★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Mak]

REALITY?
By: Niks96
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Brother, you have thought of this plot and tried to write it that was very nice. As a reader, Full marks for thinking this plot. But, It could be presented better than this. Narration and conversations par thoda work karne ki jarrorat hai. I am looking forward to read more stories by you.

Best of luck.
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[KR$NA]

Index Updated

 

[Naina]

Story - mera hero
Writer - Casinar sir
Chaahen kitne bhi bure kaam karen Satish, par ush nanhi si jaan (Pooja) ke liye joh kiya sayad hi koi aisa kar sakta hain woh bhi ush halat mein jahan khud jaan ke laale hon....
waise ek point of view se dekhe toh kismat dono ke achhe ke liye hi dono ko milwaye hain...... Satish saare bure kaam chodd diye ush bachhi ki achhi future ke liye........ Pooja ko jine ke liye ek aasha, ek ashra & uska hero mila .
Story ki end dil ko chu lene wali..... Satish ne joh samjhaya Pooja ko aur last mein nah pita, nah bhai, nah hi dost par sachhe man se Pooja ke liye joh kiya.... iske wajah se ish story mein Satish mahan bane....
Casi sir kahani ki har ek pehlu ko bahot achhe se darshaye hain Aapne... heart touching....... ishe kahte hain real hero (Satish)
Brilliant story with awesome writing skill

 

[Vijay2309]

कहानी - ख्वाब एक हकीकत
लेखक - मिलन

मिलू भाई इस रिव्यू के लिए मै आपसे एडवांस मै माफी चाहता हूं....

आज मै आपकी कहानी के बारे मै कोई बात नहीं करूंगा , आज मै आपसे सवाल करूंगा कि आपने ऐसा क्यों किया....??
मुझे माफ़ करना मै ये कहानी पूरी नहीं पढ पाया शायद कोई दूसरा लेखक होता तो मै ये जरूर पूरी पढ़ता,लेकिन आप से मुझे उम्मीद ज्यादा थी और इसी वजह से मैंने सिर्फ इसको आधा पढ़ने के बाद क्लाइमैक्स पर सरसरी नजर ही डाली थी....उम्मीद करता हूं आप मेरी बात का बुरा नहीं मानोगे और अगले किसी स्टोरी कॉन्टेस्ट मै एक लाजवाब स्टोरी पोस्ट करके जवाब मेरे मुंह पर मारोगे....

कॉन्टेस्ट के लिए शुभ कामनाएं

 

[Lucifer]

Review Thread Will Be Closed Tomorrow At 11.59 am..

 

[Niks96]

REALITY?
By: Niks96
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Brother, you have thought of this plot and tried to write it that was very nice. As a reader, Full marks for thinking this plot. But, It could be presented better than this. Narration and conversations par thoda work karne ki jarrorat hai. I am looking forward to read more stories by you.

Best of luck.
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Thanks Mak bro for your lovely review...It's my first time to write a story for a contest so may be my narration is not up to the mark...I will carefully analyze this section for my future endeavors...and surely you will be reading a lot of stories by me.

Once again thanks for your review.

 

[Casinar]

Story - mera hero
Writer - Casinar sir
Chaahen kitne bhi bure kaam karen Satish, par ush nanhi si jaan (Pooja) ke liye joh kiya sayad hi koi aisa kar sakta hain woh bhi ush halat mein jahan khud jaan ke laale hon....
waise ek point of view se dekhe toh kismat dono ke achhe ke liye hi dono ko milwaye hain...... Satish saare bure kaam chodd diye ush bachhi ki achhi future ke liye........ Pooja ko jine ke liye ek aasha, ek ashra & uska hero mila .
Story ki end dil ko chu lene wali..... Satish ne joh samjhaya Pooja ko aur last mein nah pita, nah bhai, nah hi dost par sachhe man se Pooja ke liye joh kiya.... iske wajah se ish story mein Satish mahan bane....
Casi sir kahani ki har ek pehlu ko bahot achhe se darshaye hain Aapne... heart touching....... ishe kahte hain real hero (Satish)
Brilliant story with awesome writing skill

Bahot bahot shukriya Naina dear. Mujhe khushi hai ke aap ko kahani passand aayi.

 

[Geralt of Rivia]

Review of 'Haunted' by humtum

Very good story by ht bro. Initially it looks like topical ghost stories. There is a haunted house, a boy goes inside for finding his ball and sees ghost there, got sick n everyone in neighbohood start believing that the house is haunted and there is a ghost.
But in end we find that there is no ghost. It was his own reflection in mirror which he thought as ghost.
Even though the boy didn't believe in ghost initially but he had fear in his mind Because of which he considered his own shadow as ghost.
Ghost stories don't scare me anymore so I cant tell how scary this story is. But i really enjoyed story. Good luck for contest!

 

[Lucifer]

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