapka purana fan hu ..... par pehle bina ID ke hi stories padhta tha... even muzhe ek baat aur yaad hai..... xossip par ek suspense story chal rahi thi kisi dusre writer ki ... jisme ek ladka apni chaachi ki jasoosi kar raha tha aur uski chachi ko terrorist blackmail kar rahe the aur us story mein aapne apni taraf se ek update bhi post ki thi... jiske baad us writer ko mirchi lag gayi thi.... :lotpot:

to main aapki kaabiliyat se purntya wakif hu aur muzhe pata hai ke aap apni stories se to readers ke ungli karte ho aur saath hi dusre writers ki story mein jaa kar bhi ungli karte ho......:) he he he ..... to lage raho Munna bhai... oh sorry Dr. Saab. :D
 
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Preeti said:
Nice story.
My feedback is that:
1. Since the beginning, the core plot of the story was quite serious. There were a lot of sex scenes depicted between Kajal and many (other than her husband Vikas), but since story was narrated from Vikas's point of view, so the sex scenes were felt sad rather then exciting one.
2. I felt the story is quite complicated that I couldn't understood many logics. For example, when Kajal once said to Neha that she has planted Malena for her husband Vikas. The meeting of Vikas and Malena was quite natural, so how Kajal did that.
3. Overall it is a fantastic story. My salute to you that you are able to think such a complicated plot.
4. In the last, many congratulations on completing the story.
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Chutiyadr said:
dahnywad preeti itana sundar feedback dene ke liye:):)
aapka question jo malina ke upar tha uska jawab main nhi de paunga kyoki is story ko likhe bahut din ho chuke hai aur main lagbhag bhool hi gaya hu,kyoki bahut hi turn tha story me to maine koun si chije kyo likhi thi wo sab abhi achche se yad bhi nahi hai lekin jnha tak mujhe yad hai ki malina ka aana kaajl ko pta tha kyoki us samy tak wo mishara ke sampark me aa chuki thi aur shayd usi ne phon karke malina ko uske pita ka adrees diya tha ya aisa hi kuch tha ,iska jawab dene ke liye mujhe fir se puri story read karni hogi tabhi samjh aayega ...ya fir shayd ye ho sakta hai ki vikas ko busy rakhne ke liye usne malina ko plant kiya tha ,matlab ye nhi uski meeting karwai matlab ye ki uske sath ghumne firane diya aur attract hone diya .........
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Kaajal ne Malina ko uske biological baap jo ki don tha us se badla lene ke liye bahut pehle se hi planning kar li thi, Kaajal ko ye bhi pata tha ki wo us Retired senior police officer ki patni se paida hui beti hai....... to Kaajal ne bahut hi chalaki se saari planning ko anjaam dete hue 1 teer se 2 shikaar kiye.

preeti ji agar aapko yaad ho to jab Kaajal undercover agent thi to usko police wale Mishra ke saamne hi Roberto ne Kaajal aur Neha ka rape kiya tha aur police ke aane se pehle hi bhaag nikla tha magar kaajal ne use wada kiya tha ki wo bhi us se apne rape ka badla legi aur saath hi Mishra se bhi revenge pura kar liya Malina ke through aur saath hi apne pati Vikas ji ko ek virjin aur dil ki sacchi ladki ka pyaar dilwaya..... kyon ki Kaajal ko is baat ka guilt tha ki usko uska pati Vikas itna pyaar karta hai aur usne uske past ke baare mein bina puche hi use accept kar liya tha... so Kaajal jo Physical aur emotional taur par Vikas ji ko nahi de paayi thi to usne uske badle mein Malina ko Vikas se milwa kar past ki saari kamiya puri kar di thi...
 
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firefox2017 said:
Dr. saab main aapki saari stories padhi hai bas pyaar aur dhoka chodd kar... muzhe aapki saari kahaniyo mein sabse jyaada 'biwi ke karname' hi pasand aayi hai.... aur main naya reader nahi hu... maine aapki stories xossip par bhi padhi thi..... 'didi aur dost' to sabse pehle padhi thi... uske baad 'khoobsoorat dakait' story forum par chal rahi thi jab xossip band ho gayi thi.... waise main bhi aapka purana fan hu ..... par pehle bina ID ke hi stories padhta tha... even muzhe ek baat aur yaad hai..... xossip par ek suspense story chal rahi thi kisi dusre writer ki ... jisme ek ladka apni chaachi ki jasoosi kar raha tha aur uski chachi ko terrorist blackmail kar rahe the aur us story mein aapne apni taraf se ek update bhi post ki thi... jiske baad us writer ko mirchi lag gayi thi.... :lotpot:

to main aapki kaabiliyat se purntya wakif hu aur muzhe pata hai ke aap apni stories se to readers ke ungli karte ho aur saath hi dusre writers ki story mein jaa kar bhi ungli karte ho......:) he he he ..... to lage raho Munna bhai... oh sorry Dr. Saab. :D
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:lotpot:
bhai firefox mere khayal se ap ki yahi id to xp par bhi thi na ...???
main apne kisi bhi readers ko kabhi nahi bhulata jo ki story par regular comment karta ho ,aur rahi dusare ki story ki bat to yar us story ka naam tah adbhut jaal ,aur badi hi achchi story thi wo ...bas ham dono writers ke bich misunderstanding ho gayi thi ,kyoki us bandhe ne mujhe thoda galt samjh liya aur maine use thoda jayda achcha samjh kar update likh diya tha :lotpot:
khair bad me hamari dosti bhi ho gayi thi aur unhone apni ek story ka squeal likhne ke bhi kaha tha lekin mujhe purani bat yad aa gai gayi aur maine payar se mana kar diya tha ...:)
aur aapne pyar aur dhokha kyo chhod diya hai use bhi pad hi lo complet to ho hi chuki hai wo bhi ,ha wo jyda majedar nahi hai lekin utani bhi buri nahi hai ........
 
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