★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2020 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[_ABHAY_Smarty_]

Story :- Haivaan... ( The Devil ? )

Writer :- abhaysmarty

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★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2020 ~ Entry Thread ★☆★

story ke baremein kya kahu kuch samaj hi na aa raha.. :versad:
ye story nahi aisa lag raha tha jaise koi race dekh rha hu
kuch bhi sahi tarike se discribe na kiya hai
jo kiya hai wo mere samaj se pare hai
thoda storyline ke baremein batata hu
storyline bilkul bhi sahi nahi hai..
ek baat past mein ek baat future mein ek baat present mein
are itni bhi kya jaldi thi jo aise story ko bhagaye ja rahe ho
thoda kam likho lekin sanshipt mein likho yaar
pandit ji to phir kabhi najar hi na aaye story mein
story padhne mein achi hai lekin jo kadiyan hai wo sahi se na likhi hai
aapne mehnat bahut ki hai story likhne mein thoda agar aur time lete to ache se samaj kar story likh sakte the
ek baar aap khud hi padh lo story ko iski jarurat hai..


best of luck for contest

Rating :- 4/5 stars​

Ty so much bhai... ??
Check my next story hope you like it...

 

[_ABHAY_Smarty_]

Story-Haivaan.
Writer- _ABHAY_Smarty_

Abhay bhai plot bahut aacha tha aapki story ka. Aisa plot aapke dimag mai aaya ye bahut baadi baat hai. Itne kam words mai aisa plot ki story likhna possible nhi hota hai , phir bhi aapne kiya.
Story mai almost sb kuch tha family, love, emotion ,suspense,darindagi bas ending smj nhi aaya. Raju kaise itne log ka khoon aur bakatkar kiya ye batana possible nhi tha itne kam words mai , mujhe bas ye samj nhi aaya ki jb raju itna bada gunda tha toh mantri ko kyun nhi mara khud ko marne se pehle.

Par jo bhi ho bhai kitna bhi likh lo kuch na kuch kami reh hi jata hai.
Thanks for writing such a good story for us and all the best for competition..

Ty so much bhai... For a lovely review... Thoda demotivate ho raha hoon... Chodo aapka review padh accha laga... And next story bhi zaroor dekhna...

 

[Imyours]

Ty so much bhai... For a lovely review... Thoda demotivate ho raha hoon... Chodo aapka review padh accha laga... And next story bhi zaroor dekhna...

Abhay bhai bas ek baat mai humesa khud se kehta hu ki koshish krne walo ki haar nhi hoti hai. U gave ur best aacording to u bt u could hv done mich much bttr with such an amazing plot.
Mai toh khud likh rha hu kal se par aadha Mai ruk gya. as usual..

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

खोया हुआ प्यार

writer- Dolaand Trump

bhout bdiya story bhai ji,,,,,
Emotional

✍✍??

Best of luck for the contest

 

[Rebel.desi]

Dosto, Pls give some reviews on my story ...

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

Dosto, Pls give some reviews on my story ...

Story name

 

[Dolaand Trump]

Plz meri bhi dono stories pe reviews dijiye

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

हीरो

writer - Dolaand Trump

bdiya story thi ye bhi bhai,


Afsos ki vo doctor mar gaya, varna corona vaccine vohi bna deta ??

 

[DiNu DraCula]

Dosto review jarur de..

Jehad(ek insan ki kahani)

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

Behan kii Nath kii thirkan......

writer - Rebel.desi

brilliant story with awesome writing skills


Best of luck for the contest